The Choosings—Part 1

Submitted into Contest #55 in response to: Write a story about an old family secret surfacing generations later.... view prompt

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Drama Fantasy

I sigh as I pluck my red sharpie from the magnetic holder stuck to my fridge. I bite the cap off and cross off today on my calendar.

My eyes wander a box over, twenty-four hours from today. It’s the day I turn fourteen. It’s also the day of the Choosings.

I have mixed feelings about my birthday. Not my birthday, exactly—I love my birthday. The thing I have mixed feelings about is the day it falls on—Mitzi 1st, the first day of the new year.

The day where there’s a new Chosen One.

I decide my feelings of the Choosings override my excitement of my birthday. I hate Mitzi 1st. It’s a day of suffering. 

My gaze travels over my bedroom. I have a room, a giant bed, my own fridge, TV, trampoline…all the typical perks of being a princess. Another perk: being excused from the Choosings.

Eighty years ago, when my great-grandfather was crowned king of Oacarro on his twentieth birthday—the day his father died—it started. The Choosings. See, the moon spirits used to have no actual power, but eighty years ago, their celestial capabilities returned mysteriously. The young King Klein said that in order to appease them, every year, one person must be chosen to become a moon spirit slave.

 One person may not seem like a lot, but Oacarro was a small planet. There was one tiny continent that contained the entire population of our planet—a thousand or so citizens. For the past eighty years, every Mitzi 1st, there was a lottery that everybody was forced to enter. The prize? Being sent the moon to be granted an immortal life—of slavery.

I dramatically flop on my bed. Ugh.

I don’t have anything to fear, even.

When my dad was younger, his sister was chosen to go to the moon. He was heartbroken and, afterwards, passed a law that the royal family didn’t have to enter.

Our people protested, but the king was mighty, so they didn’t do anything.

I’m the teen Princess Juniper, so I’m living rich, but I’m not happy. My only family is my dad, King Klein III, and my great-grandfather on his deathbed.

Also, while I don’t have to take place in the Choosings, I’m still affected. The guilt carries me everywhere that I’m excluded from an awful lottery. I obviously don’t want to be the Chosen One, but…. 

This may seem crazy, but I want to enter the lottery.

It’s so unfair that just because I’m royalty, I don’t have to enter. It’s unfair and also stupid and I’m sure most of the general population hates me for that privilege—even though they’ve never met me or ever seen me.

I’ve never been allowed to leave the castle or the Royal Gardens. I’m definitely not allowed to go to where the Choosings take place—which I hate. My dad treats me like some little kid, trying to protect me from the ‘harsh world’—ugh.

R-I-D-I-C-U-L-O-U-S.

This year, I’m determined to go to the festival (yup, it’s called a festival. Actually, it is a festival—in honor of my birthday and the new year. Just, at this festival, people are picked to leave Oacarro forever).

I need to experience it. Feel the pain of these people. I can’t stay cooped up in my fancy-schmancy room forever—I have to act like a citizen so I can be a proper queen.

I’m smiling as I curl up in my bed. Tomorrow’s an awful day, and that day will continue annually for a long, long time.

But, I think as I stare at the moon hanging in the inky-black sky, when I’m queen, these moon spirits aren’t getting their new slaves anymore.

My eyes travel down to the village below my castle. Just twenty years, guys. Twenty years until my dad retires and I can rule you. I can rule you, and I can stop these Choosings.

I’m starting to drift off to sleep. Just twenty years….


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“SHUT UP!”

I hurl my alarm clock to the floor and smile as I sink back into my pillow. I’m so warm, so cozy, and have such an annoying alarm clock….

Then I remember.

Today.

It’s that day.

I moan and roll out of bed, joining my clock on the floor. I spend two seconds ‘making’ my bed then scurry over to my closet. A moment later, I’m dressed and my dark brown hair is twisted into a braid.

I run back up to my bed and jump on it, pressing my face up against the window above the princess bed (my dad thought he was sooo funny when he made a new size called ‘princess’. It’s basically a king bed, just bigger).

The festival is already getting set up below me. It’s like a carnival, so everyone can have a good time before they see who’s the Chosen One.

The sun is beaming in the sky, so a layer of sunlight covers everything I can see. There’s sunlight, yeah, but there sure isn’t sunshine.

Go figure. The sun knows what’s up.

I groaned and burst out of my room, hitching a ride on the railing. When I was five, I learned that sliding down railings wasn’t just for princesses in movies—I learned how to do it, and now, the stairs are being dissed.

I smile as I enter our giant kitchen. Our cook, Lucillia, is already making—“Waffles and berries?”

The older woman chuckles at me as she finishes washing the blueberries and raspberries. “Yes. Don’t you like them, Juniper?” 

“Yeah,” I breathe. “Thanks.”

When she finishes, I snarf up the food and race out of the kitchen, into the carpeted ‘lobby’ of the castle. A second later, my cowboy boots are snug on my feet, and I’m out the door.

The Royal Gardens surround the castle with acres of bright green grass, moist soil, and enough fresh followers to fill fifty flower floats.

I glance around as I start walking towards the gate. My heart is racing. I’ve been in the gardens plenty times before, but I’ve literally never—I repeat, never—left the castle walls.

My dad is stupid.

I’m almost there. The gates are just ten yards away. Once I’m through them, I’m free to go to that sucky festival. Just five yards away. Just three. Just one—

“Juniper?”

I jump and crash into a bush. Ouch.

My eyes are still shut, but I feel myself being lifted from the shrubbery. When I’m back on my feet, I wince as my eyes blink open.

King Klein III is towering over me, his mouth twisted into something that I would call not just a frown, but a negative-grin. Yup, a -grin adorns his face.

“Dad…?” I squeak. “Um….”

I gulp and wilt a little under his shadow. “Why are you here?”

“Why are you here?” 

“Uh…I’m taking a stroll in the garden.”

“No, you're trying to stealthily get to the festival.”

“I’m not saying I agree to that, but…how did you know I was here?”

“Lucillia told me you were sneaking out of the castle.”

“She told you I was going to the festival?!” Seriously, Lucillia?!

“No. You just did.”

Dang it. Why didn’t I just play it cool? “I’m going,” I say, my blue eyes flitting up to meet my father’s harsh gaze. “I need to.”

“What you need to do,” he rumbled, “is stay here.”

“No.”

He purses his lips. “Juniper, you aren’t going.”

“No,” I repeat, a little louder. “Nope, I am G-O-I-N-G.”

I send him one more look and start to march to the doors. But since I’m still glaring over my shoulder, I walk smack into the hard sheet of wood.

“Ow,” I complain as I rub my head.

The next thing I know, my dad picks me up and starts strutting back towards the castle. I kick and scream like I’m being kidnapped, but nobody in the castle bats and eye as my dad carries me up to my room. I go limp in his arms—I literally can’t do anything.

Finally, I’m back in my room. My dad gives me a knowing look. “Juniper, you’re not going to the Choosings.”

I shake my head, and as he starts to leave, I shake it more furiously and yell, “I’M SHAKING MY HEAD TO SAY NO! ALSO, MY HEAD IS A MAGIC 8 BALL! AND YOU KNOW WHAT JUST POPPED UP?! ‘TRY AGAIN LATER’!”

I slam my door and collapse on my bed again. What I said is true—I’m definitely going to try again later. But I’ll bet ten bucks that dear ol’ dad stationed some guards outside the door so I can’t leave.

I groan for the second time this morning, open my door, and tromp down the hallway. Down the hall is my great-grandfather's room—he’s one-hundred years old and lies on his bed all day, a nurse sitting by his side.

I knock and a female voice called, “Come in!”

I press my weight against the door and it opens, revealing a large bed, an even bigger room, and King Klein (well, he isn’t king anymore) passed out on the bed. A young lady is monitoring something; everybody knows that the old king will die soon, so there’s always somebody here to watch over my GG.

“You can go,” I say politely to the girl.

She ducks a quick bow, says, “Of course, Princess”, and walls out of the room. The door clicks shut behind her.

“Hi, GG,” I say quietly as I approach the bed. I check on and meet with my great-grandfather at least a couple times a day. “Are you awake?”

I glance down at his resting figure. It’s like his wrinkles have wrinkles. “Okay, I’ll leave.”

“No,” he whispers. “Stay. Listen…”

Apparently, he’s awake, and he says—

“You want to have a conversation?” I blink. “Isn’t that what we normally do?”

“Yes,” his hoarse voice says, “but this is a very important conversation.”

He shifts in his bed and reaches over to his nightstand. I wonder what he’s doing as his shaky old hand opens the drawer. He pulls out an old-fashioned brass key.

He rolls over to the other side of the bed, where his other nightstand is. “Juniper, would you mind…could you pull this out from the wall?”

I nod and grasp the wooden piece of furniture, pulling it a foot from the wall. I watch GG in wonder as he pats the side of the table that’s been pressed up against the wall. 

I notice a keyhole in the wood and guide my great-grandfather’s hand towards it. He smiles and slides his key in the slot.

Once the key is turned, a hatch pops open. In it, built into the nightstand, was a small hollow. It looks really, really old—spiderwebs are weaved into the nooks and crannies.

There’s one thing in the hatch.

A glowing green-blue ball.

My eyes are probably stretched as wide as they can go as King Klein reaches his hand in and slowly, very slowly, pulls out the ball. It’s around the size of a ping-pong ball, illuminated a neon-ocean color from the inside.

“What is that?” 

GG smiles and presses it into my hand. It’s very dense but extremely light—it makes my head hurt just thinking about it. Also, the ball just felt like it was radiated power—a feeling I can’t quite describe. I examine the ball more. “Seriously…what is this?”  

He frowns and takes it back. “Something that has caused awful things.” 

I’m shocked to hear the change in his voice. Suddenly, my GG’s cringe whispers are replaced by a smooth, young voice. I think the ball is radiating power—and my gramps is being affected by it.

“Whuh…”

“Sit.” He pats the side of his bed. “I have a lot to explain.”

I do, and GG sighs and starts his story.

“When my father died, and I became king…people were angry. I was barely an adult and already ruling a nation of over a thousand people. The general population was bigger than it is now—it’s smaller today because of the Choosings. Because of what I did.

“People were getting out of hand. They weren’t respecting the royal power. I was young and stupid, but that doesn’t excuse what I did. See, I was traveling all around the continent, trying to calm down the people, when I stumbled upon a cave. And inside, I found this.” He pointed to the ball.

“The moon spirits have their powers because of a set of these balls. They had one, but one fell to Oacarro a long time ago. Their power was lost until I found the ball. With the matching set, they’d get their full power back.

“At the next full moon, I had a talk with a moon spirit. I promised them powers and offered them slaves, if only they agreed to do one thing. They did agree. I gave them the ball, and their powers returned. They gave me a copy of the ball, with one small power: something to slow down aging. 

“They destroyed a continent. See, Oacarro used to have another continent—a long, long time ago. The moon spirits destroyed it, and the people of our nation grew so scared they listened to me. I was the solid in all the chaos, even though I caused the chaos. I was the good king, there to help his people—help them against what I caused. I said I could speak with the moon spirits—which I can, as anyone can during the full moon. They didn’t know and everybody listened.

“They agreed to the awful terms. Once a year, on Mitzi First, a tribute is chosen to become a slave for the moon spirits. In return, they don’t kill us all. I struck the deal, and it worked. But not the way I planned.

“Everyone was terrified and heartbroken. Tame, yes, but spirits broken. It caused me pain to see the suffering I had made happen. I can’t excuse my actions. I can’t rewind time. But that’s why I’m telling you this.”

I swallow as a glance at my great-grandfather. A lump of emotions is stuck in my throat. My GG, my beloved GG, did this. This family secret that I never knew about. Until now.

I want to be furious. And I partly am. But all that comes out is….

Why?” I sob. “Why, GG, are you telling me this?”

He smiles. “I’m about to die, and I can’t keep this from you any longer. Not like your father has. I don’t want to die in regret. Please, Juniper, forgive me.”

I think for a moment. Again, I want to hate my great-grandfather, but I can’t. I can’t hold him up to a mistake he made eighty years ago. He can’t fix this, but I can. “Okay.”

He smiles again. “This magic sphere is the only thing keeping me alive. We need to stop this awful yearly tradition, Juniper. I can’t. But you can.”

He hands me the ball, his voice back to normal—slow and hoarse. “When you leave, I’ll die, as I should’ve ten years ago. This ball has some of the magic as the original set has—it could complete it, but it can also cancel it out if you put all three together. You know what you need to do, correct?” 

I take a deep breath. “Yeah.”

“Go, Juniper. And remember—your father’s laws only take action after a month. Lastly, remember the exact wording of your father’s law….” he smiles for the millionth time. “Now go.”

“But…you’ll die,” I choke out.

The sides of his mouth raise even more. “I say, go.”

Tears stream down my face as I race out of the room. I glance at a clock as I dart down the hallway—at nine a.m. the Choosing will happen. Fifteen minutes to get to the festival to make things right. 

My shoes are still on, and I wouldn’t have stopped anyway. I start to sprint to the festival, racing against time.

I look over my shoulder.

I’m racing against guards, too.

I’m running, sprinting, dashing—I need to get there in time.

My feet pound and carry me the mile there—

And finally, I’m at the festival.

I sprint past the guy who tells me to tell him my name—sorry, buddy, I’m not entering the lottery. I can’t, after all.

The games and booths are deserted and I jog past it all, to the courtyard square. Everybody in our town—the whole continent—is gathered in front of a stage.

There’s a lady, holding a large bowl. She’s about to pick.

“WAIT!” I yell.

Everybody freezes and I run around the crown and up to the stage. “Wait,” I repeat to the lady. “Don’t draw the unlucky winner yet.”

“Princess Juniper?” her eyes dart up to mine. She’s a plump woman dressed in a pink jumpsuit, with short brown hair.

“Yeah,” I say, breathing heavily from my run.

“Why are you here, Miss? You’re not allowed to enter.” She picks up a template resting on the stage and points to the bottom. There, my dad’s law is typed up: ɴᴏʙᴏᴅʏ ɪɴ ᴛʜᴇ ʀᴏʏᴀʟ ғᴀᴍɪʟʏ ɪs ᴘᴇʀᴍɪᴛᴛᴇᴅ ᴛᴏ ᴇɴᴛᴇʀ ᴛʜᴇ ʟᴏᴛᴛᴇʀʏ.

I smile, remembering what GG said: ‘Lastly, remember the exact wording of your father’s law…’ “I know. But there’s something else I can do.”

I plant my feet on the stage and glance over at the giant crowd. Everybody I’ll be queen of in twenty years. They all have petrified expressions—wondering what I’m doing but still terrified they’ll be picked.

I see the guards and my father arrived in the back of the crowd. They start to push through, but they’re too late.

I glance at the lady, then at the crowd, then all the guards.

I stare directly into my father’s dark brown eyes as I announce the hardest, but rightest decision I’ve ever made:

“I volunteer to serve the moon spirits.”

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312 comments

Megan Sutherland
01:35 Aug 23, 2020

Aerin, I forgot to say, Thank you so much for including me in your bio! It means a lot! 🤗

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02:29 Aug 23, 2020

Haha, I actually think you DID say it! But you’re welcome ;) thanks for mentioning me in YOUR bio!

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Megan Sutherland
02:31 Aug 23, 2020

Yeah, of course! You deserve it. And also, what can I say? I forget things. 😂😂

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01:53 Aug 24, 2020

Hi, Megan! Just so you know, Part 2 is posted if you wanna check it out ;) Bye! ~A

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Megan Sutherland
03:24 Aug 24, 2020

Sure, of course!

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Charles Stucker
21:02 Aug 22, 2020

"there was a lottery that was free to enter." If it is free to enter, why does anyone get forced to go? Wouldn't everyone going be willing? Or are they forced to enter? "But I’ll bet ten bucks that dear ol’ dad stationed some guards outside door so I can’t leave." outside my door OR outside the door. This went a lot faster than I thought. It flows so smoothly. Everything is just about perfect, minor edits aside. I might suggest changing the title to just, "The Choosing" or "The Day of Choosing" to better reflect the dual nature of wha...

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21:27 Aug 22, 2020

Thanks! ;)

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Kat Stokes
13:54 Aug 22, 2020

loved this! definitely need a part 2 🤠

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01:56 Aug 24, 2020

Thanks! P. S. Part 2 was just posted ;)

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Velma Darnell
13:40 Aug 22, 2020

Wow! That's an amazing story with great dialogues and descriptions! I love the name Juniper, never heard of it, but it sounds really unique. Hunger Games is one of my favourite book series, and your story really reminded me of it too. Great job :) Keep writing! p.s. I was wondering if you could check out my story "Hi, darling" when you have time and tell me what you think? Thanks!

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13:49 Aug 22, 2020

Thank you! P. S. Sure!

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First of all, great story! It kind of reminded me of the Hunger Games. Second of all, is the answer to the first word puzzle thingy "Evan Hansen"?

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13:48 Aug 22, 2020

Thanks! Yesss, that’s it!

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01:54 Aug 24, 2020

Hi, Peachy! Just so you know, Part 2 is posted if you wanna check it out ;) Bye! ~A

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12:44 Aug 22, 2020

What a great story. I've never seen the Hunger Games but if it's like this story I will def check it out. You did a great job developing relationships in a small space and creating realistic complete dialogue, which I have the hardest part doing. well done

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12:48 Aug 22, 2020

Thanks! Yesss, the Hunger Games are awesome. Yeah, they have the same kinda-cliché plot as this—volunteer for a lottery of something awesome—but the Hunger Games made it famous. Yup, you should totally read the trilogy or watch the movies! Anyways, thank you!

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Shreya S
04:58 Aug 22, 2020

Hey! Great story! I loved the whole plot with the princess and the moonly slaves. My favorite parts were the princess bed and 8 ball magic head and the sunlight not sunshine hahah I found a few things I thought you could change?: “See, the moon spirits used to have no actual power, but eighty years ago, they’re celestial capabilities returned mysteriously.” (They’re- their) “The door clicks shut behind her.“ (oop it isn’t coming in the comments, but you italicized clicks which doesn’t seem necessary) “Yeah,” I breathe, “thanks.” ...

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12:13 Aug 22, 2020

Thank youuu! Wow, thanks for all that feedback ;)

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Pragya Rathore
02:29 Aug 22, 2020

Hi Aerin! This story was beautifully written. It reminded me of a lovely dystopian story I read sometime ago. There were a couple of typos: they're- their every year one person must be chosen to become a moon spirit slave.- add a comma after year they’re- their again also stupid and I’m sure- add a comma adorned-adorns clicks- don't italicise it I offered them their power back and slaves-I promised them slaves and offered their powers back Glance over- glance towards the giant... rightest- a little clunky, do something like 'the b...

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02:49 Aug 22, 2020

Wow, thank you! I’ll make sure to correct all that! Haha, yup, that’s where I read Juniper originally. But I was looking through name lists to find this character’s name (she was actually going to be called Colette) and found this name again, so I decided to use it!

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Pragya Rathore
03:08 Aug 22, 2020

That's great...Colette sounds more like a princess :)

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03:25 Aug 22, 2020

Haha, yup, but then I decided on Juniper. I feel like Colette doesn’t fit this character as well...although I might use it in the future, ‘cuz I like names with ‘ette’s—like, Antonette or Marionette!

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Amany Sayed
13:56 Aug 22, 2020

OKAY HOLD ON Do you happen to....know any shows with the name Marionette?????????

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13:57 Aug 22, 2020

Yup! Okay, so you know any shows with the name Marionette AND Adrien?

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01:55 Aug 24, 2020

Hi, Pragya! Just so you know, Part 2 is posted if you wanna check it out ;) Bye! ~A

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Pragya Rathore
02:01 Aug 24, 2020

I'll definitely check it out :)

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02:08 Aug 24, 2020

Thanks!

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Shreya S
05:00 Aug 22, 2020

OkaY so you’ve read PJO too- how much more awesome can you get? That’s exactly what I was thinking! I kept putting Grover Juniper’s personality into this Juniper and what do you know? It fit.

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Pragya Rathore
05:11 Aug 22, 2020

:) You know, I keep thinking that I've met so many fellow fans of my favorite books, but what do I know? You surprised me again :p Yeah, I do really like PJO! You're right, but this Juniper was more like Katniss than like the real Juniper :D

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Shreya S
05:25 Aug 22, 2020

Hahah yes the whole thing was very hunger gamey, but I think if Juniper was ever in a situation like this, she would be brave and do it too! And yess haha I love PJO too! I’m really sad that so many people who’ve read Harry Potter or something think this is too childish to read or enjoy. It really is amazing. What else in the fantasy genre have you read?

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Pragya Rathore
05:34 Aug 22, 2020

It's not childish at all! Personally, I find the humor in it refreshing :) I've read some fantasy series, but I don't enjoy them anymore. Except HP, PJO and a few other series, most novels plagiarise the storylines of famous fantasy books. The same pattern: shy, unknown, rebellious teenager overcomes his/her fears and saves the world. It gets redundant.But POJ is really awesome!! (I'm honestly not the sort of person who can discuss books I like rationally. :p) What about you? What genres do you generally read?

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Shreya S
05:48 Aug 22, 2020

Haha yes, I know! Percy himself is a great character, not to mention all the representation Rick gives to the others. Oh, well,,, you’re not wrong. It does get redundant at times, and also very tiresome to read. But I still think some of the fantasy books are really good and really, which story doesn’t have the protagonist get over their fears and cause some good to society? I read mostly the dystopian fantasy genre with mystery/detective on the side. As a part of the fandom, I feel like I should make you like the genre again so: try read...

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Lily Kingston
02:24 Aug 22, 2020

Great story :) it’s good creative twist on the prompt. I love Juniper’s narration and personality. Can’t wait for part two. Keep up the good work and keep writing!!

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02:26 Aug 22, 2020

Thanks!

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01:55 Aug 24, 2020

Hi, Cara! Just so you know, Part 2 is posted if you wanna check it out ;) Bye! ~A

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Lily Kingston
02:35 Aug 24, 2020

Thanks for telling me :)

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Megan Sutherland
01:28 Aug 22, 2020

Also thanks so much for mentioning me in your bio! 🤗

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01:34 Aug 22, 2020

No problem! 👊

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01:26 Aug 22, 2020

Good job. I do have to admit that I initially got a bit of a "Hunger Games" vibe at the beginning, but you absolutely took this in your own direction, well done. I don't so much have a problem with the name Juniper, it's a good name actually. However, the problem is that this is supposed to be a fictional planet, so would they choose a name like Juniper, being that it's a tree from Earth? There were also a bunch of earthly references which I would be out of place on an alien planet. You definitely didn't bore me to death, overall, I di...

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01:34 Aug 22, 2020

Thank you! Yeah, the thing about creating other planets is that they’re typically LIKE Earth, just a bit different. So yup, there’s TVs and stuff!

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14:22 Aug 22, 2020

I suppose, it's your story, so your planet can be anything that you make it out to be!

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01:55 Aug 24, 2020

Hi, Jeremy! Just so you know, Part 2 is posted if you wanna check it out ;) Bye! ~A

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01:01 Aug 22, 2020

Hi Aerin! I just posted a new story, Ice on Fire. Can you look at it and give me feedback?

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01:01 Aug 22, 2020

Sure!

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Crystal ★
00:00 Aug 22, 2020

I am speechless. I am so putting on my bio to check this story out! IT WAS AMAZING! I was legit just thinking about rereading the Hunger Games because of how much I loved it, then I read this. Coincidence, I think not... :O

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Crystal ★
00:03 Aug 22, 2020

Update - Check my bio I have officially said to check this out :D

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00:12 Aug 22, 2020

Ahhh, thanks so much!!! I’m so glad you liked it and THANK YOU for putting it on your bio!!!

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Crystal ★
00:17 Aug 22, 2020

Thank u for writing it! And im expecting part 2 soon! If there is gonna be one anyways. And ofc, anytime!

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00:18 Aug 22, 2020

Oh, yeah, it’s Part 1 of 3. I actually wrote it knowing a prompt for this week would be part 2, so Yep, part 2 will be put this week! Maybe even part 3, but prob. not because I’ll be writing a lot of stories—part 2, then spun-offs to two popular stories of mine. Thanks!

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Crystal ★
15:40 Aug 22, 2020

OOH! I am sooo excited for Part 2, and possibly Part 3 if it comes out this week!

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22:19 Aug 21, 2020

Ok first of all, I'm going to guess you've read the hunger games. This was SOOOOOOOOOOOO fun to read and I loved it! The hunger games is one of my favorite series. I loved how you showed that Juniper didn't have to fit in with the standards of being a princess! You had great characters and it was very well written. I did notice that you switched from past to present tense a lot in the story. I don't know if you meant to do that but that was the only questionable thing I found! Great story as usual and I love the name Juniper.

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22:20 Aug 21, 2020

Thank you so much! Hmm, okay. Sometimes past tense was required, cuz I was talking about stuff in the past, but I’ll go through and edit again to check to see if there’s past tense where there shouldn’t! Thanks! I like it too ;)

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22:23 Aug 21, 2020

Ok so btw, I started an account on the reedsy marketplace website...I decided to write a collection of short stories, so could you check that out and give me feedback? A lot of the stories are ones you've already read...but still

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22:23 Aug 21, 2020

Whuh? Send me a link and sure!

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22:24 Aug 21, 2020

https://reedsy.com/#/books ok try this link and let me know if works

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22:30 Aug 21, 2020

Hmm, didn’t work. I can get to the place, but I can’t get to YOUR account. Sorry!

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01:55 Aug 24, 2020

Hi, Suhani! Just so you know, Part 2 is posted if you wanna check it out ;) Bye! ~A

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04:04 Aug 24, 2020

OOOOHHHH YES DEFINITELY!!!!!

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12:49 Aug 24, 2020

Thanks!

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B. W.
18:39 Oct 30, 2020

im a bit lonely, you there?

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B. W.
00:11 Sep 02, 2020

Hey Aerin i don't have any ideas because i just thought of this and i was wondering if you could help me think of some ideas for it. and i hope its not sounding like i'm trying to rip your Jax series off i just thought of it. I was thinking of doing a single story of a princess but thats all ive gotten with. i was also thinking of having something about powers but i thought that would kind of be ripping your story off so i'm deciding on if i shouldnt add any powers.

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B. W.
15:14 Aug 30, 2020

:D i up-voted your most recent story and the other one and then i moved down onto this one and up-voted a bit when i went and checked something, your back in third place Aerin :)

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18:13 Aug 30, 2020

😱😱😱 🤩🤩🤩 🤗🤗🤗

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B. W.
18:20 Aug 30, 2020

:D

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B. W.
18:49 Aug 22, 2020

I don't think that there's really anything wrong with this one. well nothings ever wrong with any of your stories and everyone elses stories. Juniper is actually a really cute name, i don't think i've ever actually heard that name be used for something. So do you know what this means? :) another 10/10. i saw the thing in your bio and i really love avatar the last air bender. i may have an idea with that in a later story :)

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01:53 Aug 24, 2020

Hi, B.W.! Just so you know, Part 2 is posted if you wanna check it out ;) Bye! ~A

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B. W.
02:03 Aug 24, 2020

i just did :)

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18:50 Aug 22, 2020

Thank youuu

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B. W.
18:52 Aug 22, 2020

no problem, and question if you were in avatar, what kind of bender would you wanna be? or be a no bender?

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18:54 Aug 22, 2020

Oh, I would definitely be a bender! I WOULD BE THE AVATAR

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B. W.
18:57 Aug 22, 2020

i think for me i'd probably also wanna be the avatar or be a water bender.

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19:02 Aug 22, 2020

If I couldn’t be the Avatar, I’d prob want to be an earth bender. Actually, a metal bender (have you watched LOK?), so I could bend metal AND earth. I’d WANT to be a water bender cuz of bloodbending, but only a couple people can do it and only on the full moon

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