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Fiction Mystery

Kayleen sat hunched over the kitchen table, the blue glow of her laptop casting ghostly shadows across her face. The screen illuminated a blank page, a digital abyss that seemed to mock her with every rhythmic cursor blink.

Her throat tightened, her breath uneven. The air in the room felt oppressive and stifling. She whispered to herself as if attempting to rid herself of the doubt clinging to her like a parasite. Her voice trembled, a fragile thread on the verge of snapping, as she said, "This time, I'll get it right."

Her fingers hovered over the keyboard, the tips trembling as though afraid of the truth they were about to conjure. Slowly, deliberately, she began to type, each keystroke resonating in the silent room like a heartbeat.

"...The rain came down in icy sheets, pooling in the cracks of the uneven pavement. Streetlights buzzed and flickered, their halos diffused in the misty air, casting a dim glow over the deserted streets. David Carter moved through the shadows, his leather jacket glistening with rainwater, the worn material creaking with each step. His breath rose in pale clouds, dissolving into the cold night, as his eyes scanned the darkness with practiced precision.

He could feel it in the tautness of his muscles, the way the night seemed to hold its breath as though anticipating something monumental. The clues had finally converged, every jagged piece of the puzzle locking into place.

And then he saw it.

A shadow stretched unnaturally across the slick asphalt, long and warped, flickering with each pulse of the streetlights. His steps faltered. The air seemed to thicken, the pattern of rain muffled by an invisible force. A figure materialized at the edge of the street, cloaked in black, their silhouette rippling like oil in the murky light. The brim of a wide hat concealed the upper half of their face, leaving only the faint suggestion of a crooked smile visible in the shadows.

David's instincts screamed at him, and his body reacted before his mind caught up. His hand flew to his holster, fingers curling around the grip of his gun.

"David Carter," the figure rasped, their voice low and jagged, like gravel tumbling through a dry riverbed. “You should've walked away."

David's heart pounded, the gun's weight a steady reassurance against the storm of uncertainty roiling inside him. He narrowed his eyes, forcing steel into his voice. "And you should've stayed in the shadows."

The figure moved a sudden blur in the rain-drenched haze. David acted without hesitation. The shot cracked through the night, shattering the fragile tension like glass."

Kayleen froze, her fingers hovering over the keys as if touching them might detonate something fragile. Her pulse roared in her ears as she stared at the half-written paragraph on the screen. Images flashed in her mind like scenes from a movie she had watched too many times. At times, the villain's gun jammed with a hollow click, causing the would-be assassin to curse silently as David took control. Other times, David dodged, his movements swift and sharp, his body a blur as he disarmed the threat with a precision born of experience. Once, she had even sent a helicopter into the chaos, its searchlights slicing through the storm as ropes unfurled to whisk him away, a dramatic last-second reprieve.

The ending remained the same regardless of the scenario or how many frantic revisions or clever rewrites: David always fell. His body always crumpled into the rain-slick gutter, his face pale and still, eyes fixed on some unseen point as if searching for meaning in his final moments.

Kayleen's eyes fluttered shut. The world around her dimmed, and the soft hum of the refrigerator and the distant patter of rain against the windows faded into silence.

And then she woke up.

- * -

The shrill wail of the alarm clock shattered the fragile remnants of Kayleen's restless sleep. Her hand shot out instinctively, slamming the snooze button with a force that rattled the cheap plastic frame. The silence that followed felt deafening, punctuated only by her groan as she swung her legs over the edge of the bed. Her feet met the icy floor, the chill biting at her skin and dragging her further into the day she dreaded.

Her gaze flicked to the desk, where her laptop sat waiting. Its screen was black but accusing as though it knew the futility of her efforts. "Not again," she hissed through gritted teeth. But the words fell flat, an empty protest echoing only in her ears.

She glanced at the clock on her nightstand, its bright red digits glaring back at her: 7:14 a.m. Her stomach twisted. Always the same time.

No matter what she tried - skipping breakfast, staying under the covers, or screaming into the hollow confines of her small apartment - the day would inevitably rewind its way to the same tragic, unalterable end. She could see it clearly in her mind: David, lifeless, the rain soaking his still body as blood seeped into the cracks of the pavement. The scene haunted her like a ghost she couldn't exorcise.

A sharp, deliberate knock reverberated through the silence. Kayleen froze, her breath catching in her throat. Her heart raced, hammering against her ribs as she stared at the door, its worn wooden surface suddenly menacing.

She rose slowly, her limbs stiff with hesitation. Her bare feet made no sound against the floor as she crept toward the door, each step measured, her breath shallow and quick. Her fingers hovered over the handle, the cold metal stinging her skin as she slowly turned it.

The hallway beyond was empty. There was no movement or sound, just the stillness of early morning and the faint hum of distant traffic. But there, on the floor, lay a single sheet of paper, its crisp edges stark against the worn carpet.

Kayleen knelt, her hands trembling as she picked it up. The paper was unnervingly pristine, its surface unmarred except for one thing: a bold scrawl of crimson ink slashing across its center in jagged, angry strokes.

"You can't save him."

Her breath hitched. The words seemed to pulse, the red ink gleaming faintly as though alive, mocking her with their finality. The hallway felt darker now, the air heavier, and the faintest whisper of something unseen sent shivers crawling up her spine.

Kayleen's hands shook as she flipped the paper over, the edges crisp beneath her trembling fingers. The back was empty - sharp and unyielding in its silence, offering no answers or clues. Her pulse thudded in her ears, drowning out every other sound, as questions swirled in her mind like a rising storm. Who had left it?

The paper slipped from her grasp, fluttering to the floor like a broken-winged bird. Kayleen stumbled back to her desk, her knees weak, her breath catching in shallow bursts. Her laptop loomed before her, the screen's glow casting eerie shadows across the cluttered surface. The day would reset, just like it always did. What did it matter anymore?

She sank into the chair, her fingers hovering over the keyboard. As if compelled by something outside herself, her hands began to move, her thoughts pouring out in a torrent she couldn't stop or control.

"...The city stretched out beneath David like a labyrinth of secrets, its neon lights flickering in the haze of the night. The rooftop was slick with rain, the wind howling around him as though trying to snatch the flash drive from his grip. His knuckles were white against the black plastic, the weight of its contents pressing down on him harder than the storm above. This was the key to everything - the evidence that could make the corrupt system crumble.

A distorted shadow stretched across the rooftop's edge, elongating and flickering with every flash of lightning. From the darkness emerged the man in the wide-brimmed hat. His face was obscured, but his presence was undeniable. He was a menace that filled the space like smoke.

"Give it to me, David," the man growled, his voice a low rumble that seemed to vibrate in the air.

David's jaw tightened. His free hand hovered near the gun at his side, but he didn't draw it. Not yet. "Over my dead body."

The man's chuckle was dark, hollow, and devoid of humor. "That can be arranged."

David's body tensed; every muscle coiled like a spring. And then, without warning, he moved - not toward the man, but toward the edge. His boots skidded against the wet concrete as he launched into the void. The wind tore at him, and the flash drive still clutched in his hand as he plummeted. The ground rushed up to meet him with brutal finality.

David's body lay twisted and broken, rain pooling around him and mingling with the blood that seeped from his lifeless form. The flash drive rolled from his limp fingers, spinning once before disappearing into the yawning mouth of a storm drain."

Kayleen's fingers stilled, hovering over the keys. Her chest rose and fell in quick, shallow gasps as her eyes scanned the words she'd just written. No matter how hard she tried, no matter how many ways she twisted the narrative, the ending was always the same.

The room grew colder, the air sharp and biting against her skin. Kayleen shivered, her breath fogging in front of her.

"Why do you keep doing this to him?"

The voice cut through the silence, soft but razor-edged, each word slicing through her like a scalpel. It wasn't loud, but it carried an undeniable weight, an authority that made the hair on the back of her neck stand on end.

Her chair screeched against the floor as she spun around, her eyes darting wildly. The room was empty, its shadows long and unbroken. Yet the voice lingered, hanging in the air like the echo of a scream.

- * -

The loops spiraled on, each more maddening and suffocating than the last. Kayleen threw every possibility she could imagine at the story—David walking away from the case, vanishing into the anonymity of some distant town, even staging his own death in an elaborate deception. Each time, the threads of fate snapped back, relentless and unyielding. Every version ended with David meeting the same inescapable demise.

And with every failure, the voice grew louder, more insistent, a presence she could no longer ignore.

"You can't save him."

The words burrowed into her mind like shards of ice, freezing her resolve and cracking her defenses.

- * -

Her breaking point came without warning. She woke to the harsh glow of her laptop; the screen was alive with a document she hadn't opened. The words glared back at her in stark clarity, each heavy with accusation.

"KAYLEEN, LET ME GO."

Her breath hitched, the syllables twisting something deep inside her. Tears blurred her vision, distorting the screen as her chest tightened. "Let him go?" she whispered, the words trembling on her lips. She slammed the laptop shut, her heart pounding in her ears, a desperate thrum that felt like it might burst through her ribcage.

How could she let him go? David wasn't just a character - he was hers. Her creation.

Hands trembling, she forced herself to reopen the laptop. The screen flickered to life, the document waiting as if daring her to take the next step. Her fingers hovered above the keys, hesitant, heavy with the burden of what she had to do.

“...David stood at the rooftop's edge, the city sprawling below him in a tangled maze of lights and shadows. The flash drive rested in his palm, its surface slick from the rain battering the skyline. He turned slowly, meeting the shadow's gaze, a weary smile curving his lips.

"You win," he said, his voice steady despite the storm raging around him.

The shadow hesitated, its dark mass rippling like smoke caught in the wind. David's smile widened as he hurled the flash drive into the void. It spun once and twice before vanishing into the endless abyss.

The shadow dissolved, unraveling into threads of nothingness that were swallowed by the night. David exhaled, his shoulders relaxing as he closed his eyes. His foot slipped off the edge, and he let himself fall.

But this time, there was no sickening crunch, no rain-drenched blood pooling in the cracks of the pavement. There was only the rushing wind, calm and liberating, carrying him upward as though the air had decided he'd suffered enough. For the first time, he soared, untethered and free.”

Kayleen typed the final words, her breathing shallow and uneven. Her fingers hovered for a moment, then she hit save. The screen blinks once as if acknowledging her choice before fading to black. She stared at the lifeless monitor, her pulse quickening as the silence stretched on.

For the first time in weeks, her alarm didn't ring, and her clock didn't reset. Beyond her window, the sun began to rise, its golden light spilling into the room like a benediction.

A shaky exhale escaped her lips, relief washing over her in a hesitant wave. But it was fleeting.

The voice returned, colder now, its clarity cutting through the stillness like a blade.

"You thought you were writing the story, Kayleen, but you're in mine."

Her stomach lurched, the words slamming into her like a physical blow. The room seemed to tilt, the walls bending and shifting as faint outlines began to emerge. Words. They crawled along the surface, endless and unnerving, like veins of ink spreading through the plaster. Her breath caught as she recognized them - snippets of her story, David's. There, intertwined within the narrative, was her own name, recurring in a relentless cycle.

Her voice cracked as she whispered, "I'm... fictional."

A deep, echoing laugh rumbled through the room, shaking the air around her.

"You exist because I wrote you. And as long as David dies, you live."

The truth crushed her, its weight unbearable, suffocating. She gripped the edge of the desk, her knuckles white, her vision swimming. She wasn't the author. She never had been. She was another character in someone else's story, trapped in a narrative she could neither control nor escape.

Kayleen's eyes widened as she noticed a faint but unmistakable flicker. The cursor on her laptop screen faltered, its relentless blinking stuttering like an unrhythmic heartbeat. She leaned closer, her breath fogging the screen, her pulse thundering in her ears.

Her hands hovered over the keyboard, trembling as a strange current of both fear and resolve coursed through her. She didn't know if this would work, but it didn't matter. She couldn't just sit and wait for her fate to be sealed.

"...David stood at the rooftop's edge, the wind whipping his coat as rain lashed against his face. The shadow loomed more significant than ever, its presence suffocating, a black void threatening to consume him. His eyes narrowed as he braced himself for the inevitable, his hand tightening around the flash drive.

And then he saw her.

Kayleen stepped out of the rain, her silhouette illuminated by the flickering city lights below. Her hair clung to her face, soaked by the storm, her expression etched with determination. David froze, his confusion cutting through the fear that gripped him.

"What are you doing here?" he asked, his voice wavering with disbelief.

She didn't hesitate. "Ending this," she said simply, her voice steady despite the tempest. She reached out, grabbing his hand, her grip firm and grounding.

The shadow recoiled slightly, its edges rippling as though sensing something it couldn't understand. Together, they turned to face it, their shared defiance a spark in the darkness.

Kayleen's free hand moved, and words began to appear in the air around them, glowing and ephemeral, reshaping the very fabric of their reality. Each keystroke on her invisible typewriter echoed like a chime, the letters carving through the shadow's essence.

"The shadow quivered, shrinking under the weight of its unraveling story, its grip on the world slipping away."

The rooftop shuddered beneath their feet, cracks splintering outward like veins. The world groaned in protest as it was rewritten. The shadow howled, a sound neither human nor beast, its form convulsing and fracturing.

Kayleen's fingers moved faster now, her heart pounding as she typed the final line.

"And the author, trapped in their own story, could no longer control what they had created."

The words blazed brightly in the air for a moment before surging forward like a tidal wave and crashing into the shadow. The howl dissolved instantly, its darkness scattering like ash on the wind. The howl faded, leaving behind only silence.

Kayleen blinked, disoriented by the sudden change. The storm was gone. Warm and golden sunlight poured through an open window, chasing away the lingering chill. She glanced around and found herself in a quiet room, its walls bare but alive with possibility. The air was heavy, not with dread but with something new: freedom.

David stood beside her, his expression caught between relief and wonder. "Are we free?" he inquired, his voice barely audible above a whisper.

Kayleen's lips curled into a faint, hopeful smile. "We write our own ending now."

David let out a breath he didn't know he'd been holding, his shoulders relaxing for the first time in what felt like lifetimes. Together, they stood in the quiet, savoring the moment of stillness.

- * -

Far away, in a place neither Kayleen nor David could ever reach, a new writer sat at a desk, staring at a blank page. The room was dimly lit, and the computer screen's glow was the only illumination source. The writer's fingers twitched, hesitating over the keys, unaware of the story that had just rewritten itself.

Unaware that sometimes authors lose control of their creations.

December 21, 2024 14:11

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Jo Freitag
11:44 Dec 31, 2024

I love this! I am writing a similar story of the author losing control of one of more of her characters; and the flow-on effects that has on the plot and timelines of what should be a classic Arthurian tale.

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Darvico Ulmeli
12:32 Dec 31, 2024

Thank you for reading.

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Chris Sage
14:31 Dec 29, 2024

A double twist! Very fun read and an extremely original take on the prompt.

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Darvico Ulmeli
14:59 Dec 29, 2024

I'm glad you like it.

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Kristine McCraw
13:06 Dec 29, 2024

Love your description!

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Darvico Ulmeli
14:20 Dec 29, 2024

Thank you.

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Graham Kinross
10:51 Dec 26, 2024

Seems like a blurring of fiction and reality with hints of mental health problems when a writer puts too much of themselves into their creation.

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Darvico Ulmeli
17:27 Dec 26, 2024

Perfectly described. Thanks for reading.

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Graham Kinross
07:31 Dec 27, 2024

You’re welcome Darvico.

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Mary Bendickson
19:22 Dec 24, 2024

Impressive! Very creative!😍

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