Authors note: Hey everyone! Hope y'all are having an amazing Monday. Just wanted to say a few things real quick.
- This story was made with B.W. If you want to see part 2, make sure to check out her page. I hope you guys all like it!
- QOTD: have you ever had/do you have braces?
- I hope this was better than my previous ones. I put some more thought into it.
- Would you ever want to see part 3?? Let me know!
- 4 DAYS TILL CHRISTMAS!!!!!!!!!
- This is super duper random, buuuuutttt I’m getting (ugh) braces on. I’m so nervous, wish me luck! (hehe get it, cuz the girls name is Lucky winkwinkwinkwinkwinkwink.
Unlucky Lucky
I stared out my dirty window and gazed at the boys and girls cheerfully playing outside. I wish I wasn't like this. I wish I wasn't the poor shy girl who couldn't say anything to anyone. My whole life had been poor. figuratively and literally. Sighing I turned away and looked around my room. A layer of dirt covered the ground and my blanket had more holes than cloth. All of my clothes were donations from a local charity. I didn't have a father, only a mother who worked day and night to provide for both of us. She came home exhausted and fell asleep immediately. I went to school during the daytime and cried myself to sleep at night. Each day, tears of self-pity leaked from my face and stained my pillow. Life was a big, dirt-filled piece of waste.
It was almost Christmastime and all the children spoke of what they wanted for Christmas in class. When the teacher asked me, I mumbled ”food”, barely loud enough for anyone to hear. Miss Thompson cleared her throat and continued her reading. That's the problem; no one is willing to lend a hand. They simply look past you and pretend nothing happened. They're afraid, I'm not sure what of, but everyone tries to get away from me when I talk to them. Everyone thinks they're better than the last one and don't take time to recognize someone in need. Another thing that I hated was my name. I was called Lucky. So unfitting. My life was anything but lucky. Sometimes I heard snickers in the back of the class when Teacher took the role. My existence seemed to not matter as I appeared to float through classes like a hallucination to everyone. The so-called, gossip girls laughed at my knotted, waist-length, raven-colored hair. I tried to brush it out using items around the house, but I always ended up frustrated with myself and gave up. As you could probably tell, my home life sucked. I thought everyone hated me until I saw what waited for me on Christmas day…
“Lucky!” I heard my mother’s voice drift upstairs. I awoke from my slumber and stumbled across the dusty floor and into the living room. I knew my mother didn’t get me a present. I didn’t mind, we had a nice meal on Christmas instead.
“Yeah?” I called back.
“I think you should look outside the door,” she said, with a hint of confusion on her face. I shrugged and opened up the door, barely held together by a few screws. Peering outside I noticed a cage. My curiosity led me to the porch where I glanced inside the enclosure. All of a sudden, a bird flew around in it. I gasped, it was the most exotic looking bird I had ever seen. Large blue spots were scattered across his body, and his wings were a brilliant white. They reminded me of blueberries. Blueberry. I thought. That's what I’ll call you. Beside the cage was a lifetime supply of birdseed and toys. My eyes grew hot and tears welled up behind them. This was the best gift I had ever received! Who would give me such a wonderful thing?
”Momma who-” I stopped short when I saw she was crying. She didn't know either. I brought the magnificent bird inside, but soon realized my dirty room was no place for him. In a flash, determination coursed through my veins. Something I had never felt before. In a frenzy, I swept the dust outside the window and patched up my old quilt with the extra cloth I had laying around. This was the best thing that had happened to me. I had something to take care of, and that made me have a motherly instinct to protect the bird. Finally, it was finished. With satisfaction, I set Blueberry on my window seat so he could peer outside. For a while, I was satisfied just watching him play around, but then I wanted to do more. I wanted to play with him. I cautiously opened the door and stuck my hand inside the cage, fishing around for the bird. Before I had time to react, Blueberry fluttered his wings and flew out. Why did he want to get away from me? Is he just like everyone else? Pushing the thought away quickly, I staggered around the room trying to find him. When he was located in my rat-filled closet, I let out an audible gulp. I knew I had to get him out. I shook slightly as I made my way through the small space. I thought I could feel spiders crawl up my legs, and mice nibbling at my heels. When I finally found my bird I grabbed him before he had any chance of getting away again. He squirmed the whole way through the closet, and back to his cage. I didn't know why he kept trying to get away, but I did know that tomorrow was a new day. And as I climbed in bed, I knew I would have to make him like me, for he was my one and only friend.
Another note: thank you guys so much if you read til the end! Also sorry this is so short. I’m going to have to work on that for sure. Again, be sure and check out part 2 on B.W’s page!!!! And thank you B.W for collaborating with me! It was so much fun.
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I'm stuck on the title. Any ideas? Best suggestion wins 🏆.
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don't worry Abby I did upvote you like many points. I did not even count it because you are a genuine writer that needs our immense support. Don't worry you will be back on the leaderboard. I was the first person who kinda saw you see downvoted. I immediately told the Marshmallow community and see you are reviving back. Don't worry. By the way, I have submitted a new story would love your feedback on it.
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Oh my gosh really?????? Thank you so muchhhhh!!!! Your awesome!! I'll check it out right away
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No, need to thank me. I am here your friend, and I will help you whenever I can. I contacted Luke and Jeannie immediately. I contacted other people but they did not help like these both did. You ever 39 it really made me sad. SO stay strong.
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awww you are so sweet! What are Luke and Jeannie's accounts? So I can thank them.
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You can see them on the leader board.
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Are Luke and Jeannie their usernames?
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Abby what's going on? Are you okay? What has been happening to you on here? I'm so sorry for anything that might've made you feel terrible, you don't deserve anything like that.
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oh, I believe you mean concerning my bio. And in that case, yea I kinda wrote that in a hurry because I was upset I got downvoted 2000 points in one night. I don't know if I'll leave I just want a place that I can receive feedback on my stories and not worry about downvoting. If that makes sense.
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got it, got it. i think the best thing to do is just let go of caring about karma at all, but that's just my suggestion
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I agree. I kinda wish downvoting and the leaderboard weren't really a thing tho.
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Really great story, Abby! The way you describe events and objects is really excellent!! Let me know if you're being downvoted!!! Have a striking day :) Love, Upvoter
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Thank you! And yeah, actually, I was at almost 2000 points 2 days ago. So you could say I've been downvoted.
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Yeaaa, I saw! I tried upvoting you, but people still downvote you. I think they are downvoting you for some um *cough* specific *cough* reasons. :(
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Oh thank you! And what reason do ya think?
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I don't really want to say it unless you really want to hear it because it might come off as rude, and I really do NOT want to spread hate.
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Oh ok.
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If its cuz of a certain part in my bio I think I know whatcha mean
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🍕🍕🍕
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:DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD
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noice name!!!!
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Thank you! Rumple is my favorite OUAT character lol.
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OUAT?
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It's in my bio
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Also riding bareback on my horse is just amazingggggg omg its such an amazing feeling!! (saw your bio)
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OMG YESSSS it's just the FEELING. idk i feel like you have to experience it for yourself to feel it. Walking and trotting bareback is fun, but cantering bareback 🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤🤤. Idk if you've done it before, but it's the most amazing feeling EVERRR.
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CANTERING OMFG YEEEEEEEEEEESSSSSSSS you feel like a movie starrrr XD whats your horses name?? my horse's name is Suella!
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YESSSSSSSSSS I FEEL SO POWERFULLLLLLL MWAHAHAHAHA. Her name is River! awww that's such a cute name! Where'd you get it?
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AWWW so cuteee she came with it! she's 6 XD
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thank you! I love that name. 6 is an awesome age! what do you do with her? River is about 10.
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🍕 🍕 🍕 🍕 🍕 YOU SHOULDDDD
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OKAY I WILLLLLL LOL
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YESS XD
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This story is amazing. It's sweet and sad at the same time. Great job Abby
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Thank you so much!!
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You're welcome! 😊
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I would love it if you upvote me, I'm close to 1000points. it will a lot helpful. I will return the favor. Merry Christmas.
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Of course! I'll do it in a bit.
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okay just tell me how many points you did.
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Ok
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So I got you to 1,085. Idk how many u were at before but I upvoted all of your comments on your stories.
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OMG Abby! I was at 933. Thankyou so much. You are My Christmas Santa. LOve you.
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Awww of course!!!! <3333333
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I think that this was great ^^
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Oh, I'm so glad. Phew. I can't wait to see your part 2!!!
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All of your stories are great ^^
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Really? Idk yours are waaaaaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyyyyy better
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I think yours are better than mine though
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Nooooooooooooooooooooooooooo waaaaaaaaaayyyyyyyy. Have you read your stories? Their flawless!
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Nice story Abby and I love your vivid description. Could you please read my latest story and share some feedback if possible. Thanks
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Nice story again, Abby! I loved the descriptions in this one. QOTD Answer: No, but I know a few people who did. I will surely read the second part.
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Lol me too! I’m doing great! You? And thank you!
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Sorry this is such a late response! I haven't written anything😬😬. lol
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🍕🍕🍕🍕🍕🍕🍕🍕
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Hey Abby! Just thought I'd drop by and introduce myself. I'm Felicity!!
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Hello! Thank you for stopping by! Happy to meet you ☺️
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:)
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Hellooo, how are you?? (lol why do I sound soo formal-ish)
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hiiiiii lol. Im ok. you?
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I'm good, wyd?
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Just chilling lol. u?
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lol same
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Abby Hi are you there? I want to talk to you about something.
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Yes, I am. What's up?
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Did you give feedback to the stories of oasis members? It's kind of a rule of this group so just reminding you. ANd please copy my bio about the writer of the week
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Oh, I did not. Idk who they all are exactly. and I'm still deciding if I wanna be a part of it.
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hellooo, i started a new thread, the other one was getting confusing, but it must be late where you are.
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Helooooooo, good idea. And it's 9:10 rn. Also I read your stories and they are FIIIIIIIIIIIIIRRRRRRRRRREEEEEE!!!! DANG! How old r u???? (if Ya don't mind me asking)
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same age as youuu
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Oh, cooooollll! Wow they gooooodd
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yoursss toooooo :DDD
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Yours are wayyyyyyyyyy better thooooooo
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thankss btw, yours toooo, i'll be reading more of them for sure :DD
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Aw thanks
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heyy abbyy :DD i heard you were downvoted :(( Just ask me if you want me to upvote you, lol i have waayyy tooooo much time on my hands. Im quite new here, I joined maybe early december??? (i know my account says march, but that's because i forgot i made this account in the first place lollololool) sooo, im always looking forward to make new friendss :DD Great story, btw. Happy writing :DD
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Hi!! Aw, that's so sweet. Only if you want you! And that's so cool! How are you liking Reedsy so far? Thank you!!!
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reedsy's cool, but ahhhhhh downvoters, they downvoted me tooo last night, hope your doing well now. how was your day?
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I agree completely! My day was great! How about yours?
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its great, its rainny, and its cooolldd, i love it :DD
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You like the rain?? Lol, I live in Washington and there's waayyyyy too much of it here.
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Can you make one for me..?
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Like a story about you?
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Yes.....
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Sure! Can you tell me a little bit about yourself or what you want your character to be like?
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Hmmmmmmm Lemme see- I guess like: Hair: Purple Eyes: Rainbow Personality: Smart funny crazy XD Power? Magic/psychic or uh- XD
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Okay cool. That’s helpful thanks.
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