Tying The Thread, A Story of The Undead

Submitted into Contest #64 in response to: Write a ghost story where there’s more going on than it first appears.... view prompt

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Horror Sad

You wanted a ghost story

With a twist?

Here’s the twist-

I’m the ghost

You can laugh

Shake your head

Take a bath

Go back to bed

I’m not lying

Not a bit

I’m here sighing

I can’t even sit

If I don’t concentrate, 

Things go through my skin

I don’t have any weight

My ‘bones’ are papery thin

How am I writing?

Well I just keep fighting

These worlds that I create

I live in them you see

Bouncing from state to state

The characters are my family

So I’m a ghost

Sorry for keeping it from you

Not like I can boast

About being in the undead crew

You still think I’m lying

That this is all fake

You’re not buying

Think it’s a story I make

You can think what you want

You can scoff all you want

You can shake your head in disbelief

Take a sigh in some relief

I’m just a spirit

I’m pretty dead

Call me an ‘it’

I can’t even eat bread

Let me tell you something

It’s nothing like TV

They have nothing

Us you can see

We’re a little transparent

A little tainted white

But there’s nothing about us to fear

We don’t haunt the night

I’m just like you

But I’m really not

I don’t say boo

But I don’t get hot

I don’t need to eat

I don’t need to shower

I don’t feel the heat

And I don’t have any power

I can go where I please

But I don’t age at all

I don’t feel the breeze

And I can’t play with a ball

I don’t get sick

I can’t fall in love

Or get hit with a brick

I don’t feel a shove

And my blood isn’t thick

I have friends

They live in my head

Our fun never ends

When we tie our thread

Pulling and tying

Making sure to think hard

Forget about crying

Do you see a guard?

Are you confused now?

Even more than before?

Can you not see how?

I’ll tell you more

I have lots of thin thread

In all different colors

My favorite is red

I find that it covers

All the blood

Once it falls out

It covers the blood

And I muffle their shout

Who, you wonder

What do I do?

Outside, booms the thunder

I’ll tell you

Listen to me closely

Do you hear?

It’ll seem very ghostly

But there’s nothing to fear…

Nothing to fear, 

Though it seems scary

Nothing to fear

Even if you think it very

I’m just like you

You’re just like me

I do what I do

And I do it with glee

See I do what I feel

And I do what I please

Sometimes it leaves me with a meal

Other times with fleas

Am I making no sense once more?

Are you still confused?

You’ll get it soon for sure

Though sorry if you end up bruised

I told you I don’t eat

But that doesn’t mean I don’t get hungry

Sometimes I just want a treat

Yet no one wants to feed me

I must get food myself

But it’s a different hunger

A hunger in my soul

I feel much younger

I have but one goal

I take my long red thread

And I snip it with my teeth

They all end up dead

Their souls underneath

Ripe for the taking

Lovely and sweet

Still think I’m faking?

Then come watch me eat

I tie the thread tight

And pull the head off

I don’t take a bite

That would make me cough

I press my hands down

I close my eyes

Don’t give me that frown

I still hear your cries

This is just what I must do

Please don’t judge me

Not like I’m doing it to you

You don’t have to agree

But just leave me alone

If you won’t listen

Leave me alone

It’s my own decision


I wish I could cry

I feel so hurt

But I can’t even die

My body’s under the dirt

My soul bears the agony

My heart feels the pain

I’m losing my sanity

Again and again

Why should I spare everyone

And let the people live

It’s all in good fun

You have nothing you could give

For I’m just a spirit

I’m just air

Can you hear it?

The sound of my sweet despair

I feel like I’m dying

But I’m already gone

In my heart, I am crying

My body’s moved on

I know I’m doing wrong

I know it’s mean

My will isn’t strong

My conscience unclean

Sometimes I regret it

Sometimes I’m ashamed

And yet I never quit

Instincts be blamed

If this makes you shiver

Makes your skin crawl

Makes your lip quiver

Can’t hear more at all

Then I suggest you leave

Because it doesn’t end now

I don’t know how you’ll receive

When you hear how

I bury the body

Without cleaning the blood

It gets quite soggy

As if it’s covered in mud

It’s black and red

And other colors too

It spews from their head

It’s quite the view

It stains my hands 

And my clothes too

Ruins my plans

Gives others a clue

Of what I was doing

During the night

Give them a reason to keep booing

At my sorry sight

But don’t think for a minute

That I even care

I have quite the limit

And it’s really rare

To see me snap

To lose my cool

Maybe slap

It’s a personal rule

I let others have their own opinion

Think what you want about me

But I’m not your minion

And my will is free

I’ll keep killing 

You do you

I get my filling

Though I can’t undo

Families hate me

All of them do

So, you see

I kill them too

All alone

Is how I’m left

Future’s set in stone

And it’s not the best

You could say it’s my fault

And maybe it is

Soon I will bolt

Stop doing the biz

For now, just remember

That I’m a ghost


Remember remember, I haunt the night

Deeply sorry if I give you a fright...


October 22, 2020 01:21

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263 comments

Sia S
03:37 Oct 22, 2020

This was actually really good!! I was surprised by how you answered this prompt! Good job!!

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Amany Sayed
12:51 Oct 22, 2020

Aw, thank you!

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Sia S
16:43 Oct 22, 2020

:)!

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Arwen Dove
05:32 Feb 14, 2021

Wow! I don't know how you write so well!!

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Amany Sayed
05:37 Feb 14, 2021

Aw, you're too kind :)

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WOW, this was very different Amany...you're really good in poetry! Awesome! Do check out my new stories and tell me what you think.

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Amany Sayed
15:17 Nov 24, 2020

Thanks so much! I will when I get the chance!

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17:11 Nov 12, 2020

Ooh, I love the new daily poem! You did a great job on it!

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17:11 Nov 12, 2020

And yes, praying for Zilla!

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Amany Sayed
20:33 Nov 12, 2020

Tysm!

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20:53 Nov 12, 2020

Of course!

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21:00 Nov 11, 2020

Amany!! I love the bio poem!! How do you write such amazing poems like that? Also, do you do swim as a sport? That was SO good!

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Amany Sayed
22:35 Nov 11, 2020

Aw thank you! I don't know, when I'm in the mood the words flow! Yes, I do! I'm sooo glad you liked it Kylie :) Be sure to check daily for a new poem!

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23:31 Nov 11, 2020

I will!

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Itay Frenkel
21:35 Nov 10, 2020

‘You wanted a ghost story with a twist? Here’s the twist-“ Dude you really kept your promise on that one , a poem about a genuinely apologetic ghost 😂 I love horror, and even though I normally don’t enjoy poetry this was a fun read. The character you created feels really human...pun intended. Seriously, great flow and well developed character. Great job Amany!

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Amany Sayed
21:50 Nov 10, 2020

Thank you so much, Itay! I'm so glad you liked it! Thanks again!

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Sam S.
12:52 Nov 10, 2020

Woah...im commenting sooo late but still....couldnt help saying this was an amazing story. You've got damn good poetry skills Amany.....just asking...are you on AllPoetry? P.S. If you get time, would you mind giving me feedback on my stories? Thanks!

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Amany Sayed
14:12 Nov 10, 2020

Aw thank you so much! I am not sadly. Of course!

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11:18 Nov 10, 2020

I loved the content

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Amany Sayed
14:13 Nov 10, 2020

:)

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Amaya .
00:31 Nov 10, 2020

This is what I think of you: sweet, nice, comforting. makes me smile, great writer (obvi), louis-partridge lover (understandably). optimistic, bubbly. nobody is perfect but she comes close. - Amaya <3

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Amany Sayed
00:43 Nov 10, 2020

THIS IS SO NICE DLKFJASDLKFJ

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Amaya .
03:11 Nov 10, 2020

all trueeeee

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Amany Sayed
03:15 Nov 10, 2020

Aw shucks

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Sia S
17:29 Nov 07, 2020

Check out my bio!

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Amany Sayed
22:30 Nov 07, 2020

I'm April and September :)

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Sia S
06:04 Nov 08, 2020

Nice! I'm July, August and December, even though I was born on nov.

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Amany Sayed
15:48 Nov 08, 2020

I was born April :)

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Sia S
04:27 Nov 09, 2020

Nice!

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Lulu Lemon
04:13 Nov 07, 2020

Good story. I liked how you made it unique with some poetry. It is very beautiful and you are an amazing poetry writer.

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Amany Sayed
04:15 Nov 07, 2020

Aw thanks so much that's so sweet!

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Lulu Lemon
04:19 Nov 07, 2020

Of course!!! Seriously though you could have a career out of it it is really good.

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Amany Sayed
04:26 Nov 07, 2020

What that's so nice-

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Lulu Lemon
04:28 Nov 07, 2020

Of course!! You are a really good writer (In poetry and in stories)

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Noah Morrow
00:36 Nov 07, 2020

I loved the story

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Amany Sayed
04:09 Nov 07, 2020

Why thank you :)

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Amaya .
21:31 Nov 06, 2020

Amany you better write a story with that romance promptttt

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Amany Sayed
04:09 Nov 07, 2020

Ah will Ah willll

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04:21 Nov 06, 2020

I read your bio, and I am a piano, a saxophone, and a violin!! (I play the piano and violin, what a coincidence!!)

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Amany Sayed
05:02 Nov 06, 2020

(wow awesome!)

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15:55 Nov 06, 2020

haha yeah

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Avani G
02:52 Nov 06, 2020

Flute, violin, and piano (I play the violin and a little piano).

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Amany Sayed
02:57 Nov 06, 2020

I play flute and violin and a teeny bit piano and that's great :)

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Avani G
03:00 Nov 06, 2020

I wish I could play the flute. It's such an interesting instrument ;)

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Amany Sayed
03:05 Nov 06, 2020

It's very fun :)

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Avani G
03:09 Nov 06, 2020

Cool!

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02:35 Nov 05, 2020

Hey Amany, I have updated Belle!!

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Sia S
06:11 Oct 26, 2020

Ya there

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18:30 Oct 25, 2020

I- And you say I'm better than you at poetry🤐 Anyways! This was amazing! I enjoyed it overall it was really really goood. I felt really bad for the ghost but the way you wrote it, you made it seem like he/she doesn't need anyones pity. I think your great at writing poetry especially one that rhymes, I write rhyming poetry most of the time but not for too long I get tired of rhyming😂 but you stuck with it to the end! Which was great! My favorite part wassssss.. Don’t give me that frown I still hear your cries This is just what I m...

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Amany Sayed
14:41 Oct 26, 2020

I literally CAN'T do free verse. Thank you so much! Yeah, I have rhymezone.com to thank. Glad you liked it Snow! Thanks again! Bye! Btw still waiting for a certain part 7.....

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15:05 Oct 26, 2020

Oh sameee I always use rhyme zone when I make poetry that story 'Kinda Hurt. Okay?" was the first poem I had ever done that was like freeverse. So I felt like it was super sloppy🥺. But whatever! Of course! Hehe😅😅I'm waiting on the promptssss!

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B. W.
20:07 Oct 24, 2020

I made a new story :D could you check out "A strange night" and leave some feedback?

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Amany Sayed
20:15 Oct 24, 2020

Sure thing!

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B. W.
20:16 Oct 24, 2020

thanks ^^ remember to leave feedback

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Sunny 🌼
12:08 Oct 23, 2020

Well dam, that was scary. ALSO YOU FINALLY UPLOADED THANK GOD I WAS SO BORED!

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Amany Sayed
14:10 Oct 23, 2020

Yay! HAHA I'LL TRY AND UPDATE MORE OFTEN TO SATISFY YOUR BOREDOM MY PRINCESSAAA

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Sunny 🌼
19:55 Oct 23, 2020

THANK YOUUUUU!

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