Tring, Tring, Tring! “Who’s calling me at midnight at 2 pm “, said Mr. Bond.
Mr. Bond picks up the call says, “ Hello! “
“Hello! Agent no. 007. Tomorrow there is a secret meeting. You have to come to the city hall at sharp 9 am. Other details would be messaged.”
The call cuts.
“ Hello! Which meeting for what is the meeting”, questioned himself. Is the phone of MI6. The company for I work. I think there’s another mission as it’s the secret service.
But I have told MI6 that I am on leave and in my last mission I got 6 bullets in my heart. But anyways I need to go.
Phone beeps.
“Here’s the message”, exclaim Mr. Bond. He reads the message aloud.
Agent no. 007. Tomorrow at 9 a.m you have to come to Cameroon City Hall. Then exactly at 9:05, a black car will stand near the gate. Don’t get into the car if the number is not CB 87 H 4567. Then we will take you to the place where the meeting would be conducted. You can carry your special watch as you think that you are not safe or we are going to harm you. It’s important for you to attend. So, please come to the meeting.
So, I need to go to the meeting.
It’s 8:45. I need to leave.
Mr. Bond messages. I have reached Cameroon City Hall.
He goes and sees the car number which is near the gate. “Oh!”, this is the car.
“I am agent no. 007”, says Mr. Bond. “Come Mr. Bond”, says the driver.
After an hour they reached their destination. It was an isolated land where no one was there. Even there was not a single tree, bird, and a drop of water.
“Where are we”, questioned Mr. Bond to the driver.
“There is a tunnel. Follow me”, answered the driver.
They walked for an hour and then they reached a small hole. The driver removed a circular key. He put the key inside the hole. Then many big holes came up.
Mr. Bond says, “ In which hole we need to go?”
“There is a puzzle here for more security. Just come behind me”, answered the driver.
He went to the nearest hole and dropped a can no voice came. He continued the practice. But when the last whole came he dropped the can as usual but a voice came.
“We need to jump inside this hole”, says the driver.
Then they jumped inside the hole. When they reached the bottom of the hole. There they saw a giant black door that had 24 carrot gold knob. The driver told “MI6.” A tablet came from the bottom which asked for fingerprint. Then the driver scanned his finger on the tablet. A robotic voice came from the tablet saying, “Welcome sir.” The door opened.
There was a map drawn on the first wall saying where are the different rooms in which different tasks are performed. There were a total of 25 rooms and 5 floors including the ground floor.
Then the driver takes him to the conference room which is on the 5th floor.
When they go to the conference room Mr. Bond sees Ms. Em.
Ms. Em is the head of MI6 the secret service department.
“Ms. Em why are you here. Our headquarters are in London so, why are you here?” questioned Mr. Bond to Ms. Em.
“Wait! Bond, I will tell you everything in detail just be patient”, answered Ms. Em.
“Ok”, Ms. Em.
Mr. Bond had many questions in his mine regarding MI6.
“Mr. Bond 2 months before when you were on leave, Mr. Ernst Stavro Blofeld, Mr. Auric Goldfinger, Mr. Jaws, Mr. Alec Trevelyan, Mr. Francisco Scaramanga, Mr. Le Chiffre, and Mr. Dr. No came together with their assistant to fought against us,” said Ms. Em.
“Then what happened Ms. Em” questioned Mr. Bond.
“Mr. Bond then they attacked us. We fought bravely but we hadn’t many agents. We need to run so, we took are software engineers with us. Then after a day, we came to this place. It was isolated so we thought to make an underground headquarters. Then we thought we should contact you but you were injured badly on the last mission and you were on leave. So, we didn’t call you.” said Ms. Em
“Where did the other agent when”, questioned Mr. Bond.
“Other agents were on leave like you”, answered Mr. Em.
“And why didn’t you call me”, questioned Mr. Bond.
“You were on leave so, we thought that when our new headquarters would be made that time we will call you”, answered Mr. Em.
“I am an agent of MI6 Ms. Em and it’s my wright to save MI6. Now I am ready for the war, I am going for it”, questioned Mr. Bond.
“Don’t go for the war, there is a big problem, bigger than the incident of the past 2 months”, answered Ms. Em.
“What’s the big problem, Ms. Em which is bigger than the incident,” questioned Mr. Bond.
“I’ll tell the problem, Mr. Bond. First, go around are new headquarters and see what new features we have added”, answered Ms. Em.
Mr. Bond Goes around the headquarters. There were many new features like invisible laser lights, invisible CCTV cameras, and many more. Many cars are building.
After Mr. Bond goes around the headquarters. He goes to the cabin of Ms. Em to know what’s the problem.
“Ms. Em what’s the problem. Please tell know I have seen the whole headquarters”, questioned Mr. Bond.
“You know the adventurous family. The family of Smith’s. They have done many adventures in the past. Now Ben Smith’s son Rush Smith is going for an adventure to Atlantis.” answered Ms. Em.
“So, what’s the harm for going on an adventure”, say’s Mr. Bond.
“There is harm. Ben Smith conducted an audition for the partner who will go with Rush. The partner was Shane Washington the best agent of Spectre. He is going there to take all the treasure from there. So, I have appointed you for the mission. He should not take a single gram of the treasure.” exclaimed Ms. Em.
“Okay, Ms. Em. I will work on it”, exclaimed Mr. Bond
“Do well Mr. Bond”, says Ms. Em
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108 comments
you did amazing with it i think its really good! i've seen others say things about the grammar mistakes but i think thats the only thing. imma just give you a 10/10
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thank you and please read and like my other story :}
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no problem and i will
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Please read my latest story The Secret Organisation { Part 2 }
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sure
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Nice story but check out the grammar and spellings, here are a few mistakes. 1. At 'Who's calling me at midnight 2 pm would be a question, so add a question mark. 2. 'Hello Which meeting is for what meeting ' Doesn't make sense, change it too What is the purpose of this meeting. 3. Don't mention that its a secret meeting, let the suspense build. 4.After where are we, put a question mark. 5. Then many big holes came up. Wrong. Write Many larger holes opened up. 6. Then after a day, is Wrong. It should be After a day...
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thank you! I will work on it
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Hi Amogh:) The story is very choppy for a lack of a better word, the dialogue is a bit difficult to follow and flow of dialogue could be more fluid. I'm not sure if you are writing this way as a style?I Enjoyed an adventure story will read part 2 and 3:)
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Thanks and please like
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I like spy novels, Amogh. And The Secret Organisation has all the elements not only for a good story but the secret locales, the gadgets, the secret rendezvous have the makings of a good spy novel.
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Thanks and I will think to convert into a spy novel
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I like where you're going with this, but there is a need for grammar and punctuation clean-up. It would be good to have somebody proofread. The story itself has a number of characters whose role is not quite clear. It may be my fault because I rarely see any James Bond films. Perhaps you can pare down the description and make it a bit clearer as to what is happening. Keep writing!!
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Thanks and I will work on it
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I have changed the title of the story to The Secret Organization {Part 1}
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Interesting take on the prompt! Well written and quite gripping. Please read and review my story Guest in Room No. 301, thanks!
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Sure and thank you
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great job! keep writing! please go check out my new stories.
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Sure and thank you
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Your welcome!😊
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As others have mentioned, I also realized some grammatical errors throughout the story. However, the concept was great and creative! P.S: would you mind checking out my recent submission, "Yellow Light?" Thank you :D
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HARRY POTTER THANKS FOR YOUR COMMENT AND HARRY POTTER IS GOING TO UPLOAD A COMMENT IN 5 MINUTES WITH HIS MAGIC.
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Hello, Harry. I'm alive. Nice story, I thought you were an Auror, not a writer.
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THANK YOU :)
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Haha sorry if the i'm alive part didn't make sense. I was being dumbledore
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Oh
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nice story. An old broken man died in hospital. They did not let his daughter in to see him on his death bed. They said she was going to take one gram from him. And Duryodhan did not want that to happen. And the old man died thinking his daughter didn't love him. Then he came home and lived as if he never had a daughter. The daughter on the other side was gaged and bound with energy rings. No bond came to unravel the mystery. They closed the glass door. Just kidding.
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thank you :)
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I don’t think there’s any critique I can give you that others haven’t already, so I’ll just say that you really captured the James Bond vibe with the mysterious phone calls, the globe-trotting and the secret headquarters. Keep writing! 😁
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thank you:)
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Is it a continuation of part one? Well written It made me have a sense of mystery. With practice the grammar will get better
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No, it's not a continuation of part one. Thank you :)
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This was a refreshing story! It's a really nice take on the prompt! Thanks for the follow! Every follow and like makes a difference for a new author like me.
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think you :)
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I enjoy James Bond stories, keep it up!
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thank you :)
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I get the feeling English is your second language and you are to be commended for what you have accomplished already with this story. Fan fiction is difficult at best, but you've provided us with an interesting secret mission in fine Bond style. As mentioned, Grammarly will help, but so will ProWritersAid. Keep writing. You have interesting ideas.
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thank you :)
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I love this updated take on Bond, especially how you sprinkled moments of humor throughout. Well done!
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thank you :)
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good story - I liked it very much - yes as people below are saying Grammarly can hellp and it is free. Keep writing.
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thank you:)
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Very well written. Love the suspense. I can't wait to read the part 2.
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thanks please like other stories
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are you writing any stories this week
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maybe l am not sure
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and i will surely like your other stories.
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ok
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