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Drama Romance Fantasy

“Ugh, I hate this place!” Darcy says and falls on the couch. 


We are in a room in an old castle. This castle is a really big one with huge walls surrounding its garden but it’s abandoned. The Royal family left it, just after Darcy was born, and moved to the new castle in the middle of the country. Now it is the home to spiders and rats. Some people come to clean it but they just do it from outside so its condition inside is awful. But unlike Darcy, I love this place.

Darcy is the Royal princess who is sent here to spend the weekend…..with me?


“This place isn’t that bad,” I reply.

“That bad?” Darcy stops as I give her a look. “Ok, so, what are we even doing here in the first place?”

“I don’t know,” I shrug. “But now we are here, so I’m going to explore this place.”

Darcy rolls her eyes. “Do whatever you want, I’m not gonna come with you.”

I walk out of the room into the hallway. 

The walls of the hall are painted in a old, medieval styled paintings. I have to remove some webs to have a clear look at the paintings. 

They are so beautiful. That’s why I love this place because it shows our past, it shows what we are supposed to be, it shows the things we had once but will never have again.


Every tiny detail is mentioned very clearly; how our planet used to be a land of magic long, long ago. But then space started getting polluted and that pollution came to our planet and started destroying the magical elements. After some centuries, people from a planet named Arth came and fully destroyed our planet, destroying its magic.

People with magic are exiled. People who even talk about magic are exiled. Everybody hates the word magic.


It destroyed one more thing. That thing is shown in the paintings but people don’t notice it and even if they notice it, they don't understand it.

That thing is love.

Love of a mother towards her child, Love of a person towards its planet and family, Love of a King towards its citizens. Love of a spouse towards another, Love of a lover towards the other. They destroyed it all. People forgot what love meant. 

But I think I know what it means. 

“What is this?” Darcy speaks, making me jump. 

“When did you come here?” I ask.

“I was standing here all the time,” she says, “Now tell me what is this?”

She is pointing towards a painting of the Magical Crystal. The magical crystal that gave power to all the magical people. The same magical crystal that the Arthlings destroyed to destroy the magical people.

“It’s our Magical Crystal,” I say.

“Our?”

“Our ancestors.”

“Cas, these are all lies, there was nothing like this, there was no magic.”

“No, it is the truth, lies are what you’re telling me now.” 

Yes, lies are what they are telling us. They are all lies. This is another reason why I love this place and Darcy hates it. But Darcy hating this place doesn't mean that I hate her. I still love her and will always do.


We then explore other rooms in the castle, most of them are covered in grime and dust, their walls covered in paintings. 

After exploring many rooms, I enter a room. Darcy doesn't make any noise as she follows me into the room. It is just a simple room with plain walls but it’s different. It doesn't have any paintings like the rest of the room here. The huge Royal bed, couch, and all other stuff are covered. I move around the room. The air is filled with dust as I remove the covers. Darcy coughs a little and I’m by her side the very next second. 

“What happened?” I ask.

“N-” *Darcy coughs* “Nothing”

“Do you need water?”

“No,” *cough* 

I gesture her to sit down on the couch and run out of the room. I run down the stairs to the room in which we were sitting earlier and grab the backpack. I run back to the room as fast as I can to find Darcy coughing violently. I take the water bottle from the backpack and hand it to Darcy. After drinking some water, her coughing stops. I sit next to Darcy and take her hand in mine. 

She looks at the ceiling and lets her thoughts race in silence. She looks even more beautiful as she sits there peacefully. Her long light brown hairs tied back in a ponytail. Her small perfect lips closed in a tight line. Her ocean-blue eyes staring at some point in the distance. I stare at her for a long time, because I don’t want to look at anything else.


She suddenly looks up at me, “You really like me so much, right?”

I quickly look away, I feel embarrassed. 

“Yeah….um...I mean I would have done the same thing for anyone in your place.”

“But you like me,” Darcy says.

I stay quiet.

“You know, I also believe that what the paintings show is true. I said that they are lies because that’s what everybody wants us to say, they don’t want us to know that this is the truth.”

“I know, but we can change it, we can tell the people what is true and what is not.”

“Yeah, we can.” 

Again there is an awkward silence.

“You know why I hate this place?”

“Umm...no?”

“Because this place reminds me of my...of my mother.” 

Yeah, her mother. She was killed soon after Darcy’s birth, that’s what I think, by the Arthlings because she was a magical person. I don’t know the whole story but I think it was something related to Darcy being born with magical powers. I have been with Darcy for about 16 years and I don’t think that she has any magic, I would have loved it if she had magic but she doesn't have.

“Your mother was a nice lady,”

“Maybe...my father never talks about her, he hates her.”

“No, you’re wrong, he loved her and he still loves her, but he is hiding it because people don’t want him to love her.”

“Then we need to change that too.” I say with a little laugh.

“You know what?”

“Huh?”

“Your smile is the best smile I have ever seen.” Darcy says.

“You know what?”

“What?”

“That smile exists only because of you.” I reply.


September 19, 2020 03:40

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22:02 Sep 21, 2020

This was great for your first time using 1st person. I'll be waiting to read the sequel/prequel. Keep writing! -Mj

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02:12 Sep 22, 2020

Thanks!!!

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B. W.
23:35 Sep 20, 2020

You seen this weeks prompts? i'm not sure if i already asked you so sorry if i have. These prompts aren't really good to me because they could have done more with 'face your fears' and nothing is coming to me, could you maybe help me think of some things for it?

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Charles Stucker
22:43 Sep 20, 2020

"The walls of the hall are painted in a old, medieval styled paintings." Maybe make it clearer "The walls of the hall have several old, medieval-styled paintings." If the walls are themselves painted it is "frescos." Then it would be, "The walls of the hall are adorned with frescos showing scenes from medieval life." I'm not sure which you wanted, the hall full of oil painting portraits, or the one where the plaster is part of the artwork. The latter part of the scene makes it clear you probably did mean frescoes- they last far better than ...

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02:10 Sep 21, 2020

Thank you so much for the feedback!!! I can't edit it now but I'll take care from next time.

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18:18 Sep 20, 2020

Hey, Deepshikha would be kind to watch the first video it's on Harry potter. https://youtu.be/KxfnREWgN14 Sorry for asking your time, I would ready your story

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18:19 Sep 20, 2020

Umm...Ok but what exactly is this?

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18:22 Sep 20, 2020

Copy only the link it would show YouTube option

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18:31 Sep 20, 2020

Yeah, I know. I watched it, it was really nice.

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17:01 Sep 21, 2020

Thanks! a lot

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17:05 Sep 21, 2020

You're welcome!!

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B. W.
19:25 Sep 19, 2020

Okay i'm here ^^ and did you mean my first name or like my actual FULL name like ya think you know my first,middle and last name? and for this story i really enjoyed it ^^ i'm not sure if anything is really wrong with it or anything but if you think there is then wait for others to comment and help ya with it, i'm not really that good at advice. I think you also did really great doing this story in first person as well. so ya know what? this gets a 10/10 :)

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19:28 Sep 19, 2020

I know your first name. Thanks for reading:)))

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B. W.
19:29 Sep 19, 2020

wait how though? and no problem ^^ eh tbh with my first name i've always never liked it

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ᗰooᑎ ♫ ♪
19:33 Sep 19, 2020

Idk...I think it was in one of your conversations with Aerin. Your name is nice, if it is what I think.

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B. W.
19:35 Sep 19, 2020

oh right, i kinda forgot about that. Well i'm glad you like the name at least, i wish i could change it though. If you ever need help with more stories though, then i'd be glad to help :)

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19:37 Sep 19, 2020

Thanks!! I'm currently working on that alien and human romance story that we discussed yesterday.

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17:37 Sep 19, 2020

THIS IS NOT HORRIBLE!!! I actually reallllllllyyy liked it!! I mean I could tell this is your first time writing it but still! It was amazing! I like how you immediately added in romance, like at the beginning I woulda never thought there would be romance. I also liked that the story wasn't ALL about romance! It actually some other lessons as well. I really liked Darcy's character, she is just straight to the point! And Cas? is that his name, I liked how he thinks and hopes. I would also love a backstory, and a time where Darcy also feels...

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17:48 Sep 19, 2020

THANK YOU SO MUCH!!!! I'm so happy that you liked it!!! I never thought you would like it!!!! Oh, I'm soooooooooooooo∞ happy!!!!! Yeah, his name is Cas. I see, I only mentioned his name once. And thanks for feedback, it is already approved so I can't edit it but I'll take care from next time. Thanks again:))) (P.S. Read authors note, if you haven't)

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17:58 Sep 19, 2020

Aww thanks for dedicating thiss too me🤗 And of course it was really goood! Yupp! Also sorry for not responding last night/last morning I was super busy and just didn't feel like entering Reedsy..I'll go respond noww!

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17:59 Sep 19, 2020

Of course!!! I wanted to give some credit to you!! Thanks!!! And it's ok. 😊

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19:37 Oct 03, 2020

Hey!! How are you!

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03:41 Oct 05, 2020

Hmmm? Did you not see my comment🤔Or did you...??

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13:28 Oct 05, 2020

How will I see the comment if you reply it to yourselves?? Lol I would have seen that comment 'cause I go through the comments of my stories when I'm bored but these days I wasn't on Reedsy much (sorry) so I just didn't see it...

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ᗰooᑎ ♫ ♪
13:30 Oct 05, 2020

I'm fine and kinda busy, wbu?

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ᗰooᑎ ♫ ♪
13:44 Oct 05, 2020

And yeah, you should join Allpoetry, it's super fun. And you might not know but I know that you're a great poet...I've felt it after reading your stories and talking to you...

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Keerththan 😀
02:10 Oct 08, 2020

Hi!

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B. W.
16:34 Oct 07, 2020

Nononono. Bye?? Are you leaving Reedsy?? Everyone's just leaving it now..or it at least feels like everyone is. A lot of people i know i guess. Why are you leaving?? Are you maybe just leaving for a little bit, possibly??

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Deepshika I’m so sad you’re going 😭😭😭 Why must you leeeeave...BOTH sites?! 😭😭😭😭😭😭😫😫😫😫 Are your parents making you or something? Whyyyyy? Or are you just going? Double whyyyyy?😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭 Goodbye sis, it was so nice being friends with you😘😘😘😘😫😫😫😫😫

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Keerththan 😀
15:39 Oct 07, 2020

Please!

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Keerththan 😀
15:39 Oct 07, 2020

Come back! Let's spam Reedsy friends again! I will miss you! And sorry if I had been rude to you!

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00:36 Oct 08, 2020

YESSS COME BACK DEEPSHIKHA!!!

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18:22 Oct 03, 2020

Hey, Deepshikkha! You did a great job at 1st person! Upvote spree for upvote spree?

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ᗰooᑎ ♫ ♪
05:01 Oct 04, 2020

Thanks!! Lol, why not? But you're probably asleep by now and I'm really busy so we'll do it in some time.

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18:31 Oct 04, 2020

Thanks, I'll upvote you now, too!

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B. W.
20:38 Oct 02, 2020

i made a new story :D come check out 'a savior?' and leave some feedback ^^

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Orenda .
19:25 Oct 02, 2020

hey heyyyy i finally have a story out, check it out!!!!!!

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15:53 Oct 03, 2020

YASSS!!!! Going there noww!!!!

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Orenda .
15:57 Oct 03, 2020

thanks:)

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Ha! I love your ‘bio’. And, yup, I’ve tried following myself too 😂

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B. W.
20:53 Sep 30, 2020

Hey, i am almost done with a novel :)

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ᗰooᑎ ♫ ♪
12:00 Oct 01, 2020

Wow, that's good!!! Which one have you done??

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B. W.
14:08 Oct 01, 2020

well it's the one i'm doing for fun and won't publish but maybe i could but something like it on here

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ᗰooᑎ ♫ ♪
16:34 Oct 01, 2020

That horror game one?? You can publish it or make a series here... Btw how long is it?

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B. W.
16:38 Oct 01, 2020

yeah that one ^^ Well i'm working on chapter 18 of it at the moment and there'll be a couple more chapters after that

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17:25 Oct 01, 2020

Nice!! You should publish it as you've worked hard on it...

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B. W.
16:14 Sep 28, 2020

Hey could ya maybe help me with something? i thought of a new novel

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ᗰooᑎ ♫ ♪
16:18 Sep 28, 2020

Oh, nice!! Speak up!

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B. W.
16:20 Sep 28, 2020

Well i need help with the novel because i can't think of everything so could i tell you the plot or at least what i have so far so it would be easier to help?

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ᗰooᑎ ♫ ♪
16:21 Sep 28, 2020

Ok! I'm all ears.

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B. W.
16:24 Sep 28, 2020

Heres what i have: there's four friends, 2 boys and 2 girls. one of the girls is a 'guardian' (at first i thought of her being a guardian angel but i really wanna change it tbh) who protects the others and is friends with them while pretending to be a regular human. Though she can't reveal herself as one because a lot of bad things would probably happen and scientists would probably wanna get her

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16:52 Sep 28, 2020

Nice plot!! What do ya need help with?

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FZMCISNFJENFIEHF YOU’RE Mackenzie Moon? Adihweuhfdufruhf HENLOOO

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ᗰooᑎ ♫ ♪
18:40 Sep 27, 2020

Hmm... Mackenzie 'MOON'.

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B. W.
21:54 Sep 26, 2020

Hey i made a new story ^^ could ya check out "My older sister?" and leave some feedback?

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ᗰooᑎ ♫ ♪
04:42 Sep 27, 2020

I'll surely check it out!!

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B. W.
05:34 Sep 27, 2020

Thank's ^^ i'm excited to see what ya think

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Gip Roberts
19:30 Sep 25, 2020

I think you did great at both the 1st-person narrative and coming up with a story right at the last minute. That was a sweet ending too.

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19:33 Sep 25, 2020

Thank you so much!!!

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