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The glimmering stars in the sky winked back at me through the rain-smothered window, forming pretty constellations I could name by heart. Pitter patter. The drops of water tried to cling onto the pane of glass, falling to their impending doom. The flowers down on my porch looked like splatters of paint, like something I would’ve painted while trying to imitate Pollock’s art in class. Pitter patter. The rain was hard, thudding down on everything like a giant stomping on a village. The cars on the road zipped past, different people going on their different paths.


I think I should get on with mine.


The moon was full and bright, while I sat in my bed by the window, doused in my thoughts. The clock read 12:07 AM. I watched the cars drive by, the only thing I paid attention to, reading their license plates.


CΓ‘T 47


The car was a baby blue, and its headlights made the front look like the car was smiling, like maybe it was its birthday. The rims were also a light blue and I just wrote down the license plate number before the little car zoomed off.


I had been cooped up in my house for a while since my sister went into the hospital. Apparently it was a white van that had caused it, so I’ve been looking out for it. Revenge? I wasn’t so sure. I also started writing down the plates to form sentences, to see if I could uncover a message in them. With my notebook full of random numbers and letters, I haven’t found anything in two months. I stood guard dog for the whole time, maybe seeing one, two, five thousand cars go by. I could bet that I’ve seen all the cars out there, and their licence plates were recorded in my little book. Nothing I saw would line up, so I could only gaze at the cars and the moon for now.


                                                             🌧❀~πŸ’”~❀🌧


Another car scuttled past. It was a deep magenta Cadillac, and the face I saw when I looked at the front seemed to have a scowl as if it just smelled a dirty, week-old sock.


ONN 63


I scribbled it down with my pink gel pen. My notebook was also very special to me, as it was given by my sister. It was a minty green leather cover with white-lined paper. The front said, in gold letters, OVER THE RAINBOW AND BACK AGAIN. It was cheesy, but I didn’t mind it. All that mattered was that it was from my sister. I would’ve described her as tangerine. Bright, lively, joyful. Full of energy. Always ready to take the risks, even when they weren’t hers to take. We were the duo: bright, dark; up, down; day, night...when she went into the hospital, my life plunged into darkness. She might be still there, or maybe not: I don’t know. I haven’t checked on her since it happened, because I was too scared. Too scared to see what status she was in or how well she was. I saw it happened, so I was too much of a coward to see the result. I still am. I hope the stars will help me gather up my courage to see her, because I might be dying of loneliness at this point.


                                                             🌧❀~πŸ’”~❀🌧


A moss-green Jeep came along outside my window, blending into the dark, rain-soaked grass. It looked surprised, like her when I gave her a birthday gift, as if she thought I wasn’t nice enough to do that.Β 


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Once I finished writing, I watched the gel gather up on the page at the lifting points of the letters. They glistened, like dewdrops on rose petals. Or like fresh icing on a donut. Like clean, glossy nail polish or the highlights on the exclusive pink M&Ms. Or like the silk on my sister’s dress, the one that was her favourite. The one that had her name embodied in it. β€œSmall pink mountain flower” it meant, but it hurts to think of her name, still.


There’s always another day to try.


                                                             🌧❀~πŸ’”~❀🌧


A light grey land Rover drove by now, looking similar to the moon in the twilight sky. This one had a blank face, like how my sister would look when she saw a math question.


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She had always been against why they’re called β€œRovers”. She said it was β€œa violation of the word”, probably because she was a space fanatic. The stars, solar system and anything beyond fascinated her so much. My sister said she loved space because it gave her awareness, awareness that she was not the center of the universe. That there was always something bigger than her. If she didn’t get her way, there would be a bigger force over her. She liked to think that the Sun was the family’s mother; the rest of them were just the children, obeying her, and made their own things like the seasons, storms, eclipses. She used to say that hurricanes and tornadoes and floods were when they fought, but they always resolved in the end.Β 


At first I had thought that something had come over her for her to become mature, but my sister was my sister, after all.


                                                             🌧❀~πŸ’”~❀🌧


A light pink Volkswagen beetle crawled up the road, having a worried stare, reminding me so much of her that I couldn’t get the name out of my mind.


Linnea.


My buddy, my little mountain flower. The strong wind took you away too fast, too soon. I know you are out there, I feel it. No one had trodden on you yet. I will find you. Coming out of my trance, I looked at the last license plate number.


αΉ–TH 99


I had found something.


A message.


CΓ‘T ONN YOR OWN αΉ–TH


Continue on your own path.


I sighed happily as little creeks flowed down my face.


I found something.


And yes, I will continue on Linnea.


I’ll continue on.


For you.



                                                             🌧❀~πŸ’”~❀🌧


June 06, 2021 20:06

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Mazie Gray
22:55 Jun 15, 2021

your poems i can't anymore stop shaming me with your beautiful writing but i still wanna read it eep

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asdlkjfksad TYYYYY <33 :'<

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Mazie Gray
22:56 Jun 15, 2021

My pleasureeeeeeeeee <333333333

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Danny
11:34 Jun 13, 2021

im sorry about the other threads, i just came by reedsy real quick to see if you've posted any new stories :') and this was just aksdguowiu ~BeAuTiFuL~ ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh, i loved the descriptions and the concept behind the story, you always come up with the mossssssstttttt wonderful things, it's so creative and ahsdkglkaksuiwuety X-X But seriously, amazing job!!!! It's nice she got the closure she needed. How you've written the emotions complemented the atmosphere of the story well, and it was a nice, little twist at the end :3

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<33 tHaNk yOu <33 tysmmm <33 tyy SHANK YOU ❀❀❀

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My god. How did you write so well in 5TH GRADE??

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idkkk but tyyy <33

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ACK I’M LATE (I READ THIS YESTERDAY, JUST FORGOT TO GIVE FEEDBACK) BUT AFTER SKIMMING AGAIN EEEP I LOVE DIS!!!!!!11!! THE IDEA THE IMAGERY DA EMOTIONNNNNNNNNNNNβ€” 10/10 bootiful, love it sis, the message thru license plates was so creative and really this whole thing was poetically pretty πŸ₯Ί awesomeee <3

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ITS TOTALLY FINE <333 Gahhh thank you <3333333 tyyyyyysmmmm Aerin!

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Sapphire ~β™š
21:07 Jun 08, 2021

another thread cause you can never have too many threads :P

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;)) What’s your least favourite colour? :’)

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Sapphire ~β™š
16:52 Jun 10, 2021

ummmm like lightish darkish grayish brownish b R o W n?? XD idk wbu?

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Yeah XDD like dark muddy dull brown loll sO dEsCrIpTiVe

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Sapphire ~β™š
20:41 Jun 12, 2021

yep XD I felt like I was mixing paint in my head LOL

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yessss just some of that and this and oOh sum of that~~

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Sapphire ~β™š
16:11 Jun 07, 2021

AMETHYST *INSERT YOUR MIDDLE AND LAST NAME HERE* OMG THIS WAS AMAZING I love the concept of her staying up to read the license plates to try and find a message, its beautiful! And the dividers were super cool too. Your descriptions blew me away and I THINK THIS IS MY FAVOURITE OWIRGROIGJWRIGOJRGOIJRGWIOJRG I LOVE ITTTT! <3

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HELLO AHH THANK YOU <33 eheheh shank you <333 :DD I took divider inspo from you lol :)) wjijdkasakiihgi THANK YOU <33 <333!!

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Sapphire ~β™š
21:05 Jun 08, 2021

HELLO YES OFCCCC NPP heheheheheehehehehehehhe <33333 okay so... doritos, or lays?

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:OOOO :DDD <333 Eheheheh <333 Doritos. I think. I like ketchup lays tho XDDD wbu?

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Sapphire ~β™š
17:08 Jun 10, 2021

Oooh ketchup lays are so good. Someone once told me that they don't have them in germany or something lol XD ahhhh idk im so indecisive. But probably doritos XD

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Ikr? I’m pretty sure they’re only sold in Canada but I’ll have to check lol, yEs good choice :)

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Philia S
16:02 Jun 07, 2021

AMI!! This story was *stops, panting from excitement and admiration* WONDERFUL(Is there a more heart-felt synonym for that? Cause I don't think wonderful is being able to get through the vibe I'm trying to get through lol) Anyway, the cars moods though- It's so relatable, I mean, like, WOW, I NEVER KNEW SOMEONE ELSE DID THAT TOO- It's just like the moment I see a car, I immediately judge the passengers and the car according to the bumper, lol And I mean this story was just so.....amazing(Again, I really can't seem to describe it; and I c...

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Phila! (can I call you that? :>) aljksdfhjasdhf THANK YOU <333 YES IKR I actually wrote it while in a car driving in the rain :')) inspo struck~ lol YESSS <333 tysmmmm :)

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Philia S
11:34 Jun 08, 2021

Of course you can!! (Personally, I love that name out of all!) :DD Yeah, inspiration always springs out of nowhere, I mean yesterday I was doing some work and suddenly, EUREKA!!!(I might post that story in this contest; it's kinda related, but let's see what procrastination says:p) :)

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:DDDD Ooh yes! I would love to read it :DDD :’)

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Philia S
06:45 Jun 10, 2021

Oops, well I kinda dropped it since the plot was getting nowhere but I don't mind sharing the idea with you....if you'd like to know :DD

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wow, this was a cool story! I liked how I'm not the only one who sees car fronts and backs like faces! The little few sentences you added after each car helped to visualize what it looked like and how it made her feel. Lots of emotions were running about in this one, super cool job!

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thank you Tiff <333 lol yes that's the literal only thing I see XD :DDD tysm!!!

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Girl- Bruh- Mah sis- How you write that pretty? Noooo honestly!! Like the title, so aesthetically beautiful, and gosh-my little mountain flower? So frikkimg poetic Ame! I really think you also hold submit your pieces someplace else, your bound to win some prize!! I loved it (as alwayssss) A typo. It was a deep magenta Cadillac, and the face I saw when I looked at the front seemed to have a scowl as if it just smelled a dirty week-old sock. I think you meant a dirty, week-old sock.

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aksjdhfajksdh THANK YOU <33 I try lol :> oml tyy <33 do you know any places? tyyy I've fixed it :DD thanks!! <33

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GDVSSBBSVDHDHSJS WELCOMEEEE <333 not really, but you can Google tho :DDD <333

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Ohkay shanksss <333 Hru?

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Oh :’( -> ☘️☘️☘️ Good, went to the dentist for the 53728929262th time this year XDD

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hello :)) This is another random story idea~ let me know if you like this vibe :)) title suggestions? Hmm, just realized that this story fits well with my pfp! very interesting lol Hope you like it!! <33 ~ Amethyst

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Hey, Ames! Here I am, FINALLY reading this. And I'm so glad I did. The way that she just obsessed (is that the right word?) over trying to find a message, and getting one, was amazing to me. I loved that you had her finally find a message. And this line: "I sighed happily as little creeks flowed down my face." ...there's something about it that I find so beautiful. Maybe it's because that this sentence kind of showed that she was ready to let go and live. I just sounded so weird. Let me go back to my normal personality. ASRHKBUSERILGUSERHG-...

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hello! :) thank you so much!! lol ajsdhfjashdjf TYYYY~~ eee tysm <33 :DD

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you're welcome so much! :DD <33

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<33 :DDD oml tysm for making me friend of the month gahhh you're the best <33 🍌

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<3 :D no problem! i have to change it now, though, bc it's a new month. :/ you're still one of my best friends tho <3333 ooh shanks!

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15:33 Jun 22, 2021

Amethyst! It's been a while. To say I've missed your writing would be an understatement. I loved the poetic descriptions of this story. I can feel all of the MC's emotions; you wrote them in such a realistic way. The ending was just the write (bad pun, sorry) thing the character needed as well. (I also see car headlights as faces and try to make words with the letters on the license plates.) This has become one of my favorite stories of yours. Amazing job!

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Hello!! Thank you! lol XD :DD thank you!!!

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23:50 Jun 22, 2021

You're welcome!

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Iris Vader
18:28 Jun 21, 2021

Wow, this was absolutely incredible! The emotions backing up your writing make such a beautiful effect on your words, and the descriptions were breathtaking, producing such vivid imagery! Your title is what drew me in though, do you mind explaining why you chose it? I think because of you this comment now sounds like a poet is typing it. Anyways, great story!

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Thank you!! Thanks :) I chose it because it was raining and she was watching cars, creating the 'Driving' and 'Rain' part. I added pink into the mix because it symbolized her sister, so therefore -> 'Driving In The Pink Rain' :) :D Thank you again!!

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Iris Vader
15:24 Jun 22, 2021

Ooh nice visualisation! Your welcome!

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15:00 Jun 17, 2021

I'm emotionally touched by this. The liscence plates having the messages, the rain... it felt like a good dream, or a sad one. I'm impressed. Keep up the good work! #AmeandEm

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Thank you Em!! <33 :DD

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20:53 Jun 18, 2021

:D

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16:00 Jun 07, 2021

Wooooooooooooooooooooooow Ok but actually the license plate thing was such a smart idea- Holy hell the descriptions and similes just get better and better I love the ending. So sweet, so sad. I feel like I went on an entire freaking journey in such a short amount of time tho. I love how you wrote this one, gg!

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thank you Sarah <333 TYYY <3 :D I'm glad that vibe came through :)) tysm!!

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