Nothing screams awkward silence like a cynical hacker and a clown discussing the fate of the world on a date.
Or, the supposed fate of the world, as the meet-up form insisted.
Iโm pretty sure it was just a ruse.
And apparently this wasnโt a date.
โHi, Iโm Cy.โ
I tried to be friendly first, of course. As a 14-year-old emo hacker stuck with the fantasy name Cynan Moonpine, I felt lucky to have anybody pay me for my hobby. But pay they did, and the variety of people coming to me was constantly astounding; today it was a brightly-dressed clown who requested this fancy restaurant for the meet-up, on her.
By hacking, I mean nothing illegal, nothing crazy. I was just a dramatic computer nerd trying to make some money, and besidesโit was fun finding backdoors and glitches online.
So here we were.
And then there was the clown.
โHi,โ she said, makeup caked on her face, complete with plastic glasses, a crimson wig, and the whole shabang of a costume. โYouโre the hacker?โ
โYeah,โ I said, then jumped right in. โSoโฆwhat do you want? Revenge? Hackinโ back a bad hacker who stole all your money?ย Something more chill like computer help? Getting back a permanently deleted file? What?โ
โActually, I was kind of hoping youโd be the bad hacker today.โ
My eyes widened. โPardon moi?โ
She sighed. โDonโt look at me like that. Youโve got it all: shaggy black hair, dark eyes, black clothes and sunglasses. Youโre obviously the kind of kid whoโs going to try to take over the world someday. Letโs keep this hushed-up and you walk away with all the money you want. Remember what I said about the fate of the world?โ
I sputtered a few curses. โWhaโwhat do you mean, clown girl? What are you asking me to do and why does it sound like thereโs gonna be threats involved?โย
โDonโt call me that. This is a disguise.โ
My eyes widened. โFrom whom?โ
โThis doesnโt matter,โ the clown pressed. โListen to me, Cy. I want you to hack into the biggest bank accounts in the world and hand it all over to me.โ
My eyes widened further. At this point I was on the road to looking like a cartoon character.
โAnd it sounds like there will be threats involved because there will be,โ she added coolly.
Before I could react (or get away), a waitress stopped by our booth, taking in the scene. โHello, welcome to the Lily May Diner, how may I hโโ
The clown waved her off. Immediately the waitress stopped, eyes flaring red as her hands dropped to her hips and she walked off.
I stared at the clown, warning signs shrieking in my mind. โHow did you do that? And whatโs your name, anyways?โ
โCall me Valentina,โ she says. โNo more questions now. I need money, lots of it, and we need to hurry.โ
โWhy do you need money if you can afford this?โ I gestured to the restaurant.
โNot for me. For him.โ
I didnโt like this. I started edging out of my bench. โIโm just going to goโฆโย
Valentina clamped a hand on my shoulder, but before she could stop me, shouted, โDuck!โ
BOOOOOOM!
She shoved me down just as an explosion rattled in the distance, a shock wave crashing into the wall behind Valentina. My head disappeared under the table and I felt chunks of plaster raining down. More booms echoed in the distance and my breath caught under the tableโa string of explosions going off in the distance.
I inhaled raggedly as Valentina yanked me up again. She was streaked with soot but not damaged in the least, which I could barely believe since the view of the Arizona desert was clear behind her. There was no wall, chunks of plaster littered across the table. I narrowly survived, so how did she?
I did not like this, not one bit. I was cool with retrieving โpermanently goneโ adorable cat videos for $50. I was not okay with this mysterious female clown, her rushed threats and now explosions.
โHow are youโโ
โListen, Cynan,โ Valentina said, holding my shoulders. โI am deeply in debt to a certain man who will stop at nothing to inflict punishment. The world will burn without your immediate help. Will you?โ
I could only think of one thing at the moment.
I ripped off her wig, glasses, and nose in one swipe, splashing my water cup on her for good measure, determined to find out who this lady really was.
I gasped.
In front of me was the most beautiful person Iโd ever seen. Dark curls waterfalled down from under the wig, tanned skin and wide hazel eyes. Even through her dripping makeup I was hypnotized.
Not even fazed, Valentina scowled, โOh, whyโd you have to do that?โย
She yanked me through the hole in the wall and dragged me a solid hundred feet into the desert, the screams of fleeing people behind us fading. She pushed my computer into my hands. โAre you going to help you or not?โ
Before I could answer, another series of BOOMS! echoed across the desert. I couldnโt think to react, my eyes just squinting shut in contrast to the overpowering sound.
Silence.
I was alive.
I opened my eyes, shocked I still eXiStEd. Glancing around, a ten-foot beaming shield surrounded Valentina and I, swirling green energy in a dome. The gorgeous girl, maybe in her early 20โs, had completely transformedโher clown costume and remaining makeup was gone, now dressed in a fitting white blouse, pleated mini skirt with a gold hem, a thick golden belt wrapped around her waist. Her makeup was replaced and now she was literally ten feet tall.
Well then.
โO-okay,โ I stuttered, my body becoming one giant heartbeat. One thing was for sure through the chaos of the last ten minutes: I didnโt have a choice but to help this used-to-be-clown. Hacking into super-security digital banks seemed like a breeze compared to meeting whatever was in the distance. โBut one thing. Before I help you, youโve gotta explain.โ
At first I was worried Valentina would refuse and Iโd be left more confused and panicked than ever, but her eyes just gleamed. โCan I trust you?โ
โโฆYes?โ
She took a deep breath. โI hope youโre telling the truth. But okay. Yโknow Ancient Greek mythology, Zeus and Hera and all that?โ
โYup.โย
โSo that stuff exists.โ
I blinked at her. โLike, Latin class? Is real?!โ
She chuckled. โYeah.โ
โAnd areโฆare you a god?โ
She laughed again. โโฆYeah.โ
I gaped.
โWellโฆmaybe I should be more specific. Iโm Aphroditeโs daughter. With whom? I dunno. Iโm basically a minor god, not of anything in particular, just a girl with some magic. Also, the guy I owe is Hades.โ
I choked, pointing to the distance. โThatโs Hades?โ
โUh-huh.โ
I started pacing. โDonโt you think you should have mentioned your pissed off the frigging god of the Underworld before putting my life in danger?โ
โOh, PLEASE. Everyoneโs lives are in danger if you donโt hurry up and help.โ
โGimme a second,โ I said. I wanted a little more info first. โWhat happened between you and the god of the dead?โ
Another boom rang out, the wave crumbling when it hit Valentinaโs force field. I wasnโt even fazed. She said, โI, uh, mightโve charmed like ten thousand ghosts to come to Earth as my own private army. And steal a lot of Hadesโ riches on the way here.โ
โUh.โ
โAnd ghosts are totally careless so they destroyed it all.โ
โUm. Yikes.โ
โSo yeah, I owe Hades like a billion dollars and I didnโt even get my army.โ
I stared at the pouting goddess. โCanโt you get the money yourself? And doesnโt Hades just have more gold or whatever?โ
Valentina laughed dryly. Boom! โWow, get the money myself. Why didnโt I think of that? But no, Cy. Goddesses canโt directly interfere with human wealth, just use humans to get us the money that we can exchange with godly currency. And yes, while Hades has much more underground wealth, he isโฆkinda a butt. Peeved easily and doesnโt forgive and forget much. Heโll easily wipe out half of humanity to get to me.โ
I shivered. โAwesome.โย
Another string of explosions rang out, the smoke plumes much closer. โThatโs him,โ Valentina stressed. โAnd my shield wonโt hold against him directly. You gonna help, hacker boy?โ
โFine, clown girl. Give me my laptop.โ
She picked my bag back up and shoved it into my arms. I slid out the silver laptop, the ground quivering as dust and smoke billowed in distant Arizona. I breathed slowly to calm myself as I typed in my password. Half an hour ago, I was vibing at the fancy restaurant. Now the clown had turned into a ten-foot Barbie, saying she was a goddess, and that she needed me to get her money ASAP so Hades didnโt rip apart the world.
Lovely.
โSo what do you want me to do exactly?โ
โGo to the Bank of America site,โ Valentina instructed, hands raised to enforce the shield. โOkay, now open another tabโฆyeahโฆyeah, hereโs the database of namesโฆpossible passwordsโฆperfect.โ
Though wholly confused but with Valentinaโs instructions, I managed to successfully, however slowly, bypass the security. A cloud rolled over the sun, bitter raindrops falling through the summer weather and bouncing off the shield.
โWeโre running out of time,โ Valentina hissed, hands poised below the emerald shield.
More explosions echoed. I worked more urgently with the aid of her magic, suddenly knowing all sorts of methods, secret windows and passcodes. I finally reached some rich guysโ bank account.
โWoah,โ I said, wide-eyed at the screen. I expected the hidden databaseโs top user to be rich, but I could barely say the number of online dollars stacked up once Valentina gave me the final password.
BOOM! Boomboomboom!
โHurry up, Cynan!โ Valentina yelped. โHades taking this long means he has an armyโprimarily to strike fear, I bet.โ
โI am not scared!โ
โLiar!โ she shouted, kneeling down, elbows bent, the green shield shrinking around us as smoke billowed.
Adrenaline coursed through my veins. I showed her the screen. โWeโre in!โ
โWhose bank is that?!โ
โI dunno, the computer just led me here!โ
She peered closer, her goddess body shrinking by the second as her power channeled into the shield. โYou idiot! You literally hacked Zeusโ bank account!โ
โHe has one of those?โ I said, clinging to Valentina, then yelped.
Suddenly a human figure rushed out of the smoke and sound outside our shield (now the size of a broom closet, while still-gorgeous Valentina was the size of a human again) and pounded at the dome. I screamed. Other โpeopleโ emerged from the dust store now raging above and banged on our faltering shield, but they werenโt reallyโฆpeople. They had the figurines of humans, but six or seven feet tall and pitch black. It was like they were made of darknessโfrom the front, dark features blurred together, only the whites of their eyes clearly visible. Ink curled off them, sloshing to the ground then evaporating as black mist. Between the cries they made and their size, this army of the dead was a lot freakier than ghosts or zombies.
โYes!โ Valentina glanced around, her shield faltering in second-long gaps now. Her face scrunched with effort. โBut we canโt afford to waste any more time. This shield will be gone in seconds and weโre going to face Hades.โ
โWeโll be okay, right?โ I whimpered, hugging my laptop to my chest. It was hard to keep a cool expression in the heat of an attack.
โMaybe. Stealing billions from the most powerful god doesnโt seem very โokayโ, but at least we wonโt be picked apart by Hades if we play this right. At least until Zeus gets a *wind* of this.โ
Bang, bang, bang!ย
The army continued attacking. Valentina heaved ragged breaths. Now that I knew she was a goddess, it was easy to remember she wasnโt a very powerful goddess. A daughter of the goddess of love and beauty, for godsโ sake.
โHaha, very funny,โ I deadpanned. โAnd yeah, if Zeus ever comes down to bash some heads after his account gets drained, Iโm not helping.โ
โWeโll see, Cy.โ A smile tugged at her lips. โNowโ DOWN!โ
BANGGGCRASHHHKKKKPOW!
A second after she said the word, the shield was shattered by the fists of the dark army. Green splintered everywhere, pellets of the dome bouncing off me. I clenched my eyes and clung to Valentina, expecting the figures to overwhelm us. But instead my stomach dropped and a cool breeze whisked through my mind.
When I opened my eyes, I was in a different place.
Another cracked desert resembling Arizona, but the sky opened to pitch black, stars consumed by unnatural darkness. An extended spotlight covered us, but a hundred feet off the ground the light melted to black.
I shakily rose to my feet, glancing around. My laptop was in Valentinaโs arm, her other around me.
In front of us was Hades.
(I supposedโI could still quite possibly have gone insane.)
Ten yards in front of us was a tall, pitch-black figurine. A huge black cape lined in silver was draped over his body, an old-fashioned knightโs helmet over his head. Emotionless and cold, no exposed skin.
Valentina crouched down and opened my laptop, mouthing one word: Stall.
โโฆHi,โ I said as Valentina opened the bank account out of the corner of my eye, clicking a button titled โtransfer moneyโ. She started chanting softly under her breath. โI supposed youโre Hades? Where are we?โ
โA private meeting spot.โ Hades chuckled, but it sounded wrong. Like nails on a chalkboard but more ancient, evil. โAnd yes.โ
โWhat do you want with us?โ I demanded, confidence growing. Even if I knew the answer.
Valentina continued typing and chant-whispering.ย
โI want nothing with you, young boy,โ Hades sighed. โYou look bad in black, by the way.โ I rolled my eyes. The guy wearing, like, two pieces of clothing said my dark attire was bad. โI want a word with our dear Valentina.โย
One more moment, she mouthed.
I cleared my throat. โWhy?โ
โYou know, donโt you?โ
I blinked innocently.
He groaned like rust. โThis pretty little menace made away with priceless precious gems and gold. Plus a ghost army. Which is stupid, by the way, because all ghosts do is try to jump-scare you!โ
Valentina paid no mind, typing away. She started ritually waving her hands over the laptop. What the heck was she doing?
โUmโฆsorry,โ I told him. โAnd who are you again?โ
โIโm Hades, Cynan. Lord of the Underworld. God of the Dead. That kind of thing.โ
I gulped. โJust wanted to confirm.โ While the god was a bit more humorous than I expected, I could barely believe this was happening. I mouthed to Val, Hurry up!
Almost done!
โActually, itโs annoying,โ Hades continued. A swirl of mist curled around him. โPeople always confuse me for Thanos, or worse, Satan. Thanos is the god of death! He kills you! I just give you a nice little afterlife.โ He glared daggers. โUnless you were bad, which means youโre going straight to the Fields of Punishment. But yes, it hurts when people call me the Devil! Sorry I like black. Sorry everyone attributes me with sadness. Iโm not even the one whoโs cheated on my wife like a thousand times!โ
He sneered at the sky.ย
I would have laughed at his prod to Zeus, but I was more focused on the mini tornado picking up around Hades as his attitude worsened.
The god turned back to me, and I imagined a sick smile spreading across his face. He edged forward, the storm growing. โNow, Cynan, itโs your time to get out of the way. I need to have a chat with Valentina.โ
โWhat? Nโโ
Val shushed me, standing up. โIโm done.โ She smiled sweetly at Hades. โHey.โ
โHello. Do you prefer death or paying up?โ
โWell technically, you canโt kill mโโ
โI can sure try,โ he interrupted.
My breath caught. This was it. Unless Val managed to get the god his money from Zeusโ bank account, both of us were toast.
โWell, they neednโt be a problem,โ she said, smoothing a hand down her skirt though her voice trembled. โWeโve got the money.โ
โYou do?โ
Hades seemed surprised. Valentina nodded, and shakily opened my laptop. She whispered one final Greek verse until her breath, thenโฆ
Pop!
A single sheet of paper twirled to the ground next to Hades. The dark god edged closer and picked it up as Val asserted, โThatโs it. Thereโs your money.โ
Hades inspected the paper, and then the world melted into darkness.
*
Back at the diner with Val the Clown, we had a lilโ chat.
โSo what was that?โ I said, still quivering.
โA check.โ
โA check?โ
She nodded, waving away another waitress. When Hades teleported us out of the strange place, the restaurant was magically restored. None of the people were screaming, so I supposed their memories were wiped clean of the explosions (which they apparently survived). โFor a gazillion billion dollars.โ
โNot a number.โ
She smirked, adjusting her wig. โHades seemed to accept it.โ
I considered this. โSo weโre not gonna die?โ
โUntil Zeus learns this happened, yes, but weโre on good terms so hopefully heโll let us go.โ
โYou, not us.โ
โYouโre the one who hacked the account, Cynan.โ
I rolled my eyes. โVal.โ
She laughed. โKidding. Thanks for helping me out today. Name your price.โ
โOh, shut up. Iโd say no worries, but there were a lot of worries. Still, the hacking-and-world-saving is on me.โ
She grinned. โThanks, Cy. But thereโs one thing I am doing for you.โ She waved a waitress over and turned back to me, sliding a menu over along with my laptop. โGet anything you want. Itโs on Zeus.โ
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Short version: This is random, I kinda like it, I loosely used the Reedsy Plot Generator and also I had to cut this down by 1k words lol, enjoy! Long version: VICTORYYYYY ๐๐ I originally finished this mess at, like, 4k words, and posted it in a pretty rough shape. Hours later I took it down and streamlined it literally as much as I could over yesterday and today. FINALLY I BULLIED THE WORLD COUNT UNDER 3K YAAASSSSSS (even if I had to cut out some solid jokes and stuff to do so :d) Still a mess tho~ ๐ญโ๏ธ ๐Okay, tbh, morso โrandomโ than โtra...
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this was frigging long yโall have another feast: ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ yesss yโall be getting rainbows, THE FOOD OF THE GODS MAN, except for Hades sorry Hades but why do I feel like everything you eat is pomegranates or poisoned apples-
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Really good story. I would have liked to have read the 4K version, but you did a great job cutting it down.
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Thank you so much! Haha, I promise the 4k version was kinda icky, mostly a lot of extra and inefficient words (but also some extra dialogue lines I condensed) :D
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Then you are a rather good editor. Figuring out what works and what doesn't is an art.
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This was so funny. Sounds sarcastic when I put it with a period...So funny :D That's more like it. I love the names so much! And the ending is fun too. Writing greek mythology has been on my writer bucket list for so long now, and you're so good at it. I always love Hades' character. I mean, he's always funny and not as dark as he's said to be, in everyone's writing. I love it. Keep writing :D
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Haha, thanks so much ;D Thank youuuuuuuu! Yus lolz Hades is always more humorous than the real myths so if course I hadda build into that ;D Thank you, you too!
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I haven't even read the actual story yet, I just read the title and I'm dying XD
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Ahaha thank you XDD
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You're welcome XDDD
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Very creative and fun story! I enjoyed reading it. I did notice a typo. "I inhaled raggedlh as Valentina yanked me up again." I think you meant raggedly.
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Thank you! Ah, thanks for catching that!
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OMG AERIIIINNNNNNN THIS IS SO GOOD!!!!!! You amaze me for the 500000000th time with your insane creativity. How the heck did you come up with this idea? Contemporary fiction mixed with Greek mythology?? I love your writing style because you make it so easy to picture what's happening in the story. Great job on this story!!!
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ACKCKKK TYSM SUHANI!!!!!!! Aqkdjsjwjqjsjw thank you!! I really appreciate it :DD <33
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Nice job cutting things down! Both versions were amazing ofc :P I'm still loving the last line, "It's on Zeus," It just ties the whole thing pErFeCtLy Anyways, loved the concept!
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Ack thanks hehe :P Yayyyyyy thanks, I was kinda proud of the last line this time around :D Tysm, Starry! XDD How are youuu
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Np! XD Pretty good! Wbu? :D
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Thanks, that was fun. I enjoyed the irreverence of the story. Mythology with a 2021 vibe. Nice.
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Haha thanks!
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The creativity is mind blowing!, I appreciate it when people are able to think outside the box and create something unique. I never would have thought a story like this would come out of this particular prompt . Well done!.
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Thank you so much! :D
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Thank you! :D
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Wow!!! You had me all the way from the title on in! Enormous world building feat you pulled off, I don't know how you could have trimmed this by a thousand words, it didn't feel like anything was missing. The action and anticipation of impending doom bearing down, you also had the classic 'keep the bad guy talking' lol although Hades does get a bad rap, I agree. :) Seriously though the pace of this was intense and the clown idea was spot on, and hilarious!!! Awesome!!
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Wow, thank you hehe!!! Ack, thanks so much! It means a lot lolz :DD Ty!!
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Heya! I loved the story! No notes except a few typos here and there and also you used 'peeps' in a monologue, I suggest you use formal language apart from in dialogues... Loved it! Great Job!
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Hii! Thank you! Ooh hehe, just fixed that ;D Tyy <3
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So I could definitely see the editing and how it paid off. It's a lot shorter and a lot easier to follow. It was also really funny! Besides that, you have my critique from before this was deleted!
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Thank you hehe!!! Ah, I was kinda worried I cut some of the funny parts out and all thatโs left was my normal bouncy tone, so thanks for the reassurance haha! Oop, yea, sorry about that, but you were a great beta reader so thank you for that *wiggles eyebrows*
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Okay, thank you! What did you mean by sorry about that? Also, since I'm on here and you're on here, do you want to do like a feedback-for-feedback? Like I read a story of your choice and vise versa and we both give feedback?
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I mean, idk, just that you wrote some thought-out feedback but it for deleted along with the story lolz Ahhh that sounds fun! Iโd love to do it but, like, maybe tomorrow morning?, cuz rn itโs almost midnight here and Iโm a mix between half insane and half asleep soooo- yeah Iโm a mess GOODNIGHT <3
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Okay! Yes it's fine you deleted it, since I literally just saw you use the advice I gave so you've already "used it going forward," as they say. And I get it... it's not that time yet where I live but I'm already tired... Anyway bye!
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:D Byeeeee! (I actually gotta get off Reedsy now but every time I pose a story Iโm liked psyched so ima awkwardly try to tell a few friends through half-lidded eyes for 5 minutes haha-)
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I needed this movie in my mind...Thank you!
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Haha, thank you!
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You did it! (I have yet to post a story r.i.p) Tbh I had no idea where this story was going at the beggining. I loved how you made something extremely random make sense towards the end.
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Haha thanks so much! (Cโmon sisssss you owe us a new story by the end of the month at least *wiggles eyebrows*)
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(i'm TrYiNg! I really wanna get something out either this contest or the next. Will it be good? Maybe)
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(oKi!! Ooh sounds good! Cโmon, Iโm sure itโll be awesome ;D This is random but I STILL remember the first few disaster children stories from like a year ago lol, idk why but itโs like a recurring thought and I always pictured it happening on my patio and also me and my friend Sarah have legitimately brought it up IRL before, idk yuh XDD)
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(oh yeah Disaster Child stories! I might revisit them one of these days. Key word: might, motivation isn't really in my inventory rn)
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(*tosses some Motivation over to you*)
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(i'm TrYiNg! I really wanna get something out either this contest or the next. Will it be good? Maybe)
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wow XDDDDD I liked the pacing on this, nice and fast, very drawn in until the end! Mythology...I see ya XD Val was a creative character (and so was Cy, but still...) The title kinda made me curious despite it's length (length isn't always a bad thing lolz) Twas definitely a fun story and rather interesting as well :D while Cy was hacking, I was kinda like...wut....cause I mean...eh...it was just...it seemed so simple XD you just hack into Bank of America and them somehow find the richest guy's account and push transfer money...XDDDD anyw...
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meep :OO Thank you heheee <33 Ah yea, I was worried bout that, but I dunno how to make it simpler and because there was โจmagicโจ helping him I was like whatever, โจMAGICCCโจ Thank you thank you :DD Yussss *one mil rainbows*
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:)))) Ofc <333 MaGiC lol I get that XD :DDD XD yus ๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐
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๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐๐ SO HOW YA DOINGGGG
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Doing pretty well :)))) hbu?
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Geez this is good! No- epically awesomeistly great (so weird- idk) I LUVVV mythology, and action stuff, so this is just takin' the cake for me. I mean, it's a burrito of funny, action-y, mythology and overall greatness. This frickin' ROCKS. Omg- I haven't been on is so loooong. If I already have a comment- sowwy.
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Ahahah thank you!!!!! Yessssssssss same, I love writing that stuff!!! THANK YOU lol no worries, same here
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This was excellent!! I liked this soooo much! ๐๐ป๐๐ปโจA good story about a hacker, a goddess, and a heist.
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Thank you so much! :D
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"I owe Hades a billion dollars" I die laughing!
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thank you lol <3
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LOL
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