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Gay Suspense Romance

Part three of My Mistake! I finally finished it. Enjoy! 


BLAKE'S POV:


I scream, again, for what must be the twentieth time this morning. 

I hate it here. It’s cold, and small, and I just hate it. And I decided to make it everyone’s problem. I keep screaming.

Despite how hard I tried, I still got caught. I nearly killed the people that tried to take me to jail, so they brought me here. I’m not exactly sure where I am, but it’s terrible. I think it’s some kind of high security prison.

I’m in a small room with plain white walls. I’m sitting on the floor, because there is nothing in here. Not even a bed.

I’m wearing a white jumpsuit. There’s no zipper, buttons, pockets, or anything. I’m not even sure how they got this on me. I don’t know how I’ll get it off if they ever come to wash it. 

One of my legs is chained to the wall, making it so I can reach the door. I get food three times a day, usually an apple, a sandwich, and some water.

The one good thing about being here, is that I have a nice guard. He’s the only person I’ll tolerate.

They tried sending other people, but I just screamed till they left. When they sent him, he didn’t leave. When I shut up, he gave me my lunch, and he’s been my permanent guard ever since.

 He never smiles. I guess I can’t really blame him, I mean, he’s working here. I’ve tried to talk to him, but he usually just gives me one worded answers, and never shows any emotion. 

“Morning,” 

I look up. There he is. He closes the door behind him.

He looks about my age. He has curly dark brown hair, blue eyes, and light skin. He’s wearing a gray uniform.

DON’T TALK, KILL HIM! ESCAPE!

I ignore the voice. “Good morning.”

“You okay?” He asks, putting the food in front of me. I guess he heard me screaming.

I shrug. “No, not really.”

“Yeah, stupid question. Sorry.”

I reach for the food, and to my surprise, he doesn’t jerk away. He steps back slowly, standing in front of the door. 

Apparently, they don’t trust me with plastic, because the sandwich is on top of a small napkin, the apple on top of that. A cup of water sits beside them. I mean, they couldn’t even wrap it up? The floor is disgusting

But I eat it. Of course I do. I’m hungry. 

I glance up, taking a bite out of the apple. “Do you have to watch me eat?”

“It’s required.” He replies. “Sorry.”

“Why do you apologize so much?” I ask him, going back to my food.

“I don’t mean to. Sorry.”

I want to know his name, so I’m not just calling him "guard".

“Are you trying to be funny, Liam?” 

“No, of course not. And I’m sorry, but that’s not my name.”

I look back up, and see the hint of a smile on his face. He coughs, covering his mouth with his fist. He looks away, pursing his lips.

I smirk. “You aren’t funny, John, in case you were wondering.”

“It’s not John either.” He says, the smile clearer now. 

I start guessing names, until he finally tells me what it is.

“No, no, it’s Ryan.”

I nearly choke on the water. Ryan? Seriously?

I wipe my mouth, scowling. “I’m not calling you that. Pick something else.”

He raises an eyebrow. “You want me to pick a different name?”

“Yes.” 

He’s about to say something, but an alarm goes off, and he curses. 

“I’ve got to go.” He says, the emotion on his face disappearing quickly. 

I frown, but let him kneel down, and take the food I didn’t finish. I usually eat faster, but I got distracted. By him.

“You can call me Will.” He says softly before standing, and walking out the door. 

Huh. He’s not that bad.

DON’T FALL IN LOVE. LOVE IS WHAT GOT YOU HERE.

I wince. The voice is right. But I’m not going to fall in love. Not again. Not after last time.


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The door opens, and I look up. It’s Will.

I’m about to say something, but a short shake of his head makes me close my mouth. I frown, confused.

He puts the food in front of me, then stands silently at the door.

What happened?

I frown at him, but he doesn’t even look at me. 

I pick up the sandwich and take a bite. I almost spit it out, because there’s something papery in it. I look at the sandwich. There’s a small, folded piece of paper in it, and I pull it out. I start unfolding it, but Will coughs, and I glance up at him. He shakes his head again, still not looking at me, and I drop it in my lap. I guess I’ll read it later. 


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Will didn’t say anything at all. When he leaves, I opens the piece of paper.


I’m sorry, but I’m not allowed to talk to you anymore. If you want, I can put a piece of paper in your food to communicate. I’ll see you at dinner. 


I grin. I can’t believe he broke the rules. For me.

DON’T GET YOUR HOPES UP. HE DOESN’T LIKE YOU.

Is the voice right? I mean, he must like me at least a little if he’s willing to break the rules.

This is a bad idea. I don’t want to fall in love with him. But, then again, I might not. I can do that. We can just be friends, right?

...Right?


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Wrong. Wrong, wrong, wrong, wrong. I'm so, so wrong.

I don’t know how long it’s been, but we’ve found a way to communicate. I’ll talk quietly when he’s in here, and he’ll write questions on the paper, then hide it with my food. 

I told him about Ryan and Blake, what I did, and why he did it. I told him about the voice, despite it protesting. He said, well wrote, that people will do anything for love. It wasn’t a good idea, but he doesn’t really blame me.

And...I think that’s when I fell in love with him. 

STUPID, STUPID, STUPID, STUPID.

Yeah, yeah, I know. He probably doesn’t like me. I mean, why would he like me?

He reminds me of Ryan, and I think that’s part of why I fell for him. I try not to think about him too much, but I can’t help it sometimes. I miss everything about him. 

Today, after dinner, I open the note he left.


If you want to escape, be ready to go an hour after I leave. And if you get us caught, I’m going to kill you.



Part 4 is called My Escape.

December 16, 2020 22:22

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44 comments

Nainika Gupta
15:28 Dec 17, 2020

ghAAA so good - kept right up with the pace of the last 2 parts, and i just can't......wait....for whenever you decide to write part 4!!! Amazing job :)

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Ari Berri
15:32 Dec 17, 2020

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it! I'm working on part 4.

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Nainika Gupta
15:36 Dec 17, 2020

can't wait!!!!

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Nainika Gupta
15:44 Dec 17, 2020

HAZEL LEVESQUE FROM THE HEROS OF OLYMPUS!!!!!!!!

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Night Fall
13:18 Dec 17, 2020

Uhh there BETTER be a part 4! I enjoyed it, and how we fell in love with a guard...I meannnnn unexpected?

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Ari Berri
14:58 Dec 17, 2020

I'll try! Glad you liked it!

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Claudia Morgan
09:20 Dec 17, 2020

I- This is the best series on here. PART 4! PLEASE!!

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Ari Berri
14:59 Dec 17, 2020

Thank you! I'll try!

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Amel Parvez
03:52 Dec 17, 2020

WOAH! I am waiting for part 4. And BTW, I am also a fan of Harry Potter so yeah. Charly weasley😊

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Ari Berri
15:18 Dec 17, 2020

Thank you! I'm working on it. Harry Potter is awesome.

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Amel Parvez
15:24 Dec 17, 2020

not just awesome, it is SUPER SUPER AWESOME. Anyways you are welcome.

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Amel Parvez
15:24 Dec 17, 2020

not just awesome, it is SUPER SUPER AWESOME. Anyways you are welcome.

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Amel Parvez
15:24 Dec 17, 2020

not just awesome, it is SUPER SUPER AWESOME. Anyways you are welcome.

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Lucas Zhou
03:50 Dec 17, 2020

lol nice story charlie weasley

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Ari Berri
14:59 Dec 17, 2020

Thanks!

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Haylee Lundstrom
17:43 Feb 08, 2021

make another part i feel like this is gonna get juicy

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Ari Berri
17:48 Feb 08, 2021

I'm working on it, I don't know what I want to happen yet.

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Ashlee Kaspar
20:20 Jan 22, 2021

awesome

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Ari Berri
20:23 Jan 22, 2021

Thank you!

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Zoe Hays
22:06 Dec 21, 2020

ugh I need part 4!

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Ari Berri
23:54 Dec 21, 2020

I've actually already done it, it's called My Escape.

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Haylee Lundstrom
17:44 Feb 08, 2021

have you done part 4 yet

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Radhika Diksha
17:12 Dec 17, 2020

In love with the guard? Spice, thrill, and suspense. It's running like a novel and you are fitting the story in the prompt perfectly. Eager for its sequel. I have submitted a new story where I would love your feedback. And there's a QnA I'm conducting on myself for you all. Please read my bio carefully.

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Ari Berri
17:13 Dec 17, 2020

I'm working on part 4, I'll try to finish it today. I'll check out the your story.

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Radhika Diksha
17:15 Dec 17, 2020

ok, why do you keep changing your names?

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Ari Berri
17:19 Dec 17, 2020

Whenever someone guesses it, I usually change it.

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Radhika Diksha
17:27 Dec 17, 2020

I know it sounds weird. But your profile pic looks creepy. When I zoomed then I realized that it was a Koala bear, but normally it looks like a zombie.

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Ari Berri
17:30 Dec 17, 2020

I never thought of that. I guess it kind of does.

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Radhika Diksha
17:15 Dec 17, 2020

ok, why do you keep changing your names?

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Amaya .
00:17 Dec 17, 2020

um about your name what exactly do you want me to guess? but here's my guess: Ron Weasley's second oldest brother, who works with dragons and was both head boy and prefect while at Hogwarts

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Ari Berri
00:35 Dec 17, 2020

You got it! I'm keeping it today, since it's his birthday.

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Amaya .
00:37 Dec 17, 2020

okay!

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Amaya .
00:37 Dec 17, 2020

okay!

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:D THIS IS GOING SO SOOOOOOO GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOD

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Ari Berri
00:35 Dec 17, 2020

Thank you!!

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Shae Greyfeather
23:00 Dec 16, 2020

,............................If you kill the guard, main character, I'm going to be upset.

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Ari Berri
00:36 Dec 17, 2020

XD

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Leya Newi
06:04 Dec 20, 2020

I think I know who you are! KOTLC?

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Ari Berri
11:02 Dec 20, 2020

You got it! I just started reading them.

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Leya Newi
20:01 Dec 20, 2020

I know who this is too! Harry Potter! *very proud of myself*

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Ari Berri
20:07 Dec 20, 2020

Nice job!

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Leya Newi
21:41 Dec 20, 2020

I know who this is too! Harry Potter! *very proud of myself*

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