The Champions: Part 2 (not actually a romance)

Submitted into Contest #81 in response to: Write about a first date that surprises both people, but in different ways.... view prompt

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Coming of Age Drama Fantasy

Everyone started screaming. The idle teenagers now stood, battle-ready, growing horns or holding thunder in their hands, a circle of teachers and girls in cardigans standing around their circle. It was weird, but nothing weirder than what had already happened. 

The teachers stood around the older teens.

The older teens stood around the younger teens.

And the younger teens stood around us. 

We were the fire-cat’s target. 

The small trail of smoke had grown, and we could see the tongues of fire leaping up in the sky. 

“Maybe I can turn back time and give us an advantage,” Luke said, but he began to cough and choke. “I’m allergic to cats,” he gasped. “Even twenty-foot-flaming-cats. Its hair is blowing over on the wind.” Luna bent down to help him, since he was gasping on the ground.

I reached out for the trees around me. Maybe I could use my magic? I was pushed away by the scream of the burning plants, which were like knives stabbing into my back over and over. 

The trail of fire had almost reached the school. “Turn on the guards!”a teacher shouted. I think she meant the towers around the borders of the campus. 

That was when the ground exploded. 

A massive fireball consumed the left wing of the school as thousands of humanoid figures made of flame leapt around. A teacher with water power extinguished them, but there was a bigger concern.

The left wing was where the hospital was.

Where the students slept.

And everyone who wasn't out here, about to get murdered by a bunch of fire golems, was in there with flame and heat and smoke. It wasn’t like some of it was on fire, either. The entire building was caving in under its own weight, smoke stretching to the sky.

I heard the screams. 

I heard their pain.

But I couldn’t save them.

The line of teachers broke to save them, and the fire golems raced ahead. 


A girl with a fox on her shoulder hissed a gold ball of energy out of her mouth, stopping one of the golems. 

But the other golem, enraged by the death of its comrade, it reached out and touched her chest.

Touched her.

That was all it took for the girl to explode into flames, running in circles and screaming for a few seconds before falling down, a burning corpse on the freshly mowed lawn. 

Her friends looked at her body, tears coming to their eyes. 

They charged at the golems, screaming battle cries. But every time they rook on down, another student would be touched by the golem and collapse in a rush of flames. The burning bodies strewn on the ground spread fire to the grass and topiaries, and the left wing caved in with a shower of sparks. The lawns surrounding it were now fields of fire, the boys and girls who I’d seen laughing and talking and texting on their phones now ran around, clutching the bodies of their friends, or lying among the blazing fields and courtyard, life rising out of them with the smoke.

Have you ever smelled burnt flesh? 

It smells like the worst thing ever. 

It smells like death and destruction and somehow, rubber. And pepper. But that could be the fact that I was using the napkin from my lunch to stop the smoke from flowing into my lungs and giving me all kinds of bad things like cancer. 

All these innocent people were dying because of me.

That was when I saw the Pyline.

It loomed over us like some prehistoric monster, a vivid orange streaked with gold and black. Its eyes were filled with hatred, and its fangs were as sharp as Death’s scythe. It was made of fire, at last fifty feet tall, with a long, lashing tail with a burst of fire at the end. It would have been cute if it was a kitten. As a monster? It was like looking at your death. 

“Thheee Chhhamp-p-pionsss,” it hissed in a female-sounding voice, drawing its words into a purring snarl. 

Sssseiz-z-ze ttthhhhem.”

An army of fire golems raced forward, the ground burning behind them. The few living students and teachers were either injured, tending to the injured, or fighting for their own lives. The Pyline let out a snort, a fireball of death coming out of its nose. Cats have cute noses. This one didn’t.

The fire didn’t hit any of us-- or at least we thought it did, until Jade started screaming in agony. Luke was choking on the Pyline’s hair, so he couldn’t turn back time and save her. She screamed again, the sleeve of her shirt burning, the flames reaching for her pale skin, reaching for her hair, reaching for her clothes… Jade’s friend pulled water from the fountain and doused Jade’s arm with it. She sighed in relief, but fainted away as soon as she wasn’t at risk of losing a limb. 

The army of golems had created a wall around us, a burning wall, cunning us off from whatever could possibly help us. Not like anyone out there could. 

Fearless didn’t give up, though. 

She slammed her hands into the ground, spiky necklace glowing. The ground shook, but nothing miraculous happened. 

Jade’s friend reached for the fountain, but the fire golems had evaporated the water, so she couldn’t do anything. 

Nainika turned into a fire golem, shouting “fight fire with fire!” but the others pinned her.

The Pyline, satisfied at our weakness, let out a howl. Chains made of fire appeared out of nowhere and wrapped around us, singing Fearless’s hair and making everyone's clothing smoke. I bit my tongue until it bled when the heat touched my skin, before shouting something I shouldn’t have said in public. 

A purple blur flew down from the sky, blowing out most of the golems. The purple thing was a person wearing a violet cape, I realized as the chains touched the bare skin of my arms, making my skin blister and fill with pain. 

Luke, who had slumped forward, leaning on the chains that held us to keep it from touching anyone else, looked to be in terrible pain. His hoodie had caught fire and the flames were reaching for the skin of his neck. He let out an agonized moan before falling silent. Wss he dead?

“You…” the Pyline hissed at the cloaked figure. “I thhhought I killllled you yearrrs aggggo.” 

“You didn’t,” the figure said. “And...they’re...MINE!” 

Wind blew away the fire chains and extinguished the golems, lifting us into the air. 

My eyes closed and everything went dark. 







I woke up some time later, bandages on the places where the fire had touched me, looking into a pair of rainbow eyes. “Where am I?” I asked.

“The only palace where you’ll be safe.”

A girl about sixteen years old leaned over me, her round face the only image on a gray screen. Not a gray screen, I realized, but a cave roof. 

“I’m Celeste, or the Windmaster of the Fallen Champions. I saved you. Actually, Maya used her gravity swap to stop you from cracking your head on the ground, but I blew out the golems, so you have to admit I did a big thing.”

“It was real?”

“Sure, it was real! Jade has a few more scars to add to her total, and Luke-- I’m not sure about what happened with him. He has horrible burns. I’m not sure the degree, but it has to be at least third. I’m unhappy to say that your power may be damaged because of the trees dying so soon after you bonded to them, and your left arm--err, don’t look at it. You were touched by the Pyline’s flame-tail when you fell out of my wind. I’m sorry, really sorry, and I hope you aren't left-handed.”

“I’m not.” my arm really stung, like it had been stabbed by a bunch of redhot needles. 

“Well, that’s good. Maya is trying to heal the others--Luke isn’t doing too well. But he should heal and might be able to get back out on the battlefield soon.”

“B-battlefield?” 

“Oh yes. Have you ever taken a class?”

“No, I just got to the school when it was…”

“Oh no. I’m so sorry. Here, see if you can stand.”

I rose slowly, taking in my surroundings. 

I was in a large cave, sitting on a sort of bed laid on a slab of stone. It was curved slightly, like one of those chairs at a dentist’s office. 

In front of me, twenty feet away, there was a tunnel leading out of the cave. It overlooked blue sky, so we must have been on a cliff. I slid off the bed-thing gracefully, redhot pain stinging in my arm. “Aagh! It hurts so much! I wanna rip it off just to get rid of the pain!”

“That’s a good thing, considering that if it did any more damage your nervous system would be harmed and you couldn’t feel at all.” 

I sighed. 

“You said you were Windmaster of the Fallen Champions. What does that mean?” 

“It means,” she said seriously, “that we’re the ones who failed to save the world.”

“What?” I stepped back but bumped into the bed-thing. 

“Not the world, but…” her voice lowered.

“There were others. Me, Maya, Timothy, Eric, Victoria, Maxine, Alberto, and Rose. We were the Champions. We could defeat the Pyline--the one who torched the school. He wanted to destroy us--the Chosen Ones, defenders of the Earth. We used to fight demons and monsters from the shadows, but then pyline killed them all. We thought he’d done us a favor, but he started killing us, too. The Chosen Ones, armed with their powers, set out against him,and--”

She swallowed. 

“I’m an orphan because of it. No-one survived. He turned the battlefield into a death pit of fire and blood.”

“Oh. I’m sorry.”

“No need, it’s in the past now. Because more attacks came, until we were almost wiped out. We started getting sent to schools like your’s before our Talents even came in. To keep us safe, they said. That backfired when the Pyline found out where the schools were.”

“Hundreds--thousands--of young, Talentless people died among those who promised great things to our future. It got bad. There are only five magic-schools left on Earth now.”

“On Earth? Are we--”

“Yes. We’re on our homeword.”

“But I’m a normal girl!”

“No. You are a Chosen One, with mixed blood. Half human, half...something else.” 

‘How are we on another planet?”

“Not planet. Homeworld.”

“Oh.”

“You’re the new generation of Champions--Pyline defeators. The next Rose.”

“Rose?”

“She was a nature-speaker, too.”

“Really?”

“Yes. You inherited her power. She died saving me.”

“Oh.”

“Come on. I need to introduce you to Maya.”



***

Maya was a teenage girl with golden-brown hair, Caucuasian skin, and green eyes. She and Celeste both wore purple cloaks.

“Hi, I saved you from dying. I’m Maya. Gravity Manipulator.” She grinned. 

I smiled through the pain in my arm. 

“So, we’re here to help you guys,” she said. We were in a different cave--there was a system of them running through the cliffs of our “homeworld”. Luke smiled, lying on a rough wooden table where it looked like Maya was doing something magic to the skin on his arm. “Oh, hi, uh…”

“Emerald.”

“Yeah. It seems you’re better off than me.” 

“I guess.” I touched the bandage on my arm.

“Hello,”Jade said nervously, stepping into the cave carefully. She wore a sky-blue cloak instead of a while blouse. “Emmie said she smelled smoke. Is it the...Pyline?”

“You’d see it on the horizon, too, so don’t worry, it isn’t the Plyine. Probably just Luna practicing her magic.”

Oh. The fire-girl.

“Well, as long as we stay together, we’ll be okay.” Celsest beamed. “It’ll be okay.”

Even though I inherited the magic of a girl who got killed by a fire-cat-of-death?

Maya said something magic-sounding and took a small bottle of blue potion from a shelf. “I’m gonna get back to regrowing the skin in your arms,” she said to Luke. “You guys might want to leave.”

“As we walked out on a narrow ledge overlooking a deep gorge, the way back to our own caves(we had caves of our own to live in, Celeste and explained, until we could get back to Earth)we heard Luke scream “HOLY MOTHER OF CHICKEN BISCUITS!” 


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I soon adjusted to life with the others. I moved into a cave, which was actually pretty cool, I learned about the Chosen Ones, basically demon-fighters with superpowers, tried to talk to the trees around me(which usually meant I’d feel like knives were being pounded into my back until I fainted)and learned about the others.

Nainkia’s mom was also a Chosen One, but she was back on Earth doing important stuff, and had so many other kids that she didn’t even notice Nainika slipping away.

Luke was a normal person until he felt his compass necklace buzzing as he walked closer and closer to the school. He got his parents to let him in easily.   

Luna was a rich girl who liked music and wanted to be a famous pop star until she accidentally set her old school on fire. She ran away with guilt even though no one knew it was her, and got admitted for having fire-power, kind of. 

Fearless stopped a landslide from crushing her town, and her grandmother recognized what she was and snuck her off to the school. 

Emmie and Jade had been friends for a while, until Emmie, helping her older brother by watching his post as a lifeguard, made the ocean spit out a drowning toddler. Jade followed her to school, accidentally making the weather really bad, and they both got admitted. 

My story wasn’t nearly so awesome. 

“It was an accident,” I sighed, looking into the campfire flames. We were outside, and luna was making perfect food. She could be an amazing chef. 

“I got sent to the school by accident.”

“Oh.”

Celeste looked like she had something on her mind.

“It’s the...the anniversary of…”

“The big battle,” Maya finished. “The fatal one.”

I didn’t want to know what happened....

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It had been a few months on the “homeworld” when celeste came to us with a newspaper clipping she got from earth somehow. 


DOUBLE-TRAGEDY

Boarding school burns down on anniversary of the William-Amsterdam fire


“Oh, yeah. That was another one of the Pyline’s attempts. He took most of the town and half the mountain, too.” Maya said sadly. 

I read the article, but soon put it down--it was too sad. 

500 students died. 

Because of me and the others. 



There was another a few weeks later:

ARSON OR ACCIDENT?

School fire kills 300, injures 57. 

Another appeared the next week.

火は学校を取ります,

the headline said. 

“Fire takes school,or something like that,” Celeste said. I’m not fluent, but I know some Japanese.”

A short time later, Maya called a meeting.

Fearless: “Why are so many schools attacked by the Pyline?” 

Luke: “In Japan, too?”

Luna: “I feel really bad now.”

Emmie: “I should be a firefighter, only magical.”

Jade: “WE’REGONNADIE!”

Maya: “No we aren’t.”

Celeste: “What’s the meeting for?”

Me: “I need some lunch.”

Maya: The Pyline must have a spy, someone who can tell him where we are.”

Luke: “Where’d you get that?”

Maya: “Your grandmother lives in the same state as the first school-fire, just blocks away.”

Me: “Uh-oh.”

Maya: “Fearless, your cousins live by the second. Nainika, your mom went to Japan for her job. It’s hunting us.”

Jade: “MmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmIdon’tlikethis.”

Emmie: “Who needs a hose when you can magic stuff?” 

Maya: “You listening?”

Me: “I am!”

Maya: I did research, and found possible suspects for the traitor.”

Fearless: “Good.”

Luna: “I wanna fight them…”

Maya: “The first is Adam Wyse. No known Talent. None of them have one, actually. The second is Franklin Fennel. The third is Mickie Sawyer. A girl.”

(Shows pictures of brown-haired boys who look alike and blond-haired smiling girl)

Maya: “The fourth--we don’t have a name so skip him. The fifth and sixth are twins, Mike and Mark Hassan.”

(Shows pictures of the twins, who have glasses.) 

Maya: “I have a plan to find out if they’re the traitor. You guys are gonna date them.”

All: “WHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAT?” 

Maya: “Five girls, five male suspects. One female suspect, one boy on our side.”

Luna: “What if they’re LGBTQ+?”

Maya: “Wing it.” 

Me: “I’m dating a possible murderer?”

Maya: “Not really dating. And they wouldn't have killed anybody.”

Jade: “Well, thisisgonnabeadatewheresomethingunexpectedhappens…” 

Me: (facepalms)





























(Written during writer's block. Proceed with caution.)

February 15, 2021 22:13

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22:15 Feb 15, 2021

Hi guys! I ha to take out Celeste's story, since it was like 1000 words, but this is good, right? I couldn't actually get to the date, either. But whatever! Hope you like it! If you want to be in it, I have a form you could fill out.

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Nainika Gupta
23:56 Feb 15, 2021

Nainika turned into a fire golem, shouting “fight fire with fire!” but the others pinned her. WHAT A FREAKING QUEEENNN i love me ahahaha thanks so muchhhh for including meeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee also you misspelt my name (totally fine) just letting you know!! AH IT WAS SO GOOODDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD ahaha i legit can't stop the love pouring outta meeeeee *take itttt* ahhhhh hehe amazing job Emerald!!

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17:39 Feb 16, 2021

I also love me in this, thanks! I decided to make you really cool but also kinda weird, and this was the best cool/weird thing I could think of.

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Nainika Gupta
17:40 Feb 16, 2021

ahahah i KNOW you were amazinggggg and thanksss

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17:41 Feb 16, 2021

Sorry about the name, my computer is crazy with autocorrect

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Nainika Gupta
18:02 Feb 16, 2021

no you're fine!!

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18:27 Feb 16, 2021

Ok, thanks!

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KED KED
20:36 Apr 21, 2021

Excellent. How, in the middle of exciting and tragic chaos, are you seamlessly injecting humor into this?! "It smells like death and destruction and somehow, rubber. And pepper. But that could be the fact that I was using the napkin from my lunch to stop the smoke from flowing into my lungs and giving me all kinds of bad things like cancer." I'm still laughing about it...

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10:21 Apr 22, 2021

Yessssssss, thanks!

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Cole Lane
15:17 Apr 18, 2021

Right into the melee!!

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15:19 Apr 19, 2021

Thanks:)

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Radhika Diksha
11:47 Feb 21, 2021

2 new stories would love your feedback on it.

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Radhika Diksha
04:38 Feb 16, 2021

Shout out writer ✨Cookie Carla https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/author/cookie-carla/ ✨Cherri Joanna https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/author/cherri-joanna/ Shout out story 🧨By Frances https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/80/submissions/54265/ These are this weeks writers and story, in you free time please check them out.

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17:41 Feb 16, 2021

Ok!

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22:42 Mar 13, 2021

This was an interesting installment :) I'm confused as to why you completely switched writing styles into something that looked like a playbook with stage directions.... and I don't really know what's happening, there are...traitors... and stuff is on fire but they're not on Earth anymore... and they need to go on undercover dates with... WHO? Anyway, you might have wanted to add a warning for the violence in the start of this, it was a pretty shocking change of tone. Your description of that godforsaken hell-panther was BEAUTIFUL (you mist...

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18:04 Mar 15, 2021

Yeah, it went from weird and magical to all-out WoF style violence (WoF stands for wings of fire, it's a violent series about dragon-war) but it's too late to edit it. Yes, another world. Yes, fake dating. Yes, betrayal. Yes! FINALLY SOMEONE NOTICES THE PYLINE DESCRIPTIONS!

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18:05 Mar 15, 2021

I did that to save time, the script thing. i thought it would be funny

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20:42 Mar 15, 2021

Okay, maybe it was just confusing because there are a lot of characters I've just barely been introduced to, but that description of the Pyline? Majestic. In a– you know– utterly horrifying way.

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21:08 Mar 15, 2021

Yeah :)

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"HOLY MOTHER OF CHICKEN BISCUITS" AKSJNAJKHIUSNX I LOVE ITTTT I keep forgetting which character is which, not because there's too many I'm just bad at remembering names XD Love the storyyyyyy!

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23:02 Mar 08, 2021

Hhaha though

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XD amazing story!!!!!!! I'm thinking of making one as well, my form to be in it is in my bio if u wanna check it out! :)

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15:59 Mar 09, 2021

Ok!

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Lilliane Wei
22:02 Mar 03, 2021

YESSSS THIS IS GREATTTTT I LOVE IT EMERALDDDDDDD!!!!! Such a great storyyyyyy!!! Amazing job!!!

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22:03 Mar 03, 2021

Thank you! Any edits or fave parts?

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Lilliane Wei
22:07 Mar 03, 2021

I know it's gruesome but I really loved the fight lol

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TJ Squared
16:54 Mar 01, 2021

once again, AWESOME! Defiantly want to somehow be in the fourth....

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21:50 Mar 01, 2021

Ok! Want to do the form? It's in my bio.

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TJ Squared
21:52 Mar 01, 2021

i did it :)

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21:56 Mar 01, 2021

Ok!

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TJ Squared
21:58 Mar 01, 2021

:)

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22:11 Mar 01, 2021

AAAAGH EMMIE LEFT WHO'LL BE THE WATER GIRL?

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Sapphire 🌼
19:33 Feb 26, 2021

I DIEEEDDDDD AT "“HOLY MOTHER OF CHICKEN BISCUITS!”" XD Once again, you killed it! The humor makes it soooooo fun to read, and this part written by someone with writers block made a great story to read for someone with writers block. (sorry that was confuzzling) Ohh myyy goshhhh I CAN'T WAIT FOR THE NEXT PART XD I wonder what's gonna happen with all thing "dating" XD

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21:21 Feb 26, 2021

LOL *think mind control and this scary kid and a cliffhanger*

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Sapphire 🌼
21:26 Feb 26, 2021

*oh my-*

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21:26 Feb 26, 2021

Indeed

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17:57 Feb 25, 2021

SORRY EMERALD, I TOTALLY DIDN’T SEE THIS EARLIER! OOOOH! BUT IT’S AWESOME! :D ‘ “HOLY MOTHER OF CHICKEN BISCUITS!” ‘ AHHHHH! LUKE!!! XDDD ‘ Jade: “WE’REGONNADIE!” ‘ XD ‘ Me: “I need some lunch.” ‘ Same... ‘ Jade: “Well, thisisgonnabeadatewheresomethingunexpectedhappens…”  Me: (facepalms) ‘ AHAHAHAHAHAHAHA I ‘LARB’ THIS! GREAT JOB!

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19:48 Feb 25, 2021

Thanks! Wanna be in my friends clan? I got inspired by Warriors. I gave it a cool name-- Thorncry.

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21:02 Feb 25, 2021

oOoOo! Of course! :D That name is awesome!

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21:34 Feb 25, 2021

I might change it to something cooler, because thorncry sounds kinda sad. Maybe Hidden Gem?

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21:44 Feb 25, 2021

Hm... Maybe? Both sounds really cool!

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21:58 Feb 25, 2021

Ok!

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Kate Reynolds
00:11 Feb 23, 2021

Omggggggg THIS WAS EVEN BETTER THAN THE FIRST ONE (if that's possible...) Wow. Just wow. Like this is only your second story and yet... it's better than all of mine combined XD "purring snarl" DANG THIS DESCRIPTION... HOW I think I just found my new favorite series

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16:13 Feb 24, 2021

THANKYOU! I'm trying to get one out about a mind control device and a weird date, but it isn't done yet.

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Kate Reynolds
16:47 Feb 24, 2021

YOU ARE VERY WELCOMEEEEE oOooOOooOooO That sounds very interesting!!! (In a good way, ofc)

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18:59 Feb 24, 2021

Oof... Tell Luna Colon I'm sorry I trapped her in a burning building with a psycho and me and a mind controller

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Kate Reynolds
20:53 Feb 24, 2021

XDDD

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22:30 Feb 24, 2021

Yeah

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16:40 Feb 18, 2021

Ok!

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Maya -
04:57 Feb 18, 2021

Ohmigosh this was so awesome!!! XD You did a great job of really jumping into the story and action at the beginning and hooking the reader right away. The dialogue and dynamic between characters were amazing and really funny at times! Lol the twist at the end was absolutely wonderful! XDD I can't wait to read the next part, this was terrific! :))) So sorry it took me a while to read it, I've been pretty busy lately. :/

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16:40 Feb 18, 2021

That's okay! hey, wanna continue "justice or death" sometime? Maybe next week or the week after?

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Maya -
17:13 Feb 18, 2021

Sure! I have kind of a lot of stories going on right now, so maybe later? Unless you would like to continue it as a series by yourself. Whichever you would like. ^_^

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21:37 Feb 18, 2021

That's ok! I kinda want to finish up this next part of the Champions before romance prompts end.

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21:01 Feb 17, 2021

Yesssss this series is amazingggggggggg Fav line: we heard Luke scream “HOLY MOTHER OF CHICKEN BISCUITS!” XDDDD the way the characters interact w/ eachother just feels very comfortable, and I think that very well portrays their personalities. Other fav line: Maya: “Five girls, five male suspects. One female suspect, one boy on our side.” Luna: “What if they’re LGBTQ+?” Maya: “Wing it.” XDDDD you did an amazing job of mixing humor with action and I love it so muchhhhhhhh when will the next part be outttt???? tysm for including mee...

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16:38 Feb 18, 2021

Pretty soon! Thanks!

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16:41 Feb 18, 2021

yay! Let me know when it comes out!!

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16:42 Feb 18, 2021

'K!

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Coco Longstaff
00:56 Feb 16, 2021

Hey Emerald Its me Coco but this is actually a different account because im at school Thx for doing my quiz! Anything you wanna talk about?

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17:40 Feb 16, 2021

Hmm...

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Coco Longstaff
01:01 Feb 17, 2021

........?

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19:25 Feb 17, 2021

Do you like Harry Potter? Oh man, as soon as you read it you like it... LOL

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19:26 Feb 17, 2021

Do you like Harry Potter? Oh man, as soon as you read it you like it... LOL

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Coco Longstaff
01:01 Feb 19, 2021

I like it. Not a super fan though, like my friends have Harry Potter bags and wands, but I dont do that. My best friend is crazy about Draco. I also have this thing where I dont read fantasy or myths, so I may sound weird, but I dont read Harry Potter. Um Im in Gryffindor. Heh LOL

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11:38 Feb 19, 2021

Wait, so you're Gryffindor but didn't read it? Yeah, I like the story but I don't have pins and bags and stuff.

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23:54 Feb 15, 2021

hi emerald!! this fantasy series is really good, the action scenes were fantastic!! :D you wrote this during writer's block? how? like- my favourite part is the last bit: "Maya: “I have a plan to find out if they’re the traitor. You guys are gonna date them.” All: “WHAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAT?” Maya: “Five girls, five male suspects. One female suspect, one boy on our side.” Luna: “What if they’re LGBTQ+?” Maya: “Wing it.” Me: “I’m dating a possible murderer?” Maya: “Not really dating. And they wouldn't have killed a...

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17:38 Feb 16, 2021

Yeah! I decided to do it as a script to make it funnier.

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23:33 Feb 16, 2021

yeah it definitely worked

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19:25 Feb 17, 2021

Thanks!

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00:41 Feb 18, 2021

:)

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Yessssssss I kick buttttttttt also can I date mike XD

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22:27 Feb 15, 2021

date mike? Btw the dating people and the people who died are product of my imagination and not real people

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The suspect Also I think that you can make me backstory in a separate story....? You decide 🤗🤗

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22:32 Feb 15, 2021

Ok! Yeah, you and Maya have... weird lives. I could do a prequel. Ok, yeah, date mike :) (it might work out because I planned ahead and he isn't the spy)

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XD Who is I actually want to date him/her X It fine tho XD

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22:36 Feb 15, 2021

Oh, kinda can't because someone might see, but I could swap you with someone else.

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21:48 Mar 01, 2021

Impressed.

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