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Fantasy

It was the month January, winter was knocking at my door. I was 10 years old then. I was one curious child, i liked to know about everything that was happening, i often used to interfere about every matter happening in my town. I lived in a town called 'Heavera'. The people of 'Heavera' were very religious that they used to believe in supernatural things. But i never believed those and i often mock them when they used to pray.

One morning, everybody was shouting at each other, i was awake and figuring out what the matter was. The people who were very religious, were telling that the snow was increasing, it shouldn't be, this was a bad omen, or maybe it was a curse of god. The other people were furious and told them it was natural, the nature could be unpredictable sometimes. The two groups were arguing for a long time about this matter.

I started to think about the matter, though i didn't know which side on i was. But i had a theory, as i knew the snow was increasing, it's because of our own fault, maybe we were harming the nature. If it was not that, then i thought something was going on and i had to figure it out.

Day 1 : I was roaming around the town to see if i can figure something out. I searched every house with an excuse that i was visiting. Nobody seemed suspicious. The town was safe, what's outside was unsafe.

Day 2: The other day while i was walking in the fresh snow, as i reached near to the mountain, i noticed i wasn't leaving any footprints. It was very strange, i wanted to know what was happening, so i walked as far as i can go and looked behind. Alas! no footprints at all, I got afraid. I tried to find a way back but i realized i was lost. What was happening , i had no idea. I tried and tried but all i can see was snow. It was almost dusk, the sun was about to set. I was very tired and i slept on the spot.

Day 3: I realized i woke up on the next day, i was shocked after what i saw, i saw the colour of the snow was black, it was very strange and horrible, what was happening was beyond my thinking. The sky was pink, not like the normal pink, this pink looked horrible, it was like someone's blood mixed with water. There were cactus everywhere. I thought 'cactus can't grow in the snow, this is a dream, this must be a dream'. The sky looked like it wants to roar, there was no moon, no sun in that sky, i wasn't sure if that was a real sky. The atmosphere of that area looked different, i started to think if i was in space, because nothing looked normal and related to earth. I decided to walk and by mistake i stepped on a cactus and i was hurt, my feet started to bleed. I noticed the colour of my blood was blue, i became very frightened. I again noticed i was a little bit up from the ground, but i could walk. I thought if i was not in space, where am i?.

I became very sad and started crying, but then from nowhere a boy came and asked me why i was crying, i was relieved. After i explained everything to the boy, he said ' i was like you once, a human. But then when i visited this area, my life changed and i am trapped here'. I asked him about the place and he said he doesn't know anything, he was also wondering like me but for a long time. The boy said ' there are many others like us, i think we are dead, because we can't die here, we have tried many times. I replied ' If we are dead, why can't we figure out about this place?'. The boy said he didn't know.

Suddenly i realized there was a big tornado coming towards me, it felt like the tornado was crying, it sounded like someone's crying. I started to run but the tornado just sucked me in.

Day 4: I woke up and realized, the snow was white, sky wasn't pink. I was in the same place where my footprints were missing. I saw my parents crying and the people of my neighborhood were praying for me. If that was a miracle, i should be thankful to god. I ran to my mother and hugged her, but alas! she looked shocked, she shouted and asked ' who are you? why you hugged me?'. I replied i was her son. She said ' how dare you say that, are u joking? you are an old man, how could you be my son?'. I was shocked and frightened. What was she saying? Is it true?. I ran to the pond to see my reflection. Then what i saw was unexpected. I wasn't a 10 year old boy anymore, i was turned into an old man. I was devastated, my life got upside down.

It was just only 4 days, how could this happen, i thought and thought. But i figured out one thing that the tornado was made from the tears of my parents, and it was so strong because of everyone's prayers. The tornado saved me from that strange place. If i stayed more days , i could be dead on earth.

That place is still a mystery to me. Everything was strange about the place.

No one never realized that it was me, the town people thought i was a mad man, my parents spent their days searching for me.

I always felt guilty and i was furious at myself for going to that place and mocking my town people for their religion. I realized god taught me a lesson. It all started when i didn't find my footprints. I lost everything because of my own fault.


January 07, 2020 15:51

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Monir Hossain
15:23 Jan 09, 2020

Very addictive story.

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Jannatul Purnia
17:59 Jan 09, 2020

Thank you.

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Cory Pines
21:29 Jan 15, 2020

Hey, the story was very good and I liked the storyline a lot. You have a unique type of writing that pulls people into the story from the first line. If all you want to hear is good things about the story than you can stop reading, but if you want some critiques, here we go: 1. I'm sure you know but your grammar needs a little work, all 'i's should be capitalized (I not i) 2. Don't forget about your commons. 3. I'm not 100% certain that I like the Day 1: Day 2: ect... it pulls you out of the story and just looks like you ran out of stuff to...

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Jannatul Purnia
03:19 Jan 16, 2020

Thank you for your advice💙 I will focus on that.

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Helena Dobrev
18:06 Jan 09, 2020

Nice

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Jannatul Munia
16:51 Jan 07, 2020

I love this concept.

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Jannatul Purnia
16:55 Jan 07, 2020

Thank you very much.

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Towhid Arpon
16:39 Jan 07, 2020

Good concept✅

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Harriett Ford
21:23 Jan 15, 2020

Interesting premise. A mysterious place from which he returns an old man and takes the blame.

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Jannatul Purnia
03:16 Jan 16, 2020

Thank you💚

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