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Fiction Teens & Young Adult

August 1st, 2039


We've all been friends for about seven or so years, though Achebe and Alexis have never met each other during any of that time. Though that's going to change today, we're all going to eat at a restaurant in a few hours. I'll tell you how it goes. -Roxanne


August 2nd, 2039


I don't think that it went as well as I was wanting it to go yesterday, we all met outside of the restaurant so the two of them could formally meet. Though something seemed a little...off with Alexis.


I was just sort of awkwardly standing next to the two of them as they talked and all that, I'm not sure how Achebe was feeling but...I swear I could see something in Alexis' eyes...- Roxanne


August 3rd, 2039


You know what? I think meeting the two of them were some of the best days of my life. I...don't remember exactly how I met Alexis all those years ago, Though I remember we ended up meeting when we were ten years old.


I can however remember fully how I ended up meeting Achebe. It was probably about a few weeks after I met Alexis and we ended up meeting at a pool. A town pool to be exact.


I have no clue though on how neither of them met each other until now, I thought that they would have at least ran into each other while trying to find me or something. That's a little strange, to be honest... -Roxanne


August 7th, 2039


I know I haven't been writing anything in this for a few days, so sorry if anyone is reading this for some reason. The past few days were just extremely boring and nothing really happened.


I texted the two of them a few minutes ago and luckily they both agreed to have a movie night with me. I kind of hope that if the two of them hang out a bit more, they'll become friends with each other.


We're going to watch a movie that I believe is called, "Otherworldly repairs" It seems like its sci-fi or futuristic, I've never actually watched the movie.


Well anyways, I'm going to go now, and then I'll tell you whatever happens. My gosh, I'm like eighteen and I'm writing in a stupid Diary, what am I doing with my life? I really should get rid of this. -Roxanne


August 8th, 2039


I think the movie night was a tad bit worse than the whole Restaurant thing I told you about. Alexis was the first to arrive, she at least seemed a little happy, though when Achebe arrived that's when she changed.


It felt like she was just going to remain silent for the whole time as Achebe had asked me, "Is something wrong with her? She wasn't like this a few days ago..."


That wasn't the bad part or anything, she was just a little confused. It's what happened with Alexis whenever Achebe decided to go to the bathroom.


"Roxie, why do you keep bringing that girl with us? She shouldn't even be here, it should only be me and you!" I'd list what else she said but...it was bad. Is she jealous or something? -Roxanne


August 11th, 2039


Over the last couple of days, whether the two of them were with me or if it was just me and Alexis, it kept happening. She just always seemed...annoyed or confused, maybe even a bit upset with that look in her eyes.


I'm not sure if she actually hates her, or if she's just a little upset since it's usually just the two of us. Maybe it's both? Though either way, I'm still going to try and make them hang out to become friends and not enemies.


In fact, I already did something for the two of them. I know that Alexis might not like it, though I'm making the two of them go for a long walk together tomorrow, I'm not going with them though. It's just for the two of them. -Roxanne


August 14th, 2039


I have no idea what's going on, I haven't said anything for the past few days since I've been looking for the two of them. I was waiting the whole day for them to come back, but they never did.


I wasn't freaking out when it first happened, of course, it was a bit late when they would have come back so I thought that they just fell asleep somewhere and didn't have the time to reply.


Achebe's parents had already got a missing person report out for both of them once we realized that we couldn't find them anywhere. We searched a lot of places over the last few days...though I have an idea of where to go next. -Roxanne


August 16th, 2039


I found both of them. Earlier this morning when I was about to head off to where they went on that walk, Alexis was outside waiting for me. I could tell something was wrong by her expression as she then said, "I'm so sorry...I didn't mean for it to happen."


I didn't really think much of that besides being a little happy that she was back until I found her. Achebe was where the two of them went on that walk, just like I thought.


She had fallen though, she had fallen off of a cliff. I wish I could just say that she was alive and alright, but that wasn't true at all, she was dead. She was gone.


Did...Alexis kill her?! I know she seemed like she hated her or was at least jealous but why would she go that far? It was a terrible idea to leave those two alone, I got her killed... -Roxanne


August 18th, 2039


I haven't told anyone about what happened, not even the Police, I don't want Alexis coming after me as well. She might be able to even break out of prison if I put her in there.


She's been texting me for the last couple of days about it, though I haven't been responding to her, I'm thinking of blocking her completely in every way. Everyone knows that Achebe is dead, though they'll never know how it happened...


She's been texting me things like, "I'm so sorry it was never supposed to happen, please forgive me!" and "It was just a mistake, please you have to trust me on this...maybe I could fix it." Hah, no she couldn't, how would you fix something like this?


I'm going to try my best to figure out what to, maybe I could try to avenge her or something. That's what a friend would try to do, right...? I don't have anyone else to talk to, so this is the best thing to do. -Roxanne

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20:59 Dec 02, 2020

Hey B, This was a very interesting, and mysterious story. I wasn't expecting Alexis to do that, and I was not expecting the whole disappearing body thing. But I suppose thats why 'Fantasy' is on the tag! But yeah I really enjoyed the diary format as well, I liked how you put in little entries. I also enjoyed the story as a whole, it was very interesting! Great job!!

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B. W.
21:36 Dec 02, 2020

What do you mean? Fantasy isn't one of the tags and the story itself isn't really fantasy either, her body did sort of disappear but it was just missing because it took them a while to find the body since it was sort of out in the woods. The way she went missing/disappeared had nothing to do with Fantasy. Though I'm sorry if Im being rude about this or anything like that, though I'm glad ya liked the story ^^

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22:07 Dec 02, 2020

Ohhhh! My bad! Thats just how I interpreted it- and your not being rude you just correcting me, thank you. Sorry, not all your stories have fantasy but I noticed a good amount of your are fantasy, and I assumed fiction said fantasy😅oopsy- forget that happened. Yup I loved the story great job!

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B. W.
22:08 Dec 02, 2020

I'm way better at doing Fantasy stories than anything else, that's why most of my stories and novels will be some sort of Fantasy. Though the only time I cant really do Fantasy is in the diary format unless I just mention something from fantasy like, "Today i rode a dragon to school" or something

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22:17 Dec 02, 2020

Oh I see..

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B. W.
22:43 Dec 02, 2020

Would ya maybe wanna see more diary type stories though?

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Felicity Anne
16:38 Dec 02, 2020

Hello B!! I finally made it over here! I love the diary format you used, it's so neat! I haven't seen many stories formatted like that. It adds character to your story! I also love love love how you set it in the future! That's so cool! As far as grammar corrections go, I didn't see anything that needed to be corrected, so wonderful job, B! Have a wonderful rest of your day and don't forget to keep writing!

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B. W.
18:39 Dec 02, 2020

I haven't really seen much stories on here like it either, I just kind of took a liking to it and decided to start doing it. Thank you though and I'm glad that you liked the story and all that ^^ did you maybe have a favorite part or anything like that?

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Philip Clayberg
04:08 Dec 02, 2020

I liked this story. It felt very much like daily life in the real world. And then when Achebe's dead body was found and Achebe apologized, I thought, "But what if Alexis *didn't* kill Achebe? Maybe it was an accident. Maybe Achebe just slipped and fell, and Alexis couldn't grab her hand and stop her fall soon enough. Or maybe Alexis didn't even try to save Achebe's life. She just watched Achebe fall and then went home." If Achebe's body is recovered, a medical examiner/coroner could do an autopsy and try to determine the cause of deat...

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B. W.
04:19 Dec 02, 2020

Thanks, im glad ya liked it ^^ Like i said this is a story im doing with a friend, her part of it would sort of be the POV of Alexis which might clear some stuff up that wasn't answered or anything like that in this story, it was only Roxanne's POV so she wouldn't be able to know some of that stuff or at least find it out that quickly.

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Philip Clayberg
04:22 Dec 02, 2020

I'll try to patiently wait until your friend writes the story from Alexis' point of view. Like I said in my other response (in the other thread), please don't clear up *all* of the mystery. Leave something behind that doesn't quite add up. Something that lets the reader think about it and decide for themselves what really happened.

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B. W.
05:00 Dec 02, 2020

It takes her a while to do the things because she told me the stuff she has to do, like writing it, editing and all that other stuff, though I think it should probably be out by Thursday or Friday at some point. I'll probably go and tell you whenever its out ^^

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Philip Clayberg
20:19 Dec 02, 2020

I'm looking forward to it already. Thank you ahead of time for the referral to your friend's story (after she finishes writing it). I've been trying to think of something to write about based on the 4 weekly prompts that are left. But I can't think of anything yet. Just jumbles of possible ideas that haven't really coalesced into something solid that I can work with. Of course, that could change very quickly. That happened two or three weeks ago, when I thought I would have to go through an entire week without writing a story, and th...

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B. W.
21:30 Dec 02, 2020

Hm, if you ever need any help with the stories or anything like that, then I could still help ya if ya ever need me to.

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Raquel Rodriguez
20:27 Dec 01, 2020

Hey, check out my bio! :)

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B. W.
20:39 Dec 01, 2020

aww, i love it :)

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Raquel Rodriguez
20:40 Dec 01, 2020

Yayyy! I'm so glad you do! I tried to come up with different descriptions for everyone, lol

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B. W.
21:59 Dec 01, 2020

I also like the nickname ^^

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Raquel Rodriguez
14:33 Dec 02, 2020

Nice, I'm glad! :)

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B. W.
18:30 Dec 02, 2020

Sorry that i dont really have a nickname for you or anything, I couldn't think of one

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Kate M
14:52 Dec 01, 2020

This is a very intriguing story! I love how it was written in a diary! Great work! 😁

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B. W.
17:40 Dec 01, 2020

thanks ^^ did you maybe have a favorite part or anything like that?

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Kate M
18:43 Dec 01, 2020

I loved the whole thing, but I really liked the August 14th entry. It had a lot of tension and suspense packed into those few paragraphs!

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B. W.
18:55 Dec 01, 2020

would ya wanna see more diary entry type things?

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Kate M
19:06 Dec 01, 2020

Of course! 😊

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B. W.
20:33 Dec 01, 2020

alrighty ^^

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Amany Sayed
14:19 Dec 01, 2020

Actually one of your best I think! The plot line was well thought out, and you kept a good voice of the narrator throughout. The diary thing worked well for this story. No real critiques. Loved the names! :D

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B. W.
17:39 Dec 01, 2020

Thanks, im glad that you liked it and all that ^^ did you maybe have a favorite part or anything like that?

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Amany Sayed
18:04 Dec 01, 2020

No, not really, I liked it all!

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B. W.
18:06 Dec 01, 2020

would ya wanna see more diary format stories?

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Laiba M
14:16 Dec 01, 2020

Hey~ I loved it!! It's so nice to plan a story with someone and see the ideas come to life, it makes it ten times more interesting to read~~ I do think that you should consider adding more emotion into the part where Roxanne discovers Achebe's death. Also, this isn't a bad thing, but why 2039? Just curious :) I have a twist coming up for you in my part of the story so that you're surprised!

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B. W.
17:38 Dec 01, 2020

I don't know what to do to add more emotion for whenever she finds that out, though I'm glad you at least liked it a little bit ^^ I don't know, I just picked a random date and wanted it to be set in the future a little bit. A twist? when do ya think your part will be out?

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Laiba M
19:01 Dec 01, 2020

Ohh, ok :) Yep! I didn't tell you anything about it since technically you're still a reader and I want you to be surprised a bit~ Hmm, I'm not sure. I'll start my rough draft this afternoon, finish in the evening, review it and edit it all day tomorrow, then read over it a few times. Maybe Thursday? Or if I'm too busy, Friday.

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Laiba M
19:00 Dec 01, 2020

Add shock, sadness, fear, just a blur of negative emotions. Since it's a diary, obviously it won't be poetic or detailed. Maybe just an "I couldn't move" or "I was shocked and scared and sad and disgusted and angry all at the same time. Who would do this to Achebe? Would they do it to me as well? Why her?"

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B. W.
20:31 Dec 01, 2020

I could maybe try to add some of that stuff in, though I might end up forgetting :/ You said your part of the story was gonna be in second person, right?

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Laiba M
20:43 Dec 01, 2020

Yes :)

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B. W.
22:02 Dec 01, 2020

hey, if this all goes really well, maybe we could do another thing like this together?

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The Cold Ice
04:44 Jan 27, 2021

Hello

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B. W.
06:03 Jan 27, 2021

Hi?

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The Cold Ice
06:57 Jan 27, 2021

How are you

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B. W.
07:11 Jan 27, 2021

I guess I'm fine, what about you?

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The Cold Ice
08:18 Jan 27, 2021

Great.

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B. W.
08:45 Jan 27, 2021

what do ya think of the prompts?

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The Cold Ice
06:52 Dec 24, 2020

Hi

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B. W.
06:54 Dec 24, 2020

Hi?

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The Cold Ice
06:55 Dec 24, 2020

How are you

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B. W.
07:03 Dec 24, 2020

eh. half and half

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The Cold Ice
07:06 Dec 24, 2020

What half and half

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B. W.
07:09 Dec 24, 2020

I feel a bit good, but i also feel a bit bad.

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B. W.
21:50 Dec 09, 2020

I'm not making part 2, but a friend of mine was doing the story with me, you should check out Laiba M because she made the other part and its called "The Dollmaker" or something like that

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William Liu
02:18 Dec 07, 2020

Upvoters always beat downvoters :D

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Phebe Emmanuel
08:10 Dec 05, 2020

I thought it was cool how she didn't know where Achebe was for a while. I think, though, that you should try to slow the story down a bit more. It all happened so fast, and though I know that it's a diary entry, it's a story for us. You dig?

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B. W.
17:21 Dec 05, 2020

I don't think I could change the stuff now though, since the new prompts are out now and all that.

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Phebe Emmanuel
19:06 Dec 05, 2020

That's alright. Hey, why did you change your name?

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B. W.
19:52 Dec 05, 2020

Some other friends also changed their names to Harry Potter characters, I thought it would be fun to do ^^

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Phebe Emmanuel
20:32 Dec 05, 2020

Oh, k.

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B. W.
20:39 Dec 05, 2020

could ya maybe help me with something?

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Phebe Emmanuel
06:12 Dec 05, 2020

The diary format is great! Luv It!

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B. W.
06:21 Dec 05, 2020

thanks ^^ did ya have a favorite part or anything?

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Kaitlyn James
21:10 Dec 04, 2020

Hey B! It's been awhile. Anyway, I just wrote a new story. It's called 'Never Did She Break Her Promises' I was wondering if you could check it out. Thanks!

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B. W.
21:56 Dec 04, 2020

Sure ^^ though could you maybe leave some feedback on this and stuff?

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Kaitlyn James
02:01 Dec 05, 2020

Of course!

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B. W.
02:05 Dec 05, 2020

also- do you perhaps know a story on here called "Keep The Paper Coming (A Reedsy Fanfic)" I know this is a strange comment but I saw something about it at one point and I wanna see it, I kinda like seeing stories that involve people from here.

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Kaitlyn James
04:00 Dec 05, 2020

No I don’t.

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B. W.
04:17 Dec 05, 2020

Oh, thats fine, so how have ya been?

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The Cold Ice
06:18 Dec 03, 2020

Hi

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B. W.
06:30 Dec 03, 2020

Hiya

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The Cold Ice
06:37 Dec 03, 2020

Wyd

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B. W.
10:37 Dec 03, 2020

Not really, all i know is that its probably a group of people downvoting everyone else for some reason

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The Cold Ice
14:00 Dec 03, 2020

Ok

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The Cold Ice
06:38 Dec 03, 2020

Do you have any idea about the downvoted I was downvoted 300 points 😭 😢

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The Cold Ice
06:38 Dec 03, 2020

Con you upvote me I too do the same

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Salom :)
00:17 Dec 03, 2020

This story is really good! Also hello :)

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B. W.
00:19 Dec 03, 2020

Hiya there ^^ and thanks im glad ya liked it, did you have a favorite part or anything like that?

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Salom :)
05:29 Dec 03, 2020

No specific part, but I love the format! It's very nice how you did it in diary form. I personally am only good at 3rd person, so there's no way I could pull it off like you did! :) P.S. I'm sure you've noticed, but I think someone is downvoting all your comments? I could be wrong but a bunch of your comments had 0 points. (not anymore, I did some upvoting)

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B. W.
05:46 Dec 03, 2020

The downvoting has been going on for several months, not just with me though, with a lot of people :/ I honestly think at some point ill just be downvoted completely and lose all the points, then people would have a bit of a harder time finding me and stuff. Though thank you for going and upvoting me ^^ I don't think there's just one downvoter, I know there's probably like a group of them.

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Salom :)
15:06 Dec 03, 2020

Oof that. I'll try and go on an upvote spree when I have the time, it'll help a bit

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B. W.
19:41 Dec 03, 2020

How many points do ya wanna do?

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05:54 Dec 02, 2020

What’s up peeps! I’ve written my first mystery and submitted it for this week’s contest. “Murder at Kasserine Pass” I’m looking for honest feedback. I’ll admit I’m kinda nervous. I had a few ideas but not enough space to put everything in this short story. Your opinions matter to me and I greatly appreciate you taking the time to read my work. If you have something you’d like me to read please reply back and I’ll check it out. Robert

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B. W.
06:01 Dec 02, 2020

Could you at least leave some feedback on this story Please? I'll check the story you've been talking about out a little bit later.

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Amaya .
00:24 Dec 02, 2020

Hey B this was amazing! Again, you slayed the diary format, im so impressed. it was super realistic, and the story had me hooked until the end. I agree with Laiba, maybe some more emotion when Roxanne finds out about Alexis. With the last one, you had tons of emotions that really drew me into the story, but not so much this time. Overall though, great job! I loved it!

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B. W.
00:51 Dec 02, 2020

Thanks, im glad you liked it and I could possibly try to do that stuff to make it better and all that ^^ do ya have a favorite part or anything like that?

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Amaya .
00:51 Dec 02, 2020

i didn't rly have a fav part, all of it was amazing. :)

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B. W.
00:52 Dec 02, 2020

would ya wanna see more of these?

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Amaya .
00:53 Dec 02, 2020

YES. not even a question

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B. W.
00:59 Dec 02, 2020

I can try to make some new ones then whenever I get the ideas and stuff ^^

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Amaya .
00:19 Dec 02, 2020

B have you used reedsy book editor? should I use it?

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B. W.
00:47 Dec 02, 2020

It's what i use to write my novels and stuff, I think you should use it ^^

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Amaya .
00:50 Dec 02, 2020

it is secure? Like my novella won't be deleted or anything right?

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B. W.
00:52 Dec 02, 2020

Yeah, and i think your the only person who could delete it or anything like that, it doesn't just randomly do it or something.

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Amaya .
00:53 Dec 02, 2020

okayy tysm!

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B. W.
00:59 Dec 02, 2020

Uh- i dont really remember how to change it, though I know I did it a few times

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Amaya .
00:56 Dec 02, 2020

wait B how do you change the name of ur book on reedsy editor?

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17:10 Dec 01, 2020

Great job! I love the diary format, that was really good, I like the names and the plot as well, nice story!

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B. W.
17:44 Dec 01, 2020

thanks ^^ did ya have a favorite part or anything like that?

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20:12 Dec 01, 2020

Hmm, I liked the ending.

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B. W.
20:38 Dec 01, 2020

would ya wanna see more of these types of things?

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20:40 Dec 01, 2020

Yeah! I would really like to.

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B. W.
22:00 Dec 01, 2020

I can try to do it then :)

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