Air Loom 2: The Fuel
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Well, hellfire and biscuits, you done stumbled
into a mess bigger than a hog in a mud pit.
Lemme break it down for ya real slow-like,
‘cause Lord knows it took me a while to figure it
out my own self. See, I was just mindin’ my
business, drinkin’ my sweet tea, scratchin’ my
belly, thinkin’ life was about as normal as huntin’
deer on a Sunday. But nope—turns out, I was
about three kinds o’ stupid.
Ever hear folks talk ‘bout not messin’ with things
ya don’t understand? Preacher always said,
Don’t go worshippin’ false idols.
But did I listen? ‘Course not. Now I got a one-
way ticket to hell in a hay cart, and I ain’t even
got a damn refund.
I’m talkin’ real hell, y’all. Not that fancy fire ‘n
brimstone kinda deal where you just sit around
sweatin’ all day. Naw, this is different.
This is the Air Loom, and it don’t just eat yer
soul—it chews it up,spits it out, and asks for
seconds.
And guess who’s on the menu? Me.
Also my daddy.
Also my granddaddy.
Also my girlfriend, Alina.
Also Sylvester—my childhood cat, bless his dumb
lil’ heart. Ranout in front of a truck like he had
somewhere important to be.
Now, I know you’re sittin’ there scratchin’ yer
head wonderin’,What in the high-fried Kentucky-
fried chicken is this boy talkin’ ‘bout?
Well, buckle up, buttercup. We’re fixin’ to take a
ride.
2;
Now lemme tell ya ‘bout Jeffery. Boy wasn’t right
in the head, bless his heart.
He had this thing in his basement. Not a still,
not an old truck engine, not even a possum he
was keepin’ as a pet (don’t ask). This thing was…
alive. Sorta hummin’. Sorta callin’ to him like a
siren whisperin ’ through a cornfield.
Any regular ol’ feller with an ounce o’ sense
woulda burned thewhole house down and
moved to a new county. But Jeffery? Naw.
He had that special kinda stupid—the one that
makes a man touch a fence he knows is electric,
just to be sure.
So, what’s he do?
He let his girl Alina to flips the switch.
Y’all ever seen somethin’ so bad, so wrong, it
makes yer stomach go colder than a frog’s ass in
a snowstorm? That’s what happened.
Alina screamed. Somethin’ inside that Air Loom
snapped to life, and it took hold of us.
No runnin’. No hidin’. The only way out? Suicide.
And Jeffery? Well, he ain’t no coward, but he
ain’t got much left to lose neither.
That’s why he grabbed them truck keys, sat his
ass in the driver’s seat, and let ‘er rip.
10 mph.
30 mph.
60 mph.
That good ol’ Chevy was flyin’ down the road like
a bat outta a possum’s backside.
100 mph—no slowin’ down now, buddy.
Then—WHOOSH.
That truck done lifted off the road. Ain’t never
seen nothin’ move so smooth. For a split second,
Jeffery was free.
SPLASH.
Water comes crashin’ in like a drunk uncle at a
wedding.
Floop. Bloop. Floop.
Cab fills up faster than a beer cooler at a tailgate
party.
Jeffery’s last words?
"Alina, I did love ya. Lord, please look after Sylvester."
And... Nothin’.
3;
Y’all still with me? Good. Grab a beer, swat a
mosquito, and lean in close, ‘cause things are
about to get weirder than a three-legged
possum dancin’ on a hot tin roof.
Jeffery’s eyes shot open.
First thing he saw? Alina’s smile. Bright, warm—
like Sunday morning biscuits fresh outta
Granny’s oven. For half a second, everything felt
alright.
Then it came the screech.
Not just any ol’ noise. This was somethin’
unnatural. Like if a barn owl and a chainsaw had
a demon baby and raised it on a diet of
shattered dreams. The beasts were outside.
Jeffery bolted upright. “What in the deep-fried
hell is goin’ on?”
His daddy stepped forward, arms crossed,
lookin’ like he just chewed up some bad tobacco.
“Best we can tell, son,” Daddy grumbled, “we’re
inside the machine.”
Jeffery’s stomach turned colder than an
outhouse seat in December. “Wait… Dad? Is that
really you?”
Daddy just sighed, like he’d been waitin’ on this
conversation longer than he cared to admit.
“Yep. All of us are here. Paw-Paw.
Your Great Paw-Paw. Even your mama.”
Now that? That was enough to make a grown
man forget how to breathe.
4;
“Mom?!” Jeffery’s voice cracked like a shotgun
blast over an empty field.
“Yeah, she’s here, son,” Daddy said, but his eyes
got all heavy, like a man holdin’ a secret too big
for his britches. “But… she ain’t doin’
so good. Machine’s damn near sucked her dry.”
That hit Jeffery like a steel-toed boot to the gut.
He needed to see her.
So, he followed Daddy down the path, Alina’s
hand in his, clammyas a frog’s belly in a
rainstorm. He wasn’t sure who was shakin’
more—him or her.
“Jeffery!” He heard it. His mama’s voice.
He broke into a run, feet slammin’ against the
ground, breath comin’ fast.
When he saw her, his heart near about quit.
“Mom!” He lunged, damn near tackled her,
clingin’ like a kid who just realized the dark’s got
claws. “Momma, I missed you.”
But the screechin’ outside? It was gettin’ closer.
Real close.
Daddy put a hand on Jeffery’s shoulder, voice
tight. “Son… now ain’t the time.”
5;
“Listen to your father,” Mama said, voice weaker
than a one-legged rooster in a dogfight. “He
knows this place. The only way out is the
mountain.”
That got Jeffery’s attention. “Mountain?”
Daddy nodded. “It’s surrounded by… creatures.”
Jeffery’s stomach twisted up somethin’ awful.
“What the hell kinda creatures?”
Mama sighed, lookin’ more tired than a hound
dog after a coon hunt. “Your father will explain…
but I won’t be there.”
“No. NO, Mom, don’t start talkin’ like that...”
She put a hand on his cheek, soft as the lullabies
she used to sing.
“I got no fight left, baby. I’ll become one of them
soon.”
Jeffery felt her slip away. One second, she was
there. The next?
Nothin’ but her clothes in his arms.
He staggered back, shakin’, heart hammerin’,
lookin’ at Daddy like a man starin’ down a storm
he can’t stop.
“Dad… where is she?!”
6;
Daddy looked at Jeffery, face all serious-like, like
a preacher about to lay down some hard truth.
“She’s one of them now, son.”
Jeffery’s gut sunk like a stone in a swamp.
“Dad… why?”
Daddy just shook his head. “I don’t know, boy.”
His voice was tight, like he was holdin’ back
words he couldn’t afford to say.
And that’s when the screechin’ outside got
worse. Alright, now hold up. I know what y’all
are thinkin’. You’re sittin’ there gnawin’ yer nails,
whisperin’ What in the redneck revenant
hell is happenin’ now?!
Well, buckle up, ‘cause things are about to blow
the hell up.
Jeffery whipped around. “Where’s the
mountain?”
Daddy pointed. “Only place in this world that’s got any color.”
Jeffery blinked. Color?
“Darkness hates color, son,” Daddy said, real
slow-like. “It only tolerates what it controls.”
Jeffery sat down hard, stomach churnin’ like bad
moonshine. He looked at his arm - bloated from
the drownin’, purple and ugly as
sin. And then? He saw it.
Everyone in this place… They were disfigured.
Changed by how they died.
Suicide left a mark. A cruel, sick signature.
7;
Jeffery turned to Alina.
For a second—just a second—she looked perfect.
Like she did back before all this hellfire
nonsense. He looked again.
Bones. Stickin’ out, sharp and ugly, from when
she wandered into the snow.
He sucked in a breath, stomach doin’
cartwheels. He caught his
own reflection in a puddle.
“Oh, my God.” Jeffery gagged. “I look like
marshmallow!”
Alina laughed. “Oh, Jeffery, you’re adorable.”
He rolled his bloated ass up and hugged her
tight. Maybe too tight. He was always messed
up, one way or another, but this?
This was a new level of screwed.
The Air Loom had taken its pound of flesh.
And now?
Now he had to get to that mountain of red lava.
“Dad,” Jeffery said, standing taller than he felt.
“I’m gonna defeat this darkness and free these souls.”
Daddy sighed. “Son… many have tried. It’s
impossible.”
“No,” Jeffery shot back. “You’re just scared.”
Daddy’s face got real still. “We don’t fight. We
hide. That’s the only way to survive.”
Yeah, well. That wasn’t gonna work for Jeffery.
8;
Jeffery gritted his teeth. “I can do it. Tell me
everything.”
Daddy watched him a long time, then finally
nodded. “Alright, boy. I’ll help you.”
The others in the shelter gathered around.
Survivors, lookin’ at Jeffery like he was the last
can of beans in a damn apocalypse.
Daddy sighed. “What’s the plan, son?”
Jeffery exhaled. “I dunno.”
Not exactly reassurin’, huh?
Alina reached into her purse. That same damn
purse she never let go of, even in death. She
pulled out a sticky note and smacked it
onto Jeffery’s forehead.
He yanked it off, frowned. “Not funny.”
It read:
To Jeffery, my adorable love. SAVE US.
And then? Lightbulb moment.
Only one way out.
One last sacrifice.
9;
Jeffery stood tall.
“I know how to beat the Darkness and save all of
us.”
Alina narrowed her eyes. “Really?”
He nodded. “Greed got us here. Sacrifice will
set us free.”
And that, folks? That’s the end of Air Loom 2.
But don’t y’all worry yer pretty little heads—
Air Loom 3: Sacrifice is comin’ up next.
Later, gater.
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18 comments
Such great imagery. Loved the style of writing and some brilliant lines here.
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Thanks Helen. Watch for loves portal this week. WW2 flick!
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Ha ha! Love the voice. This person is so real to me.
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Cool Ella. Real to me too! Thanks for reading
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The narrative voice held me captive, drawing me in like a moth to a web. Fantastic writing—I can’t wait for Part 3!
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Moth to a web! Love it! Thanks Denise
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Woah! What a wild ride, Donald. Love the voice and the many, mangy metaphors used in the tellin' of it! Though I bet that poor possum's plumb tuckered out. Great ending, hanging us all over the side of the proverbial cliff with all this talk about sa-cry-fice. Suffice it to say, nicely dun! Can't wait to read the next installment. Or get me the audiobook. All the best with the contest!
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All I can say here is “git r dun”! Thanks Marilyn
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Grat narative, great pacing. In spite of the small space characters well defined
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Thanks Chris!
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I liked this story a lot. I heard the dialect in my head. I like the contrast between the colourful, friendly tone of the narrator and the grim story he tells. Some excellent turns of phrase too. I particularly liked: "That good ol’ Chevy was flyin’ down the road like a bat outta a possum’s backside." :-)
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Thanks Frankie! I’m going off the deep end this week. A WW2 Nazi love story. Dangerous but it will be fun.
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Interesting Donald! Yes, dangerous. Looking forward to reading it!
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It’s tough to write WW2. I think I can either be on point or fall off cliff. “Loves Portal- the American and the Jewish girl”
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Looking forward to part three! Had missed the first part so had to go and read that and then read part two again - glad I did. I love this! Brilliant narrative voice, and some great dark humour in there - particularly like the line 'Like if a barn owl and a chainsaw had a demon baby and raised it on a diet of shattered dreams.' Amazing stuff!
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Awwww… shucks! You’re so sawweet, Miss Penelope! Thanks for the read!
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Way to go. Great second part. Looking for 3rd part. Hilarious stuff.
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Redneck phraseology! My man. Love it. Part 3 and 4 coming soon at Mr Haddix’s fingertips. Oh yea! Enjoy a bit of hillbilly Arkansas, John Wayne, humor. Well buddy peace out!
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