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Fantasy Fiction Suspense

Poke, prod, scrape...


That's all it is, every single day.


Poke, prod, scrape...


For research, they say. For science.


Poke, prod, scrape...


They poke at my chest, as if feathers will sprout from them at any moment.


Poke, prod, scrape...


They prod at my wings, plucking feather after feather. They don't care that it hurts.


Poke, prod, scrape...


They scrape at my arms, collecting skin cells. They stick shots into my neck, trying to grab the best blood cells possible. They bend and unbend my backwards knee, examining every part of my body, trying to understand how I had the DNA of a harpy eagle inside of me.


To tell you the truth, I don't even know.


I don't remember not having these grey and black wings. I don't remember not having large, pale talons that replace my feet. I don't remember not having a second eyelid that blinks from the side, or the insane eyesight, or the vibrations I can feel every second of every day...


How long is a day again?


There is no sun. There is no sky. Time does not exist here, at least not for me. Morning is signaled by the load of scientists entering my room and strapping me to the table to begin their poking, prodding, and scraping. Sometimes an occasional experiment. Noon signals the one meager meal they slide underneath my door. Night signals the lights in my room dimming and the camera lights flashing through the darkness.


Sometimes, I hear bits and pieces of conversation.


"Parents... genes... animals... more..."


But they leave before I can make sense of it all.


Some days, the scientists simply come in to poke, prod, and scrape, then they take refuge behind the thick, metal door and release the straps that restrain me to the table. Those are the good days.


Others arenโ€™t as good.


Once, they brought in a python. It was humongous, almost 20 feet long, held by a leash through a hole in the door. It saw me, huddled in the corner, trying to get as far away from it as possible. Pythons were one of the few animals that were actually a threat to a harpy eagle, and the animal instinct in me went wild. Fly! Go to safety! Get out of here!


I wish I could.


I am not a murderer. I didnโ€™t hurt anybody. So why am I here? Why do I have to live this life of loneliness and pain and suffering?


Are there others like me? Others, who struggle with their animal instinct? Others with wings like a bird or a tail like a fish or claws like a cat? If so, are they living a life of suffering? Poked, prodded, and scraped their entire lives? Or are they living a normal life, soaring through the air, able to see the sun and the sky and just beย 


freeโ€ฆ


One day, the scientists didnโ€™t come. They didnโ€™t enter the room with their white coats and tranquilizer guns to strap me to the table. The blinking camera lights stopped. Confused, I walked to the door and peered through the peek-hole. The cameras in the hall were shut down as well.


Is this another test? Are they trying to see what I would do if I had the chance of freedom?


I remembered the last time I failed one of their testsโ€ฆ my wings ached at the very thought.


I stopped, feeling a sudden vibration through the walls. I stood still and felt it again, this time stronger.ย 


โ€œCome on, this way!โ€


Voices. People. They can save me, free me from this wretched nightmareโ€ฆ


No, thatโ€™s what they want. They want me to jump at the chance of freedom, to know what I would do so they can take the necessary measures to increase their security.


I canโ€™t let them have that.ย 


โ€œHurry up! The cameras wonโ€™t be down for long.โ€


I return to my corner, wrapping myself in my wings.ย 


Itโ€™s not realโ€ฆ itโ€™s not realโ€ฆ itโ€™s not realโ€ฆ


I was startled by a sudden banging on the door.ย 


โ€œIs anyone in there?!โ€


Eyes showed through the peek-hole, landing on me.


โ€œWe got one in here! Max, tear it down.โ€


The door was flown off its hinges, landing not 5 feet beside me. I cowered closer into my corner. Itโ€™s not real, itโ€™s not real, itโ€™s not realโ€ฆ


A gorilla burst into the room, followed by a boy with gold and green eyes, his orange tail and ears twitching with anticipation. His brown and red hair was plastered to his forehead with sweat, his abnormally sharp fingernails glistening.


โ€œFollow me!โ€ the boy shouted, holding out his hand to me. I shook my head, curling my wings closer to my body.


โ€œCome on, we donโ€™t have much time!โ€ he shouted, moving his hand closer. Before he could react, I raised my talons, leaving several scratch marks on his arm. He jerked his arm back, staring at the blood dripping off his arm.


โ€œHey, Iโ€™m trying to help you!โ€ he shouted. โ€œSo are you going to come with us or just sit in the corner while this place burns to the ground?โ€


I hesitated. I could just barely smell smoke in the airโ€ฆ would the scientists really go this far for a test? I was just about to reach for his hand when a girl in a scientist coat walked into the room, holding a tranquilizer gun.


I flared my wings and screeched, a sound a harpy eagle rarely makes. I knew it, I knew it was a test, and now that they saw what I was about to doโ€ฆ


โ€œLiz, youโ€™re scaring her!โ€ shouted the gorilla. โ€œAnd take off the coat, you donโ€™t need it anymore.โ€


โ€œWell, too bad if Iโ€™m scaring her, Max,โ€ retorted Liz, her bright blue eyes glaring at me. โ€œThe building is coming down. We gotta get out of here, NOW!โ€


The boy turned to the gorilla. โ€œJust grab her and go!โ€


The gorilla made their way towards me, but I flared my wings again and lifted my talons, prepared to strike. I felt a small pin-prick of pain on my arm. It slowly became numb, spreading to the rest of my body, fogging up my brain.


โ€œLiz!โ€ shouted the boy. Everything sounded far away, as if underwater. โ€œYou didnโ€™t have to tranquilize her!โ€


โ€œDo you want to make it out of here alive or not?!โ€ screamed Liz. I could feel my body being lifted off the ground and placed on a large, hairy shoulder.


โ€œAre the others on the boat?โ€ shouted the boy as we ran through the burning building.ย 


โ€œYes, theyโ€™re on the boat. Now letโ€™s get out of here before- watch out!โ€


Wood crumbled all around us as the ceiling gave out. I heard a grunt before I was thrown off the hairy shoulder and onto the cold, hard floor. I tried to get up, but my muscles were too weak. I could barely hear Liz shouting before a large piece of wood from the ceiling landed on me and everything went dark...


March 09, 2021 19:48

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wowwwwwww wow wow wow this was really good!!! very suspensefulllllllllllllllllllllll and amazing cliffhanger!! I love my characterrrrrrrrrrrrr:DD nice job Abbie!! Cant wait for the next part!!

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TJ Squared
01:05 Mar 10, 2021

wow! Great job, and that cliffhanger was priceless! I filled out your form, btw :)

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Valerie June
23:03 Mar 09, 2021

Nooo, the dreaded cliffhanger! Oh my goodness, this is going to make an amazing series I just know it. I'm not sure if this is the novel you talked about in your bio, but if it is, I'm so glad that this prompt worked perfectly to unleash your idea. The story had a nice and suspenseful pacing to it which made the story roll off the tongue. I filled out the form and just wanted to tell you that I wish you the best of luck for this series! :D

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tysm I'll try and include you in the next series! This isn't the one I mentioned in my bio (the other one is better XP) but ty for reading and hope you enjoy the rest of the series! :D

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Ooh yay!!! I love how you used the words poke and prod over and over; lol Iโ€™m getting anxiety just reading this. Love my character! Great job!

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This story features: Ethan as Ethan and Luna as Liz, anyone who filled the form and is not in the story don't worry, I'll try to include you in the next one! If you would like to be featured, fill out the form in my bio :)

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Phoenix LaRue
18:22 Apr 29, 2021

This is a great beginning to the series! I loved Harper's vulnerability, and the action was really detailed. Plus, the cliffhanger was amazing! I like them as much as you do. I'm going to read Part 2 now.

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Beverly Riddle
15:08 Apr 23, 2021

Whoa! Great story! I was just wondering, could you do me a small favor? I'm currently trying to write a chapter book called The Secret Journey. I posted what I have so far on Reedsy recently, so I'm not sure if it will show up right away. But if you can, would you mind reading what I have so far, and giving me feedback, or some tips I can use to make it better? I think I only have about 7 chapters done, and most of them are pretty short.

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Beverly Riddle
15:08 Apr 23, 2021

Whoa! Great story! I was just wondering, could you do me a small favor? I'm currently trying to write a chapter book called The Secret Journey. I posted what I have so far on Reedsy recently, so I'm not sure if it will show up right away. But if you can, would you mind reading what I have so far, and giving me feedback, or some tips I can use to make it better? I think I only have about 7 chapters done, and most of them are pretty short.

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Felicity Anne
15:18 Mar 15, 2021

This is so cool!!! I thought I'd stop by and read part one before I went to read the second part and I'm glad I did! I like the unique perspective of being inside your character's head. She has a very unique inner voice! As far as grammatical corrections go, I did not see anything that needed to be fixed, so good job!! :)

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Felicity Anne
15:27 Mar 15, 2021

No problem! Lol, that's good! My stories are FULL of grammar mistakes, haha. I loved it!!!!!! I don't think so, but I'll let you know if I think of something! Again, thank you so much for featuring my character!!

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Felicity Anne
21:07 Mar 12, 2021

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Felicity Anne
14:22 Mar 12, 2021

Read your whole bio!! โค๏ธ I'll be back to read your amazing stories later today!! :)

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Lilliane Wei
02:37 Mar 12, 2021

HAIIIIIIII JUST FILLED OUT YOUR FORMMMMMMMM SO MUCH INFORMATION IM SO SORRY LOL

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BY THE WAYYYYY it can't be mystical creatures sorry :( if you are looking for an agile creature google may be able to help (no more cats or wolves tho lol) btw I LOVEEEE HTTYD best movie ever but yeah you will need to choose another animal :)

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Lilliane Wei
23:23 Mar 10, 2021

Helloooooooo saw you wanted to join my Reedsy castttttttt!! Stuff like the brother thing would go in last question, I think. Sorry about how long this is! Preferred story name (just so you know, I like keeping your username so that people can easily identify you unless your name is like an inanimate object or something but I wanted to put this here just in case): Hair(anything from just a vague description to every detail is fine): Eyes(anything from just a vague description to every detail is fine): Skin tone(anything from just a vague d...

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Ok got it! Abigail will be fine in that case, but some people call be Abbie so you can put that too if you want doesn't matter to me :) Hair: Dark brown with green streaks and a flower wreath Eyes: Wide, bright green eyes Skin: Like a light yet slightly tanned skin tone or something (idk lol) Clothing: regular clothing (or maybe a jumpsuit) with vines and roses around it Personality: Quirky, likeable, friendly, loyal, etc. Fave color: Green Relationships: no bf or anything, but the brother is her only last family member Oooooo I wan...

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Lilliane Wei
16:39 Mar 11, 2021

Ehehehehehe I love backstory...๐Ÿ˜ˆ๐Ÿ˜ˆ๐Ÿ˜ˆ... Lol, I don't think I can choose some other guy already on here to fit that role unless you know someone? I could try it with Ethan but if not your brother's going to be a fictional person and unfortunately you'll have to describe all of him :D. You wanted his name to be Flint, right?

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Lilliane Wei
17:41 Mar 11, 2021

Actually, there is one male character who might work. Well he's really a she but she wanted his character to be a he and...ugh it doesn't matter, the point is that he's a Shadow with no relations at the moment with this personality: outgoing, impulsive, risk taker, firm but friendly. So I'll see what I can do :D

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Lilliane Wei
17:33 Mar 10, 2021

Hi, Abbie!! This was such a great story! I love the descriptions and the way you illustrate the story unfolding. This was super intriguing and really easy to read, great job!

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