Note: This is part two of a duology series. Please read the story “Touched by an Angel” before you read this story in order to understand what is going on. This takes place one day after the events in the story “Touched by an Angel”. This is told in Judas Lee Cameleo’s perspective.
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Day 1
Sweat poured off my body. More than I ever thought possible. I wiped some of it off my face, uselessly. Why did it have to be so hot here? I clenched my hands on the stool I was sitting on. It seemed to be the only thing keeping me tied to the living.
I still couldn’t believe I was here. In the place I most feared. My chest tightened just at that thought. I’ve been here for less than a day, and I already wanted to leave.
The servants of Satan gave me food. They let me rest. They haven’t killed me or hurt me yet. They keep me in this building. This suffocating room that’s no bigger than a bathroom. Probably so I don’t burn to a crisp.
But all of these miniscule attempts of ‘kindness’ were all a coy. I knew it from the bottom of my heart. They had no good intentions keeping me here.
I had to get out.
I stared out the window. No doubt the most interesting part of this room. Outside, I could see the constant fires raging. Mercilessly licking up every single person it could find. Screams of pain were heard in the distance.
As much as I knew why they were here, I felt sorry for all of them. They were just not lucky enough to have believed in Jesus to their last breath. That’s why they were here. I could have prevented at least one soul from joining this place. If I had just. . .
I heard the door to my room creak.
“Judas.” A voice said behind me, and I could almost hear the smile on his face. It was male, deep, and rich. It sounded almost. . . familiar.
I turned, and a few feet away from me, stood a man, maybe seven feet tall. With his raven-black hair, fancy black suit, and smooth smile, he could easily pass as a rich businessman who just made an excellent deal.
But his pure black skin and flaming eyes ruined the look.
It was that man from my vision. The man that had made David into what he was. Into a hunter of the per quod angelus tetigit. Humans that had been touched by an angel.
I was supposedly one of them.
“Are you comfortable?” The man asked me, like this was a normal conversation.
‘Gee,’ I thought. ‘I wonder. Am I comfortable? Am I comfortable in a fiery wasteland that just happens to be my fear? A place where I was sure I would never set a foot in. You tell me whether I’m comfortable or not.’
Even though my mind was whirling, I said nothing.
“Ah,” the man said, nodding. “You’re going to play the silent game.”
As quick as a viper, he pinned me against the wall. Up close, his flaming eyes seemed to flicker, like there was an actual fire in them.
“I don’t care what plans you have of escaping.” The man hissed. “No matter what they are, they’ll be futile. I, Dracul, the archangel of Lucifer, will turn you over to our side. You will become a servant of the devil. And there’s nothing you can do to stop me.”
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Day 31
“What are they even doing to me? How are they turning me over to their side? I feel nothing changing. It’s just the same old same old, every single day.” I said aloud, groaning.
I writhed on the brick floor, my neck and back felt stiff from sleeping on the hard floor for over a month. It had become my new bed.
I had woken up to the screams of dead, tortured souls. Every single day, new people were tossed down here. That thought made me hollow. As much as I didn’t like it, it had become my new alarm clock.
A few minutes later, a hooded man walked in my room, holding a tray. He set it down and left without a word. On the tray was a glass of hot water and two pieces of burnt bread on a plate.
I drank down the water, not caring how it scorched my tongue. A month ago, for quite some time, drinking this water had me curled up on the floor, in pain, wishing for something cold to hit my tongue. But now, I fought against the pain, swallowing it down. I then moved on to eat the bread.
The burnt bread was always terrible to eat. It was edible, but that was the most flattering thing I could say about it. It was almost completely black. The tiniest bit of flavor, ironically, came from the burnt parts.
Nonetheless, I choked down the pieces, trying to ignore how bitter and bland it was.
I didn’t know how I was still alive from surviving off of that. But it has become my new breakfast. And lunch. And dinner.
I sat back down on my stool, and watched the fires spreading. I silently thanked God that this building was made of fireproof bricks. The fire was so destructive, yet so mesmerizing. It felt almost alive. The fires outside swallow up anything and everything in its path. Day in and day out. It had become my only entertainment.
I don’t know how long I stared at the fires outside. Time was impossible to keep track of. There was no sun or moon. Just the hellish landscape stretching on as far as I could see.
But eventually, I stood and paced around the tiny room, trying to keep myself from panicking.
The last month, I had been numb and distant. Going about my daily routine. Sleeping. Eating. Watching. Praying. Bathing. I had hoped this was all a crazy dream for so long.
But glancing around the room, looking at the people burning from the fires, and remembering the faces of Dracul and David. . .
Everything came crashing down. Emotions. So many emotions.
A month ago, I had been quarantined at home, browsing on social media. A month ago, I had been in an online college. A month ago, my life had been normal.
But now. . .
I was in hell. The actual hell.
Tears trickled down my cheeks, mixing with the sweat. I knelt on the floor, and prayed. Prayed for help. Prayed for survival. Prayed for guidance.
How much more of this could I handle?
Day 125
I closed my eyes as the hot water trickled down my body. If I closed my eyes, I could almost imagine I was back home, taking a shower after a long day.
But the screams of the souls brought me back to the harsh reality.
I sighed, relaxed. For once, the water wasn’t all that hot. Then I noticed that my hands and body were slowly turning red from the hot water. I started toweling off with my hoodie, but Dracul barged in my room.
“Gah!” I yelled, covering up as quick as I could. “Haven’t you ever heard of privacy? Or knocking on the door?”
My eyes widened as I realized that was the first words I had ever spoken to Dracul.
“You’re a prisoner here,” Dracul sneered. “You don’t get privacy.”
I did my best to keep all emotion off my face.
“I came here,” Dracul continued, “because you’ve been here for months now. And nothing’s changed. All of the per quod angelus tetigit that came here changed. They became more corrupt. More. . . disconnected to God. But you” --he glared at me-- “have barely changed at all. You’re still as faithful as ever.”
“But in my vision, you said that people touched by an angel had unbreakable faith.” I said quietly, frowning.
Dracul laughed dryly. “A lot can change in eight years, girl. The per quod angelus tetigit’s faith is still strong, but not invincible. It takes three months here, at most, for them to crack. My point is, you’re not cooperating. I promised you that you will be working on our side soon. And I don’t. Break. My. Promises.”
He walked out of my room and slammed the door.
Later that day, as I prayed, I wondered what was in store for me in the future.
Day 243
God still hasn’t helped. Not even a word of his guidance. Even that voice in my head had gone silent.
Seven months. It’s been seven months since I got stuck in this room. That thought made me angry.
That was all I thought about today.
As I chewed off a hunk of burnt bread, my rage burned. As I watched the endless fire burning through people, my rage burned. As I showered under the hot water, my rage still burned.
Was I really going to be stuck in here forever?
Cold, hard determination pressed against my bones. I couldn’t just fall into a pit of hopelessness. Because once you fall in, there’s no coming out.
I was hanging by my fingertips, right over that pit. One small slip-up, and I would fall in.
I couldn’t have that.
But still. Why, God? Why haven’t you saved me from this hellish place?
Day 288
Please.
Day 291
Jesus.
Day 294
Save.
Day 297
Me.
Day 300
I’ve abandoned hope. I don’t have it inside of me anymore. It’s vanished, like what happens to your smile when you receive your test scores.
I could see why Dracul’s plan for the people touched by an angel was so effective on them. They started losing things.
Happiness. Well-being. Hope.
And eventually, faith. Hell just sucks it out of you. Slowly, but surely.
Day 303
But that doesn’t mean I have no faith left. God has a plan. Jesus has a plan. I’ll get through this. I had to.
Day 365
I stared out the window at the fire. It eagerly devoured souls as I watched. In the year I’ve spent here, I must’ve watched the fires outside hundreds of times. Maybe even thousands. Every single time, there was something different. The way it flickered. The color. How fast it was. How destructive it seemed.
Yet one thing stayed the same. I felt sorry for them.
Whoosh!
Behind me, the door swung open. If you could open doors aggressively, that’s exactly what Dracul did. He marched in, pure anger lighting up his face.
“One year.” He growled, slamming the door behind him. “ONE YEAR! One year since you got here. But you still have your faith. Unbelievable.”
He pinned me against the wall, in the exact same way he had a year ago.
“What’s your secret?” Dracul asked, not much louder than a whisper. “What is it?”
I struggled against his hold, but it was useless. After the tiny amounts of food and not much space to exercise, I was weak. Not to mention that I stood at a painfully short four foot eleven inches.
“I have no secret,” I managed to say. “Just. . . Love. Faith. Hope. I will give my life for Jesus anyday.”
Dracul smiled. “In that case, we have no use for you now, child.”
His hands shot out and latched around my throat. He began to squeeze.
I coughed, my face surely turning red. My breathing got weaker and weaker. I tried to escape his grasp, but it was much too strong. I couldn’t do anything as Dracul sucked the life out of me. I instantly knew this was how I was going to die. After a year of being tested by a rebel angel of Satan, I would be put to rest. Somehow, that thought didn’t terrify me.
Faces of people flashed through my mind. My loving parents, who cared for me in every way they could. My Japanese and white mother. Elizabeth Lee. Her light-brown eyes and dark brown hair. My Puerto Rican father. James Cameleo. His dark brown eyes and curly black hair. Their kind souls had always looked out for me. I missed them so much. It has been over a year and a half since I saw them. And now, I was certain that I would never see them again.
The kids that used to bully me. Jackson. Paul. Deborah. Mia. Calling me names. Cyberbullying. Spreading rumors about me. Making fun of my religion and heritage. Their bullying was relentless. They never got caught. I spread the Gospel to them, which just made them angrier. Made them strike back harder.
My pastor, who was almost as kind as my parents. Rachel Sullivan. Who taught me the ways of God, and taught me the Gospel. I owed her so much. Where would my life be without her? I missed her so much. She passed away only two years ago. But I was sure that I would see her soon.
Other faces shot by, going so fast I could barely catch a glimpse of them. My best friends, who were all dead because of the Coronavirus. The only guy I kissed. The pet lizard I used to have in elementary school. My history teacher in middle school. The homeless guy I would always give money to whenever I saw him.
At last, the montage of faces slowed, stopping on the face of David Cambron.
Ugh.
No matter how gorgeous he was, this guy had literally thrown me into hell. Because of him, I had to spend a year here, all alone except for the company of evil rebel angels. Once David had found me, he had teleported to hell, dropped me off, and casually strolled back to earth to find more per quod angelus tetigit. Like he was dropping off his kids to school, not dropping off Christians to hell.
One last time, all of the Christian faces I knew flashed through my mind.
‘I will see you again soon. In heaven.’
That was my last thought before I dropped to the ground, dead.
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My first completed series!!! Yay!!! 🥳 Shoutout to Jay Dmer! She gave me the wonderful idea of the character Judas Lee Camaleo. Here’s the link to her profile! Give her some support! https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/author/jay-dmer/ Please note that not all of the Bible-related content in here is from the Bible. The way I wrote hell is mostly made up (except for the part about the fire). It is my interpretation of it. Dracul is not a real angel in the Bible. Since I cannot put the actual Satan in my story, I chose Satan’s arch...
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You did an amazing job. 😈
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rushed? rUsHeD? RUSHED? THiS WAs NOT RUSHED AT ALL, IT'S WELL-PACED, AS WELL AS A PACE COULD EVER BE PACED >:D AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH LFAJLAFSKFJSDLKJFLSDKJFKSDLKFJSLDFK CONGRATS ON FINISHING YOUR FIRST (completed lol) SERIES!!!!! hehehe the cliffhanger was worth the sUsPenSe~ GAH I LOVE IT!!!! <333 LIKE LKSJLDKSJLDKJ SERIOUSLY, even the ending of the series was cliffhanger-esque :') The descriptions and imagery you used was *poifect*, lol the burnt bread, the burnt place, tears, it's...a masterpiece. Alsooooooooooo, I lov...
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Thank youuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu so muchhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!! (Also, this is probably the longest piece of feedback I've gotten lol XD)
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No problemmmmo :)))) ehehehe yasssssssssssssssssssssssssssssss xD
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XDDDDD How was your day?
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XDD ehhh, good? lol how was yours? :))
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I mean, I just started my day, so I have no idea XD
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OOF GREAT IMAGERY! I loveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeed this! It just expresses that that is exactly why everybody needs Jesus! Amen Sister! Will there be a continuation in Heaven? Will she see anybody again? YES SHE SHOULD! Really awesome, this and the other one too. WOW! Outstanding job!
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😁😁😁 Honestly, this series is a duology. I don't plan on writing a continuation, and I prob won't. Why? Because heaven would be so hard to write about. I mean, hell was hard enough. But heaven? Nah. And I'm assuming that in heaven, you can't sin, and no way could I write an entire story with no sin XD Thank youuuuuu! :DDDD
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i think it's possible XD The Bible gives you a lot to work with in Revelation XDDDDDD I understand you tho. It would be interesting. YOUR WELCOME!!!!!!!!!
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Truuuuuuu :DDDD
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:PPPPPPPP How's your day going?
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I'm doing good! I just went outside for the first time in weeks, so I feel tired, yet energized. Does that make any sense? What abt you?
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Description: Of course it was so pulling and moving. Again, awesome job. Loved it. The days counting down was a great idea. I really liked-->Day 288 Please. Day 291 Jesus. Day 294 Save. Day 297 Me. Critics: "My Peurto-Rican father. James Cameleo." ---> "...Puerto Rican..." Ik this is a fantasy, so I get it but Idk if you know, but when people die (when they don't have God in their life) then in their grave they suffer and get taunted by the devil. They don't get automatically sent to hell neither do those who die with God automatic...
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Thank you! Ok, I'll change that. Yes, I know. This is just my interpretation, and I didn't want to make Judas die on a sour and sad note, which is why I wrote the part about heaven. Ok! I will :) Yes, she did 😅
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Np No, I think it's fine. She was going to die eventually in story life, but the way she died was nice (I don't mean it in that manner).
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Ok, good to know :)
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HOLY SMUCKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKK AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH *five days later* holy smuckkk I can't belive Amazing job on a completed series!! so proudddddddddddddd I think this was amazinggggggg so amazingggg ahhh i loved the continuation didn't feel rushed at all ahhh just kill me nowwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww <3
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Ahahahahaha tysm!!!!! <3
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Ik right, she did amazinggg. I love how our collab went. Again, amazinggg job Annabelle<3 Nainika and I collabed on a story I did called "Where the Waters Take You". Check it out if you haven't already.
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Tysm! :))) I'll give feedback on it soon! :)
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:) Thankss
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Hey Annabelle! Well done on Part 2! And congrats for a completed series! I'm super proud of you! The ending was super dramatic, oOoH!! I really liked it! :D Also, I've been asking heapsssss of people, but would you like to be in my Reedsy Cast series? 😈
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Thank you so much!!! :DDD Sure! I would love to be in your Reedsy Cast! :)))
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Awesome, thank you!
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Do I take your quiz in the bio?
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Yep, it's the first form under my Reedsy Cast comment
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Ok. I did it :)
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wowwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww this was strangely....uplifting if that makes sense? Judas's strong faith in God just felt very hopeful...idk:) anyways, this is such a cool seriesssssssssss that ending tho *chefs kiss* perfectionnnnnnnnnnnnn It's such a satisfying ending after seeing what Judas went through you did an amazing job showing Judas's struggle from Day 288-Day 300 cant think of any critiques and didnt see any errors, so good on you for that!! amazing(I've said that lik...
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That makes sense. I wrote it that way with her faith unbreakable (instead of her temporarily losing her faith like my original plan) because I didn't want to torture everyone with two sad stories in a row XDDD Thank youuuuu so muchhhhh!!!! :DDDD
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oh phewXDDD Glad you didntXD <33333333
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XDDDD :))))
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:O NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO WHY DID SHE HAVE TO DIEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO WHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY *dEeP bReAtH* sO oml I love this this is so good how do you write this good oml XD The memories flashing before my eyes thing was described so well, and the hunger and pain was too. You showed the way that she refused to give up, BUT THEN SHE DIED A...
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Honestly, I didn't know how else to end it lol. So I went for the "killing the main character because why not" strategy XDDD Thank youuu so much!!! :DDD
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lol yeah XD Np!! :]
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SHE DIED!!!!! Okay, I guess I should have seen that coming. Will there be a heaven part three? She's been so good, she deserves it.
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No. There won't be a part 3. I would like the people on Reedsy to imagine Judas's time in heaven, instead of me just writing it out. (It's also because I have a whole bunch of other stories that need continuations and I won't have time for a part 3 lol)
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Oh. Well,maybe in the future you could do something where she shows up as a saint or guardian angel? (Looks up can people become guardian angels) Nevermind. Amazing story! Yeah, Heaven would be hard to describe. Could you check out my own story on the same prompt?
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Lol yeah. Sure! :)
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Whew! This was 🥺🥺🥺 I'm glad that Judas still held on even despite the torture. You have a great descriptive skill. Congrats on your completed series. God bless you. ❤️
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Thank you so much! :)
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Sad and happy ending all at one?! Beautiful. Lovely ending to the duology!
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Thank you! :)
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YaY tHeReS mOrE
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I just saw this comment and it says April 1st- its only 7:02 pm on March 31st here- What an ending!!!!
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Yeah, the timezones of Reedsy and your timezone might be different. Thank you!
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😈😈😈 Hey Sky! This was great part 2!!! It was not rushed at all:))) Keep it up girl! #GOD
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Oh my gosh! I loved this series so much! It was amazing.
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Thank you :)
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