Author's note: This is a story I did with Akshaya! Link and details below!
The wisps of my cinnamon, brown hair fell loosely as curls on my cream complexed face. Applying a smear of strawberry flavored lip gloss, and swaying in front of the curvature mirror that decorated my dorm.
Pleased with my style, I held my calculus books in hand, and anything I could find that writes.
โDrat, Iโm late again,โ I softly murmured, searching for an eraser.
โMiss. Dโsal, why arenโt you in class?โย
I froze, pasting a small, dubious smile on my face, bowing down to the principal, grabbing the hemโs of my patterned skirt and crouching down.
โMrs. Veloz, pardon my absence, I shall be in class soon.โ
Mrs. Veloz tutted, as she was about to say something but reconsidered it, nodding at me she left, her high heels tapping against the cool, marble floor.
Taking a breath of relief, I whisked away to class.
โAhh, finally Brittany, weโve been hoping youโd come,โ My teacher called out, placing a hand on her hip, as she sipped some cold, brewed coffee that made me remember my empty stomach.
Saying my apologies for being late, I sat beside Hillary; my best friend.
โSay, whatโs today's excuse for being late?โ She purred, bobbing her head low so that Mrs. Jen wonโt see her mouth moving.
Rolling my eyes I ignored her absurd question.
โGirls, who can solve this equation?โ
A wave of hush fell over us, some looked at me for assistance but I faced the front, not bothering to take any risks of getting an incorrect answer and humiliating myself.
โAnyone?โ Mrs. Jen questioned, her brow going up in surprise.
I felt someone gasp, looking at my right I saw Klara raise a skeptical hand in the air, waiting to be called.
Her dark, coffee hair was cut to her neck, and placed in a small ponytail. Her gleaming green eyes were magically attractive for someone who was unknown at school.ย
If I were the Alpha, she was the Omega. The loser at school, no one bothered to befriend her, in fear that they will be considered โuncoolโ.
โMrs. Winters?โ Mrs. Jenโs voice quivered as if she couldnโt believe Klara existed until minutes ago.
Without a word, she got up, rearranging her plaid skirt and walked to the front. Taking the chalk, she scribbled the numbers. Everyone else looked at each other in bewilderment, trying to catch up to Klara.
โIs- is that correct?โ Her lower lip trembled, as she bit it.
โWhy, yes it is,โ With a small smile, Mrs. Jen excused her.
โShowoff,โ I heard Hillary whisper in my ear.ย
โDid everyone study for the test?โ I rotated my pencil in my hand, tapping my foot against the oakwood floor.
Hillary gulped, shooting me a nervous look. She wasnโt a big fan of tests.
I waited until Mrs. Jen passed a paper to me to feel the tension in the air, my heart beating, my eyes seemed to blur, not letting me read the questions. Hands sweating as I reached over my paper.
I could smell the almond shampoo beside me, cranking my head slightly to the right, meeting her emerald eyes as my hazel eyes fell down in silence.
I saw her mouth the questions, a โvโ etched in her brow, her mouth carving into a smile as her hand and mind worked in sync.
My mind felt fogged, not letting me focus. Making it waver to my undisturbing surroundings.
If I brought my chair faintly to the right, Iโd see Klaraโs answers. Knowing I was getting in a risky situation, I decided to take the chance with my usually good luck.
Klara was already on the last question when I hadnโt even written my name. She hadnโt noticed me shift over, keeping her eyes interlocked with the paper.
Quickly, I wrote my name and began to fill out the answers, all the calculations, every number, every symbol that she wrote.
Just when I finished the last problem, Klara had flipped over her paper, giving me a puzzled look.ย
I smiled at myself, knowing that even if I got caught the teacherโs would never pose me as the culprit knowing my reputation.
I felt a sharp jabbing sense of pain, my motherโs soothing voice filling every corner of my mind.
โIโm sure youโll be a wonderful example to further generations.โ
I hated to break her image of me, the perfect girl with noble qualities. It just wasnโt me.
Even in her last seconds of life she had begged me to be a good girl, not fall in the ways of evil.ย
Rubbing the stinging tears from my eyes, Iโd held her freezing hands, feeling her heart fading away at my every sob. Her doe eyes twinkled one last time until they closed forever.
โPss, you good?โ I felt Hillary nudge me with her elbow. Rubbing an unexplainable tear, I nodded.
โPlease be prepared for our next topic, have a wonderful day girls,โ Mrs. Jen finished, opening the class door for us to be excused.
Klara hesitated to leave, as always dawdling beside her desk, scribbling with a blunt pencil that barely was a few inches long, doodling away at the school property. Not that anyone cared, it was an old boarding school, established in the 1900's specifically for girls.
I vaguely recalled having any initiatives to ever end up here, in the outskirts of town. Far away from home, having to depend on strangers for a measly meal. It just wasnโt fair, but life isnโt fair either.
I guess some good luck must have rubbed off, as being the most popular girl in school wasnโt so awful. I always got selected in teams first, being able to command everyone at will, use them as pawns and toss them away when they were useless to me.
My mother wanted me to be a good girl, someone who people look up to for good reasons.
I didnโt care, she wasnโt around anymore.
I was on my own now.
I shielded my eyes from the late, evening sun. Taking big breaths of fresh air, wavering of spices from the kitchen and fallen yellowish orange leaves of Autumn.
โBri, wait up,โ Turning around, I glimpsed Cammie jogging up to me.
โHey Cam, whatโs up?โ I asked cooly, with a dubious look pasted on my face.
โMrs. Jen asked me to call you to her class.โ
โOh,โ My lips made a โoโ, wondering why Mrs. Jen wanted to see me, โThanks for letting me know.โ
My hands felt sweaty, my heart beating faster. Was Mrs. Jen going to accuse me of cheating? That thought made me gulp, my throat becoming dry.
I knew I shouldnโt have copied Klara, why did I sweep so low?
Heart ricocheting, I reached out to the door handle and stepped inside.
โMiss. Dโsal, do you have any clues to why youโre here and not out there?โ She asked, inclining her chin towards the window that showed everyone having fun.
Shaking my head, I locked my hands against the curve of my plastic, blue chair.
โHmm, Miss. Winters will be joining us shortly,โ She said, her lips making a straight line of disapproval.
I was right, this was about the test.
Mrs. Jen indicated me to a seat next to her desk and I spotted my test next to Klaraโs. My face pale, the color drained from my face.
โYes?โ Mrs. Jen asked, when she saw me staring in revelation.
โHow-?โ I started, a thought clicked into my brain.
โLet her take the blameโ
Would I lie?
I had to.
To save my reputation.
โKlara cheated, she copied my answers.โ
โI see,โ Mrs. Jen became thoughtful, โHow can I believe you?โย
โMrs. Jen, Iโm sure that it was Klara!โ I said, my arms held out in protest, โPlease believe me!โ
My eyes flew to the door creaking slowly open and Klara stepping inside with a vacillating face. Her eyes wide in shock when she saw me.
โWell, sheโs here now.โ Mrs. Jen looked at her in skepticism, โMiss Winters, Iโm sure you know why I have called you.โ
โSorry, Mrs. Jen?โ She whispered, looking at the test papers and giving me a look of doubt.
I had to play along.
โReally, Klara?โ I said, rolling my eyes over-dramatically, โYou didnโt know?โ
โMiss. Winters,โ Mrs. Jen continued to add, โIs it completely coincidental that both yours and Brittanyโs papers happen to be the exact same? Word for word, number for number? Even the cuts and slashes?โ
I kept my eyes downcast, knowing that Klara knew I was at fault but Iโd have the upper hand. My eyes flickering back at her again, giving her a spiteful warning.
โMrs. Jen, I studied really hard. I wouldnโt imagine why Klara would want to sneak my answers in the pretense of them being hers.โย
โI thought you were honest.โ Mrs. Jen looked through both our papers in her hands, โEspecially when you managed to solve that tricky sum in class today.โ
I heaved a sigh of relief, knowing that the teacher supported me.
โMrs. Jen I didnโt copy anyone, least of all Brittany,โ Klara said, shaking her head. Shooting me an unfriendly look, as my heart began to feel better but a sense of guilt piled up instead.
If mom had been here, she would have been disheartened to see me, her only child being mendacious.
Mrs. Jen looked at both of us, her fingers automatically tapping against the oakwood table.
โWell, I canโt punish one of you without proof so both of you are in time out, Miss. Dโsal, you know where to go, please escort Mrs. Winters there.โ
With a sweat trickling face, my eyes adjusting to the fact that Iโd been punished finally set in. Well, at least the blame wasnโt all on me.
โY-Yes ma'am,โ My voice quivered, shooting a placid look at Klara who seemed lightheaded, her fingers intertwined with each other, her cinnamon colored hair acting like a curtain as she hid behind them.
We forcefully left, she lagged behind, sniffing a tear as she rearranged her backpack in multiple ways until she was satisfied with draping it in one shoulder.
Rubbing my hand against the bamboo door marked DETENTION. Iโd never been inside before, but was curious to what was beyond the carved door.
โWhy?โ I heard a murmur behind me, sighing I pushed the door open, not bothering to be polite.
She held her shoe out before the door shut, pushing past the heavy door as it made a click noise when it closed behind her.
I heard her gasp, I had to as well. Downy white sofas near the water cooler, an AC running above, making small, undisturbed noises. A wooden basket of snacks littered in different brands sat on the circular, glass desk.
A low, dim light was all the illumination we had. It almost felt like a party vibe, wondering what this room was used for before.
Old, storage boxes were tucked away in the back, all filled with old newspapers and magazines.
โWhat is this place?โ Klara asked, coming to sit nervously on the couch.
I shrugged, โA time-out room, didnโt you hear?โ
She shook her head, โDid you copy me?โ She asked instead, the question I didnโt want to answer but I was surprised that she wasnโt screaming her head off but maintaining calm, like nothing happened.
Biting my lip, I slightly nodded, unable to meet her glance.
โWhy?โ
โIโm sorry, I wanted to ace this test but I couldnโt study, youโre smart.โ
โUmโฆ thanks?โ I could see her smile waver.
โSo you forgive me?โ
โI guess, itโs not like the teacher believes me anyway, only non-popular kids get the benefit of doubt.โ
โOh,โ I said, I hadnโt realized that was what she thought of me. Someone who people supported just because they seem special.
โEveryone knows your โrichโ,โ She added, using her fingers to quote.
โIโฆโ
โBut you know what, it doesnโt matter, my parents worked so hard they got sick, they couldnโt even care for me but still managed to get me good education,โ She continued, the tears she had saved had begun to pool her eyes.
โDonโt cry,โ I cooed, โI didnโt know.โ
โNo one knows,โ She wiped a tear, sniffing again, โAnd no one cares.โ
We sat in silence, as the evening began to dim. She was nothing but a silhouette against the flinching, overhead light.
We looked in opposite directions, never meeting each otherโs awaiting eyes.ย
โDo you smell that?โ She said, breaking the overwhelming quietude.
โN- oh yeah, I do.โ
We got up from our seated positions, walking around but staying close enough.
โSmells likeโฆโ I started.
โFire?!โ We began to panic, looking over our surroundings for a chance to escape.
โThe door, we have to leave,โ Klara pulled my hand, I felt a dizzy sensation from the smoke as it traveled into the room.
โItโs locked,โ I pushed past her, kicking at the door but my leg hurt as I pulled away.
โYou ok?โ
I nodded, jumping on one foot, while slowly resting the other.
โThe doorโs locked,โ She repeated, her hands entwined around her head, โNow weโre trapped.โ
โGod, donโt freak out, let me think.โ
โMe?!, I wasnโt the one who cheated and blamed someone else and now being the person responsible for us suffocating to death.โ
โGosh, donโt be melodramatic,โ I rolled my eyes, โWhat, I said Iโm sorry.โ
โYeah, whatever.โ
โAre we gonna find an exit or keep arguing, โcause I know how to win one,โ I mocked.
She sighed, walking away from the stubborn door, โWhatโs your plan?โ
ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ***
I checked my watch; 8:20. It had already been 20 minutes since bedtime, I couldnโt even hear any screams or people fleeting for their lives. The heat began to cook us, Klara seemed some sickened than me, sweat dripping down her chin, her eyes expressing unbearable pain, her teeth chattering as she twitched.
โDonโt worry, weโll figure something out,โ I tried to reassure her.
โYou mean, youโll figure something out.โ
โYeah, that,โ I wasnโt in a mood to argue about petty things.
We huddled closer as the warmth intensified, I could see the sparks of red and orange lit the newspapers and slowly turned them to ash with a flicker of an eye.
Klara moaned, โWeโre gonna die.โ
โShh, weโre not,โ My facade slipped a little, but I wasnโt ready to give up without a fair fight, โCan I tell you something?โ I asked.
โUmโฆ ok?โ
โI understand what you mean, it's not fair for you or anyone to be put down cause they arenโt liked by everyone.โ
Klara pouted her lips, nodding slightly.
โIโฆ I feel like there is more than meets the eye, youโre an amazing person and never forget that.โ
โWow, I canโt believe Miss. Perfect just complimented me!โ She wheezed a laugh.
โIโฆ eek, a mouse!!!โ I scrambled to stand on the table, peeking at the carpet.
Klara gave a good laugh, โGeez, itโs just a vertebrate.โ
โOh yeah Miss. Knowitall, something that will bite you.โ
โWhere is it?โ She asked, clearly not bothering with my joke. I shrugged, inclining to the floor.
โHey, look.โ
โIs thatโฆโ
โA tunnel,โ She finished, her lips curving to a smile, โWe can definitely fit through there.โ
ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ย ***
Klara began to get on her knees as mine shook from fear of the loose mouse still roaming the room. Klaraโs bravery made me stunned, how the introverted, shy girl was suddenly finding ways to save us.
And I was impressed.
Letting Klara go in first, I was dazed by the musky smell of the tunnel, water leaked from the sides. Soaking my dress, I wanted to complain but understanding the current situation I kept mum.ย
I wanted to groan about my hair all fuzzy, my lack of clean oxygen, my lipstick melting from the shoddy smell.
I couldnโt see anything with Klara blocking my view, I had nothing to do but trust her. The tunnel felt slimy, I wondered if sewage rats would pop out and attack us.
My head felt dizzy, this was not something I was used to. I had to use my mouth to gasp for air as we went deeper into the maze like shaft. We moved left and right, rounding against the spiraling sides. Yet Klara didnโt utter a word, and neither did I.
I began to lose faith, my long legs cramp, luckily Klara was much shorter than me to fit inside much easier.
โWill this tunnel ever end?โ I complained, dodging something that looked like a dog threw up.
โI donโt know.โ I could barely hear her, feeling her breath was just a whisper.
I heard her stomach growl as she constantly swallowed, my throat felt like sandpaper as well but I tried not to think about it.
Just when I felt bile rose up my throat, Klara gasped. I looked behind her head to see that the space had become bigger. We were saved!
Klara went out first, looking around as I feebly got on my aching pair of legs admiring freedom.
โNow what?โ I asked.
"Iโm not sure but I donโt feel like we're enemies anymore. Though we weren't sure what was going to happen to us now or in the future, we would get through it together,โ She said as I nodded.
โTeamwork is dream work.โ
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Sure!
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Good story, kept my interest, hope you get the opportunity to read mine also.
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Thank you so much!!!! Sure, NP:)
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A new story is out would love your feedback.
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Sure Radhika!!!
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New story out!
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I really liked this story! Your writing is fantastically descriptive; I almost felt like I was right there with Brittany. The story was very intense and interesting, as well. I was hooked; I couldn't wait to find out if Brittany and Klara made it out of the detention room! Very intriguing and well-written story, keep it up!
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Thank you so much Kanden!!!! It really means a lot to hear from a specialist like you:D
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No problem at all :)
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:)!!!
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heyyy it says you can't take the quiz..needs permission??
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also new story out!
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Oh let me check, ok! I'll read it soon:D
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OK! :)
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Thx for taking my quiz!
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Can u try now?
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yep...:)
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This was great, Varsha! I loved how the two girls became friends with each other. Sometimes when weโre put in tough situations, itโs better if we have someone with us. I think you could try to make your characters a little more defined. Someoneโs personality isnโt just โuncoolโ bc of school stereotypes. Other than that, great job! :)
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Hi Jasey! Thank you so much! Yeah, I agree, thanks for the tip!
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No problem, Varsha! :D
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You know you really have a wonderful way of writing. You had me at the edge of my seat the entire time, wondering what will happen next. Absolutely amazing job!! Of course I noticed tiny details. Constructive Feedback: "I seated beside Hillary..." should have been "I sat/sit beside Hillary..." "I saw her mouth the questions..." What does this part mean? Did you mean to put a comma in there somewhere?
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Thank you so much Cookie!!! I corrected the first one, he second one is supposed to mean like when you read out the questions but some people read with their mouths moving, that is what Klara was doing. TY!!!
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NP NP NP!!!! And oh, I get it now :DDD
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:D, glad u do!
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I updated my bio!!!
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YAY! I'll check it out!
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Great, but I am wondering, why didn't the alarm go off? I think the alarms are supposed to sense it before you can smell it, so unless I missed something, they should have heard it. And I thought teachers did head counts, unless the teachers all left? Sorry, just getting caught up in the details, I love the story.
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Hi Emmie!!! Oh yeah, I totally forgot about that, maybe when I make a part 2 I will add those details. I'm glad u liked it!!!
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:D thanks!
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:D, NP!
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Hey! I liked the story, the concept was good. But the characters weren't very likeable, they had nothing relatable about them, and though the descriptions were good, the characters had no defining or distinct emotions about them. I would advise you to work on your characters further to make them different and realistic. Other than that, great work!
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Hi! Thank you so much for your feedback, I agree about the characters for sure. Next time I will try that, thank you again!
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No problem!
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Very sweet story! I liked how Brittany does wrong things, but still has a good conscience and still makes it up with Klara in the end.๐๐
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Hi Nandini! Thank you so much for your feedback:) Lovely name btw!
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Thanks, no one ever told me that before!๐
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Of course, well they should!
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Yaya!!!!
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New story out!!!
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Ohh Sure:D!!!
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Thanks!!! :)))
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NP!!!
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Happy saturday BTW!!!
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OMG THIS STORY... I JUST CAN'T... It was so sad at the beginning, but then it turned really hopeful AND I JUST LOVED ITTTTTTT Also why didn't you tell me you posted itttt QwQ
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Hi Kate!!!:DDD< thank you so muchhhhH!!! I thought i did, QwQ, I promise to tell u next timeeee!!!
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Hello!!! Nppppp!!!!!!! Ok! :D
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:DD, !!! YAY! ur the best!
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The skribbls now have a doc for chatting (kinda like Aerin's doc) and if you want to be on it the link is in my bio! :)
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YAY!!! :D, i''ll check it out!
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YAY! :D
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We're playing skribble again at 3:30 today, if you want to join the link will be at the bottom of my bio. :)
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ok!
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:) Did you see who my alt account is?
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Yup!!!
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;DDD
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I was surprised:D
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Heya Varsha, Wanna know my alt account? If you promise not to tell anybody. Also, if you want to know be ready to see so I can delete the comment right after. ;)
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Hey Maya! Sure:D, ok
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I'll comment a random emoji on one of your stories from my alt account. :)
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ok!
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I promise not to tell anyone:D
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Very cute story Varsha. The message is clear, strong, and bold.
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Thank you Hari!!!!!
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Hey Hari, check out this story! https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/79/submissions/53273/
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Of course! Also, definitely will! :)
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Hi Varsha! I absolutely loved working with you on our collab! It was a great experience and I can't wait for our next collab when we do one! Great job!! :DD <3
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Hi Akshaya!!!! I agree<33 Can't wait to see what happens next!!!
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Hey everyone! Hope you enjoyed this story! This is my first Collab with Akshaya! Check out her's for Klara's POV!!! And all her other stories:D, they're amazing! https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/author/akshaya-sutrave/
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