Author's Note: I wrote this story with the help of my friend,Brooke D!.Check her out and her part of this story! (This is Garnetโs point of view.)
We had just got into our new house, and all of our stuff was piled everywhere in brown cardboard boxes. The living room, or would-be living room we stood in was bare and drab, but we soon would fix that. For now, there was just Baneenkani (my girlfriend) and me.
โItโll be different, thatโs for sure. But I think we can turn it into a home. Together.โ Kani had a dreamy look on her face. I loved her the most when she does that. I grinned as I walked towards Kani and kissed her. She put her hand on the side of my face, and we stayed together for a few seconds, then we both stopped the kiss. Kani walked straight into our bedroom, where only a large mattress laid. I could hear the floorboards creaking and Kaniโs muffled snores. She was already asleep. I stayed up as always, watching the stars.ย
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Four weeks later, all of our furniture has been set up and ready, and most of our stuff is unpacked. In the past week, I have been getting crankier and crankier. Our house is too small and cramped! How could we trade our big, wide country house for this? I was getting more and more annoyed with Kani, as she was the one who suggested it. I took everything out on her, and if she had anything good to say, I would stomp on it with the bad. In the past week, our relationship has gotten tenser. I wonder who is to blame.
On a Friday night, Kani and I were standing in the kitchen, making Hamburger Helper and salad. Normally I loved it, but now, I wasnโt in the mood to be happy. But this was our normal Friday dinner, so I had to make it. Kani was mixing the lettuce, cheese, bacon pieces, ranch, tomatoes, cucumbers, and croutons. I stirred the Hamburger Helper concoction slowly and put the lid on it. As I did, my anger boiled over.
โCanโt believe that you chose this small of a kitchen,โ I snarled at Kani. She stopped mixing the salad to glare at me angrily.ย
โWhen we bought it, you said that this kitchen would work for us fine. So thatโs on you,โ Kani snapped back. I could see her jaw tighten, her fists clench, and her fiery glare. She was really getting on my last nerve. Had been for the last week.ย
โMaybe, but there still isnโt enough counter space.โย
โOh, shut up. You donโt have enough space in your brain to hear the good.โย
I felt my anger rising to the boiling point. She had comebacks and witty snips, and I had what? An annoying girlfriend? My mind turned fuzzy with frustration. I saw Kani putting the salad bowl on the counter, and she had her hands on her hips. I realized what I wanted to do in a split second.ย
โWhatever, Kani. Now it appears that Iโve lost my appetite. You can finish cooking for yourself. Iโm going over to Toddโs house to watch the game.โย
I wretched my coat and keys off the table, and slammed the door. I stormed down the street, and wondered if I actually loved her.
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โPass the potatoes.โ I said to Kani. Every since I walked out on her at Friday, sheโs been acting like a bomb, ready to explode at the slightest thing I said. She rolled her eyes and looked away. I jabbed at her with my finger, hitting her hard.ย
โWhat?โ Kani had her fiery glare again. How I hated it.
โI said, pass the potatoes!โ I cried, annoyed and angry. She had changed so much in the past days, Ever since weโd moved in. I wondered if we hadnโt moved, we would still be in our country house, understanding each other. Kani loved our house more than me now. I wish that we hadnโt moved again. I loved her, but that fragile line of love was collapsing quickly.ย
โHere, then,โ Kani growled, sliding the bowl of cheesy potatoes down the table to me. I grabbed it quickly and harshly. A scowl was covering my face, and I didnโt do anything to try to hide it from Kani.ย
โIโm gonna get some milk.โ Kani got up from her chair and began sprinting into the kitchen. I stopped her. I couldnโt just let her go without my acknowledgment!
โCome again?โย
โI said Iโm going to get some milk. You got a problem with that?โ Kani snarled back at me. I then changed my mind again.
โNo. Go on.โ I helped myself to a large forkful of cheesy potatoes and stared at Kani.
โGlad I know I have your permission.โย
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โWhen a person has a problem with the decisions that another person is making, a person should talk to the person instead of complaining about that person to that personโs best friend,โ Kani blabed. I made my eyes slits; shouldnโt the person whoโs your girlfriend make sense once in a while?
โAll this person talk is making me dizzy. Talk in a foreign language, why donโt you?โ I rhetorically asked. If she wonโt make sense, I wonโt. What was Kani even talking about?!ย
โAh, shut up. Ever since we moved in here, youโve hated me, hated this house, and not cared about any of it! Iโm sick and tired of having to worry about what youโre going to think, about how youโll react. So, Iโm not going to anymore! Lilah doesnโt believe you about all of the stuff you told her--Iโm just going to go stay with her. Donโt expect me to be back any time soon,โ Kani fumed. I could see smoke rising. And now I thought it was a perfect time to scream at her too.
โFine! I donโt care! Itโll be a relief to not have to be heckled about my personal opinions. And I thought when we first started dating, that you would respect my beliefs.โ I stomped into our bedroom, looking behind me angrily. I then proceeded to slam the door the our bedroom as hard as I could. Then I toppled on our bed, angry and sad.
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When I woke up, Kani had left. It was like a huge weight had been lifted off me, and I could finally be at peace. Without anyone bothering me, I could be alone by myself in the living room. Sleep by myself. Eat by myself. It was actually kind of peaceful, life without Kani. I was beginning to think that everything would be okay, that I could live forever in this place. Then my hopes and dreams were shattered into a million pieces and stepped on when Kani appeared at our door.
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โWhyโd you come back? I thought we were over,โ I groaned. Kaniโs eyes shot daggers at me as she was putting her tee shirts in the dresser. I was sitting on the edge of the bed, complementing life.ย
โWhat the heck?! No! I just need a break, okay? We never decided that weโre โoverโ. So shut your mouth.โ Kani slammed the dresser drawer close with a boom and pranced to the closet, hanging up more of her clothes.ย
โWell, maybe I did want to decide that. Maybe Iโm sick of living with you and your petty attitude, and the fact that you canโt come to terms with the fact that we have different opinions.โ I jumped up from the bed and stared at the back of Kaniโs head. Kani spun around and stared at me in the eye. I did the same, wishing that the ceiling would come down on Kani.
โFine! If you want that, then you can pack up and move out! Iโm over you, too! Get out! You never liked this place, anyway!โ I saw Kaniโs tear-filled eyes and her shaking figure. She flung her arms out, then let them drop to her sides.ย
โFine! This is what I wanted! Iโve always wanted out! Bye!โ I screamed at the top of my lungs. I stamped out of the bedroom, the floorboards creeeeeeaking loudly. As I yanked the door open I had one last glance at my ex. She was crying, but not begging me to stay. I jumped out of the house, not caring about my clothes, possessions, or food. I could worry about that later. Right now, I was free.
So be it.
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Just had to comment to say happy birthday! Mine's up soon too :/
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YESSS and sorry for not telling you BUT AWESOME STORY!!! I'LL CHECK OUT BROOKS'S POV NOW and did you like part 6?? :D:D:D
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Hey, Celeste! First of all, HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Second of all, I am writing a story using a Reedsy friend cast, and I want you to be in it. If you also want to be in it, then fill this out: Name (if you don't want it to be Celeste): Power: Spirit animal: Eye: Hair: Favorite color: Weakness: Thanks if you do this! If you don't, that's okay, too. :D Your friend, Brooke
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HAPPY BIRTHDAY QUEEEEN!!!!!! AND AS A PRESENT, PART TWO IS OUT!!!
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Will it have a next part?
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Ummm, prob not
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Wow! That relationship fell apart quickly. I think you did a great job making the animosity between them feel so real. Your writing and dialogue was so tight and vivid - i felt really invested in these characters. So invested, that I would love to see the interim - the time between when they moved in and when things turned bad - drawn out a little longer. More about the moments where the relationship started turning. It's great work as is....but you've done it so well, that you are making me want more!
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Oh, such a sad ending. Hi, Cel. Great story, I really loved the raw emotion displayed by the two characters, great job!
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Aw, how sad. Sometimes things just aren't meant to be I guess. You did well with the romance, but it was a little jarring when they fell out of love. I mean, in the start, everything was fine. It was a little fast paced when it came to that. There were also lots of time jumps, with maybe too little happening in between. Other than that, I enjoy every romance, even breakups. Keep writing!
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Hey! Thanks! I'll be sure to focus on that in my next stories! Thanks for reading and critiquing! :D
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No problem!
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:D Love ur bio BTW
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YEASSS ROMANCEEEE!!! I feel like this was, like events that would normally happen in real life. This was a great read, and I loved the ending!!! "Right now, I was free" Lol yeah people tend to feel that way about their exes XDDD YAY! THANK YOU FOR BLESSING ME WITH THIS STORY!!
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Belated birthday by the way.
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You displayed the fallout of the relationship properly. I loved the dialogue and the story flowed well with the prompt. You exploited the prompt to the fullest. And the character's dialogue was fine as a needle. Great work. Keep writing.
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I really canโt respond..... Thank you.
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Great story, Celeste! I read Brooke's part too and they go together perfectly! The character's personalities and perspectives on the situation are well-developed and realistic. Nice job!!! :D
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Awwwwwwwwwwwwww Tanks lemon ! Sorry about Scribble.... I had more wok. D:
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No problem! :D It's fine, maybe tomorrow? :DDD
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AW TANKs (Nope!) Itโs just a temporary fun name! You can do it too!
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Of course!! :D Nice!! Could you suggest a fruit name for me because I don't know which ones are already taken?
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What about๐ ? :D
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Pear Paris, Penople, or Polly.
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