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Drama Mystery

My neck aches from looking up. A gentle breeze hits my skin. I grip Acelynn's hand tighter. The stars twinkle above us as if they are sending a message. They form wonderous constellations in the night sky. Acelynn yawns beside me and closes her eyes. I smile to myself and keep my eyes above the sky.


A bright streak races across the dark canvas, like a chariot on the battlefield. A shooting star. I close my eyes and whisper a wish, knowing that it won't come true. Opening my eyes, I notice Acelynn is fast asleep beside me. I scoop her up and walk towards the door. Inside the little shack, Mama is working. She is looking for a job. Mama is sitting on the couch, looking through the newspapers. I tiptoe to the only bedroom in our old house and gently lay Accelyn down.


"Celestial? Come over here", Mama croaks. I shuffle to where she sits and stands beside her. "Yes, Mama?"


"I am traveling to town early tomorrow and won't be back till night. You must take care of your sister."


I nod my head, "yes, Mama".


"Thank you, my bright star", Mama whispers, using her nickname for me.


I whisper goodnight and wander into the bedroom. Gingerly, I climb on the wooden bed and lie down, wrapping an arm around Accelyn. "Sweet dreams, little one", I whisper into her hear. Closing my eyes, I imagine the starry night.


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My eyes flutter open. I sit up on the wooden bed and rub my sleepy eyes. Accelyn sleeps peacefully beside me. I walk into our miniature kitchen and open the pantry. There is a little bread and some slices of cheese. I make two petite sandwiches and place them on a cracked plate. Waling back into the bedroom, I wake up Accelyn. We rinse our mouths in the sink and eat our sandwiches.

"What will we do today, Celestial?", Accelyn asks between bites.

I swallow my sandwich. "I'm not sure yet, we can play inside".

Accelyn smiles and takes another bite.


After, eating Accelyn and I decide to play her favorite game. I tell her short stories and she acts them. Accelyn giggles. "Celestial, this is so-".


THUMP!


Accelyn shuts her mouth as my eyes widen. I immediately grab Accelyn's hand and drag her to the bedroom. Locking the door shut, we both roll under the wooden bed. Accelyn whimpers as I comfort her. The front door slams open and heavy footsteps stomp on the floor. "Check if anyone's there", a gruff voice says. "What do they want?", Accelyn whispers, her eyes full of apprehension. I squeeze her hand. "I don't know, maybe money?" Accelyn closes her eyes. This has never happened before. I whisper a small prayer to God. Keep us safe. Please.


Mama...mama please come home. My eyes fill with tears. Angry ones. The star...last night. My wish didn't come true. In fact, exactly the opposite happened. I knew I shouldn't have relied on some stupid miracles. Accelyn sniffles. "Celestial, I'm scared", she whispers. I embrace her. "Don't worry. I'm here". The Earth spin's on its axis. The stars decorate the black sky. How? How in the world did we end up here? What did we do to deserve this? Our family is lonely. Sad. Mama needs a job. Why are do people want to harm us? We don't deserve this... 


I can hear men tearing down the walls. Searching through cupboards. Flinging our few precious items. Suddenly, I gasp. Oh no! Mama's bracelet. It's in the drawer a few feet away from the bed. It was the last thing Papa gave to Mama before he passed. "What?", Accelyn whispers. "The bracelet", I reply. "I need to go get it!" I squeeze my head out from under the bed and start to roll out. "Oof!". My body is stuck. "Accelyn, I can't get out", I cry, quietly. "It's okay, Celestial. I'll get it. My body's smaller.", Accelyn offers.


"NO!", I yell softly. It's too late. Accelyn rolls out and starts to tiptoe to the drawer. I shut my eyes tightly hoping, praying it would go well...CREAK. The wooden floorboard makes a hollow noise. Accelyn freezes. The stomping moves towards the bedroom. The door is shoved open and two large men with guns walk in. No! This can't be happening. I shove myself out and run towards Accelyn. "Don't hurt her", I plead. Where did they get guns from?! I put my body before hers. "Take me", I whisper. The men stare at us. One of them starts to laugh. "We'll take both", the other says. They point their guns at us. NO...


BAM!


CRASH!


Silence.


"Accelyn?", my voice echoes. I'm standing...in nothing. Black. Dark. Empty. It is a void of darkness. Never-ending. Why am I here? I rotate my head to look around. I see nothing. It's as if a black hole has swallowed me. Leaving me in its darkness. I'm afraid. Where's Accelyn? No. I won't let the darkness take me in. I need to get out. Deep breaths. In and out. I close my eyes and squeeze my elbows. Let me out. Let me free. Oh, starry night...let me go... 


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"Celestial!", Accelyn yells. I jolt upright and scream. "What's wrong?! Where did they go?!". I look around and see...the backyard? Accelyn laughs. "What are you talking about?". I look into her eyes. "What happened", I gasp. "You fell asleep while stargazing. Are you tired? Shall we go inside?", Accelyn replies. I stare at her for a minute and then break into laughter. 'No-I, haha, you see-", I whisper. "I just dreamed something weird". Accelyn smiles. "Okay then, Celestial.".


I drape my hand over Accelyn's shoulder and pull her in. "I love you", I whisper. "I love you more", she replies. We sit there, side by side, staring at the magnificent night sky. "A shooting star!", Adelynn yells in delight. I observe the streak race across the black sky. Thank you for granting my wish, to keep Accelyn safe. I never believed in miracles or wishes until now. I tilt my head back up to the sky. Only in the darkness, can you see the stars.





April 30, 2020 21:27

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Sarah Freeman
21:42 Jul 22, 2020

Wow, that was really good! The story builds up until that one point where the reader is on their toes wondering what is HAPPENING when Celestial wakes up and the reader says to themself “oohhh, it was just a dream.” I also liked that you used interesting names. Celestial is really cool. But I couldn’t tell if Celestial’s sister’s name was Acelynn, Accelyn, or Adelynn. All are pretty and unique. Nice job overall!

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Niveeidha Palani
05:02 May 01, 2020

Oh my god, this story was amazing! I love your description at the first part. Also this story was very emotional and loving. Loved this!

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Riddhi S.
05:06 May 01, 2020

Thank you so much! :D

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Niveeidha Palani
11:08 May 01, 2020

Your welcome <3 <3 :)

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This was great! Three things I liked: —It was cool how you used ‘return’ to give some onomatopoeias some extra spotlight. I think it really added to the story. —Celestial! What an awesome name! I love the name Celeste, but I’ve never heard of Celestial. Nice spin on an already nice name! —I like the twist ending, but especially the ENDING ending. Like, the last sentence. It was very poetical and pretty. Keep it up! —Aerin (Would you mind reading and maybe commenting on my story? It’s my first one and I just posted it...

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Riddhi S.
03:00 Nov 05, 2020

I'm so sorry for replying late, but thank you so much! It means a lot to me :)

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04:43 May 04, 2020

All that was a dream? He must have a pretty good imagination 😉 I liked the story and thought it was fun right to the end. I almost felt panic when they heard the creak and then the darkness later on. Great job.

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Riddhi S.
18:15 May 04, 2020

Haha glad you liked it :)

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Rhondalise Mitza
04:05 Jun 26, 2020

<3 I have some feedback if you're up for it!

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Riddhi S.
16:25 Jun 26, 2020

Of course! Any feedback would help a lot :)

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Caroline G
23:19 May 06, 2020

I’m glad it was a dream haha. I really thought they’d died. I enjoyed reading it though.

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Riddhi S.
00:01 May 07, 2020

Haha thanks for reading! :)

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18:40 May 02, 2020

I love this story! I read it till the end! I love everything that involves wishes and your story was amazing!

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Riddhi S.
18:41 May 02, 2020

Thank you so much! :)

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18:46 May 02, 2020

Your welcome! You should change your bio to "Nevertheless, she writes successful short stories."

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Riddhi S.
18:49 May 02, 2020

Haha okay!

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Soumya Garg
10:09 Dec 27, 2020

I loved this one too! The descriptions rocked !! Loved the way you presented the feeling of miracles and used metaphors like 'stars' to add depth. Good Job!!!

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Riddhi S.
19:26 Dec 27, 2020

Omg, thank you so much for reading! I really appreciate it :D

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Keerththan 😀
02:06 Jul 31, 2020

Great story. Loved it. Keep writing..... Would you mind reading my story "The secret of power?"

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Keerththan 😀
02:05 Jul 31, 2020

Great story. Loved it. Keep writing.... Would you mind reading my story "The secret of power?"

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Raquel Rodriguez
17:27 Jul 30, 2020

What a unique name. Celestial. Never heard of that before. I love the beginning. The sentence, 'I close my eyes and whisper a wish, knowing that it won't come true.' is just perfect. Love it. I also couldn't tell if Celestial's sister's name was Acelynn, Accelyn, or Adelynn because of these sentences. 'We sit there, side by side, staring at the magnificent night sky. "A shooting star!", Adelynn yells in delight' 'I drape my hand over Accelyn's shoulder and pull her in.' 'I grip Acelynn's hand tighter.' Could you maybe chec...

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Riddhi S.
02:59 Nov 05, 2020

I'm so sorry for the late reply, but thank you so so much! Sure, I'll check them out when I can! :D

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Raquel Rodriguez
13:04 Nov 05, 2020

Alright, thank you so much! :)

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