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The squirrel has declared
War.
He has shaken
Furry tail at me.
Chattered
Angrily and I think he’s
Mocking me.
My human doesn’t let me
Outside.
I stare out
The window.
The squirrel thinks it’s
So funny.
My owner gets
Mad at me.
When I
Bark.
It’s the
Squirrel’s
Fault.
It declared
War.
My owner finally
Pulls his socks on.
Minus the one
I chewed
Yesterday.
He was mad
About that.
He grabs the
Leash.
Clips me
On.
We go
Outside!
Oh fresh
Air.
Oh, nice
Smells.
Oh, the
Wind.
Oh, the other
Dogs.
The squirrel.
I growl
At him.
He chatters
At me from the
Tree.
I think he’s enjoying
Himself.
I growl
At him.
He chatters
At me.
Says some
Bad things.
I bark and run
To the tree.
“Bad
Dog”
My owner screams
As I drag him to the
Tree.
Bad
Dog?
For chasing
The
Squirrel?
Woof.
Woof.
Woof.
The
Squirrel chatters at me
From his safe perch.
He should face me like
A brave one.
He’s a
Coward.
My owner yanks
Me away from
The tree.
I plant my feet.
I want to bark and chase the
Squirrel.
But my owner insists.
He holds up
A Treat!
A yummy piece of
Jerky.
Yum.
Yum.
Yum.
I bark at my owner,
Squirrel winning
For today.
Although I can
Hear him chattering
In his tree.
I will get him one
Day.
I dream of
Him.
Chattering in his
Tree.
Not sure
Why.
He is a
Monster.
My bed is somehow
Uncomfortable.
I jump into
My owner’s bed.
He mutters and
Kicks me out.
I think he’s lonely.
Lonely is a
Funny
Word.
The Squirrel gives
Me all I
Want.
Run. Chase.
Hide.
Bark.
Run.
Chase.
Hide. Bark.
Over.
Again.
Because even though
He
Never gets
Caught.
He is mine
To chase.
Mine.
Mine.
Mine.
Woof!
The dawn
Breaks and I have
To pee.
I bark at my owner.
Woof.
Woof.
Woof.
He
Groans.
I think I can be
Annoying.
Wag.
Wag.
Wag.
The squirrel is up
Already.
Chattering at me
From the safety of
His tree.
I will get him
Today.
I break away from
My owner.
He yells as
If I will not
Come back.
He is home?
I will
Always come
Back.
But now is
War.
I must chase
Squirrel.
I bark and bark.
Woof!
Woof!
Woof!
I run.
Pant.
Pant.
Pant.
I chase.
Pant.
Pant.
Pant.
I don’t catch
The
Squirrel.
I bark in
Surrender.
He chatters at me.
I bark at him
One last time.
He skitters
Out of the way.
Ha.
My owner calls me
Again.
He sounds amused.
I think?
I run back
To him but
Another smell catches my
Attention.
Girl?
Oh.
Pretty dog.
Friend!
Mmm.
I run to the other
Dog. Sniff her
Butt in hello.
She is
Very pretty.
Her owner
Is…
Oh.
Wow.
Woof!
Woof!
My owner comes up.
He talks to her owner.
They smile.
They talk.
I interact with pretty
Dog.
She likes me.
I’m
Sure.
Woof!
Woof!
Woof!
My owner talks
With her
Owner.
I think his name is
Matt.
My owner seems to
Like Matt.
Hmm.
Woof!
Woof!
Woof!
I want to see more
Pretty dog.
She is very big.
Very pretty.
Also.
Smells amazing.
Like flowers and water.
And poop.
She is very
Interesting.
Very sweet.
Pretty!
Woof!
Yip!
Woof!
Yip!
Pant.
My owner tugs me
Away.
Sad.
Whine.
Whine.
Whine.
But then I smell
Squirrel!
Woof!
Woof!
Woof!
No!
My owner doesn’t like
Me chasing
The squirrel.
But it’s so
Fun!
And I’ll catch
Him one
Day.
One day.
Woof!
Yip!
Woof!
Yip!
Even my
Pretty dog
Agrees with
Me.
Squirrel?
Chase.
Run.
Bark.
Over and
Over again.
Because that is
The way of the world.
What else is there in
Life?
Nothing.
My owner thinks I am
Funny.
But I get treats.
Jerky?
Yum.
Yum.
Yum.
Oh-look!
More toys.
A bouncing ball.
A-
Squirrel!
Woof!
Woof!
Woof!
I run.
Chase.
Pant.
Pant.
Pant.
Tired now.
I think I’ll
Sleep.
Long day.
More running
And hunting
And chasing-
Squirrel!
Yes.
Yes.
Yes.
I like
Chasing him.
He is very
Amusing.
Woof!
Woof!
Woof!
I may never catch
Him.
But he is
Fun to try.
What else is
There?
Food?
Yum.
Yum.
Yum.
Sleep?
Hmm.
Sleepy now.
Zzzzz.
I like my
Bed.
It’s very
Comfortable and
I think it’s my favorite
Thing.
Apart from chasing the
Squirrel.
My owner thinks
I am nuts.
Ha!
Woof.
Woof.
The squirrel is
The only
One who is
Nutty.
He eats nuts.
Nutty.
Ha!
I am a
Dog.
Not nutty.
Those taste weird-
Pretty dog!
Woof!
Yip!
Woof!
Yip!
Hello, hello, hello.
Sniff your butt.
Where have you
Been?
All over the
Place.
Oh this smells like
The country.
Farm.
Woof!
Yip!
Woof!
Yes, I did chase
The squirrel.
He got away this time.
Woof!
Yip!
Hello!
Goodbye.
My owner likes
Matt.
I do too.
He has pretty dog.
She is very nice.
And pretty!
Woof!
Woof!
Woof!
New smells.
New sights.
New-squirrel!
I run after
Him.
Pant.
Pant.
Woof!
I almost-
I got a few
Hairs.
He got away
Though.
I will get
Him one
Day.
That day is
Not today.
Today is for
Seeing pretty dog!
Yip!
Woof!
Yip!
Woof-
Squirrel!
Yes.
Yes.
Yes.
Yes.
Yip!
Yes!
Pant.
Pant.
Treat?
Oh no!
Why no treat?
Bad dog?
Oh-why?
I just wanted
To chase the
Squirrel.
Is that
…
Bad?
Why?
I run.
He runs.
We both run.
I don’t
Catch him.
I bark at his
Tree.
Over
And over again.
Sure I don’t
Catch him.
But that’s why
I try again
And again?
Woof!
Yip!
Pretty dog agrees
With me.
Yip!
Yip!
Yip!
Chase-Squirrel!
NO.
I must
Listen to my owner.
Bye squirrel.
He chatters at
Me.
I think he is
Sad.
I am
Sad.
No more
Chasing?
No.
I don’t get to
Sleep in my
Owner’s bed
Tonight.
He is
Mad at me.
Why?
I am a dog.
A good dog?
Yes.
Not a
...
Bad one.
That is not
A nice word.
All I want
Is love.
And treats.
And someplace
To call home.
A place where
I am
Loved.
Where I can sleep
Peacefully.
And chase squirrels.
Squirrel!
He chatters at me.
Woof.
I bark once.
Low voice.
Twice.
Woof!
My owner doesn’t stir.
I yanked him
All around town
Today.
Oh well.
The squirrel chatters
At me.
I wag my tail.
Wag.
Wag.
Wag.
Then he runs off
Into the night.
I watch him
Go.
Truce for now.
Maybe.
But one day?
He is
Mine.
All
Mine.
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hmm....well. This took a while. Just to get it out of my scattered brain took a while. I really like it though. It's what I think goes through my dog's mind although he's not much of a barker...well except when I sneak up on my family...then he barks and howls like anything. This was surprisingly easy to write. I feel like sometimes my thoughts are. Like this? where they are all over the place and I like writing like this so yeah. :) Hope you enjoyed 🐕🐕
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EEK nainikaaaa I loved this story so much!! Right after I finished reading it, I stared at my dog for a solid 15 minutes XD I loved the scattered sort of style your sentences were in. i thought that was very creative and fun to read. I laughed A LOT reading this story, especially whenever he saw a squirrel. Keep up the amazing work girl!!
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:) Thanks so much ZOey :) Ahaha so did I!! Aw, thanks! I really enjoyed the style that I did :)
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Ya it was definitely a great and unique style:)) great job once again girlll! <333
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So refreshing! a Dog's point of view. Laughed a little or a lot
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Aw thanks!
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Well, I didn't expect to stumble across Ruff-i Kaur and their poignant ruminations when I decided to prowl Reedsy today but also I can't say I'm not absolutely delighted about it 😁 PS. Where is their poetry book already?
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:) Thanks! Aw haha :)
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This story was so creative and fun to read! I had a good laugh at your take of a dog's thoughts. I don't think I'll ever look at dogs the same way again. This story was, in a way, strangely relatable—I am somehow not surprised that I can relate to a dog—with the dog's short attention span and scattered thoughts. Great job!
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:) Thanks Annabelle
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No problem!
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I really liked this! I know it isn't really supposed to be funny but I am finding myself laughing a bit at the way its formatted, and because of its format, the way I read it in my head. I loved that. very creative. It didn't touch everyone's bottommost heart, but thats is okay with me. There wasn't some prophetic, inspirational message. It was simple, and I liked it. (Granted I don't know if you were trying to convey something and my messed up mind didn't pick it up... but hey. Good job. xD)
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Aw, thanks! Yep, it wasn't intended to be super inspirational lol :)
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I liked it that way. Sometimes it bugs me when the story is that way. I just feel like so many stories are centered around sickness and loss and death, and whereas it happens, I feel like there is another way to get your point across, And I hope no one reading this takes any offense, but I'm kind of getting bored of it. Like been there, read that. If you know what I mean. Or maybe I'm just rambling like usual. ;)
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:) Yep I know what you mean!
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The short sentences really show the short attention span of a dog here, especially their hatred for animals they can't get to intruding on their patch. Was a fun read, made me laugh a lot imagining my own dogs thinking just the same :D
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:) Thanks ben! ahaha yeah, this was fun to write :)
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How did you decide where to split the lines by the way?
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hm...well the answer that i want to give is "oh, it caMe to me in a dReaM and it was aWesOme" but honestly, I sneezed and was like oh-hmm-where does this? oh no crap hm... alright this'll go here. dang it not there. hmm... yeppp... no...? ya? huH? lol :)
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I liked it :D gave it a chaotic feel, the way I think a dog would think!
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:D thats what I thought too!
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So creative! The text format was perfect to convey the frantic pace that a dog thinks!! If there was a ever a chance I would love to see the squirrel's view of it all. Somehow I think he is enjoying being the antagonist. ;)
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Ha-Thanks so much Cole! :)
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Hey Nainika!!! Loved it!! I like how you portray what the dog thinks! It was kinda funny when the dog felt he was a good dog after dragging his owner around the town Great job!
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:) Thanks so much!!
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:D If you don't mind, could you leave feedback on any of my stories? Thanks!
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LOVE it! Great job! I am following you, RIGHT this instant.
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Oh, thanks!
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A little scattered, but kinda cool. Very contemporary... I was expecting a reference to the world tree, I think, but it's fine that you didn't add it. Lol, very relatable though.
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:) Thanks!
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I love it!
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:) thanks!
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HOW CAN YOU WRITE SO FAST?!?!?!?!?! I swear you are actually an alien that can just speed write all the time. Anyway... This is so good! I love how the words are broken up into smaller pieces, it really captures the short attention span of the dog. I feel like some days I feel like that too, my thoughts just jumping from place to place. The story is so cute, and it just warms my heart. I love dogs, and I really want one, but sadly, I sneeze a LOT when they're around :(. Great Job!!
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:))) Thanks so much Alya!! Ha- even I do not have that answer ;)
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Is the puzzle Wonder Woman? (I'll give you feedback soon!)
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Yep!
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I like how random and scattered the dog's thoughts are, it's got like the shortest attention span in history. I like your explanation for dogs chasing squirrels too.
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Thanks so much! Yep :)
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