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You’re home! Finally!


Yeah, but I’m gonna-


Where’s my kiss? Come here, give me my kiss. 


Donnie...I’m-


I have been waiting all day for you!


I’m sorry, someone called off, I had to cover-


You didn’t think to text or call me? The last message you sent me was at 5:22. That was more than two hours ago! Why haven’t you texted me since? 


We were too busy, I was doing a lot-


You ALWAYS say that. Always too busy for me... always... take your coat off and come here. Come on, sit on my lap... you owe me a lot for all the time I lost waiting for you. 


Donnie…..I’m...I'm going to go to-


WHAT!? GO? Go where? You’re leaving? You are not being serious right now! Where are you going? You’re not going anywhere. Are you being serious?!?


I’m sorry… I..I’m going...I want to see Max and Zoe’s new baby-


You’re kidding me. YOU. ARE. KID. DING. ME. You just got home! What the hell are you talking about!? I’ve been waiting all day for you! And now you want to leave! AND! You saw them yesterday!


I didn’t get to talk to them much, there were a lot of people at the hospital, they’re home now and Max just called me and said-


You know what, cut it out. Stop. You’re lying. We both know what this is really about. You just want to see Max!....Max! Max! Max!..........That’s all you ever talk about! HIM!


Why do you always think that!


What do you mean?! You always want to go over there!


Donnie, I just want to see their new baby...why don’t you come with me...take a shower and come with me...


Ha! Sure. Sure you do. And the fact that Max is there has nothingggg to do with it. Sure Annie. Ha! Sure. No. Are you kidding me? I’m not going there. You are not going. You saw them yesterday after you got off work. And maybe you don’t remember because obviously your memory is shot, but I spent all day yesterday waiting for you to get off work -AND NOW TODAY NOT TO MENTION- I put your dishes in the sink, I feed your stupid cat, I grabbed your mail-


I didn’t ask you to do any of that…..I don’t understand why you don’t go home…why you wait here all day in my apartment…..I really wanna see my friends and their baby….. why don’t you take a quick shower and we can-


Because, Annie! That’s the kind of person I am! The kind that does nice things for other people without them asking, but obviously you don’t appreciate the things I do for you. I do this because I want to spend time with you. Don’t you want to spend time with me??


We were together last weekend and the weekend before. I work long hours Donnie you know that...you know I have to work…


Weekends!? Two days!? That’s it?!? That’s all I get???


You’ve been here every single day, Donnie...you see me every morning and night.....and…..Donnie…. I told you you can use my shower while I’m at work....why haven't you? 


Why do you keep bringing that up?? Why do you keep changing the subject?? Why are you always trying to bring me down?? HUH???


I’m not trying to bring you down, Donnie. It’s just…..I don’t understand, you’re still wearing the same clothes from the past few days. I can smell you from here-


SHUT UP! Are you fucking kidding me? I have been missing you and all I want to do is spend time with you! I can’t eat! I can’t sleep! You sleep fine, just fine! Showering is the last thing on my mind; especially, showering in this dump apartment!


Why don’t you go to your house and shower then!


Stop yelling! Why are you getting angry now!? My parents are home and I’m still mad at them...you should know this already! Don’t you listen to anything that I tell you?? Why? You don’t want me here? You want me to leave? You want to see someone else don’t you! You want to see Max don’t you! DON’T YOU!


Donnie…please… put your hands down. You’re turning red….. please ...calm down……I’m sorry that I work a lot ...okay? Please stop…..


There you go! Blaming work again! Before I lost my job I worked way harder than you EVER do at your job! AND I never treated someone as badly as you treat me!


Donnie….I’m sorry…..please...calm down…..


Don’t you DARE tell me to calm down! Why are you holding your keys? Put those down! You’re not going anywhere! All I wanted was to spend time with you! I’ve waited and waited and waited and you want to leave again! Look! You’re getting closer to the door! COME HERE!


Donnie! Stop! You’re being ridiculous, I’ll only be gone for like two hours! They’re my friends! 


COME HERE, ANNIE!! Get AWAY from that door! 


NO! I’m sick of this! Why don’t you ever let me see my friends!? I want to see their new baby! 


WHO DO YOU THINK YOU ARE??? TELLING ME NO??...WHO THE HELL…..WHAT THE FUCK DO YOU THINK YOU'RE DOING???? SHUT THAT DOOR ANNIE!!!


NO!


GET BACK HERE!!


NO!!!


GOD DAMN IT, ANNIE!! COME HERE!!


NO!!...STOP IT, DONNIE!!! LET ME GO!! STOP!!


STOP FIGHTING ME, ANNIE! GET YOUR ASS BACK INSIDE!!


NO!! LET GO! DONNIE! LET GO! LET GO OF MY HOOD! STOP! YOU'RE YANKING MY HAIR! 


YOU ARE GETTING BACK INSIDE! WE ARE NOT DONE! I SAID YOU ARE NOT GOING OVER THERE! YOU’RE NOT GOING ANYWHERE FOR A LONG TIME!!


NO! STOP!


STOP FIGHTING ME ANNIE!!! OW!!! MY EYE! OW OW OW!! WHY DID YOU DO THAT?! ANNIE!! ANNIE!!! COME BACK!! COME BACK HERE NOW! 


STOP CHASING ME! LEAVE ME ALONE!


DON’T GET IN THE CAR!


DONNIE, NO!


STOP! ANNIE!


LET GO OF THE HANDLE DONNIE! LET GO! I’M LEAVING!


UNLOCK THE DOOR, ANNIE!


NO!


SHUT THE CAR OFF! DON’T YOU DARE LEAVE! WE ARE NOT DONE TALKING!


YES WE ARE!


STOP REVERSING! STOP! YOU’RE GETTING CLOSE TO THE STREET! 


DONNIE, I’M BEING SERIOUS! I’M BEING SERIOUS THIS TIME! LET GO OF MY CAR! I’M ALMOST ON THE STREET! LET GO!


ANNIE! ANNIE! Annie! Listen! Listen! Baby! Baby...come on….there you go...come on baby, I love you….. please…..unlock the car…baby. Lets go inside. Please…. I won’t grab your clothes or your hair again….. hopefully you won’t try gouging my eyes out again...I'll even forgive you for that…..come on. Baby, please. Drive back in the driveway. Come on, please, just go back in the driveway. 


Donnie ...please...let go...you’re suffocating me...everyday you…..you’re…..suffocating me! I can’t breathe! I can’t do this anymore!


Stop saying stuff like that!


I don’t want this, Donnie!


DON’T SAY THAT! I LOVE YOU, ANNIE! AND YOU LOVE ME! PLEASE! LET'S TALK INSIDE!


NO! I’M LEAVING!


STOP! NO! STOP THE CAR! 


NO, DONNIE! LET GO!! LET GO!!


THEN STOP THE CAR!


NO! I WANT TO LEAVE! 


SLOW DOWN! ANNIE, SERIOUSLY! SLOW DOWN! YOU’RE GOING TOO FAST! ANNIE! ANNIE! PLEASE ANNIE! I LOVE YOU! MY HAND IS SLIPPING! SLOW DOWN! ANNIE! SLOW DOWN!


LET GO! LET GO!


STOP THE CAR, ANNIE! I CAN’T HANG ON!


DONNIE! LET GO! I’M SERIOUS! I WILL GO FASTER! I CAN'T DO THIS ANYMORE! 


NOOO!! SLOW DOWN!!!


NOOOO!!!! LET GO! LET GO! I’M DONE! 


NO ANNIE!!! 


I’M DONE!!!


OHHHH MYYYYYY GODDDDDD!!!!!! SLOW DOWN!!!!!! STOP THE-


OH GOD...OH GOD DONNIE!......Oh my god…oh my god what do I do...where's my phone…..where is it…...SIRI! CALL MAX!.....


*Ringggg* *Ringggg*


Helllloo


MAX!


Ann, where you at? Zoe was just asking me if you were still coming over. 


I GOT IN A FIGHT WITH DONNIE AND-


Yeah? What else is new. He didn’t hurt you did he?


HE WAS HANGING ON TO MY CAR AND I STARTED GOING FASTER AND HE SLIPPED OFF AND I THINK HE'S HURT…HE ROLLED AND HIT THE ROAD HARD.....I THINK I HURT HIM BAD...I-I SHOULD GO BACK-


Wow, wait, what? What happened? 


He didn’t *sniff* he didn’t want me to leave but I started to drive off and he was hanging on to my car then rolled and hit the street….he’s probably hurt...


So what, Annie! Don’t go back. It’s about time you fled off. Donnie’s a douchebag, how many times have I told you that? How many more fights do you need until you’re going to realize you need to drop that guy? Do not go back. Leave him there. He doesn’t care if you get hurt, so why the hell should you care? 


But he'll come back, he always shows up...he’s always there...and Max, I didn’t want to *sniff* *sniff* hurt him...I just….*sniff*....he was so different with I met him I kept thinking he’d *sniff* he’d go back to h-how he was when I-I first met him...I really loved him, Max *sniff* why-y did he change-


Ann, I’m sorry. I’m sorry for everything he’s done. He was an illusion. I’m sorry, but I won’t be sorry if you fall back into that. Don’t go back, don’t let that scumbag back in your life. Even if that means getting a restraining order; we’ll do that so he leaves you alone. You’ll never know what it feels like to have true love if you keep falling for false love


But Max-


Annie. Seriously. You have to let him go….....are you still driving?


Yes….


Well, I’m going to get off the phone before you run someone else over hahaha. 


Ha ha, I didn’t run him over. 


Sureeee hahahah. You should’ve, though. He would’ve deserved it. Hahah. But, how far are you? 


A few minutes. 


Okay good. We’ll talk more when you get here, I know Zoe is dying to hear what happened. 


Okay…... I’ll see you in a few minutes…..


Ann?


Yeah?


Relax. Take a deep breath. Everything’s fine now. Just let it go. We will help you.


I know…..thanks, Max.


Bye


Bye


*Sign*...*sniff*......let it go, Annie.…let go.



May 07, 2020 09:48

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A. Y. R
16:14 May 14, 2020

An interesting take on the promt, really suspenseful!

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Carlie Beth
17:00 May 14, 2020

Thank you so much!!!!!!!

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Lynne Desen
09:55 May 14, 2020

Great narration and suspense!

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Carlie Beth
17:00 May 14, 2020

Thank you!!!!!!!

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10:09 Sep 23, 2020

Hey, Carlie would you be kind to watch the first video it's on Harry potter. https://youtu.be/KxfnREWgN14 Sorry for asking your time, I would ready your story

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