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Drama Fantasy Teens & Young Adult

I threw another knife, a frown coming over my face as it hit the outer circle of the target painted on to the long wooden wall. I tried again, frustrated with myself. I need to learn how to do this. I can't focus on one weapon, I need to be versed with all. There might be close- range combat tomorrow in the arena, and archery doesn't work with that type of fighting. It takes to long to get the arrow flying. 


"Like this." Karila said with a smile, taking a knife off of the wooden table. She planted her feet into the ground, standing perpendicular to the wall, twisting her shoulders and throwing it.


I took the knife she handed me, copying what she had done. The feel was completely different. The movement was sharper. I felt surer of where the blade was going.


I practiced again and again, glancing over at Luke's older sister and Therin from time to time. They knew each other. I was sure of it. The emotions were too prominent for me to ignore, for they were taking up every single space in my head. They felt comfortable- safe. He did, at least. The girl was harder to read than him.


After a few minutes, a guard entered. We all stopped what we were doing, and the girl turned to face her. 


"Raya Castor." she said softly, offering a timid bow as Luke's sister turned to her. She murmured something softly, too quiet for me to hear. Raya replied, relief flickering across her face for a moment. She glanced at Therin, repeating what she had said to the guard. He nodded, offering her the slightest of smiles. 


As if on cue, two officials walked in. "You have all been requested to join the king and queen in an hour's time." One of them said, eyes sweeping around the room. "Please make your way back to the right wing. Your assistants will be awaiting your arrival." 


I knew what they meant. Emmie would be waiting for me with the pale blue dress.


I couldn't help but noticing Karila's bright smile as we walked down the elaborately decorated corridors and back up to the large, circular common space. Instantly, Emmie took me by the arm and led me back towards the room I had been assigned to, handing me the dress she had laid out on my four-poster canopy bed. 


I took it from her with a sigh, ducking into the over sized bathroom, glancing around before finally meeting my reflection's eyes. She looked confused, but intrigued. It was the same, overwhelming curiosity that I had seen in Alaric's eyes that fateful day I chose my death. 


With a sigh, I changed into the dress with a bit of struggle around my shoulders, tugging it down once it was on. I stared at myself in the mirror, reaching up and freeing my hair from it's ponytail, watching as it tumbled down my back and over my shoulders in loose waves. People- friends- back in Forane always used to tell me that I was pretty. I still don't understand why. I tied my hair bacin just as Emmie knocked on the door. 


"Done getting the dress on?" She called, voice tinged with the slightest bit of humor. 


"Yeah." I replied. 


She opened the door and picked up a brush from the white and grey marble counter, standing behind me as she ran it through my hair. I winced as it caught on knots, Emmie brushing them through until none remained. Even without curling my hair, it looked as if it had been done. She turned me to face her and I sighed, clenching my teeth as she added a light layer of blush and eyeshadow to my face. She picked up a small tube of a black liquid and twisted the cap open. 


"Close your eyes and relax your face." she instructed, and I did. I felt something cold and wet touch my eyelid, breathing out a sigh of relief as she finished the other side. I opened my eyes, trying to get used to the feeling of the powder and eyeliner painting my face like I was a blank canvas. 


The canvas was obscured in a layer of white. Underneath, there was a mural.


She handed me the heels as I took off my shoes and socks, slipping them on and following Emmie back out to the common room. She waved, offering a last smile, and I returned it, following everyone else down the staircase. Had it really been an hour? That long just to get me into this excessively fancy apparel and have makeup done? 


Just to have me- and all except one person- dead by the same time tomorrow. 


Everyone besides Therin and Everlys looked like mannequins. Emotionless figures walking, always in step with the people beside and in front of them. 


We branched off to a corridor more elaborately decorated than the others, the stark white dotted with gold decor, white vases with blood red roses lining the columned way.


I could hear voices on the other side of the large, double doors that the guards promptly opened as we approached.


I looked over at the other contestants. They looked afraid, all except for Therin and Everlys.


The doors opened to a space as large as a ballroom. The lights from the gigantic chandelier in the center were dimmed, though they weren't needed much because of the large windows that stretched from the ground to ceiling. Columns just like the ones outside were set between them, benches made of the same stone pressed against the glass. 


I didn't know what to do. There were too many people, all draped with jewels and the symbols of each major Sinistrian city dotting the room on banners and noble's cloaks. I saw Raya walk towards us, and I couldn't help but stare.


Her dress swept the floor, and was the color of a naturally pink rose. There was a slit in the side that reached above her knee, high heels the same deep black as her pixie- cut hair. Strays brushed her forehead and silver earrings, the thin metal long enough to almost touch her broad shoulders.


First, she looked at me. I know what you're doing. Trying to free the dragons...it won't work. It never will.


I refrained from shaking her by the shoulders to ask how she knew. Had Luke told her? Had she just...found out? One possibility suddenly revealed itself. There was only one other person that I knew of who she could have gotten it from. Nepthys. Had Raya known her? My best friend? And now, was she going to end me through Therin and Everlys? I was a target now. That was the only thing I knew for sure.


She extended a hand decked with jeweled rings towards Therin and he took it, unable to keep from smiling. "You're welcome." she said with a smirk, and the two were soon lost in the crowd, leaving me more confused than ever. I instantly disliked Raya. It wasn't that I was jealous that she was just so beautiful, but rather that she was hiding something, and doing so in a way that I hated. It I also didn't like the fact that Luke was her brother. It just...bothered me, for some reason. Was he plotting against me? Was everyone?


"Hi." said a voice behind me. I jumped, quickly turning around to meet a pair of golden eyes. 


I sighed, crossing my arms. "Please don't scare me like that." I said with a slight shake of my head, rolling my eyes at his smirk. Luke looked like his sister just then, with the same satisfied look that I had seen in Raya. 


"No promises." he said, and I rolled my eyes, looking around again. 


"It's so...crowded." I could tell that people's eyes were on Luke and I.


A noble talking to one of the contestants? One from Forane, at that. In Emran, there were never events like these. Not with as many people, not with as much decoration and showing off as much obvious wealth. 


"Yeah. I hate it, too." He grabbed my hand, weaving his way through the crowd of nobles. He stopped he almost collided with two young women, both looking like they were in their late teens. 


"Katya." He said in acknowledgement to the girl with bright sapphire eyes, then dipped his head as he turned to the other. "Zea." 


We tried to move past them but were stopped by the one name Katya. "What happened to just 'Kate?'" she asked with a smile, then turning to me. 


"You're Eriene." The other girl-Zea- said, twisting one of her gold rings. I nodded, and Kate's eyes lit up. 


She tucked a lock of her wavy brown hair behind her ear before staring at me with a sapphire gaze that could dare to rival Raya's. 


"Careful." Zea said, and Kate glanced at her before looking at me with a nod.


Whatever that look was faded from her eyes. She smiled at me again before hooking her arm through Zea's and walking into the crowd. 


"I don't understand." I murmured, and Luke shrugged. 


"Me neither." he said. His voice was taught with worry, but I didn't know who it was for. Me? Or Therin and Everlys? 



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((Hiiiii! Thank you SO much for reading!!!!! All critiques are welcome!!! I know that this prompt doesn't exactly fit the prompt. The idea that I had is that all the nobles brought something from where they're from, kind of like a royal potluck, if that makes any sense at all. Example: The food in Emran might differ slightly from another city in Forane, just because of the different resources. The places on flat land might resort more to farming and agriculture, while places near large bodies of water would have more fish and seafood. Kind of like in The Hunger Games. My original idea was that Raya had requested that the contestants join just so that she could see someone, as you might have inferred. So...yeah. That was my idea for Part 6 that loosely fit the prompt. Again, thanks for reading!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!))


((Also, shoutout to Zea Bowman and Kate Reynolds!!! They're AMAZING writers, so please check out their stories!!!))


((Another shoutout to Litlover and Jennie for also being amazing writers AND great friends.))

December 11, 2020 19:05

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Mira Caplan
02:52 Dec 15, 2020

Hi, everyone! My sister was reading this series, and pointed out that I said the Dragon Races happen every five years in the first part. I'm actually going to change that to every year, like The Hunger Games, so that there's no confusion. (This was greatly based off of it.) Anyway, thank you so much for reading!!! :)

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✰ Jennie ✰
19:44 Dec 14, 2020

omggg thank you soooooooo much Mira!!! I'm so honored! you're featured in my next story!!

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Mira Caplan
19:45 Dec 14, 2020

Aaaaaaaaawwwwwwww, same!!!!!!!! I'll incorporate you in somehow, promise. Might be part 8, BUT I WILL!!!!!!!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
19:46 Dec 14, 2020

noooo it's ok! you don't have to feature meeee omg

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Mira Caplan
19:47 Dec 14, 2020

I want to!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! You totes deserve it.

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✰ Jennie ✰
19:48 Dec 14, 2020

i saw somebody downvoted a lot of your posts 😢😢😣 so i'm upvoting your posts+ commenting more!

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Mira Caplan
19:49 Dec 14, 2020

:( Thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
19:49 Dec 14, 2020

awwww thxxx you too

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Mira Caplan
19:49 Dec 14, 2020

:) :) :) :) :)

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I didn't really realize until this part the complexities of the other contestants. You put care into their stories.

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Mira Caplan
13:33 Dec 14, 2020

:D Thank you so much!

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Writers Block
00:06 Dec 14, 2020

Oooh.....a series of stories....i like how you tweak the stories with the same title....very creative

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Mira Caplan
01:10 Dec 14, 2020

Thanks for reading! :)

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K. M. Carpenter
17:21 Dec 13, 2020

Wow, your descriptions were spot on! You described the castle perfectly, somehow even finding a way to tie in the decorations to Eriene's emotions and her and Luke's conversation during the banquet. Every time you post, I grow more and more excited to see what happens next! The politics, the world building, the alliances and sectets- it's all building up to a climax I'm ready to read!

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Mira Caplan
18:08 Dec 13, 2020

The climax of the series won't be for a while, so thanks fr sticking with The Dragon Races this entire time! :) Thanks for reading!

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K. M. Carpenter
21:11 Dec 13, 2020

No problem :) I can't wait to see what happens next!

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Mira Caplan
21:12 Dec 13, 2020

:D

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Kate Reynolds
20:55 Dec 11, 2020

OMGGG MIRAAA THANK YOU SOOO MUCH FOR INCLUDING ME!!!!!!!!!!!! And the story was great as always!!!

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Mira Caplan
21:32 Dec 11, 2020

:) :) :) Np!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Kate Reynolds
21:39 Dec 11, 2020

:DD Anytime!!

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19:10 Dec 11, 2020

She didn't meet Raya tho. Or Lex. Wah. This was great!! Just add a little more of her looking at the city and the nobles, her kind of taking time to smell the flowers. Great Job!!!

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Mira Caplan
19:11 Dec 11, 2020

Raya was MENTIONED, though. I'll add a bit more about how Eriene instantly doesn't like her. And Lex will be in the next one.

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19:12 Dec 11, 2020

COME ON GIVE US INTERACTION BETWEEN RAYA AND ERIENE!!!!!!!

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Mira Caplan
19:14 Dec 11, 2020

I WILLLLLLLLLLLL

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Mira Caplan
19:14 Dec 11, 2020

You'll have to wait a week. BE PATIENT XDDD (I'll let you read what I have on Sunday, if you want)

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19:15 Dec 11, 2020

No. Mira, this is from me, as a writer. You are over-pacing. This is already 6-parts, you don't want to make it 20. You need to add more fluff. Come on.

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B. W.
22:05 Dec 17, 2020

Heya

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✰ Jennie ✰
00:46 Dec 20, 2020

Hiya! (i guess you were talking to Mira... but hiiiiii)

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B. W.
02:01 Dec 20, 2020

Hola amiga

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Mira Caplan
02:39 Dec 21, 2020

HIIIIIIIIIIIIIII!!!!!!

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B. W.
02:42 Dec 21, 2020

Hiya

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Mira Caplan
02:43 Dec 21, 2020

gtg, sorry. Take to you tomorrow, B!!!

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Mira Caplan
02:44 Dec 21, 2020

I gtg...sorry! Talk to you tomorrow, B!

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Mira Caplan
02:44 Dec 21, 2020

I gtg...sorry! Talk to you tomorrow, B!

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✰ Jennie ✰
13:39 Dec 15, 2020

i got you to 2308... help a friend out pls? (shameless begging)

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Mira Caplan
13:50 Dec 15, 2020

THANK YOU!!!!!! Obvi, yes!!!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
13:51 Dec 15, 2020

lol yay!!! i'm suffering in math lol

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B. W.
08:26 Dec 12, 2020

How are ya?

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Mira Caplan
04:11 Dec 13, 2020

Good! You?

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B. W.
05:10 Dec 13, 2020

im mostly bored but fine :/

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TJ Squared
04:16 Mar 10, 2021

yeah, thanks for the explanation :) Although, I think stories don't need to fit in with a 'category' or 'prompt'. It's like, what happened to just writing to just write?

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Radhika Diksha
18:08 Jan 14, 2021

I loved the intensity and thrill. I loved the story. But I think you could have used the prompt for the story. Just my POV.

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Mira Caplan
18:09 Jan 14, 2021

Yes, I agree. I couldn't find a direct way to incorporate the prompt, so this is what I eventually came up with!

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Mira Caplan
18:09 Jan 14, 2021

Yes, I agree. I couldn't find a direct way to incorporate the prompt, so this is what I eventually came up with!

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Kristin Neubauer
16:35 Jan 03, 2021

I read this earlier when your first wrote it, but I hadn't read it in the context of the other Dragon Races parts. I liked it then and I still like it now - even more so. Now I understand the context better and still think your writing, the descriptions are exquisite. Everyone sounds so beautiful!

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Mira Caplan
16:55 Jan 03, 2021

Thank you so much!!! :)

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Mira Caplan
16:55 Jan 03, 2021

Thank you so much!!! :)

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12:55 Dec 16, 2020

MIRA CELESTE IS NOW A MARSHMALLOW

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Mira Caplan
13:05 Dec 16, 2020

YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAYY!!!!!!

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13:07 Dec 16, 2020

I know!!!!!!!!!!

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Mira Caplan
13:27 Dec 16, 2020

:) :) :)

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13:30 Dec 16, 2020

:DDDD ALSO PLEASE HELP UPVOTE B SHE GOT DOWN TO 6th OR 7th HELP RESTORE HER TO HER FULL GLORY!!!!!

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Mira Caplan
13:33 Dec 16, 2020

I will!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
14:05 Dec 16, 2020

YAY!!!!!!! she's 4th now!!!!!!

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Celestia sounds like me! Your descriptions are fantastic, I can feel everything. :D

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Mira Caplan
21:08 Dec 15, 2020

Karila, you mean? (I have a different character named Celestia, but she isn't in this, lol) Thanks for reading!!! :)

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Mira Caplan
21:32 Dec 15, 2020

XD You seem really nice, so you do seem like her! :)

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🥰 Awwwww thanks! (Also, hi! You are Luke’s best frien right? XD

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Mira Caplan
21:35 Dec 15, 2020

Yes, 'tis I! Luke's bestie! :) :) :)

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Jeni Conrad
13:41 Dec 15, 2020

I like your fantasy world. Seems like a cool place.

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Mira Caplan
13:49 Dec 15, 2020

Thanks for reading! :)

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13:00 Dec 15, 2020

YOU'RE IN THE TOP 60!!!!

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Mira Caplan
13:25 Dec 15, 2020

YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!

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13:26 Dec 15, 2020

ALSO COMMENT ON VAYD'S COMMEMORATIVE THREAD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Mira Caplan
13:50 Dec 15, 2020

K!

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13:51 Dec 15, 2020

:D

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Mira Caplan
13:51 Dec 15, 2020

Where is it?

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00:35 Dec 15, 2020

New story alert!! It's a little drab!!

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Mira Caplan
02:02 Dec 15, 2020

I saw!!!!! It was AMAXING, as usual

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15:14 Dec 12, 2020

Nainika got me to 3000!!!!! I so happy!!! Also, I'll be posting a story sometime today....

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Mira Caplan
15:45 Dec 12, 2020

That's awesome!!!!!!! YESSSSSSSSSSSSSS

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15:46 Dec 12, 2020

I made a new story!!!

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Mira Caplan
15:48 Dec 12, 2020

I SAW!!!!

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15:48 Dec 12, 2020

Yay!!

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Aiden Chu
09:46 Jan 08, 2021

AMAZING

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