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Drama Suspense Thriller

It was a sunny afternoon, and Karen Locke was in the backseat of the family car. The sun's warmth bathed everything in a golden glow, filtering through the windows and casting playful patterns on the seats. The air was filled with the scent of blooming flowers from the meadows they drove past, mingling with the faint, sweet aroma of the vanilla-scented air freshener dangling from the rearview mirror.

The radio played a cheerful tune that everyone knew by heart. The father led the singing, his hands confidently on the steering wheel, with a deep voice booming with happiness. He wore a light blue shirt, sleeves rolled up, revealing a wristwatch glinted with the sun's rays. His laughter was hearty, which seemed to reverberate through the car, adding to the lively atmosphere.

Sitting in the passenger seat, her mother, with her auburn hair tied back with a floral scarf, smiled brightly, her eyes crinkling at the corners as she harmonized. Her warm and melodic laughter perfectly counters her father's deeper tones. The sunlight highlighted the fine lines around her eyes, each a testament to years of shared joy and love.

Karen's younger sister, Jane, sat beside her, their hands occasionally clapping in time with the beat. Jane's laughter was infectious, a high, tinkling sound that made Karen's heart swell with affection. Jane wore a yellow sundress that matched her sunny disposition, her curly hair bouncing with every move. Karen joined in the singing, her voice blending with the others, creating a perfect moment of familial bliss. She could feel the vibrations of the music through the seat, each note resonating with the shared love in the car.

They were singing an old favorite, "Sweet Caroline," and as they reached the chorus, the car was filled with their joyous voices:

"Sweet Caroline, Good times never seemed so good..."

Karen looked around, her heart brimming with contentment. The car was a moving bubble of happiness, filled with the sounds of love and laughter. Her father glanced at her in the rearview mirror, his eyes twinkling with pride. His gaze was reassuring, a silent promise of safety and love. Jane nudged her playfully, their bond evident in the shared smiles and giggles. Karen could feel the warmth of Jane's small hand against hers, a comforting and familiar touch. Her mother turned to face her, her expression of pure love, the sunlight catching the golden flecks in her eyes.

Then, during this perfect moment, her mother's smile faded. Her eyes darkened, filling with sorrow and disappointment. The change was so sudden that a shadow had passed over her face, stealing the sun's warmth. She leaned closer, her voice cutting through the music and laughter like a knife, sharp and cold.

"Why did you let me die, Karen?"

The question hung in the air, starkly contrasting the joyous atmosphere moments before. The scent of flowers seemed to grow cloying, almost suffocating, as Karen's heart pounded in her chest. The car, once filled with laughter and song, now felt like a confining space, the weight of her mother's words pressing down on her. Karen's eyes filled with tears, the vivid memories of that day merging with the present, blurring the lines between past and present.

Dr. Reynolds, her psychiatrist, entered the room with a calm, practiced demeanor. The room itself was sterile, a blend of soft beige walls and minimalist decor meant to soothe the minds of troubled patients. A faint smell of antiseptic lingered in the air, mixing with the faint scent of lavender from a diffuser on the shelf. The only sound was the quiet hum of the air conditioning, a gentle background noise that made the silence more pronounced.

"How are you feeling today, Karen?" he asked, his voice steady and professional. His eyes, framed by silver-rimmed glasses, were filled with concern and clinical detachment. He wore a dark blue suit, impeccably pressed, with a stethoscope hanging around his neck, more as a symbol of his profession than for practical use in this setting.

Karen's eyes locked onto his, her voice trembling as she replied, "They're here again. They won't leave me alone."

Dr. Reynolds nodded, making notes on his clipboard. His pen moved swiftly, capturing her words with an efficiency born of years of practice. "Tell me about them. Who are they today?"

Karen closed her eyes, her mind racing back to the faces that haunted her dreams. The room felt colder, a creeping chill seeping into her bones. "My mother," she whispered. "She looks at me with those eyes filled with disappointment. I can hear her voice, telling me I failed her, that I left her to die."

As she spoke, the temperature in the room seemed to drop further. Karen felt a chill run down her spine, an unnatural coldness that had nothing to do with the air conditioning. She opened her eyes, and there she was—her mother, standing at the foot of her bed. The figure was translucent, an ethereal glow surrounding her form. Once warm and loving, her eyes were now pools of sorrow and anger, reflecting the torment of a restless spirit.

"Why, Karen?" the ghostly figure demanded, her voice echoing with a spectral resonance that made the hairs on Karen's arms stand on end. "Why did you let me die?"

Tears streamed down Karen's face, each drop a testament to the unbearable guilt she carried. "I'm sorry," she sobbed. "I'm so sorry. I couldn't save you. I couldn't."

As the apparition of her mother faded, the room remained steeped in an eerie silence. Then, another figure materialized—her father. His appearance was similarly spectral, his edges blurred as if he were a figure seen through frosted glass. His voice was softer, tinged with melancholy and longing. "I miss you, Karen. We all miss you."

Karen clutched her head, trying to block out his voice. It felt like the room was closing on her, the walls pressing closer with every word. "I couldn't save you," she cried. "I couldn't save any of you."

Dr. Reynolds watched his expression, which was one of deep concern. He placed a reassuring hand on her shoulder, the warmth of his touch a stark contrast to the cold that permeated the room. "Karen, these are just hallucinations. They aren't real. You need to remember that."

But to Karen, they were all too real. Every word cut deep, every accusation a dagger to her heart. The ghosts of her sins were everywhere, and there was no escaping them.

Dr. Reynolds' voice cut through the fog of her despair, gentle yet firm. "Focus on my voice, Karen. These visions are a manifestation of your guilt and grief. You have to let go."

But how could she? The memories of that fateful day were etched into her mind, an unending loop of regret and sorrow. The scent of her mother's perfume and her father's laughter now twisted into a haunting symphony that played relentlessly in her mind.

The room seemed to darken, shadows lengthening as if responding to her inner turmoil. Karen's breaths came in ragged gasps, her chest tightening with the weight of her sorrow. She felt herself being pulled into the past, into the moment she had been trying so desperately to escape.

"Karen," Dr. Reynolds' voice was a lifeline, pulling her back from the brink. "You're not alone. We're here to help you through this."

But Karen's eyes were fixed on the apparitions, their ethereal forms flickering like candles in the wind. The ghosts of her past were relentless, their accusations a constant reminder of the pain she could never outrun. Deep down, she knew that this was her penance—a never-ending cycle of remorse and longing for what she could never change.

Suddenly, the room around her blurred and shifted as if reality was being reassembled. She blinked, trying to steady her vision, and when it cleared, she was no longer in Dr. Reynolds' office. She stood in her childhood home, the familiar scent of her mother's cooking filling the air—a rich aroma of freshly baked bread and simmering stew that tugged at her heartstrings. The sunlight streamed through the kitchen window, casting a warm, golden hue across the well-worn wooden floor and the floral-patterned wallpaper.

She wandered through the house, her fingers grazing the textured wallpaper and the smooth, polished banister of the staircase. Every surface, every detail felt vivid and solid beneath her touch. The ticking of the old grandfather clock in the hallway was a comforting metronome of her past, and she heard the distant laughter of children playing outside, mingled with the chirping of birds.

But as she turned a corner, the serene atmosphere shattered. She saw her mother again, standing in the living room, her figure ghostly yet unmistakable. Her eyes bore into Karen's soul, filled with that same crushing disappointment.

"Why, Karen?" her mother repeated, voice full of sorrow, echoing like a haunting melody through the house.

"No!" Karen screamed, the sound raw and desperate. "This isn't real. This can't be real!"

Her vision blurred again, the world around her swirling into a chaotic dance of colors and shapes. When it settled, she found herself in a different place—a sunlit meadow, the air thick with the heady scent of wildflowers. The vibrant colors of poppies, daisies, and buttercups were almost too bright, their petals swaying gently in the warm breeze. The sky above was an endless expanse of clear blue, and the distant hum of bees added a serene, almost idyllic soundtrack to the scene.

She breathed deeply, the sweet floral scent calming her frayed nerves. "This is real. I must have woken up again," she murmured, her voice steadier.

As she walked through the meadow, the soft grass brushing against her ankles, she saw her father standing by a towering oak tree. His figure was solid, yet his eyes had an unsettling hollowness, a void that spoke of deep betrayal and sorrow.

"You did not help me," he said, his voice echoing with a spectral resonance that chilled her to the bone. "You did nothing."

"No," Karen whimpered, her voice barely audible. "Not again. Please, not again."

The world around her began to distort, the colors bleeding into one another, the meadow fading away like a distant memory. She felt herself being pulled through a tunnel of darkness, the sound of her own ragged breathing the only constant.

Suddenly, she was in a hospital bed, the sterile scent of antiseptic and the faint beep of medical machines surrounding her. The harsh fluorescent lights overhead cast an unforgiving glare on the white walls. She felt the stiff, scratchy texture of the hospital sheets beneath her fingers, the cold metal of the bed rails pressing into her sides.

Doctors and nurses bustled around her, their movements a blur of white coats and hurried efficiency. Dr. Reynolds stood at the foot of her bed, his face etched with deep concern. His calm, professional demeanor now seemed fragile, like it might crack under the weight of his worry.

"Karen, you've been through a lot," he said, his voice a lifeline in the chaos. "You've been in a coma for the past week."

Karen's mind reeled, struggling to process his words. The ghosts of her past, the vivid hallucinations—had they all been the products of her comatose mind? She looked around, her eyes wide with confusion and fear. The lines between reality and illusion had blurred so deeply that she couldn't tell where one ended and the other began.

Tears filled her eyes, spilling down her cheeks as she grappled with the overwhelming sense of loss and guilt. "But they were so real," she whispered, her voice breaking. "They felt so real."

Dr. Reynolds shook his head gently, his expression one of patient understanding. "It was all a dream, Karen. Your mind was playing tricks on you. The stress and the guilt are all manifested in your dreams. But it's over now. You're awake, and you're safe."

Karen's eyes filled with tears, a mixture of relief and confusion. She had been trapped in a nightmare of her own making, tortured by the ghosts of her sins. But now, she had a chance to start anew, to heal and find peace.

But then, just as she started to relax, her eyes caught a movement in the corner of the room. She froze, her breath catching in her throat. Her mother's face, not a ghost this time, but vivid and alive, sat in the corner of the room, staring at her with those same accusing eyes. The lines of sorrow etched deeply into her expression were unmistakable, her presence as real as the bed she lay in.

"Doctor, do you see her?" Karen whispered, her voice trembling.

Dr. Reynolds followed her gaze, his brow furrowing in concern. "There's no one there, Karen."

Karen's pulse quickened, a cold sweat breaking out on her forehead. "I... I don't know what's real anymore."

The room seemed to close around her, the walls pressing closer, the air growing thick and stifling. She tried to focus on the mundane details—the harsh fluorescent lights, the sterile smell of antiseptic, the rhythmic beeping of the heart monitor—but they did nothing to ground her.

She was in a perpetual state of suspense, never knowing when the next vision would strike. Sometimes, it was her mother, eyes filled with disappointment and sorrow, whispering words of accusation that sliced through Karen's soul. Other times, it was her father, his expression a twisted mask of betrayal and grief, reminding her of the promises she had failed to keep.

The hospital room transformed into a labyrinth of her worst fears and regrets, each corner hiding a new torment. The sterile environment, once a place of supposed safety, became a prison. The soft whirring of the ventilator and the faint ticking of the wall clock became ominous, each sound amplifying her sense of dread.

In moments of fleeting clarity, Karen would try to reach out to Dr. Reynolds, her voice a desperate plea for understanding. "Doctor, please, help me. I need to know what's real. I need to find my way back."

Dr. Reynolds responded with calm, measured words, trying to anchor her: "Karen, you are here, in the hospital. You are safe. The visions are part of your mind's struggle to process your grief and guilt. You need to hold onto the present, to the tangible world around you."

But the apparitions were relentless, their presence a constant, haunting reminder of her failures. Karen's grip on reality slipped further each day, her mind a battleground of fear and sorrow. The hospital bed became her world, a narrow space where the lines between past and present, dream and reality, blurred into a suffocating fog of confusion and despair.

One morning, Karen woke up and found herself in a different place altogether—a warm, sunlit room, far removed from the cold sterility of the institute. She felt a strange calmness, a sense of peace she hadn't felt in months. Dr. Reynolds and a nurse stood by her side.

"You did it, Karen," Dr. Reynolds said, smiling. "You're finally awake. For real this time."

Karen wanted to believe him, but a nagging doubt gnawed at her. "How do I know this isn't another dream?"

Dr. Reynolds sighed. "I understand your skepticism. But look around you. Feel the sun on your skin. Listen to the sounds outside. You're truly awake."

Karen took a deep breath, trying to convince herself. The sun's warmth felt real, the birdsong outside her window soothing. But just as she began to relax, she saw her mother's reflection in the window, staring back at her with those same disappointed eyes.

"Mom?" Karen whispered, her voice shaking.

The reflection vanished, replaced by her own haunted face. She turned to Dr. Reynolds, desperation in her eyes. "I don't know what's real anymore."

Dr. Reynolds moved closer, his voice calm and reassuring. "Karen, listen to me. You are safe here. The visions you're seeing are a product of your mind. You've been through a lot, and understandably, you feel confused. But I need you to trust me and try to rest."

Karen looked into his eyes, desperately seeking the calm reassurance she desperately needed. His steady and composed presence began to cut through the haze of her fear. She took a deep breath, trying to absorb his calmness.

"Okay," she whispered, her voice fragile but hopeful. "I'll try."

Dr. Reynolds smiled gently. "That's all I ask, Karen. Just try to rest. You're safe here, and we'll help you through this."

Karen nodded, laying back against the pillows, her eyes heavy with exhaustion. Dr. Reynolds adjusted the blankets around her, making sure she was comfortable. "Rest now. We'll be right outside if you need anything."

As Karen's eyes slowly closed, Dr. Reynolds quietly left the room. He stepped into the hallway, the door clicking softly shut behind him. The corridor was quiet, and the soft hum of hospital activity was a distant background noise.

Dr. Reynolds turned and glanced at the metal plate on the door of Karen's room and walked away. As his shadow moved, the shining letters appeared:

Patient 137

Jane Locke

July 19, 2024 19:07

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13 comments

KA James
20:14 Aug 01, 2024

Good things you ran up against 3000 words (I have the same problem)- one more false recovery might have been too much. From the almost sickeningly sweet opening setting, through all the awakenings and shifts, it was enjoyable. I particularly liked the way you described the apparitions.

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Darvico Ulmeli
20:23 Aug 01, 2024

Thank you, James. There is more things to explain (Why Karen isn't appearing with parents? Why is Jane acting as Karen? Etc...), but 3000 words isn't enough. Thanks for liking the story.

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Carol Stewart
23:36 Jul 29, 2024

Trying to fathom the (very possibly) unfathomable here! So Karen was really her sister Jane, her way of keeping Karen alive, the manifestations of mother and father similar. Interesting portrayal of a disturbed and traumatised mind.

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Darvico Ulmeli
06:23 Jul 30, 2024

Thanks for comment, Carol.

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Martin Ross
20:30 Jul 29, 2024

Powerful — I loved the abrupt transition from an idyllic ride into the darkness, and the final revelation was a satisfying jab! Well done!

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Darvico Ulmeli
21:37 Jul 29, 2024

Thank you,Martin 😊.

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Sarah Wise
17:15 Jul 27, 2024

I was on the edge of my seat the entire time! I still wasn't sure by the end which visions were real and which were not. I also heard Sweet Caroline in the back of my head through the entire story. I so wish there were more I feel like I have so many questions. Loved this!

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Darvico Ulmeli
20:13 Jul 27, 2024

There was more but I couldn't finish ir under 3 000 words. Maybe I make sequel, who nows.

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01:59 Jul 26, 2024

The biggest twist is we don't know why she is being kept in a probably locked room with a metal plat with Patient 137 on it. I guess she is a patient and whatever she did or didn't do she has been put in here due to her state of mind. A mind riddled with guilt? Poor girl. She blames herself for something awful that happened. But was it all a nightmare? Creepy indeed. Had to keep on reading.

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Darvico Ulmeli
02:37 Jul 26, 2024

I am glad that you like the story. This is my favorite type of mystery. Even in the end you can stop wondering.

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Mary Bendickson
14:27 Jul 20, 2024

I was wondering what happened to Jane. Suspenseful telling.

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Darvico Ulmeli
15:04 Jul 20, 2024

I hoped that end was quite a twist. Thanks, Mary.

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Mary Bendickson
15:15 Jul 20, 2024

Very twisted.

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