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EVACUATION NOTICE

Sector IX will be evacuated tomorrow,

Tuesday, January 21, 2025, at 17:00


Food, clothing, and shelter will be provided.


Each individual, regardless of age, may bring no more than one suitcase, which they must carry themselves. Excess luggage will be left behind.



The notice came yesterday afternoon. A simple flyer pushed through the mail slot. She had stood by the front door, reading, and rereading the message, trying to absorb the news, the implication, the reality. Everyone knew that it would happen. They had heard rumors from other sectors, but nobody had heard from those who had left. Nobody knew where they would go, how far they would travel. Everyone had hoped it would be later, rather than sooner. Nobody was prepared to leave their home. How could they?


How could she pack more than seventy ears of living in one suitcase and still carry it? How far would she have to carry it? Would they walk the whole way? What would they have in their new home? Would there be a home or dormitories, or tents? Would there be electricity, phone service, running water? Would they need money, something with which to barter?


What would she take? What could she bring? How to decide?


She walked into her living room. All her adult life she had painstakingly collected the best she could afford at the time. Now after so many years, her home was exactly as she envisioned. The colors, the style, the comfort. It might not be perfect enough for Architectural Digest, but it was perfect for her. How could she walk away from this? This was her identity, her peace, her comfort, her sanctuary.


She looked at the walls and saw her art. There was her first framed piece. She remembered making it. She had been so proud of it. But other pieces, like that one, were technically better. And the one over there, had more emotional value. She remembered when she created it, not long after her father passed. Those were his colors. But then there was also her textile work. Would she bring that quilt? Or this blanket? Would she be able to make more, wherever she’d end up? Maybe she could learn new techniques or teach others.


She wandered into her study. How about her books? Which one or two of the books she had read and carefully saved, alphabetized, and catalogued were more important than others? How about her own stories? Could she carry all of them? Or would she write new ones, read, share, and listen to other people’s stories?


She looked at her kitchen, all her recipes. And smiled, remembering those endless hours, not to mention thousands of dollars spent on experiments, trial and error and eventual successes. How could she leave all that behind? Would she be called upon to cook? Would she have proper ingredients? Or could she share her knowledge, taste different dishes, explore new spices?


Jewelry? She opened the drawer and looked at her collection of handmade pieces picked up at markets around the world. Pieces shamelessly bargained for, remembering the triumph of finding those little gems and bringing them home. The one or two pieces of value she had inherited from her mother, who had gotten them from her mother.


Clothing? This dress? The fabric exquisite, the cut timeless, the fit exact, but not warm enough for January. Or these boots? Lovely, elegant but not comfortable for walking. Her prized dancing shoes, though she didn’t dance anymore.


The flyer had said clothing would be provided, but would she bring one or two special pieces? Which one? How could she choose? Would it be warm where they were going, or would she need to bundle up?


She sat up all night, thinking, planning, and remembering.


She thought back to her childhood. How different life had been then, so simple, so safe. How she had played in the backyard, rarely exposed to the chaos and complications of the world. She remembered learning to juggle, poorly. To jump rope and play tag. Building castles in the sandbox and forts using old blankets and clotheslines.


She thought of her teens, the angst, how nobody had understood her. How she had felt alone, adrift, and insecure. Certain in the knowledge that her problems were unique and unexplainable. She remembered the music, how her parents had hated it. How she defiantly had used earbuds and blocked the world.


And smiled when she thought of her college years. How she had sprung free, let loose and transformed herself. How, when she started her work, she had to curb all that wildness and slowly became her parents.


Early this morning she wandered through her home again, looking at, touching, holding, stroking all she had made and everything she had accumulated. She stopped to think about where and when she had created, found, fallen in love with each item. She thought about what she had learned from each piece, whether it had been a technique or how many failures it had taken before she got it right. She thought of how she would do each one differently if she ever would do it again. Her mind awhirl with possibilities, opportunities and plans. Would it be possible to grow, change, evolve?


Then she had taken pictures of her art, picked some of the snapshots from her photo albums, weeded through and selected her favorite recipes, and stories, uploading them all to her phone. Finally, she had dropped her mother's jewelry, her wallet and the phone in a shoulder bag.


At 16:55, after one last look, she shrugged into her coat, the sensible one with the zip-out lining and closed the door behind her. Stuffing her hands in her pockets, she walked to the street and joined the dozens of people already walking. Most lugging large suitcases, children clutching beloved stuffed animals and dolls. Slouching teens trailed behind, headsets in place, heads bopping to whatever beat, their eyes on what could be their last videos.


She had her memory, her skills, her knowledge, and experience none of which fit in a suitcase. 


January 17, 2025 19:40

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Thomas Wetzel
06:02 Jan 22, 2025

Cool story, Trudy! Priorities. What really matters when it comes to material goods. I went through this exercise recently and it was purifying. You've probably heard the saying (and I am paraphrasing here) "The more things you own, those things eventually own you." There is a certain liberation in casting away unneeded things. Marie Kondo knows all about this.

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Trudy Jas
13:40 Jan 22, 2025

Thanks, Thomas. It's all just stuff. I've moved so many times; you get used to weeding. Will confess I just looked up who Marie Kondo is. I probably could teach her a thing or two. LOL

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Thomas Wetzel
23:28 Jan 22, 2025

Even her book is small and concise. She's all about downsizing.

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Trudy Jas
03:23 Jan 23, 2025

So, it's Wednesday, and you made it, right? Or am I talking to Margot? In which case, good dog, good dog.

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Thomas Wetzel
04:01 Jan 23, 2025

Got any steaks? Tennis balls? Bacon? This is Thomas! I swear...

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Trudy Jas
04:23 Jan 23, 2025

Woof! I believe you. (Yeah, right)😏🙄🐿️ This is Petra, lemme talk with Pete

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Myranda Marie
00:54 Jan 20, 2025

We carry the very best things in life in our hearts and in our memories.

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Trudy Jas
00:56 Jan 20, 2025

We do. Can't leave those behind, ever. Thanks, Myranda, for reading my story. :-)

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Ari Walker
13:30 Jan 19, 2025

Trudy, I felt that I came to know this woman over the course of your story. I like the way that you use the stress in inherent in the prompt to suss out what is most important to her. As I read, I found her internal dialog and considerations always at the front of my mind, while in the perimeter I registered some fear for the future. I came away with the impression that this woman is calm under pressure. Best, Ari

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Trudy Jas
15:04 Jan 19, 2025

Thank you, Ari for those wonderful words. I'm thrilled that you feel you got to know the person, and yes, in the end things are just things. Thanks for reading my story. :-)

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Keba Ghardt
01:13 Jan 19, 2025

This hit home a few times. I've had to move suddenly and leave a library behind, I spent a whole day in 2020 photographing art I couldn't keep. The context you've created with everyone going through the same semi-expected thing helps skip over the self-pity for a more pure sentimentality. The last line is *chef's kiss*

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Trudy Jas
01:26 Jan 19, 2025

Thanks, Keba. Your last words are golden. I'm sorry for your losses. I've been there and empathize. But, like a forest after a fire, we grow again.

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Alexis Araneta
16:35 Jan 18, 2025

Such a touching and poignant piece, Trudy. That last line sealed it for me. Lovely work !

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Trudy Jas
16:37 Jan 18, 2025

Thanks, Alexis for our lovely feedback. It's all just things, isn't it.

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Kristi Gott
03:52 Jan 18, 2025

Very immersive. I felt like I was there too, experiencing the main character's feelings. This seems especially relevant right now when so many people had to grab things and leave their homes in Los Angeles to escape the fire. The character's life journey is told when she tries to decide which items to take with her. It reaches to the heart and the memories attached to the items are so dear.

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Trudy Jas
04:44 Jan 18, 2025

Thank you, Kristi. Your comments are always wonderfully insightful. I really appreciate your feedback.

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