Tring, Tring, Tring! “Who’s calling me at midnight at 2 pm “, said Mr. Bond.
Mr. Bond picks up the call says, “ Hello! “
“Hello! Agent no. 007. Tomorrow there is a secret meeting. You have to come to the city hall at sharp 9 am. Other details would be messaged.”
The call cuts.
“ Hello! Which meeting for what is the meeting”, questioned himself. Is the phone of MI6. The company for I work. I think there’s another mission as it’s the secret service.
But I have told MI6 that I am on leave and in my last mission I got 6 bullets in my heart. But anyways I need to go.
Phone beeps.
“Here’s the message”, exclaim Mr. Bond. He reads the message aloud.
Agent no. 007. Tomorrow at 9 a.m you have to come to Cameroon City Hall. Then exactly at 9:05, a black car will stand near the gate. Don’t get into the car if the number is not CB 87 H 4567. Then we will take you to the place where the meeting would be conducted. You can carry your special watch as you think that you are not safe or we are going to harm you. It’s important for you to attend. So, please come to the meeting.
So, I need to go to the meeting.
It’s 8:45. I need to leave.
Mr. Bond messages. I have reached Cameroon City Hall.
He goes and sees the car number which is near the gate. “Oh!”, this is the car.
“I am agent no. 007”, says Mr. Bond. “Come Mr. Bond”, says the driver.
After an hour they reached their destination. It was an isolated land where no one was there. Even there was not a single tree, bird, and a drop of water.
“Where are we”, questioned Mr. Bond to the driver.
“There is a tunnel. Follow me”, answered the driver.
They walked for an hour and then they reached a small hole. The driver removed a circular key. He put the key inside the hole. Then many big holes came up.
Mr. Bond says, “ In which hole we need to go?”
“There is a puzzle here for more security. Just come behind me”, answered the driver.
He went to the nearest hole and dropped a can no voice came. He continued the practice. But when the last whole came he dropped the can as usual but a voice came.
“We need to jump inside this hole”, says the driver.
Then they jumped inside the hole. When they reached the bottom of the hole. There they saw a giant black door that had 24 carrot gold knob. The driver told “MI6.” A tablet came from the bottom which asked for fingerprint. Then the driver scanned his finger on the tablet. A robotic voice came from the tablet saying, “Welcome sir.” The door opened.
There was a map drawn on the first wall saying where are the different rooms in which different tasks are performed. There were a total of 25 rooms and 5 floors including the ground floor.
Then the driver takes him to the conference room which is on the 5th floor.
When they go to the conference room Mr. Bond sees Ms. Em.
Ms. Em is the head of MI6 the secret service department.
“Ms. Em why are you here. Our headquarters are in London so, why are you here?” questioned Mr. Bond to Ms. Em.
“Wait! Bond, I will tell you everything in detail just be patient”, answered Ms. Em.
“Ok”, Ms. Em.
Mr. Bond had many questions in his mine regarding MI6.
“Mr. Bond 2 months before when you were on leave, Mr. Ernst Stavro Blofeld, Mr. Auric Goldfinger, Mr. Jaws, Mr. Alec Trevelyan, Mr. Francisco Scaramanga, Mr. Le Chiffre, and Mr. Dr. No came together with their assistant to fought against us,” said Ms. Em.
“Then what happened Ms. Em” questioned Mr. Bond.
“Mr. Bond then they attacked us. We fought bravely but we hadn’t many agents. We need to run so, we took are software engineers with us. Then after a day, we came to this place. It was isolated so we thought to make an underground headquarters. Then we thought we should contact you but you were injured badly on the last mission and you were on leave. So, we didn’t call you.” said Ms. Em
“Where did the other agent when”, questioned Mr. Bond.
“Other agents were on leave like you”, answered Mr. Em.
“And why didn’t you call me”, questioned Mr. Bond.
“You were on leave so, we thought that when our new headquarters would be made that time we will call you”, answered Mr. Em.
“I am an agent of MI6 Ms. Em and it’s my wright to save MI6. Now I am ready for the war, I am going for it”, questioned Mr. Bond.
“Don’t go for the war, there is a big problem, bigger than the incident of the past 2 months”, answered Ms. Em.
“What’s the big problem, Ms. Em which is bigger than the incident,” questioned Mr. Bond.
“I’ll tell the problem, Mr. Bond. First, go around are new headquarters and see what new features we have added”, answered Ms. Em.
Mr. Bond Goes around the headquarters. There were many new features like invisible laser lights, invisible CCTV cameras, and many more. Many cars are building.
After Mr. Bond goes around the headquarters. He goes to the cabin of Ms. Em to know what’s the problem.
“Ms. Em what’s the problem. Please tell know I have seen the whole headquarters”, questioned Mr. Bond.
“You know the adventurous family. The family of Smith’s. They have done many adventures in the past. Now Ben Smith’s son Rush Smith is going for an adventure to Atlantis.” answered Ms. Em.
“So, what’s the harm for going on an adventure”, say’s Mr. Bond.
“There is harm. Ben Smith conducted an audition for the partner who will go with Rush. The partner was Shane Washington the best agent of Spectre. He is going there to take all the treasure from there. So, I have appointed you for the mission. He should not take a single gram of the treasure.” exclaimed Ms. Em.
“Okay, Ms. Em. I will work on it”, exclaimed Mr. Bond
“Do well Mr. Bond”, says Ms. Em
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108 comments
I like your effort in this story! Again, some grammar mistakes here and there, but those are just steps to improve to become a better writer! I use Grammarly myself, and it helps a lot. You should try it too! Nice work!
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thank you, Kendra!
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Of course!
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Hey, Amogh! You asked me to check this story out, so here I am. This was a great story line, and your characters were realistic/believable. But there were lots of grammatical errors throughout the entire story. If you download Grammarly, that extension should help you do better with that. It helps me for sure. Awesome job! -Brooke
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thank you :) I will work on it:)
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You're welcome!
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THIS IS NOT AMOGH, IT'S HARRY POTTER
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XD Sorry, Harry! I got your name mixed up with someone else. (;
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It's okay because I Harry Potter is in the body of Amogh
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My latest story is based on James Bond. There are some names from it.
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Nice story! There are a few grammar mistakes, but if you have Grammarly, it can sort everything out! Score: 4.6 out of 5
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thank you :)
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:D
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Cool story! I liked it! Great job!
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Thank you :)
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You're welcome!
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Would you mind reviewing my stories? I'd love your feedback!
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Sure, I will :)
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Good story with chilling Bond vibes! I did not know that Harry could write😁
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Than you :)
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A few grammar mistakes here and there, but overall a good read! PS - I strongly recommend downloading Grammarly, it really helps! ;)
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thank you
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No problem :)
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Nice story! Keep writing!
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thank you :)
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Welcome! I appreciate if you can take some time to read my stories and offer your comments!
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sure and I will :)
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sure and I will :)
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This was a good story. I can tell you thought up the plot and planned it well. However, it was a bit of an awkward read because of all the grammar errors. Your dialogue also felt very stiff. You don't need a dialogue tag for every single piece of dialogue. Also, don't forget to put question marks on your questions. Use conventions when writing dialogue, it'll make it flow better. Like Akshat said, think about maybe installing Grammarly, something I use personally for more help with your grammar. Keep writing! ~Amany
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thank you! Actually, I have installed Grammarly.
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No Problem! Oh, ok!
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The new one
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Hey did you just delete your story
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I haven't deleted any story
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I have changed the name
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Amogh, The story line is good, there are several grammatical mistakes but one caught my eye immediately since it was part of the first paragraph: "who's calling me at midnight at 2am." It should either who is calling me at midnight or who is calling me at 2am, not both in the same sentence. Try Grammarly it really does help and it is free. Keep writing. Sue
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thank you! I will work on it
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IT'S HARRY POTTER NOT AMOGH
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I really enjoyed reading this story, loved how everything unfolded. :)
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thank you :)
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I always loved Bond so enjoyed the story. I use grammarly and still get called out on errors so reading it out loud or if you have someone else read it before submitting or let the reedsy writers help you out. Well done with the story overall.
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Thank you! I will work on my mistakes
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Awesome job!
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thanks
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Nice play on the Mr. Bond storyline. I did notice a change from the first person to the third person. (But I have told MI6 that I am on leave and in my last mission I got 6 bullets in my heart. But anyways I need to go. Phone beeps. “Here’s the message”, exclaim Mr. Bond. He reads the message aloud.) The story keeps my attention. Keep safe and keep writing!
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thank you :)
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No child ever stands up and just walks without tripping and falling. Sooner or later, the same child runs and jumps though, and the community ululates. The BEST thing is that you have the mettle. Also, you take criticism very well! Thank you for the piece! Keep writing!
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thank you :)
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"Mr. Bond had many questions in his mine " mind "we took are software engineers with us" our software engineers "it’s my wright to save MI6" right to save For fan fiction this isn't bad. You have a complicated scene, with a fair bit of information, but spaced it expertly to avoid bogging down the story. I only see one problem- your dialogue is very stiff, but I guess that is because you are not a native English speaker. The more you write, and read, the smoother your dialogue will become.
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thank you! I will work on it
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! Please read my latest story The Secret Organisation { Part 2 }
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Story is so intriguing and captivating. But, I saw there was some grammatical errors because of which you were losing your coherence at many places. Keep writing. Practice makes a man perfect. Never get dishearten with the negative feedbacks.
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thank you and please read and comment on my other stories
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