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Funny Fantasy Kids

~*~𝒮𝒶𝓂𝒶𝓃𝓉𝒽𝒶~*~


My green eyes throw a panicked glance as the timer ticking away on Ms. Kara’s desk. It’s practically a bomb: when it runs out, we have to turn in our final exams for biology. 

Three minutes. Three minutes ‘till the test is over.

I hastily jot down my name down at the top of my paper. It’s fast but neatly stenciled down: 𝒮𝒶𝓂𝒶𝓃𝓉𝒽𝒶 𝒯𝑜𝓇𝓇𝑒𝓈. I wouldn’t dream of inking a messy signature: I’m a star student, after all.

Oops. Sorry if that sounded braggy. (Wouldn’t want to be a Todd Flint.) But it’s true—I've been at Hawkings since kindergarten. Eight years of being the perfect pupil at my private school. 

I check my answers on my test. Yep, yep, yep; all are the answer I meant to write down. They seem right to me, anyways.

I observe the rest of the room. My whole class, about ten kids, is still scribbling away. Besides Rosalee Adams—she’s done, her paper on her desk, her gaze fixed on something out the window. I stifle a snort. She’s probably zoned out staring at the bushes or something. 

Rosalee is weird. Really weird. Our whole school knows it. She’s very antisocial—which I normally wouldn’t judge, seeing I’m an introvert myself. But she literally never interacts with anyone if she doesn’t have to. 

She shows up at school and is gone the instant the bell rings. She disappears in the woods framing our school during recess, something I can’t understand why the principal would let her do. She’s constantly murmuring under her breath and acting like she revealed a secret anytime somebody says something to her while she’s doing it. She’s like the modern, real-world version of Luna Lovegood—just, she isn’t magic.

The weirder thing about the weird girl is that she’d be normal if not for her quirks. Rosalee has messy strawberry blond hair falling to her waist—hair I would die to have replace my plain brown locks. She has wide blue eyes and there’s always a faint smile on her lips, like she’s aware of something everyone doesn't know—another odd trait. Rosalee and I are neck-to-neck in academic skills, too—she’s the only one in the grade as smart as me.

Next in my line of classmates I’m observing is Todd Flint. He’s a tall braggart who has enough academic brains to get into this school, but he’s still pretty dumb. For instance, he thinks people care when he remarks about his muscles.

My eyes meet my friend’s heads, hunched over their desks a row in front of me. Melody and I have been best friends since kindergarten, and this year, Asher, an eleven-year-old, skipped two grades and joined our class. He, Melody and I are now a trio of close friends.

“DOOOOO! DOO-DUL-DEE-DOOOO! DOO DOO!”

I sigh and watch Ms. Kara turn off her alarm clock. It has the most obnoxious ring tone and I’ve hated the stupid timer since I first heard it “doo”.

“That’s it!” Ms. Kara exclaims. “Time’s up, everyone!” She claps her hands. “Pencils down, papers turned over, and seats pushed in. You guys go straight to the cafeteria, okay?”

Everyone chants, “Okay!”

I stand up and meet my friends at the door. 

“Do you think you did well?” Asher shrugs at Melody and me as we start walking to lunch.

“I dunno,” Melody smiles. “I think I got the tibia and the fibula mixed up on that bone question.”

I laugh. “Happens to the best of us.”

Asher smiles. “Seriously, who names these things?” He thinks for a moment as we step into the lunch line. I see Rosalee disappear down the hall. She brings her lunch instead of buying it. “I’d remember bones better if they were named, I don’t know…Jeff. And Fred. And Bob.”

“Girls too,” Melody elbows him. “There could be bones named Sasha and Jillian and Arynn and—”

“Hush!”

Melody sends me a side-eye. “Did you just command me to be quiet?”

“Yup.”

“I will never shut my yapper!” She pumps her fist in the air.

We all laugh and sit down at the nearest empty table after we’ve received and paid for our food.  

“Truth or dare?”

I stare at Asher. “Truth.”

“Lemme rephrase that: dare or dare?”

I snort. “Preeeetty sure it doesn’t work that way. But dare.”

“Very wise choice,” he winks. “Now, listen: you have to do this, okay? No chickening out. But it’ll follow the Rules of Dares, don’t worry.”

I nod. “Sure.” The Rules are awesome. Dares have to be doable, they can’t be dangerous and/or get you in trouble, and lastly, they can’t be embarrassing. No, like, going up to your crush and saying “You’re a donkey, sir.”  

“So…what?” Melody prompts.

Asher grins evilly. “Samantha, you hafta go up to Rosalee and ask her why she always sneaks to the forest at recess. Oh, and why she’s always muttering stuff.” 

“No!” I explode. “No, nope, no way, NO!”

“Why?”

“Because—because…I-I—” I sputter, “NO!”

Asher and Melody stare at me, then burst into a fit of giggles. “Seriously, Sammy, why not?” Melody says, acting like she’s genuinely curious.

“It’s against the Rules!” I protest.

Asher snickers. “Not at all. You have to do it.”

I huff and turn my back on my friends.

A second passes and then… 

“Don’t be a chicken,” Asher and Melody singsong in unison.

I sigh and turn around. “Fine.”

The bell rings, signaling that we’re allowed to go start recess if we want to. My eyes are trained on Rosalee, who’s quietly picking through her lunchbox, alone at the table closest to the door. As the bell rings, I watch her face light up. She gets up and races out the doors.

I sigh again and start following her, wondering what the heck I just got myself into.


~*~ℝ𝕠𝕤𝕒𝕝𝕖𝕖~*~


Finally! FINALLY!

The sound of that bell is music to my sick-of-chatter ears. Spending fifteen minutes inside a room with almost a hundred kids is bad enough. Spending that time right before recess, the best part of the school day? Pure torture.

I don’t care about the playground. I’m aching to practice my powers, and the forest is the only location private enough to to do it.

As the bell rings, I hop up and push the doors open. Without looking back, I sprint towards the forest.

My feet pound on the squishy fresh soil as I pass the playground. Some monkey bars, benches, and pull-up bars for people like Todd. I don’t care.

I relax as I enter the woods. Trees line the footpath only one pair of feet has ever tread on—for the past something-years I’ve been walking this way to the clearing. 

Eventually, I’m there. Pine trees tint the air with their crisp scent and I get into position in the small clearing. I focus on a pile of pine needles on the ground and thrust my hands towards them, then up. The thin leaves mirror my movement, jumping up into the air. 

I concentrate and lift them higher and higher, until the bale is positioned a good five yards above my head. I drop my hands to my sides and smile as it rains pine needles.

I laugh as I tumble to the ground. People think I’m weird, looney Rosalee Adams, but honestly, I’d rather be an outcast of true weirdos and have powers than be a normal old human who fits in.

“Rosalee?”

I jump and madly glance around. Then I see her.

Samantha Torres is standing where the clearing and my path meet. Her fingers nervously tap against her jeans and her curls of dark brown hair whip around her neck as a gust of wind pushes us both.

“Um, hi,” she says.

I shoot to my feet. What had I done? “Hello. Um, how much did you see?” Straight to the point, yeah, but I needed to know.

“See what?”

“What?”

Huh?” She squints.

I laugh nervously. Thank god she hadn’t seen my powers at work. Even her being here made me a bit jumpy. Especially interacting with her.

I got my powers at birth, and accidentally killed my mother with them. Me and my dad lived near my school, but he didn’t know that I had magic. Nobody did. And I wanted to keep it that way.

I’m careful, but just careful enough. People think I’m weird, and sure, I am. I constantly mutter spells and stuff under my breath, and while I’d rather kids not notice, it’s in my first language—Elvish—so I’m fine. Same with sneaking off towards this clearing: people notice, but they don’t care.

Having Samantha here…yikes. I’m probably going to slip up at some point.

“Nothing,” I smile, trying to pretend like nothing happened. “Why are you here? Are you allowed to be here?” I grin as she opened her mouth to respond then shuts it. She definitely isn’t allowed—the only reason I am is because I mind-controlled Principal Pelegreen. I hate mind-controlling, but I needed permission to go into the woods.

“I’m here because of truth-or-dare,” Samantha admitted.

“Yeah? Why?”

“See, uh…” her voice trails off.

“Samantha—”

“Please,” she cuts me off, “Sammy or Sam.”

“Maybe Sammy,” I smile, “but not Sam. I know a guy named Sam and I hate him. He’s a dumbo who brags too much.”

Sammy laughs. “Sounds like Todd Flint.”

“You know him?” I don’t know why I’m surprised by this, but I am.

“Well, we’re not friends or anything, but yeah. He’s in my class, after all, so I’ve ‘known’ him for years. You should, too. Although I guess you can be in a guy’s class and never talk to him….” she stares at me apologetically. “Oh, geez, sorry if that was rude.”

“No problem. I just don’t like being around people that much.” They’re annoying, they talk way too much, and I just don’t like people. 

“I like people, but I’m still introverted.”

“Me too, definitely,” I smile.

“Yeah,” Samantha nods, “I can see that. Me, I’m up in my room a ton reading books. It’s actually funny because on tons of quizzes, it’s like ‘how many books do you read a year?’ Typically, the highest answer is fifty. And I’m like, nooooo, I read at least a hundred novels a year…”

Wow, Sammy pretty much just described my life when I’m not practicing my powers. “Yes! Exactly! Me too! What books do you like reading?”

“Well,” she ponders, “Keeper of the Lost Cities and The Hunger Games are my favorite series, but only because I can’t list every single Rick Riordan book. Rick is my fav author, ‘cuz of how funny he is, but those other series are still amazing.”

My jaw literally drops. “He’s my favorite author, too!”

We grin at each other profoundly, and I think, Wow, who knew? Having a conversation and not wanting to run off screaming? Dang, Rosalee, this is crazy!

“So, uh, anyways,” Samantha clears her throat, “I’m here for truth-or-dare. Asher asked me to ask you why you always come here, and what you murmur under your breath.”

She stared at me expectantly.

“Ummm…”

“Please tell me! I swear I won’t spill!”

I sigh. I never dreamed of telling anybody about my powers, but Sammy and I are becoming fast friends. Besides, it’ll feel good to get this weight off my chest. “Okay. But promise not to be weirded out or anything.”

“A weird explanation for a weird thing? No problem.”

“So…” I hesitate, “I have powers.”

Her face perks up. “Whuh?”

“I have magic. Powers. Magic powers.”

“What’s your power? Invisibility? Telekinesis? Super-strength? Flying? Mind-read—”

“All of them,” I blurt. “See, uh…I don’t just have a power. I have magic. Magic in general. So I can do a lot of things at different times. Sometimes I can teleport things. Other times I can walk through walls. My most common power is telekinesis, and the rarest is flying and mind control.”

“You’ve flown?” She says, her eyes stretched wider than I could’ve thought. “And mind-controlled people? Who?”

I shook my head. “Sorry, not saying.”

“Okay. Can you explain a little more?” 

“I got my powers at birth. I don’t know where they came from, but I like them. The end.” There’s a moment of silence, then… “Are you freaked out? Or do you think that’s cool?”  

“ARE YOU KIDDING!”

“Huh?”

“That’s awful! Really weird! Uugh, I hate you, you little alien! You’re a threat to society with those powers! I’m calling the police!”

I gasp. My worst fears are coming true.


~*~𝒮𝒶𝓂𝒶𝓃𝓉𝒽𝒶~*~


  “Ro-Rosalee? You okay?”

The girl has been standing in the same position for a good twenty seconds, her eyes glazed over and her mouth frozen in time.

I walked over and gently shake her. “Rosalee! Snap out of it!”

“DON’T!” She yells, coming to life. She backs up then glances around. “Wait, what? What just happened?”

“You blanked,” I say. “I told you about the dare and asked for you to tell me about it, then you froze up. Are you okay?”

Rosalee seems a little dazed. “Um, yeah.”

She shook her head, presumably to clear it. “Wow. Okay. Geez. I imagined it. I imagined it. Samantha isn’t going to call the police. She didn’t find out about my—”

“What?” I cock my head. “About your what?”

She seems to have forgotten I was there. She jumps.

“Sorry,” I breathe as I help her up from where she stumbled backwards.

“It’s okay. I’m sorry. I’m just a little jumpy.”

I nod then recall what she had said. “When you blanked, why did fake-me call the police? And what do you ‘have’?”

“You called the police because of what I have. You got freaked out.”

“I’m sorry.”

“Stop apologizing. I made it all up. You’ve just been standing there.”

I wonder what Rosalee ‘has’. She’s weird, but I have to revise my impression of her. Weird isn’t bad. She’s just a normal human being who goes into the woods. She isn’t a lunatic. She’s my friend.

A whistle tweets in the distance, a sharp, ear-spilling shriek that echos over to us. “Time to go in,” I say at the shrill noise.

We start walking back towards our school when Rosalee stops.

“Rosalee?” I say. “Let’s keep going.”

“No. Wait. Do you still want to know about what I constantly say, why I’m here in the forest every recess?”

“I…guess?”

“Because I can tell you.”

“Um…” What am I supposed to say in response to that?

“Wouldn't want to lose that dare, would you?” She laughs, but it’s really shaky. She seems nervous as her hands fidget with one another.

I quickly say, “Oh, it's okay. Asher dared to me to ask you—he didn’t say you had to answer.”

“No… I want to tell you. I’ve been keeping this to myself for way too long. I need to tell somebody. Please, Sammy. Can I tell you?”

I’m taken aback. “Yeah, sure.”

We start trotting again. Nobody’s on the playground when we emerge from the woods. We keep walking in silence until we’re right outside the school door.

“Ready to tell me yet?” I say, turning to Rosalee’s face.

“More than ready. One thing first, though.”

“Yeah?”

Her blue eyes glitter and a smile crowns her lips. “Can you keep a secret?”

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02:52 Aug 19, 2020

Hi, guys! 👋👋👋 I started writing this short story as I was in the car coming home from the beach. 🌅🏊🏻‍♀️I finished it at eleven o’clock at night (late for my age). 😑Basically, this might be awful!🥴😅😂 As always, I’d love if you shared your views. 🥳To people who spend 3-5 minutes if their time on a detailed comments: 🤩🤩🤩 THANK YOU!!! 🤗 Likes are also appreciated, as I’m always trying to get higher up the leaderboard 😁. Lastly, if you find any typos or grammar mistakes, punctuation or capitalization mishaps 😬, pleeeease tell me! 😉Just...

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Jesna Anna S.
12:53 Aug 19, 2020

That's a good dialogue to encourage the reader to comment with clarity! Thank you!

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12:54 Aug 19, 2020

Thanks! Um, no problem? Hehe....

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Akshat .
13:00 Aug 19, 2020

Ok. WOW! Lots of things for me to say here- 1. Thanks for including me in your bio! 😁 2. 😲😲😲WHAT! You're ONLY 11! I'm 11 too and I'm only 40th on the leaderboard! I thought that you were at LEAST 13 or 14! 😲😲😲 3. Awesome story. I was hooked and the blanking out twist was nice! 😀 4. 11 o'clock is NOT late for 11-year-olds. I, personally, sleep at 12. On WEEKDAYS! I just can't help it! 🤷‍♂️ 5. Asher is DanTDM's son! Did you get that name from him or did you just think of it yourself? PS. Do you even know DanTDM? (Spoiler: HE'S AWE...

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13:18 Aug 19, 2020

Haha, okay, I have an idea. Ima go on an upvoted marathon with your profile. Expect more karma points soon 😁 P. S. Thanks for putting me in my bio! ‘A source of fun’ YAAAAAY! 😍

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Akshat .
13:24 Aug 19, 2020

OMG! THANK YOU SO MUCH!!! Even I upvote some of your comments when I see them! This is what I think: "It's gonna be upvoted anyway by Amany or Celeste, so why not me?" PS. I'll do the same for your comments! But in a while though. I've spent a BIT too much time on my laptop.

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13:26 Aug 19, 2020

Haha, no problem! I think it’s a simple courtesy to upvote Reedsy friends 😁. P. S. Yaaaay thank you!!! Yup, I get that...I’m on my iPad a biiiit to much. (I have to set screen time limits for myself, haha)

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Akshat .
13:28 Aug 19, 2020

Lol

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Keerththan 😀
12:10 Aug 22, 2020

Wonderful story, Aerin. Are you just 11? Wow wonderful. Keep writing. Waiting for more of yours.....

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12:22 Aug 22, 2020

Thanks! ;)

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נιмму 🤎
02:33 Aug 20, 2020

i know this wasnt directed towards me but i like to chime in and butt my head into ppls buisness ... i also really like the hunger games books have you seen the movies too?? And yeah so you would be shocked by the number of young talented writers on here! I myself am 15😎

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Akshat .
03:31 Aug 20, 2020

I've only read the 1st book and seen the 1st movie. But I love it!

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11:27 Aug 20, 2020

Yesssssss! P. S. Love your new temporary bio, Akshat ;)

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Akshat .
11:44 Aug 20, 2020

You have the thanks of The Dark Lord AGAIN. Stop flattering me or I may have to keep "Silencio" upon you. And maybe the Body-Binding Curse so that you can stop typing. PS. Akshat here! I hope you don't get offended by any of these! I just have to be like Voldemort. 😁

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20:51 Aug 20, 2020

Haha

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Megan Sutherland
14:06 Aug 21, 2020

All of you people are as young as me? I am literally so surprised here because I thought most people were adults here, but WOW. A lot of people my age.

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נιмму 🤎
20:17 Aug 25, 2020

BRO WHAT IS HUNGER GAMES WRITING OMG??i saw it in ur bio

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20:18 Aug 25, 2020

Well, idk the full details, but Priyamvada and kinda me came up with this thing...basodslly every week, there’s a genre. And you hafta write in THAT genre, to step outside of your comfort zone. And there’s like a winner or something? I dunno. Ask Priyamvaaada!

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נιмму 🤎
20:23 Aug 25, 2020

oml who??

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Amany Sayed
20:49 Aug 25, 2020

lol, a sis gotta help her sis out. here's the link to her prof:https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/author/priyamvada-deshmukh/

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נιмму 🤎
00:40 Aug 26, 2020

ahh thankss

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20:15 Aug 26, 2020

Hey, siiiis! I just posted a new story!! It’s actually with the same characters as this story ;). Anyways, uh, yeah, ‘A Recipe For Disaster’ is posted if you could/want to check it out! ~A

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נιмму 🤎
02:46 Aug 20, 2020

for some reason, I really like the end. I mean i know you had to fit the whole "can you keep a secret" thing in there but i feel like you really did it perfectly. your wording about her eyes glittering and her smile... i feel like i say this for literally all of your short stories so you might be getting tired of hearing this but its true: SOOO creative. I never would've thought of this. My attention span is short and your ability to come up with such well thought and written stories in such a short time is alarming and i envy you.

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02:55 Aug 20, 2020

Ahhhh thank you so much! I’m glad you like the ending; I try to make my endings better than other elements. Thank youuu!

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21:54 Aug 28, 2020

This is INSANE!!! Keeper of the Lost Cities, Hunger Games, and Rick Riordan books are literally my FAVORITE!!! Harry Potter, too, and the one I like most of all of the series is probably Keeper of the Lost Cities. If you actually like Keeper of the Lost Cities, do you ship Sophitz or Sokeefe? You're ELEVEN?! I am, too!! (almost twelve, my birthday is in 2 days!) I am literally shocked, I thought that you were in high school! Congrats on being so young (who am I to tell you this, I am young, too)! You write better than people older than y...

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23:48 Aug 28, 2020

Ahhh yes I ADORE those books!! I enjoyed Harry Potter, too, but those are my favs ;). Yesss KotLC for life!! OH MY GOD SOKEEFE DUUUUH Wow, really?! Cooool! Well, happy early birthday!! Haha, thanks!!!!! Eee thank you so much!!!! I’ll upvote you toooo! (But you don’t have a lot of comments, do sorry, I can’t do hundreds of points...😑😑😑 But hey, it’s still something! 😁)

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22:08 Aug 29, 2020

Sokeefe? Aerin, that is an INSULT! Team Sophitz for life!!

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22:10 Aug 29, 2020

WUT NO I mean, I’m not even anti-Sophitz (impressive, cuz a lot of people hate Fitzy by book 8). But Sokeefe is amazing! THEY ARE CLEAAAARLY MEANT TO BEEEEE TOGETHER

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20:13 Aug 30, 2020

Same, just the opposite, I'm cool with SoKeefe, too. If I wrote a fanfic about Sophitz, there would be SoKeefe moments, too. But I am TRULY TEAM SOPHITZ!!! (I just have to convert my cousin to Team Fitzphie!!)

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20:15 Aug 30, 2020

Hmmmm

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Meera Lakshmi
13:04 Mar 25, 2021

KOTLC FOR EVAA!!!

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14:13 Mar 25, 2021

YASSSSS

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Meera Lakshmi
14:14 Mar 25, 2021

I am on the doc!

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22:11 Aug 28, 2020

Okay, upvoting spreeeee! Expect to see a couple hundred more karma points!! You deserve them!! I will probably do some more, but I probably gave you a couple hundred points JUST FROM THE COMMENTS ON THIS STORY!! I want to get you higher in da TOP 5!! 😁😁😁

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23:48 Aug 28, 2020

Thank youuu! As I said below, I’m about to upvote youuu!

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Amany Sayed
16:34 Aug 20, 2020

Hey, is the answer to the riddle the word wrong? I'll keep thinking.

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16:36 Aug 20, 2020

Yup, you got it riiiiiiight!

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Amany Sayed
16:38 Aug 20, 2020

REALLY?! YAYYY

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16:45 Aug 20, 2020

Haha

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Amany Sayed
16:46 Aug 20, 2020

Also, a person names Bob may or may not have taken your would you rather quiz.....

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16:49 Aug 20, 2020

Haha, okay, I just saw 😆

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16:48 Aug 20, 2020

Hehehehehe... I’m gonna go check ;)

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Sunny 🌼
14:56 Aug 19, 2020

Ooooh~ I love keeper of the lost cities! Me and my friend talk about it all the time. (Im convinced I would be a flasher btw). Nice story! I really likes Rosalee as a character and Sammy as well.

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16:17 Aug 19, 2020

Thank you! Haha, cool. I’m pretty sure I would be a Hydrokinetic!

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Nirosha P
10:26 Aug 19, 2020

This story was creative and original. I liked it :) One small thing... "I think I got the tibia and the fibula mixed up on that bone question.” This line. There was a chemistry test but bone questions. Bone questions are usually asked in Biology. At least for me it is... 😅 Anyway I just stated this because I had a chemistry test earlier today. 😫I can totally relate to how they felt during the test in this story :) Good job and keep writing! PS: Do you mind checking out my story 'Time to think back'? I would love feedback :)

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12:33 Aug 19, 2020

Thanks! Haha, I’ll fix that. I was thinking it was a science test (stupid because I write chemistry 2 minutes ago) when I added that question, hehe... Thank youuu! P. S. I tried. I really did. But I slipped up and read a different story of yours, haha. I hope you’ll take feedback on that most recent story of yours???

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Nirosha P
21:56 Aug 19, 2020

Sure! I don't mind :)

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Niveeidha Palani
10:18 Aug 19, 2020

Agh! I need a part two right now! Just kidding. Seriously, though. 😁 It kept me really hooked 'till the end! ✍ Wonderfully written. Just noticed a pretty small error. It might not seem big, but you know, writers strive for excellence! ✌ PS - Do you know when your book will be released? “Wouldn't want to lose that dare, would you?” She laughs, but it’s really shaky. Change the "She" to a "she". Just check that and you're good to go! And of course, never stop writing! 😊

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12:31 Aug 19, 2020

Haha, I’m definitely thinking about doing part 2! Thanks! I’ll fix that error in a sec. Thank you! P. S. I’m hoping by the end of the month. I just have to finish typing up the edits then I’ll make a book cover, and voila, published! So yeah...Color Quest with hopefully be on Amazon in less than two weeks 😁.

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Niveeidha Palani
21:57 Aug 19, 2020

Oooh! How many pages are there? (If you don't mind me asking though, I'm just curious, 😅) No problem, it was a minor error! :)

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22:01 Aug 19, 2020

Well, it kinda depends. I’ve typed it up in Docs in size 14 pt font, so it’s 300 pages for ME. Color Quest has 70,000+ words, soooo...whatever that means to you! 😅

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Niveeidha Palani
22:16 Aug 19, 2020

Whoa! Pretty long! Do tell me when it comes out! I would love to buy it! :)

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22:17 Aug 19, 2020

Wow, really?! Thank you, that means so much!!!! I will ;)

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22:18 Aug 19, 2020

P. S. I’m gonna upvote you a bunch now. Expect more karma points soon LOL!

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22:26 Aug 19, 2020

Update (see above): you’re now a hundred karma points up! 16th place, congrats!

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Lilliane Wei
06:59 Aug 23, 2020

What a great story! I really love the suspense behind Rosalee. You're only eleven? Wow! Anyway, nice job!

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12:36 Aug 23, 2020

Thanks! Yup, I’m a tween!

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Avery G.
03:08 Aug 19, 2020

WOW! This was really good! I didn't find any grammer mistakes, but I might be wrong. I really like the plot and I like the name Rosalee! It's super pretty. It's also cool how you keep on changing the perspectives. This was really creative! Amazing job!

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12:00 Aug 19, 2020

Thank you!!

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Avery G.
18:59 Aug 19, 2020

I wanted to answer your poll, so here's my answer:🐈 It was super hard to choose...

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19:01 Aug 19, 2020

Got it. I’m personally a dog person (I WOULD NEVER BETRAY MY PUP) but I get why people love cats! Thank for answering ;)

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Avery G.
19:02 Aug 19, 2020

Yeah! I like dogs too! But...when I was a little kid a dog attacked me in a bathroom soo... But I still like dogs! Lol

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19:54 Aug 19, 2020

Wow, uh, okay...sorry! Yesss

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Akshat .
06:23 Aug 20, 2020

I can't even imagine a dog attacking me! 😱😱 Although, when I was walking outside once, a couple of dogs started barking at me. I just ran like my life depended on it (I think it did.)

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Avery G.
15:24 Aug 19, 2020

You're welcome!

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Sia S
04:29 Aug 20, 2020

Hey Aerin! Get ready and go get a umbrella 🌂 because.... you are gonna be showered by Karma pts. !!! Upvoted you 34 pts yet, more are coming!

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11:33 Aug 20, 2020

Ahhhhh thank you!!! I noticed so many of my comments upvoted and now I have 200 karma points MORE than I went to bed with?! Thank you so much, Sia! (And my sis Celeste, because I’m pretty sure she upvoted this other conversation too.) I’ll upvote you in a second?

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Sia S
11:36 Aug 20, 2020

Welcome😊 Thanks in advance!

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11:38 Aug 20, 2020

🤗🤗🤗

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Sia S
03:17 Aug 19, 2020

I agree with Avery, nice take on the prompt, and where in the world did you find the name Rosalee??

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12:00 Aug 19, 2020

Hmm, well...I dunno. When picking names, sometimes I find uncommon names, sometimes I make up names, and sometimes I get a name and twist up the spelling. Rosalie=Rosalee now!!!

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Sia S
14:02 Aug 19, 2020

Cool Hack !!

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Avery G.
15:24 Aug 19, 2020

Yeah, that's a good idea.

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Avery G.
03:43 Aug 19, 2020

Yeah. Rosalee is not that common.

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Sia S
03:54 Aug 19, 2020

Yes.

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נιмму 🤎
20:14 Aug 25, 2020

OML AERIN U HAVE 5000 points (well more but )nkfasjfkdsjfsadjfslkdfjklsajkdfjklsd thats crazyyy congrats !! you deserve it!!😁

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20:17 Aug 25, 2020

Yaaaay thank you sis!!!! Always trying to climb up the leaderboard ;) I betcha you’ll be in top ten sooom! (You’re already in top 20!)! Thank you!

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Akshat .
04:26 Aug 20, 2020

Answer to your poll --> 🐶🐕🐕‍🦺🐩 DOGS!! FOREVER!! But I'd rather have a cat than let's say ... a fish. 🐈🐟 Answer to your question --> I think you succeed AND fail. You fail at your mission but succeed in whatever you wanted to fail in.

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11:32 Aug 20, 2020

YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS 🐶🐶🐶🐶🐶=🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩🤩 Yup. Cool. Buuuuut...Here’s the dilemma: everybody says thaaaaaat! I changed it to my bio to ONE answer, like: succeed or: fail. Hmmm, so, uh, do you wanna answer again? I personally think it’s a fail because you had a mission, and you failed. It doesn’t matter if you’d succeeded along the way, your main goal was failed.

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Akshat .
11:37 Aug 20, 2020

I have temporarily changed my preferences to be more suitable to my present character. I am a snake person.

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11:45 Aug 20, 2020

Note: I have no idea what I just wrote, but I hope you enjoy it, LOL!

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Akshat .
11:47 Aug 20, 2020

If I do enjoy it, then you may be inducted into the Death Eaters. What are your thoughts on snake-skull tattoos and permanent service?

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11:52 Aug 20, 2020

Hmm, uh....is ‘no thanks’ an option? See, I’m not really a snake-tattoo person and I kinda don’t want to be doing evil full-time... I’LL JOIN IF I GET MONDAYS OFF (AS WELL AS WEEKENDS) AND I GET A DOOOOG TATTOO

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11:44 Aug 20, 2020

Haha, oki-dokes, you-know-who! “Who?!” No, I was referring to— “Cheese?” Cheese isn’t a ‘who’! It’s not a person! “Duh. It’s CHEESE.” *sighs* “Dang, you’re stupid.” But...I’m you. “The stupider part of me, yes.” Uhhhh.... “Cheese is cheese, but cheese is a person, so cheese is a person.” Whuh...? “Duh.” Okay, this has GONE TOO FAR. *whistles* “Wh—what are you calling...?” *grins evilly* you’ll see. *Chickens toddle up* “Oh. This isn’t so fearsome.” *more grinning evilly* suuuure. *whistles t...

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Akshat .
11:46 Aug 20, 2020

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13:48 Aug 21, 2020

Hi Akshat! Just so you know, I moved the dogs-or-cats poll to a super-short quiz because it was hard to find and count all the responses around 260+ comments. https://forms.gle/ygrgsHuajDEfsxez6 Would you mind taking that quiz to submit your dogs-or-cats answer again? Thanks!

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נιмму 🤎
02:30 Aug 20, 2020

http://chng.it/96qzf2wshQ SIGN FOR JUSTICE FOR LUZ GONZALEZ another one of those petitions. Spread it like peanut butter and jelly on a sandwhich. (also about to read this lol had skool)

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02:32 Aug 20, 2020

Okay, I signed it!

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נιмму 🤎
00:29 Aug 21, 2020

thanks! I signed your link about the immigrants.

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00:42 Aug 21, 2020

😆 Thanks!

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Amany Sayed
19:25 Aug 19, 2020

Oh, and I almost forgot, I'm most definitely a cat person, all the way :) AND if you tried to fail and succeeded, I'd say you failed at your intention, but succeeded at the task, like if you wanted to rip something not straight (don't know where this analogy came from) and it came out straight you succeeded at the straightness, but not at what you wanted to do.

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19:34 Aug 19, 2020

Cool 😎😎 I’m a dog personnnnnn Also cool 😎😎. I think you failed, because that was your intention.

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Amany Sayed
19:39 Aug 19, 2020

Nice :) Yeah, I get what you mean. Also, I don't really know about the riddle today... I could just.... unbottle the cloud and fly away?

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19:45 Aug 19, 2020

Hehe, funny guess, but NOPE! Keep thinking. Here’s a hint...I added in those objects as a distraction. You don’t need them to escape... Tell me if you want another hint! I love giving them out 😉

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Amany Sayed
20:28 Aug 19, 2020

Hehe, I kind of like my answer... I saw the answer in someone else's comment just now oops, but I love it.... 🙃😂

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20:28 Aug 19, 2020

Haha yessssssss 😅

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User_2443 0967
13:45 Jan 19, 2021

Ps Rosalee is such a pretty name- My friend is legit named Asher!

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14:25 Jan 19, 2021

P. S. Ty! Oh cool, I love that name :D

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User_2443 0967
14:27 Jan 19, 2021

Lol yw!

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User_2443 0967
14:27 Jan 19, 2021

Lol yw!

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User_2443 0967
14:26 Jan 19, 2021

Lol yw!

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User_2443 0967
13:43 Jan 19, 2021

Wow. Just, just-wow. This is so good, omg, I can't believe it. This is so good, Aerin! lol, right now I'm dealing with insomnia, so- just lol. This is so creative! Geez! I'm older-SO THIS IS FREAKING AMAZING! Also if there's a sequel PLEEZ lmk. this is suuuuuper insane and absolutely just- better then I can explain in words. KEEP WRITING!! Also I was reading previous comments and was curious. I thought everyone here was adults(teehee not me) but anyways... beeeeeeeeeeeautiful job!! 💛💚💙❤️

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14:19 Jan 19, 2021

Eeep thank you so muchhh!!!! And oh, haha, there’s actually two sequels XD Well, kinda—‘a Recipe for Disaster’ is a sequel and ‘Cruel Spell and a Cruel Joke’ is a prequel if you want to check them out :DDD <3 Weifewnifwinfiefj thanks so muchhhh is means a lot that you enjoyed it 🥺🤩<3333

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Phebe Emmanuel
00:11 Aug 22, 2020

Hey, Aerin! Loved the story! You have so much talent, I'm jealous (LOL). Also, my guesses for the brain teasers are: 1. Evan Hansen????? 2. Drama Llama 3. I love pizza 4. Do you like or love basketball? 5. Basketball is amazing. Or at least I think so. I'm not too good at things like this, so I hope I didn't just fail! 😇

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00:15 Aug 22, 2020

Thank youuu! Yeah, you got them ALL right, which is a first! Congrats! Actually, #3 is I love cheese, but the cheese and pizza emojis look similar and it’s the same idea so you still got it riiight!

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Phebe Emmanuel
00:26 Aug 22, 2020

Yayyyy!

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Sarah Freeman
18:03 Aug 21, 2020

OMG THAT ENDING...❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️!!! That description of her eyes glittering and everything...LOVED IT. The story has a very interesting plot, too! Although there is one thing that I’m sure you’re sick of being told—show, don’t tell. You’re probably inwardly screaming at me right now, and I don’t blame you. But seriously—the only real description you have of anything in this story is the last line. I suggest having frequent little indirect descriptions, like ‘Samantha swept her long brown hair out of her eyes. She was sick of it getting tangled ...

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18:19 Aug 21, 2020

Yay, thank you! I’m glad you love the ending do much (I’m proud of it). Yup, I know the show-don’t-tell thing. The thing is, in my opinion, showing is kind of part of author’s voice, and another third you can add to your story. For example, Hunger Games was very distinguished because of how much showing there is, and Percy Jackson hardly has any showing—which makes it read faster. Different kinds of stories have different amounts of showing, and I think it’s fine when I don’t use a ton of showing on my stories that are especially quick and h...

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Sarah Freeman
18:35 Aug 21, 2020

No notes on becoming a playwright, I noticed. I can’t tell if that means you dissed the idea altogether, forgot I mentioned it, or are secretly writing a play. I agree with you about the showing part, sort of. Some good books do have limited showing. But for readers to know characters, appearances are a good tactic. I still have no idea what Rosalee looks like. First I imagined her with pale skin and curly auburn hair, then with chocolate-brown skin and frizzy black hair. I’ve always imagined anyone named Samantha as having pale skin and str...

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18:43 Aug 21, 2020

Haha, no, I’m not writing a play. And yay, you agree! (Sort of.) EXCUSE ME? You not knowing their approaches means you skimmed. In the first line, I mention Samantha has blue eyes. Later on, I mention Rosalee’s appearance and a but more of Sammy’s: Rosalee has messy strawberry blond hair falling to her waist—hair I would die to have replace my plain brown locks. She has wide blue eyes and there’s always a faint smile on her lips, like she’s aware of something everyone doesn't know—another odd trait.‘ Rosalee has light, long, messy hair and...

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Sarah Freeman
19:19 Aug 21, 2020

Ok, maybe at the very beginning you mentioned it. But the point is that the readers REMEMBER their appearances, and clearly I didn’t. Well, whatever. Keep writing 👍

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19:36 Aug 21, 2020

Mmm...I understand that over the course of a NOVEL, but this thing wasn’t even ten pages from the descriptions to the end...

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Niveeidha Palani
07:18 Aug 21, 2020

Hi Aerin, you might think I'm going a little bonkers, because I think if you look back in the comments, I already commented twice, but I'm here to answer your poll 🐶 I prefer dogs, to be honest. Although cats are really agile, dogs are like best friends. (●'◡'●)

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12:43 Aug 21, 2020

Yessss doggies!!!

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Niveeidha Palani
22:25 Aug 21, 2020

👩‍🦰

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22:28 Aug 21, 2020

Oh, right—just so you know, I moved the poll in my bio to an actual quiz, cuz it was hard to tally up among 400 comments. Here’s the link tp the mini-quiz if you wanna submit you’re answer!: https://forms.gle/HEwxhX6TFSVd8dLFA

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Niveeidha Palani
22:33 Aug 21, 2020

Oh okay! 😊

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