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Sad American Romance

Author's Note: I wrote this story with the help of my friend,Brooke D!.Check her out and her part of this story! (This is Garnetโ€™s point of view.)

We had just got into our new house, and all of our stuff was piled everywhere in brown cardboard boxes. The living room, or would-be living room we stood in was bare and drab, but we soon would fix that. For now, there was just Baneenkani (my girlfriend) and me.

โ€œItโ€™ll be different, thatโ€™s for sure. But I think we can turn it into a home. Together.โ€ Kani had a dreamy look on her face. I loved her the most when she does that. I grinned as I walked towards Kani and kissed her. She put her hand on the side of my face, and we stayed together for a few seconds, then we both stopped the kiss. Kani walked straight into our bedroom, where only a large mattress laid. I could hear the floorboards creaking and Kaniโ€™s muffled snores. She was already asleep. I stayed up as always, watching the stars.ย 

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Four weeks later, all of our furniture has been set up and ready, and most of our stuff is unpacked. In the past week, I have been getting crankier and crankier. Our house is too small and cramped! How could we trade our big, wide country house for this? I was getting more and more annoyed with Kani, as she was the one who suggested it. I took everything out on her, and if she had anything good to say, I would stomp on it with the bad. In the past week, our relationship has gotten tenser. I wonder who is to blame.

On a Friday night, Kani and I were standing in the kitchen, making Hamburger Helper and salad. Normally I loved it, but now, I wasnโ€™t in the mood to be happy. But this was our normal Friday dinner, so I had to make it. Kani was mixing the lettuce, cheese, bacon pieces, ranch, tomatoes, cucumbers, and croutons. I stirred the Hamburger Helper concoction slowly and put the lid on it. As I did, my anger boiled over.

โ€œCanโ€™t believe that you chose this small of a kitchen,โ€ I snarled at Kani. She stopped mixing the salad to glare at me angrily.ย 

โ€œWhen we bought it, you said that this kitchen would work for us fine. So thatโ€™s on you,โ€ Kani snapped back. I could see her jaw tighten, her fists clench, and her fiery glare. She was really getting on my last nerve. Had been for the last week.ย 

โ€œMaybe, but there still isnโ€™t enough counter space.โ€ย 

โ€œOh, shut up. You donโ€™t have enough space in your brain to hear the good.โ€ย 

I felt my anger rising to the boiling point. She had comebacks and witty snips, and I had what? An annoying girlfriend? My mind turned fuzzy with frustration. I saw Kani putting the salad bowl on the counter, and she had her hands on her hips. I realized what I wanted to do in a split second.ย 

โ€œWhatever, Kani. Now it appears that Iโ€™ve lost my appetite. You can finish cooking for yourself. Iโ€™m going over to Toddโ€™s house to watch the game.โ€ย 

I wretched my coat and keys off the table, and slammed the door. I stormed down the street, and wondered if I actually loved her.

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โ€œPass the potatoes.โ€ I said to Kani. Every since I walked out on her at Friday, sheโ€™s been acting like a bomb, ready to explode at the slightest thing I said. She rolled her eyes and looked away. I jabbed at her with my finger, hitting her hard.ย 

โ€œWhat?โ€ Kani had her fiery glare again. How I hated it.

โ€œI said, pass the potatoes!โ€ I cried, annoyed and angry. She had changed so much in the past days, Ever since weโ€™d moved in. I wondered if we hadnโ€™t moved, we would still be in our country house, understanding each other. Kani loved our house more than me now. I wish that we hadnโ€™t moved again. I loved her, but that fragile line of love was collapsing quickly.ย 

โ€œHere, then,โ€ Kani growled, sliding the bowl of cheesy potatoes down the table to me. I grabbed it quickly and harshly. A scowl was covering my face, and I didnโ€™t do anything to try to hide it from Kani.ย 

โ€œIโ€™m gonna get some milk.โ€ Kani got up from her chair and began sprinting into the kitchen. I stopped her. I couldnโ€™t just let her go without my acknowledgment!

โ€œCome again?โ€ย 

โ€œI said Iโ€™m going to get some milk. You got a problem with that?โ€ Kani snarled back at me. I then changed my mind again.

โ€œNo. Go on.โ€ I helped myself to a large forkful of cheesy potatoes and stared at Kani.

โ€œGlad I know I have your permission.โ€ย 

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โ€œWhen a person has a problem with the decisions that another person is making, a person should talk to the person instead of complaining about that person to that personโ€™s best friend,โ€ Kani blabed. I made my eyes slits; shouldnโ€™t the person whoโ€™s your girlfriend make sense once in a while?

โ€œAll this person talk is making me dizzy. Talk in a foreign language, why donโ€™t you?โ€ I rhetorically asked. If she wonโ€™t make sense, I wonโ€™t. What was Kani even talking about?!ย 

โ€œAh, shut up. Ever since we moved in here, youโ€™ve hated me, hated this house, and not cared about any of it! Iโ€™m sick and tired of having to worry about what youโ€™re going to think, about how youโ€™ll react. So, Iโ€™m not going to anymore! Lilah doesnโ€™t believe you about all of the stuff you told her--Iโ€™m just going to go stay with her. Donโ€™t expect me to be back any time soon,โ€ Kani fumed. I could see smoke rising. And now I thought it was a perfect time to scream at her too.

โ€œFine! I donโ€™t care! Itโ€™ll be a relief to not have to be heckled about my personal opinions. And I thought when we first started dating, that you would respect my beliefs.โ€ I stomped into our bedroom, looking behind me angrily. I then proceeded to slam the door the our bedroom as hard as I could. Then I toppled on our bed, angry and sad.

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When I woke up, Kani had left. It was like a huge weight had been lifted off me, and I could finally be at peace. Without anyone bothering me, I could be alone by myself in the living room. Sleep by myself. Eat by myself. It was actually kind of peaceful, life without Kani. I was beginning to think that everything would be okay, that I could live forever in this place. Then my hopes and dreams were shattered into a million pieces and stepped on when Kani appeared at our door.

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โ€œWhyโ€™d you come back? I thought we were over,โ€ I groaned. Kaniโ€™s eyes shot daggers at me as she was putting her tee shirts in the dresser. I was sitting on the edge of the bed, complementing life.ย 

โ€œWhat the heck?! No! I just need a break, okay? We never decided that weโ€™re โ€˜overโ€™. So shut your mouth.โ€ Kani slammed the dresser drawer close with a boom and pranced to the closet, hanging up more of her clothes.ย 

โ€œWell, maybe I did want to decide that. Maybe Iโ€™m sick of living with you and your petty attitude, and the fact that you canโ€™t come to terms with the fact that we have different opinions.โ€ I jumped up from the bed and stared at the back of Kaniโ€™s head. Kani spun around and stared at me in the eye. I did the same, wishing that the ceiling would come down on Kani.

โ€œFine! If you want that, then you can pack up and move out! Iโ€™m over you, too! Get out! You never liked this place, anyway!โ€ I saw Kaniโ€™s tear-filled eyes and her shaking figure. She flung her arms out, then let them drop to her sides.ย 

โ€œFine! This is what I wanted! Iโ€™ve always wanted out! Bye!โ€ I screamed at the top of my lungs. I stamped out of the bedroom, the floorboards creeeeeeaking loudly. As I yanked the door open I had one last glance at my ex. She was crying, but not begging me to stay. I jumped out of the house, not caring about my clothes, possessions, or food. I could worry about that later. Right now, I was free.

So be it.

January 15, 2021 18:26

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Nainika Gupta
22:31 Jan 18, 2021

HAPPY BIRTHDAY CELESTE!!!!

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Nainika Gupta
22:34 Jan 18, 2021

YESSS and sorry for not telling you BUT AWESOME STORY!!! I'LL CHECK OUT BROOKS'S POV NOW and did you like part 6?? :D:D:D

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Nainika Gupta
22:36 Jan 18, 2021

YAY!! and oooh hers was awesome!! You both did an awesome job!!

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21:30 Jan 18, 2021

Hey, Celeste! First of all, HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Second of all, I am writing a story using a Reedsy friend cast, and I want you to be in it. If you also want to be in it, then fill this out: Name (if you don't want it to be Celeste): Power: Spirit animal: Eye: Hair: Favorite color: Weakness: Thanks if you do this! If you don't, that's okay, too. :D Your friend, Brooke

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TANK YOUuUuUuUUuUUU Name: OFC Celeste Power: Psychic/Magic Spirit Animal: Phoenix Eye: Rainbow Hair: Purple Fav color: Purpleeeee Weakness: death

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22:11 Jan 18, 2021

That sounds wonderful! YOU WELCOMEeEeEeEeEeEeEeE Whatcha mean for magic for your power?

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Kristin Neubauer
19:58 Jan 16, 2021

Wow! That relationship fell apart quickly. I think you did a great job making the animosity between them feel so real. Your writing and dialogue was so tight and vivid - i felt really invested in these characters. So invested, that I would love to see the interim - the time between when they moved in and when things turned bad - drawn out a little longer. More about the moments where the relationship started turning. It's great work as is....but you've done it so well, that you are making me want more!

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Lilliane Wei
04:17 Jan 16, 2021

Oh, such a sad ending. Hi, Cel. Great story, I really loved the raw emotion displayed by the two characters, great job!

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Lilliane Wei
04:58 Jan 16, 2021

EHEHEHEHEHEHEEEEEE

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Amany Sayed
23:04 Jan 15, 2021

Aw, how sad. Sometimes things just aren't meant to be I guess. You did well with the romance, but it was a little jarring when they fell out of love. I mean, in the start, everything was fine. It was a little fast paced when it came to that. There were also lots of time jumps, with maybe too little happening in between. Other than that, I enjoy every romance, even breakups. Keep writing!

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Hey! Thanks! I'll be sure to focus on that in my next stories! Thanks for reading and critiquing! :D

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18:44 Jan 15, 2021

YEASSS ROMANCEEEE!!! I feel like this was, like events that would normally happen in real life. This was a great read, and I loved the ending!!! "Right now, I was free" Lol yeah people tend to feel that way about their exes XDDD YAY! THANK YOU FOR BLESSING ME WITH THIS STORY!!

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YEAAAAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS Thanks! I wrote this with Brooke D.! Check her OUT REEEEEEEEEEEEEE Lol XD THANK YOU FOR BLESSING ME WITH THIS COMMENT

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Radhika Diksha
17:42 Jan 23, 2021

Belated birthday by the way.

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Radhika Diksha
17:41 Jan 23, 2021

You displayed the fallout of the relationship properly. I loved the dialogue and the story flowed well with the prompt. You exploited the prompt to the fullest. And the character's dialogue was fine as a needle. Great work. Keep writing.

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Maya -
23:27 Jan 20, 2021

Great story, Celeste! I read Brooke's part too and they go together perfectly! The character's personalities and perspectives on the situation are well-developed and realistic. Nice job!!! :D

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Maya -
00:14 Jan 21, 2021

No problem! :D It's fine, maybe tomorrow? :DDD

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Nainika Gupta
14:07 Jan 20, 2021

MY GOD YOU HAVE A FRUIT GANG and I thought... yeesh XD

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Nainika Gupta
16:34 Jan 20, 2021

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16:59 Jan 20, 2021

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Akshaya โœจ
05:54 Jan 19, 2021

A VERY HAPPY BIRTHDAY, CELESTE!!! โค๏ธ๐ŸŽ‰๐ŸŽ‰๐ŸŽ‰ (I hope I'm not too late in wishing you!) And I was wondering what's up with changing your name? :) Is it something you're all doing as friends because I've seen many authors change their names into fruit names? (It sounds fun!)

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Akshaya โœจ
16:30 Jan 19, 2021

Of course!! :D Nice!! Could you suggest a fruit name for me because I don't know which ones are already taken?

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Ari Berri
02:54 Jan 19, 2021

Happy Birthday!!!!!!!!!

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