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Funny Coming of Age Creative Nonfiction

A story about a time capsule? Okay, but remember this story is actually about two people and a time capsule. Oh, and by the way this time capsule was also a purse. Don't worry, it will all make sense at the end. I promise.


Kathleen, or Kathy for short, was so unique that odd people called her quirky. She was proud of her name, and wanted everyone to know that not all Kathys were alike. She used to say that Cathys with a C were wimps. She always said this with a smile because Kathy loved everyone, even Cathys.


I know what you're saying, she could not have been that unique. Well I'm here to tell you she was. I'll give you an example. Whereas most people go out and buy an ugly sweater before a Christmas party, Kathy’s closet was full of them year-round. When she did attend the aforementioned gatherings the prize would always go to the second ugliest sweater at the party. It was the only way to keep Kathy from winning every year. 


Here's another. Kathy also bought hundreds of magnetic multi-colored polka dots to place strategically all over her car so she could always find it in a parking lot. Her husband, Pete, would tell you, however, it had nothing to do with her fear of losing the car, it was just Kathy being Kathy.


She started carrying the purse her first year in high school but - just like everything else she did - it was bigger and louder than any other girl's in town. That was large enough to fit a medium-sized dog, if she'd had a mind to. It had an extra-long strap which allowed her to wear it on the opposite side of her body to handle the additional weight when it was full as it often was. 


Once at a baby shower, the host - as part of an ice breaker -offered five dollars for the person who could produce the oddest thing from their purse. One woman had a pair of dirty pantyhose. Two others produced condoms. But Kathy, in her last year of nursing school, simply reached into her purse and retrieved a stool specimen. She collected it earlier that day and, needless to say, she won the contest in a unanimous vote.  


Kathy also had another special use for this purse. It was also a time capsule. Don't act shocked, I told you at the beginning the time capsule was a purse.


It’s not easy being different, especially when you are young. Most teenagers do everything they can to fit in, it’s much easier to be part of a crowd than to stand out from one. Kathy, on the other hand, always wanted to be true to herself. As a result, she, like many teenagers who march to their own drum, was misunderstood, ostracized and emotionally bullied. Kathy, never one to let circumstance control her, came up with an ingenious idea. Whenever anything was going badly or she was dealing with something that seemed like the end of the world she would activate her time capsule. The first thing she would do was find a small piece of paper and a pen. She would then write out the current trauma on said paper, ball it up as tight as she could, and throw it in her purse. It was her way of setting the trauma aside and not letting it change who she was or her happy outlook on life.  


This trick was great for temporary relief but the real reason for the practice came from its long-term benefit. This is how our hero, Kathy, took an ordinary purse and transformed it into a time capsule. (I know. I know, the purse wasn't ordinary, but neither was Kathy and stop interrupting. I don't want to lose my train of thought)


The thing about having a purse so large is one can go for long periods of time without cleaning it. There were times where it would be years between thorough cleanings but each time Kathy would find these small balls of paper hidden at the bottom and would open them up and read them.


I’m failing math.


Bobby says he doesn’t love me anymore.


I got into a fender bender in mom’s car.


I’m pregnant. Dad’s going to kill me.


These notes were little time machines that would take Kathy back to the days these earth-changing events had happened. Invariably these would have worked themselves out and were no longer the end of time issues. In fact often she'd have forgotten about the problem all together.


Kathy had spent extra time studying and passed math with a “B”. 


Bobby was kind of a bad guy anyway, she knew that now. 


Mom was so happy Kathy was alright she just hugged her and forgot to be mad about the accident. 


Yep, these life-changing events weren’t life-changing at all, except for that last one. That last one is what this story is all about. 


Stop complaining, I’m getting to the point as fast as I can.


This part of the story starts after high school. Kathy had gone to college on a math scholarship. Okay, she didn’t really go on a math scholarship, I was just making sure you were paying attention. She did, however, go to college and it was there she had met Charles. 


Charles was everything Kathy wasn’t. He wore Oxford button-down shirts and loafers. I know, loafers, who does that? He came from money and had a slight English accent. This was unusual because no one in his family had been to England since before the Revolutionary War. He wasn’t particularly smart or funny, even by accident. He was nothing like Kathy and for some reason that attracted her.  


For all of Kathy’s quirks, she had grown into quite a handsome young woman. She had long curly auburn hair and piercing brown eyes. The purse wasn't a magnet but the rest of her attracted the boys like flies and for some reason, Kathy settled on Charles.  


Their relationship came and went more quickly than the Edsel, however, there was one lasting effect - Kathy’s unborn child. 


Kathy’s parents weren’t particularly religious but they were practicing Catholics. It goes without saying there are few surprises less welcome in a Catholic household than an unexpected pregnancy out of wedlock. 


Marriage was not an option as "good old" Charles left school and stopped answering the phone as soon as he found out he was a father to be. Kathy was alone and she wasn’t sure if, for the first time in her life, the time capsule purse would let her down.  


As good luck would have it, she would be home for Christmas before she started to show her "situation." This would allow her to surprise her mom and dad with the news. 


In case it’s not obvious, I’m being sarcastic there. 


She was dreading the conversation and that’s what precipitated that last note on the small ball of paper she threw in her purse just before she got on the bus home.


Christmases at Kathy’s home had always been special. The family, which consisted of Mom, Dad, Kathy, and her five siblings would start the morning after Thanksgiving to transform the house.


Yes, I know, I said five siblings. Remember these are practicing Catholics we are talking about, but I digress.


After hours of work the house would become a Christmas wonderland. A manger on the coffee table. A tree in the center of the family room, and mistletoe over most of the doorways. There were even stocking hung by the chimney with care. Kathy's family, always partial to music, would also play actual Christmas carols in a loop. Kathy's dad like the old favorites like “O Come All Ye Faithful,” and “Silent Night," He wasn't much for the new ones but while he was at work mom let the kids play "Jingle Bell Rock" and "Rocking Around the Christmas Tree" to their hearts content. And the smells! The Christmas smells. Cookies, eggnog, and wassail made the whole house smell delicious.  


I am telling you all this so you can see in your mind's eye what Kathy was walking into. She could skip the Christmas trip and wait until spring break when her over-sized belly could do the talking just bring home a little surprise during summer break. To Kathy, who loved her parents deeply, those ideas were cruel and never an option. She, likewise, could choose to end the pregnancy but that idea left her mind faster than Charles left town. Kathy was less than two months pregnant and she already loved her child. She was keeping it, even if it meant losing her family.


Growing up Kathy had learned there were two ways to win over her dad. The first was food and the second involved her mom.


Kathy knew she had to win over her mom first and then approach her dad. When Kathy broke the news to her mom she paused, sat down for a second, and then started to cook pasta. Kathy's mom knew the two tricks as well and this surprise would take both. 


Now I wasn’t there for this conversation, not really, but I’ve spoken to people who were and by that I mean, Kathy, her mom, and - yes- her dad too and the consensus is there is no consensus. 


Kathy’s dad said he took the news like a man and after pausing and sitting down, (Are you noticing a pattern here?) hugged his daughter and told her he loved her and it would be it would be alright. 


Kathy’s mom said he screamed “What!”, turned bright red, and stopped breathing for a second. He then paused, sat down, and hugged Kathy. 


Kathy said, well she said she wasn’t quite sure what happened, she ran out of the room as soon as the words came out of her mouth. She missed everything that happened after the reveal and before the hug.  


You see it turned out the time capsule worked after all. Kathy’s dad was shocked and a little disappointed but he was going to be a Poppy, that’s what the little girl ended up calling him, and what dad doesn't want to be a Poppy. The bottom line is he loved Kathy and he couldn’t wait to meet his grandchild.  


It’s been years since that day and Kathy never gave up on that purse. Her time capsule worked that day and it’s worked every time since. It has a perfect record.


I'm happy to report, unlike Bobby and Charles, Kathy found a keeper in Pete. He was a loving husband to Kathy and devoted father to her baby girl. You see there were a whole lot less opportunities to use the time capsule because Kathy found true happiness.


So I guess you’re sitting there wondering why I’m telling you this story. Well, you see I have a small part to play in this story too. If you look back you'll see I said this story was about two people, well the other one was me. I was the little girl Kathy decided to keep. Kathy is my mom and today we laid her to rest. 


She had some very specific requests for her funeral. The first was very difficult, I’m not going to lie. She insisted her coffin be covered in multi-colored polka dots. 


Have you ever tried to put polka dots on a coffin? Of course, you haven’t. No one has. That was a stupid question. 


I will say this, it looked ridiculous but that was Mom at her best, being quirky from beyond the grave. 


The second request was for laughter. Anyone could give a eulogy but they had to tell a joke first. She wanted people laughing through their tears. 


The last, and by far the most emotional for me, was that as soon as she “was feeding worms”, her words not mine, that her big multicolored leather purse was to be passed on to me. It was my greatest joy and most profound sadness to accept her gift and I’m sure you know the first thing I did. I pulled out a little piece of paper and a pen and wrote -


I buried my Mom today. How will I go on without her?


Then I rolled it up in a ball, threw it in my new purse, and headed home. Oh, by the way, I don't have any stool specimens in there, I promise. 


October 09, 2020 20:57

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Lani Lane
19:07 Oct 12, 2020

Thom, I felt like this style of writing was Lemony Snicket-y, which is always fun to read! Great job. You had a creative take on the prompt. :) "But Kathy, in her last year of nursing school, simply reached into her purse and retrieved a stool specimen." Hilarious, love it! Some others have made some fantastic suggestions, so I hope I'm not too repetitive, but here are some thoughts that'll hopefully help! 1. There were a couple places that couldn't used parentheses, especially with a strong-voiced narrator like this: "He wore Oxfo...

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I.B. Dunn
19:11 Oct 12, 2020

I love your feedback. It is so spot on, I just wish I had reached out to you before my story was approved because the suggestions would have tightened this story up greatly. I was going to say I'll try to come to you earlier in the future but I'm guessing you are going to be busy for the next few weeks. More than anything, thank you for your time. Time is our most precious resource and you give it freely. It speaks very well of you. Your future husband is getting a real keeper. :-)

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Lani Lane
20:47 Oct 12, 2020

No no, definitely reach out to me!!! Only busy this Thursday/Friday. ;) We're only eloping as we pushed the big wedding to next year due to COVID! You are too kind, Thom, thank you so very much! I can't wait to read your next stories! :)

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Zilla Babbitt
23:51 Oct 09, 2020

Working on a lengthy comment...

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I.B. Dunn
23:52 Oct 09, 2020

Uh oh. 😀. I wait nervously.

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I.B. Dunn
20:59 Oct 09, 2020

Once again, I'm not sure about this one. All feedback is welcome.

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Laura Clark
06:09 Oct 13, 2020

Finally! I’m so happy this has been approved and I can finally click on it. I never shortlist my friend’s work because I know I’m so heavily biased and I never want to judge it because then I feel like I could potentially be costing you a shortlisting. ANYWAY. I read both this version and the version that Deidra edited to make it a bit less grammatically rugged. The only thing I disagreed with her on was the removal of the asides to the reader because I love the personal connections. Jonathan says that an English professor would object (...

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I.B. Dunn
12:42 Oct 13, 2020

You had me at friend. I am challenged as a writer to find new and exciting ways to say thank you that really express how impactful your feedback and care have been. It's so much more than how it helps my stories and, Wow, it helps my stories. Its about how you make me want to write. I think I've found the cure to writers block and her name is Laura Clark. I will say this, I have to make sure to avoid all the other judges. It's my only chance of winning one of these things one day. :-) Seriously, though, thank you. For everything but ...

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Jonathan Blaauw
08:19 Oct 11, 2020

Hey, Thom, I loved this! You've done something a bit different, addressing the reader directly throughout the story like that. I think maybe some Englishy professor somewhere would say something about breaking immersion or something, but there are exceptions for every rule, and for me, the style here makes it feel so much more personal, relevant, and real. Like you're just telling the story, not writing the story (if that makes sense?) And then the reveal at the end explains that that's exactly what you were going for! Really well done. I...

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I.B. Dunn
11:25 Oct 11, 2020

Once again you have said the exact right things to encourage me and I couldn’t be more grateful. That being said I want to say again just how masterful “Remember Tomorrow” was. It has to be published because it’s not only fabulous writing it also gives the hopeless hope. I read it to my friend and through tears he said I am James. I don’t know if he’s going to win this fight but if he does your story will have a part in that. Thank you!

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Jonathan Blaauw
16:26 Oct 11, 2020

Thanks Thom. It's not something I want to advertise, and I'll never mention it on one of the comments on that story, but it's probably the closest I'll ever get to an autobiographical account. I've been there and I know what a nightmare it is, so I know what your friend is going through. I'm incredibly touched that my words mean something to someone who really needs them. It must be incredibly hard for you. I think the best thing you can do is just love him no matter what. Which it sounds like you do. Sometimes, just knowing and hearing that...

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I.B. Dunn
16:38 Oct 11, 2020

I kind of thought that might be the case. The writing was so real I figured there might be part of you in there but I didn’t want to pry. I won’t make a big deal about it, this isn’t the forum but I hope for nothing but the best for you. On a writing note, your versatility is astounding. I’ve said it before and then you do something new and great and I’m reminded of it again. I hope one day we are all published writers, sitting around a table somewhere tropical, remembering these days. That would be worth writing about.

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01:06 Oct 10, 2020

Hi Thom! I like the concept of this story, and you've created a great character in Kathy, but it could definitely use some tightening. I'll make some specific suggestions in a moment, but I think the best thing you can do is sit down and read through it slowly. It felt like you were trying to fit in as much as possible, and as a result the story barrels along without pausing to breathe. If/when you do that slow readthrough, notice where you naturally pause. That's where commas or other punctuation is needed. There are a lot of run-on sent...

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I.B. Dunn
01:32 Oct 10, 2020

I love your feedback. I just wrote this today in a single sitting and wanted this type of feedback so I could clean it up while the edit function was available. I can’t tell you how much I appreciate the detailed feedback. First of all because I need it and secondly it tells me you think there is something worth working with. I will send a note when it’s cleaned up so I can see what you think of the changes. Thank you again!!!!!

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01:56 Oct 10, 2020

You're so welcome! I just read your reply to Zilla and knowing that Kathy is, in a way, your mother, makes the whole story that much more meaningful and I can't express how incredible I think it is that you were able to write and share this story. It explains a lot about the storytelling and the feeling of being rushed. You must have had so much you wanted to say and needed to get it all out before the words tumbled over one another or floated away, as words are likely to do. I can't wait to read the edited version.

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I.B. Dunn
02:00 Oct 10, 2020

You hit the nail right on the head. I had the opposite of writers block which has its own challenges. I wish she was here today to read my stories. She would have been proud. 😀. Thanks again. You are what’s right about this site.

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I.B. Dunn
18:37 Oct 11, 2020

Can I ask you a favor? Would you read the edited version? I still have time to edit so if you find other weak parts I'd like to try to tighten them up as well.

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19:38 Oct 11, 2020

Yes of course! It's much better now. For me there are still a few too many asides to the reader, but like Jonathan mentioned in his comment, it makes the story feel more personal, so if that's the style you're going for, it's good that you leaned into it. There's one I would edit, though, the one about the dirty minds--that one is "you all" instead of just "you" and it felt a little inconsistent. I'd either make a few of the others plural, or make that one singular. Also, there's a fragmented sentence in the stool specimen paragraph, whic...

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I.B. Dunn
19:58 Oct 11, 2020

Thanks for the second read. I’m going to have to start paying you editors wages. 😀 I removed the dirty mind line all together. Upon further review, even with the tone I was going for, it seemed out of place. Thanks so much. You are the bomb diggity.

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Katina Foster
01:00 Oct 10, 2020

I really, really liked this one! First, I like the entire premise. It's a cool take on the time capsule idea. I liked how the paper balls were used & that you tied it in with the granddaughter at the end. It's so true that there's a psychological benefit to looking back on struggles and disappointments after you've made your way through them. I'm going to give it a try and see if it works on election and covid anxiety, too. :) Second, this description of Charles is maybe my favorite description of someone, ever. "He came from money and...

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I.B. Dunn
01:33 Oct 10, 2020

Thanks so much for seeking this out. It means more than you know as does your feedback. I am finding such talent on Reedsy and the amount of time people put in to help me is humbling. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.

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Zilla Babbitt
00:52 Oct 10, 2020

Okay, first: YAY another story! I really like this one. It reminds me a little bit of the character May from "The Secret Life of Bees." She's a mentally retarded, traumatized woman who writes her griefs on paper and sticks them in between the stones of a wall she works on during the day. I like that you define time capsule in the beginning, though I think you could emphasize a bit more that time capsules aren't always sealed tanks that go into the ground for five hundred years. They can be all kinds of things, even purses. As the first p...

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Zilla Babbitt
00:52 Oct 10, 2020

I have never written a longer comment. You're welcome :)

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I.B. Dunn
01:25 Oct 10, 2020

This is the most perfect feedback. First of all I will tell you Kathy is my mom. She is embellished a little but there is a lot of truth in there and the care and concern you showed in your feedback felt like respect for my mom. This is the first thing I’ve written about her since her obituary. I think I’m getting better because some of your suggestions had already crossed my mind. In fact at first I had the narrator as the daughter. I then started to think about extra generations and overthought it. Just so you know the polka dots on the ca...

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Zilla Babbitt
14:40 Oct 10, 2020

What a testament. I feel like I already know her, which is part her character and part your writing. I'm always glad to help.

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Deidra Lovegren
11:47 Oct 10, 2020

This is why Zilla Babbitt is #1 on Reedsy forever.

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Deidra Lovegren
11:48 Oct 10, 2020

Incidentally, I'm casting Kathy Bates in the movie. Just saying.

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Zilla Babbitt
14:40 Oct 10, 2020

:)

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I.B. Dunn
18:46 Oct 11, 2020

Hey there, any chance you could give a second look. I’ve been working on it since you first commented. 😀

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11:59 Oct 13, 2020

Lol, this story is so charming and funny. I wasn't expecting that for some reason. It felt like gut punch when I read that Kathy died. What a creative, imaginative take on the prompt. And you have a gift with humor. I usually have a short attention span but this story had me gripped the whole time. I'd like to see more humorous stories from you. And as always this may not be correct but I would change: "Kathy with a C were wimps." I'd put the C in 'C'. "Of course, you haven't." Maybe drop the comma. Other than that I wouldn't c...

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I.B. Dunn
12:49 Oct 13, 2020

See, here's the thing, I really need for you to keep writing because it allows me to read your stories and ask you to read mine and give feedback, and I crave your feedback. Its always so helpful and shared with care. As an extra added bonus I get to read you, and I do so love reading you. I'm pretty sure one day I'll be waiting in a long line to get your newest book signed and when I get to the front of the line I'm going to say, "Hey Sarah, it's me, Thom. From Reedsy. Can you do me a favor and look at this story for me." The best par...

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Jane Andrews
05:14 Oct 12, 2020

Hi Thom. I enjoyed this one so much - and it resonated with me in a very personal way which I'll get onto later. Firstly, lots of the things I was going to comment on after my initial reading a couple of days ago have already been fixed - the opening paragraph is much stronger now you go straight into telling us the purse was a time capsule. I also like the way you've edited slightly when you talk about Kathy's popularity in college: "The purse wasn't a magnet but the rest of her attracted the boys like flies" is much better. I think you...

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I.B. Dunn
13:06 Oct 12, 2020

Jane, When I joined Reedsy I had no idea exactly what it was. I was a new writer looking for an outlet to share my stories. I am not going to lie, I wanted feedback, lots of feedback, all the feedback I could get. I wanted to get better because I wanted to believe I had something to say, something people would want to read, and I didn't want it to get lost in my inexperience. I could never have imagined finding people like you. You have given me much more than I could ever have hoped. You have given me a little bit of yourself in...

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Bianka Nova
15:21 Oct 11, 2020

I can't believe I hadn't ready any Thom Brodkin before. Not my fault, no one told me. I had to find you all on my own. 🙃 This story was as quirky as its main character! Just a delight to read. And I laughed out loud on this one: "Ok, she didn’t really go on a math scholarship, I was just making sure you were paying attention." 😂 I also didn't see the end coming at all. That was some skill - turning the weirdly funny into emotional and endearing. 👏 If you're still able to edit, here are my contributions for the process: "if she'd of ha...

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I.B. Dunn
15:47 Oct 11, 2020

I’m so glad you found me and liked my story. I can still edit and plan to do so today. All of your suggestions are correct and will be included in the edit. This is part of why I love Reedsy. It’s writers helping writers be better writers. Thank you. Thank you. Thank you.

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Rayhan Hidayat
04:20 Oct 11, 2020

Ooh I love how the narrator is sort of reaching out of the story to interact with the reader. Really kept me on my toes. I have a suggestion to make: when the narrator says “I wasn’t here for the conversation” they technically WAS because they were inside their then-pregnant mom. A clever thing to write might be “I was there for the conversation, but at the same time not really,” or something to that effect. Not really an issue, just something that crossed my mind while reading. Keep it up, anyways! 😙

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I.B. Dunn
11:27 Oct 11, 2020

Thanks so much and a fantastic point about “being there”. I’m still cleaning it up and I’ll work on that. I like how it can help with foreshadowing.

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Rayhan Hidayat
12:11 Oct 11, 2020

Yay, glad I could help! And feel free to check out any of my stories if you’re interested! 😙

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A.G. Scott
22:04 Oct 10, 2020

You've got a lot of comments here, some of them echoing the useful critique I would have given, some of them heaping onto the praise I would have given, so I'll try to come at this from a weird angle. At first, I was a bit put off by the way the narrator was apologetic over the simple fact that they were telling a story -- in fact, I would still advise that you dial back the self-reference in the opening. However, as it went on, I grew to enjoy the little misdirects and asides, and when it was revealed that the narrator was a character in...

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Kristin Neubauer
16:20 Oct 10, 2020

You never let us down Thom....another fabulous story. In the time since I discovered your writing - the first I read was the story about your veteran friend - I don't think I've read such funny one. It was really delightful to see that wit and hear a different kind of voice from you. There's nothing I can add that the more experienced writers haven't already said, but I always look forward to your stories and pretty much always feel like I learn something about improving my writing from reading yours. I can't believe you wrote this in on...

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I.B. Dunn
16:25 Oct 10, 2020

Thanks so much. In a sense I cheated. It was about my mom so I told a story more than wrote one. Some was fictionalized but the quirks were all mom. :-) I only add this because you mentioned it but Jason is struggling again. He had 33 days sober but the devil bit him again. At least he's still answering my calls. Thanks for caring. It means a lot.

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Kristin Neubauer
16:42 Oct 10, 2020

What a struggle it is. Answering your calls is important though - better than withdrawing. I also think it must be important for him to know you are there as a steady and solid presence no matter what. I have a friend who's ex-British military who goes through the hills and valleys of PTSD and alcohol....he's told me that knowing his closest friends will stick by him helps a lot in the darker times.

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Julie Ward
15:52 Oct 10, 2020

I'm going to stop saying it once and for all...the tears! This is just how it's going to be and I'll have to get used to it. I love this story, Thom. I feel like I've met Kathy, with all of her quirks and imperfections. She is interesting and that's the kind of character I want to follow and keep following. When I was thinking about how to create a story for this week's prompt, I couldn't wrap my head around the time capsule, but you used it in such a creative way. I really love the how you infuse your stories with these mundane things th...

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I.B. Dunn
16:22 Oct 10, 2020

Thanks so much. This is a fictionalized story about my mom although most of it is true. The polka dotted car, the stool specimen, and the purse were all real. As was her request for laughter at her funeral. Thanks for reading even though I didn't use Julie as a name this time. :-)

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Julie Ward
16:56 Oct 10, 2020

I knew it had a lot of truth to it! After I commented, I scrolled down saw that you'd written about your mom and that just made me grin. I wish I'd known her! I'll always read your stories, Thom. Your writing is so real, I know I can always expect a lot of heart-something I always look for when I pick up a book.

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Deidra Lovegren
11:46 Oct 10, 2020

William Wordsworth coined the expression: "The child is the father of the man," meaning that who we are as children defines who we will be as adults. And so much of that child, our nascent adult self, is wholly defined by our mother. I, too, rejoice in having had a good mother, who is now suffering from dementia in Arizona (so far away.) And like you, I commemorated her in a fictional story, "The Come Down," easing my overburdened conscience, because how do you truly thank a good mother? She also appears in my Ollie & Evie stories, which ...

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I.B. Dunn
12:42 Oct 10, 2020

If we time it right you can send it then delete the post as soon as I get it. What do you think?

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Deidra Lovegren
13:49 Oct 10, 2020

I don't think I'm that paranoid. And I don't think my fanbase is that rabid. I could be wrong. Anyway. I set up a new gmail: reedsy.deidra.lovegren@gmail.com It is my wish to have Babbitt, Clark, J. Blaauw, you and I all collaborate on one massive story on google docs one day... A girl can dream. Have you edited on google docs before? It's amazing. You can see whatever comments/suggestions I make, as well as side commentary. Very fun. A work colleague and I use it to edit each other's work. He has a great science fiction pantheon...

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I.B. Dunn
14:09 Oct 10, 2020

I've made a few edits and changes. I'll shoot it over to you as soon as I have my newest rough draft ready. :-) I went away from the more formal start. Let me know what you think.

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Deidra Lovegren
15:30 Oct 10, 2020

I have to grade some literary analysis of political cartoons (which range from the sublime to the ridiculous), so no worries. On the google doc (assuming that is what you use to draft?), click on SHARE and give me editing privilege. I assume since you are a Virginian, you are highly educated and adaptable.

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Zilla Babbitt
14:39 Oct 10, 2020

That sounds awesome. I'm game.

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Deidra Lovegren
15:31 Oct 10, 2020

Queen Zilla, I'll let you rally the troops. Maybe we all make reedsy.firstname.lastname@gmail.com just to make it easier?

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Laura Clark
15:53 Oct 10, 2020

I’m in. You can find me at Reedsy.Laura.clark@gmail.com. Let’s do a collaborative story.

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Zilla Babbitt
22:28 Oct 10, 2020

Sounds good. I've got mine up, too. Should we plan on a date to share the doc? In a week?

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21:12 Oct 16, 2020

Damnit! I thought this was going to be funny and cheer me up, but it made me cry at the end! lol

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I.B. Dunn
22:37 Oct 16, 2020

I’m sorry. It was supposed to be mostly funny. I’m sorry about whatever has you down as well.

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23:49 Oct 17, 2020

I have been blessed not to be touched by covid up until now. My grandma tested positive and she is in a nursing home, so no one can be with her.

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I.B. Dunn
03:30 Oct 18, 2020

Would you feel comfortable sharing her name so I can pray for her specifically?

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16:40 Oct 18, 2020

Her name is Ruth and she is an amazing human being.

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I.B. Dunn
18:45 Oct 18, 2020

I have a daily prayer list. She’s on it.

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Yolanda Wu
09:50 Oct 16, 2020

This was such a sweet story about a really unique character. I see from the other comments that she is based on your mum, and I think that's just beautiful. You captured Kathy's character so well right from the start. And I love how the narrator, which I guess is you in some form has a character as well - it's not often that I see that in stories. I loved how the notes were kept as a time capsule. You described all the quirkiness and uniqueness of Kathy's character throughout the story, and by the end, I feel like I know her so well. That la...

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19:59 Oct 13, 2020

Wow, Thom! This story was absolutely beautiful. The fact that the 'second person' and narrator was actually the girl that Kathy decided to keep was beautiful and shocked me. Your writing style is absolutely beautiful, and I can't wait to read more. Keep writing and stay healthy! -Brooke D. <3

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I.B. Dunn
21:23 Oct 13, 2020

Thank you so much. This was so nice. I will keep writing and please you do as well.

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21:25 Oct 13, 2020

You are welcome! 😊

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This is the best story I've ever read

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