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Contemporary Fiction

         “You need to go to this party, Stewie,” his brother, Mike told him.

         “I’m not going to some stupid party,” Stewie replied back as he tried to read his fantasy book. “Will you please leave me alone so I can read my book?”

         “I’m not going to leave you alone. You need to get out of this house, and have some fun.”

         “I’m getting to the intense moment in this book so I would appreciate it if you would leave my presence,” demanded Stewie.

         “You have read that book at least a dozen times. You probably know the book word by word. Get your butt off the bed and come to the party,’ his brother pleaded.

         Usually Mike just left Stewie alone to do his own thing, which ninety percent of the time was in his room reading, watching TV, and creating his own games to play by himself. It was starting to worry Mike and the rest of the family so he figured it was time to get him out before something bad happens down the road. Maybe not, but why take the chances. He just needs to get out and blossom, and see all the wonders of the world. Ignore the ones who are out just to spread their misery and concentrate on the ones of positivity.

         “You must not care about me?” Stewie asked him.

         “What the hell are you talking about?”

         “You know how I am, but yet you want to take me to a party where I’m going to find the closest corner and put myself into the fetal position. Is that what you want to put me through?”

         “That is not going to happen since you will find out you are going to have one fun night. You will experience a new world.”

         “A new world surrounded by a bunch of drunk and drugged out idiots?” asked Stewie.

         “Not all of them are that way,” said Mike. “Many stay coherent enough to get themselves home.”

         “I’m not interested in the party atmosphere.”

         “They have a swimming pool. And I believe a hot tub. You can stay in those the entire time. The one in charge of the party doesn’t want anyone intoxicated near either location.”

         “You really want me to go?”

         “YES. You need to go, and get yourself out of this room. You will have fun. Just bring your swimsuit if you don’t want to be in the house.”

         Stewie sat there contemplating, which gave Mike some hope. Mike watched as Stewie’s facial expressions changed constantly from disgusted, to a slight grin, to utter disgust, to a little wider grin. He then put his book on his lap and looked at Mike.

         “I will give this a try,” Stewie reluctantly said. “If anything happens that brings me to tears I will never, ever, never forgive you for the rest of your life.”

         Mike smiled, and smacked Stewie on the shoulder. “You are going to enjoy this. Just have faith and an open mind to the way parties work.”

         “Sure.”

         “We need to be heading out around eight o’clock so be ready to go,” said Mike and left the room.

         Stewie tried to go back to reading his book, but couldn’t concentrate on what he was reading as his mind was going through a swirl of emotions. He put the book back on his nightstand, laid back, and closed his eyes.

         “What am I getting myself into?” he thought. “I know I’m going to regret this.”

         Time slowly ticked by as Stewie looked at the clock constantly. He put on some music, but that didn’t help matters so he turned on the TV. That helped a little, but the party was full on inside his head.

         Dinner soon came, and Stewie ate as he thought of the party as Mike sat there humming away.

         “You are loving this,” he thought as he looked over at Mike with repulsion. “You love to torture me. I should back out, but then I will have to hear about it for months upon months.”

         Dinner came to an end, and Stewie went to get himself ready. He tidied himself up, and used his cologne which was hardly used since he never went anywhere.

         “It’s time to go brother!” Mike called out as he entered his room. “Let’s go and party.”

         “Sure.”

Stewie followed Mike as they left the room and to the front door.

         “You two behave yourselves,” their mother said as she lay on the couch reading your favorite magazine. “I know you will Stewie.”

         “I will too, mom,” said Mike.

         “Sure.”

         Soon they were on the road, and heading to the other side of town where his buddy lived. Stewie found his buddies parents were out of town, and was okay with their son throwing a party as long as there was no damage.

         “Is his folk’s naïve?” Stewie asked Mike. “There is a good chance of damage.”

         My buddy, Nick, knows he will be paying for it if there is,” replied Mike.

         “Doesn’t sound like the party will be much fun for him,” said Stewie. “Watching all these clowns stumbling around, knocking shit down.”

         “He has done this before. Everything is fine. Don’t worry about him. Just relax and have a fun time.”

         “Sure.”

         They eventually came to the house that Stewie thought was more like a mansion. There were vehicles of all types parked all over the place.

         “Great,” said Stewie. “A ton of people.”

         “The better for you. Better chance you will find someone like you. Maybe even a girl,” chided Mike.

         “Give me a break,” said Stewie. On the super shy side he wouldn’t even know what to say to her. He would wind up sounding like a dork.

         Mike parked the car, and headed toward the front door. Stewie was starting to feel sick, and about to tell Mike he was going back to the car to sit for an awhile. Probably the entire time they were there, but decided to hang in there.  Some little feeling inside him told him he will be okay and tonight was going to be a life changer. The question is if it was his inner angel or inner devil. 

         “I guess I will find out.”

         They went inside, and immediately bombarded with countless souls, chatting away, yelling, drinking, smoking, and who knows what on some that seemed to already be under the influence.

         Most of them knew Mike as they shook his hand, hugged, punched him, kissed him, or did some kind of slap down show. Mike told them about Stewie, which they welcomed him the same way as Stewie cringed whenever someone touched him.

         “Can you take me to the swimming pool?” said Stewie. “It’s still warm out so want to take a swim before it gets too cold.”

         “I can take you there, but I want you to meet everyone so they can see I have a brother, and that he is actually out of the house.”

         “I suppose you have told them that I stay in my room all the time?”

         “Not all of them,” said Mike as his face got red.

         “Thanks a lot.”

         “A few more people then you can check out the pool.”

         Stewie tried to hurry Mike through the crowd as quick as possible so he could get to the swimming pool. Eventually, the time came, and Stewie was taken to the backyard where he saw the large pool, and a good sized hot tub right next to it. For the first time since he got here a grin came to Stewie’s face.

         “Where do I change?” he asked Mike.

         “There is a changing room there to your right. Enjoy yourself, and hopefully you will meet someone else back here. I’m staying inside where the party is happening.”

         “Sure.”

         Stewie walked over to the changing room, which was about the size of a small two bedroom house.

         “This family has the money,” thought Stewie as he went to the door.

         Before he opened the door he heard a girl cry out behind him. He turned around and saw a guy with dark, slicked back hair grabbing a girl that was trying to go into the pool.

         “You are staying with me, Tina,” the guy growled at her. “I’m not here for you to be in the pool the entire time.”

         “Let me go! I just want to cool down.”

         “Hell you are!”

         Stewie just stared for a bit not knowing what to do, and immediately regretting coming to this party. But, his thoughts changed drastically when he saw the guy suddenly smack her in the face, and she fell into the pool. The timid attitude suddenly changed to one of the heroes from the many books he had read. He went directly the guy, who turned to him, and was about to say something, but never got a chance as a fist crashed into his nose, and off he went into the water.

         Pure silence.

         Stewie looked around and saw that everyone had stopped what they were doing and staring at him. He looked into the pool and saw the girl the jerk smacked looking up at him. The jerk floated up onto his back, knocked out cold.

         “Oh shit,” he muttered. “I can’t believe I did that.”

         He figured he would surely be kicked out of the place.

         “You are the man!” a guy called out.

         “I can’t believe you did that!” another one called out.

         Next moment, he was surrounded by people congratulating him, clapping him on the back and shoulders.

         A very wide grin came to Stewie’s face.

         “I can’t believe you did that,” said Mike, suddenly beside him. “I just caught a glimpse of you taking out that jerk.”

         “I can’t believe it myself,” said Stewie.

         Stewie was expecting to be kicked out, but quickly found out that the guy he punched was causing problems from the start, and was about to get kicked out. A couple of big guys grabbed the jerk and hauled him off to dump him in the front yard.

         Stewie suddenly was the talk of the show as everyone came up to him, chatting away. He was surprised they didn’t put a crown on his head, have him sit in a chair, and lift him up into the air.

         “This is the most attention ever,” he thought. “And it feels good.”

         He finally came back to the pool, quickly changed, and jumped in. It didn’t take long for him to have a visitor.

         “Thanks for taking out that jerk,” said Tina, coming close to him.

         “Sorry your boyfriend was a jerk to you.”

         “He’s not my boyfriend anymore,” she said as she gave him a smirk.

         Stewie realized this was the best night ever in his life, as he chatted more with Tina.

         The egg had cracked, and the adventure is about to start.

May 13, 2021 22:09

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42 comments

Deidra Lovegren
17:52 May 19, 2021

I'm a sucker for an underdog. GO STEWIE.

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Corey Melin
17:57 May 19, 2021

Greatly appreciate the comments. There are elements of my personal life when I was younger in Stewie. I just never punched anyone.

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Deidra Lovegren
18:01 May 19, 2021

There is still time. And many deserving candidates :)

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Corey Melin
18:03 May 19, 2021

Amen to that! There are so many times I have to control my emotions before I either speak or type out my response. I probably wouldn't be liked much if I let my emotions take control.

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Deidra Lovegren
18:08 May 19, 2021

Or you'd be liked even more. Fortune favors the bold :) That's why it is always great to have the ONE FRIEND you can be your horribly brutal and awesome hellish self with. And having a long lunch with that person is pure heaven.

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Corey Melin
18:12 May 19, 2021

The funny thing is I was about to say that. Just let it out, and who gives a damn the response. I have a friend or two the same way. Have a blast saying whatever we want. No worry of offending a poor soul.

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Yvone Mthembu
08:33 Jun 03, 2021

Stewie my man I don't know if you're a hypnotist or not but your words are captivating and they always bring prompts to life

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Corey Melin
14:00 Jun 03, 2021

Thank you for the comments!

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Beth Connor
16:13 May 24, 2021

Oh! I relate to Stewie so much! I love how you used dialog (I struggle with this sometimes!) and I am invested enough in Stewie to hope as he explores this new side of himself, he doesn't lose his quiet self! Fun read.

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Corey Melin
16:55 May 24, 2021

There are some elements I can relate you. Thank you for the comments!

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Dhwani Jain
13:46 May 24, 2021

Great story! I mean, I did find a few grammatical errors on the way, but overall, it was an awesome read!

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Corey Melin
15:34 May 24, 2021

Thank you for the comments!

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Dhwani Jain
04:15 May 28, 2021

Hey, I have got two new quizzes in my bio and a link to my blog... Please check it out. Also, are there some other stories of your you recommend me to read?

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Corey Melin
13:56 May 28, 2021

I will check them out. I wrote two stories for this weeks prompt. One funny, one serious

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Dhwani Jain
13:58 May 28, 2021

Okay

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Annie James
16:06 May 21, 2021

Hi Corey, I like how you started this story with dialogue, and how you wrote believable dialogue the whole way through. Good for Stewie, for coming out of his shell.

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Corey Melin
16:41 May 21, 2021

Thank you for the comments!

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Shruti Jain
10:27 May 20, 2021

Never underestimate the inert loners. If needed, they can be more reactive than potassium or more reactive than azidoazide azide. Their wrath is concentrated within their system, and so when it is unleashed, the immediate effect and aftermath are stronger.

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Corey Melin
14:57 May 20, 2021

Awesome analogy. Thank you!

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Shruti Jain
12:40 May 28, 2021

Don't mention it. This story is awesome.

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Zane Ishii
00:38 May 20, 2021

I like how you describe Stewie's inner feelings. It comes across as exactly what a reclusive person feels before going to the party. I enjoyed the bit before he got out of the house most!

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Corey Melin
01:00 May 20, 2021

Thank you for the comments! Some it is from my real life experiences

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Cathryn V
18:15 May 19, 2021

I love the name Stevie! Quite the unlikely hero. Fun story,

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Corey Melin
18:35 May 19, 2021

I always like the name Stewie when it comes to characters with a goofy life style, and/or a carefree attitude. Many comedies I have watched the characters name is Stewie or Stuart.

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Cathryn V
19:31 May 19, 2021

Way to make use of your resources!!😁

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Charlie Murphy
00:58 May 19, 2021

“You two behave yourselves,” their mother said as she lay on the couch reading your favorite magazine. “I know you will Stewie.” I think you meant “her favorite magazine." other than that, great job! Stewie’s a hero! Maybe you could write another story with Mike and Stewie? I like them. They’re fun!

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Corey Melin
01:54 May 19, 2021

I was seriously thinking of using them in one of the prompts but ended up writing this hastily written story at work

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Charlie Murphy
02:08 May 19, 2021

So, you have more stories with them?

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Corey Melin
02:50 May 19, 2021

Not yet but very soon

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Charlie Murphy
02:54 May 19, 2021

Cool

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Malcolm S
19:56 May 17, 2021

Well done!

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Corey Melin
19:57 May 17, 2021

Greatly appreciate it. Quickly written.

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Kristin Neubauer
14:54 May 16, 2021

This was a great story! I really admire how you keep to a very simple and straightforward plot in many of your stories. I try to do that and, inevitably, wind up getting carried away on twists and turns. My simple plot goes sideways. And, you still give us well-developed and likeable characters that we wind of caring about. Love your style!

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Corey Melin
15:18 May 16, 2021

Greatly appreciate your comments!

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Kay (:
19:12 May 15, 2021

This is a really fun and good story! I read your comments about finishing it at your workplace and skimming through it, totally understand. Good job! I wrote a story in the same prompt and would appreciate it if you read it and would appreciate it if you gave me some feedback as well! Keep writing and stay safe!

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Virginia Rand
11:07 May 15, 2021

It was a fun story and I liked seeing a bookworm character get outside of himself. Your writing might have been a bit clunky in a few places. The deadline certainly doesn't make things easy, but it might help if you read your story out loud? I'm just glad you seem to be writing so much! Keep going!

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Corey Melin
15:29 May 15, 2021

It was a Thursday that I wrote it and at my workplace since it’s super slow. I skimmed through re-reading it so no surprise on errors

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17:03 May 14, 2021

Oh liked this one! Nice ending!

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Corey Melin
17:06 May 14, 2021

Thank you for the comment and the likes!

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Monica June
14:56 May 17, 2021

I liked how this story ended! It was short and sweet and had a good theme. I have a few little comments on grammar and stuff, but that's just because i'm nit-picky ;) You wrote: "They have a swimming pool. And I believe a hot tub" That could be changed to: "They have a swimming pool. And a hot tub, I believe." Just sounds better in my opinion. You said: “What am I getting myself into?” he thought. “I know I’m going to regret this.” I always like to put thoughts in italics, to differentiate from dialogue. But that's a personal preference...

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Corey Melin
17:23 May 17, 2021

Greatly appreciate the comments and corrections. Majority of my stories are written on paper then typed out at home where it's quiet for the most part, and notice my many errors. This story was immediately typed out, at work where it is slow, and skimmed over when I submitted it. Thank you so much!

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Monica June
17:25 May 17, 2021

I totally get that! I'm glad I could help :)

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