Contest #204 shortlist ⭐️

Gordita

Submitted into Contest #204 in response to: Set your story in a desert town.... view prompt

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Western Funny Adventure

This story contains themes or mentions of substance abuse.

You won’t find it on any map. When spoken of, it’s usually by old men drinking coffee at the local Dairy Queen. The town is part legend, part myth, a relic of the old west that left nothing behind to mark its existence save a lot of old bones and a half-buried, rotted sign displaying the town’s name.

Not that anyone has lately seen these bones, or the sign; they are lost in the vast West Texas desert, bleached by the sun and sniffed at by coyotes. The sun returns daily to further ossify the bones, and the coyotes abandon the bones in search of something worth eating.

Gordita.

Even the name of the town is debated. Some say the name was Gordia, not Gordita. Arguments ensue. The old men’s grandfathers’ recanting of the tale are passed around from old man to old man. Everyone under the age of sixty don’t care. The employees at the local Dairy Queens want the old men to leave, to make room for people who desire to eat their life-shortening burgers and fries.

The one thing all the old men agree on is that something calamitous happened to the town for it to disappear so completely.

They are right.

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Gordita (Gordia?) met its end because of three seemingly innocuous situations:

1.   The astounding level of laziness and bureaucracy in the state cartographer’s office.

2.   A traveling circus coming through town.

3.   The mayor recently discovering tequila.

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                                                                1832

Joe and Marylou Statler stopped midway through their journey to California. This was due to Joe’s indolence; he never saw the advantage of working hard when one could work less hard. Marylou had married him, despite knowing of this shortcoming. She vowed to remake Joe in her own image.

They built a small house in the desert. Marylou planted a vegetable garden and Joe planted a baby inside Marylou. Jessie, when born, saw a world that made little sense to him. This would not change much over the years.

Jessie’s father died when he was twelve. Rather, he watched as his mother shot his father over a dispute about her culinary abilities. To wit: he complained about undercooked corn one too many times. Jessie had to dig a grave and plant his father.

His mother died ten years later. A rattlesnake bit her. She didn’t die, though, before prying the snake off her ankle and bashing its brains out.

She also didn’t die before creating a budding empire in the desert. She and Jessie built a general store, catering to travelers going west. She soon added a saloon that sold cool beer and whiskey of sketchy provenance. She added a sheep ranch to provide the restaurant with mutton and cheese. The year before she died, she brought in prostitutes from New Orleans and Ft. Worth.

Jessie, now a young man, buried his mother and continued their legacy. Like his mother, he was ambitious. Like his father, he was a bit lazy. This combination worked until it didn’t.

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                                                                 1855

One warm June evening, Jessie got gloriously drunk. Not an unusual occurrence. He also eschewed female company for the night in lieu of doing something productive. This was very unusual.

He desired to name the town, and it seemed fitting to name it in his mother’s honor. He thought about it for a few minutes before coming up with a) an appropriate-sounding name, and b) one that he could spell.

Gordita. Pudgy woman.

Conchita, a sporting woman (and the one who introduced Jessie to the pleasures of female intimacy), called his mother by this name, though never to her face.

Jessie found a thick piece of wood and some paint. He started working. The first four letters were legible and evenly spaced. Unfortunately, there was little space left for the remaining three letters. Jessie squished them in anyway. He attached the sign to a post and planted it in the ground. It fell over. So did he.

Conchita got a couple of ranch hands to secure the sign the next day. It stayed up, firm and true.

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                                                                  1893

Jessie appointed himself mayor of Gordita on his sixtieth birthday. He had appointed himself sheriff on his fiftieth birthday, so it seemed right that he would become – at least in his eyes – more important every decade.

Because of his new-found status, Jessie decided to contact the state of Texas and ask that they put Gordita on the map. Surprisingly, they acquiesced. They arrived in August. Four bespectacled men in gray suits, accompanied by strange instruments and wide eyes. They had never seen such a place, a veritable oasis in the desert.

Conchita, too old to be lying on her back for a living any longer, now managed the bar and the girls. She brought in better whiskey and friskier girls. The bar no longer carried a sour, musty odor. Jessie was so happy about this that he gave her a month off work to go back to Sonora and visit her family. She came back with a husband and several bottles of something that Jessie had never heard of: tequila.

He liked it. He liked it a lot. He liked it so much that he appropriated the twelve bottles of the magic elixir for himself. Conchita’s husband went back to Sonora to procure as much as he could of the clear, peppery liquid.

Conchita went back to work. She provided the cartographers with female company for the duration of their stay, had the bar cleaned up again, and whiled away her free time mixing the tequila she had hidden from Jessie with lime juice and sugar water. She considered selling it in the saloon at some point.

To commemorate the presumed status of Gordita as a place on the state map, Jessie also managed to get a traveling circus to perform while the cartographers were there. Jessop Witt’s Amazing Spectacles arrived a day before the cartographers. Elephants and lions and tigers made their way down the main street, advertising the circus. Bearded ladies cavorted, strong men flexed, clowns danced around, handing out sweets to the kids, and Jessop Witt himself led the procession.

This is where things got interesting.

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Jessop Witt wasn’t simply the owner of a traveling circus; he was also the ringmaster and the lion tamer. Although a skilled orator, he wasn’t much of a lion tamer. He would saunter into the cages, crack his whip a few times, getting the lions to roar, and then leave the cage.

He was prone to drinking, and somewhat less prone to quality control. These didn’t seem like terrible sins. Until the animals escaped.

It had happened before, but never in such a vast landscape. Rounding up the animals would prove much more difficult in such terrain.

The elephants were easy. The monkeys were less easy, but still accomplished in a few hours. The lions, though, proved impossible. Men searched for them every night, but to no avail; they had simply vanished.

But that wasn’t quite true. The lions left evidence of their existence: dead sheep. The ranch hands would find a half dozen slaughtered sheep every morning, half-eaten. The hearts and livers were always gone because lions, apparently, liked hearts and livers.

Jessop Witt decided to do a flit. The circus, like the lions, had disappeared. They could do without the lions but they didn’t care to face an increasingly hostile populace. There was talk of incarceration, or worse. Jessop decided that discretion and distance was the better part of valor, so the circus high-tailed it to New Mexico.

The lion problem remained, as did the cartographers. They tarried, more because of the free drink and free women than anything else. The lions tarried because of easily-had food.

Jessie was distraught. When Jessie was distraught, he drank.

Tequila has an amazing effect on people. It soothes the soul, warms the belly, and goes down as easily as a good cup of coffee. Too much, however, causes a person to lose any sense of perspective. Jessie was good at having too much of everything, and tequila was no exception.

He was drowning his sorrows with tequila and adventurous prostitutes the day the circus left town. Both revived his spirits, to a point. The early-morning hours found him crawling over nubile bodies on his way to the outhouse. He felt like shit, and his mind was once again troubled by the lion problem.

Morose and full of self-pity, Jessie decided to hunt the lions himself. He would wait no longer. It was dark, feeding time for the lions, and he was ready to tackle the problem himself.

The effects of the tequila became apparent almost immediately. The waning crescent moon created a dim, hazy atmosphere. Shadows lurked in the desert. Ghosts appeared out of nowhere. A low, guttural growl pierced the air, terrifying Jessie. He started shooting wildly at the dark.

He didn’t manage to hit anything carbon-based except for the town sign. He had shot off the sign at the spot after the “i” and before the “t.” Jessie didn’t know this; he had run screaming back to his hotel room. The growls of the lions scared him more than his mother ever did.

A couple of ranch hands found the damage as they were heading into town for coffee and supplies. After gathering what they needed, they consulted Conchita on what to do about the damage done to the town’s name. Conchita, shrugging, told them to just attach the pieces together and let it go at that.

“The “t” is gone, Conch,” one of the men informed her.

Conchita thought about this bit of news for a moment.

“No one’s gonna miss one little ‘t.’ We all know the name of our town, anyway.”

The men nodded at Conchita’s good sense and went off to repair the sign. They attached the two pieces together with a couple of bracing boards on the back and set the sign back in the ground. Standing back to look at their work, the men noticed that the remaining letters were now evenly spaced and more pleasing to the eye. Gordia looked a hell of a lot better than Gordita ever did, they reasoned.

Conchita had been almost correct in her assumption that no one would notice the difference. Unfortunately, the cartographers noticed.

Discussions took place in the saloon. These mutated into arguments. Two of the four cartographers swore that the name of the town was, and always had been, Gordita. The other two swore that the name of the town was, and always had been, Gordia. The impasse remained unresolved, even when they left town on their way back to Houston.

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Dominic Farleigh was the head of the mapmaking division for the state of Texas. He took his job seriously enough to work diligently to create a department rich in graft and corruption. He made friends in the accounting department so that he could eat and drink on the state’s money. He greased the palms of several other bureaucrats to procure nice clothes, a fine house, and the occasional frolic with women of loose moral character. He, in turn, aided and abetted the schemes of his fellow bureaucrats. Texas may be a young state, but its bureaucrats were wise in the ways of greasing the wheels for the government.

The cartographers were fortunate enough to find their boss present and fairly sober when they returned. The quandary regarding the town’s name was put to Dominic.

Dominic grimaced; he actually had to make an official decision. Dominic lectured the cartographers on many things, most of them dealing with the fact that they brought him a problem to deal with. After a couple of snorts of whiskey, he calmed down. After lighting a cigar, he became downright philosophical.

“That’s a knotty little problem you boys gave me.”

The cartographers nodded, contrite. They had no idea that decision-making was frowned upon by the state’s machinery.

“Listen, boys. A town that can’t decide on what to call itself has no business being on our map. We’ll just leave it off.”

The cartographers looked at each other, frowning.

“But – but it’s there,” one of them said.

“That’s as may be, son, but is it really worthy of being on the map of the great state of Texas? This is a state of boldness and decisiveness, boys. Hard men, forging empires and becoming legends. This Gordita Gordia thing doesn’t sound like it belongs on my map. Sounds like it belongs in Oklahoma.”

The cartographers couldn’t think of any argument decent enough to put forth to their boss, so they left it at that. Dominic waved them out of the office so that he could take a nap. It had been an exhausting thirty minutes.

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Jessie got gloriously drunk the night after the cartographers left Gordita. The tequila had invaded his system once more, dulling his senses to the point that he thought of a brilliant plan to get rid of the lions. The problem, of course, was that the plan wasn’t at all brilliant.

Jessie did what he had to do, then went to bed; he slept well, certain that his brilliant plan would be the talk of the town. He was right.

This is where things got very interesting.

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The sheep were dead. All of them. White clouds of wool dotted the landscape, fluttering in the breeze and beginning to decay in the desert heat. Several men wandered through the carnage, looking for a reason why every sheep in the area had died.

They found the reason soon enough. Someone had put out poisoned food.

Jessie was stunned – and silent. He wasn’t going to tell anyone that it had been his doing. He thought about his plan, and realized, in his sober state, where he had gone wrong. He had thought that the lions would eat the poisoned food, neglecting to think that the lions’ diet had consisted exclusively of sheep. The sheep, however, ate the poisoned food.

The townspeople were unusually quiet and sober when nighttime arrived. This was a fortunate occurrence, for several lions wandered into town, looking for a new food source. Bedlam erupted.

People ran, screaming, for cover. The lions roared at the screams, pawing the air as if they could rid the air of such a terrible sound. Men grabbed guns and started shooting. The lions evaded the bullets, slinking towards the shadows.

In the chaos, someone had knocked over a lantern. The fire spread from building to building in the stiff desert breeze. Soon, the horizon was alight with fire and people running. Lions prowled, looking for food. No one was killed by a lion that night, miraculously, but Gordita had burned to the ground.

The lions all died that night, in the fire. The knotty problem of ridding the area of lions had been solved, but at great cost. Jessie found no comfort in this.

Everyone left. Nothing remained of the town except smoking embers and singed lions.

Jessie, still drunk and very distraught, climbed on his horse to join the exodus. He slipped off and fell to the ground, under his horse. The horse stepped on Jessie’s skull, thereby sending Jessie off to God’s judgment.

Jessie Statler was the last victim in Gordita to die from drinking and driving.

Conchita and her husband found Jessie’s body. They buried him beside the repaired sign that had altered the town’s name, figuring that the sign would double as Jessie’s burial marker. After saying a few words over the grave, the couple left Gordita. Sonora was their destination. Conchita wanted to have a bar of her own so she could sell her new concoction.

The town’s sign fell over a few months later. The Statler legacy was left to the tender mercies of the desert.

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                                                             2023

“I’m sick of those old men. All they do is argue about cattle prices and some stupid town that probably never existed,” Larry Gregson said, shaking his head before returning to the grill to flip a few burgers.

“They’re harmless. Tall tales aside, I like ‘em,” Jill said. She popped a couple of steel cans into the milkshake mixer.

“Don’t know why,” Larry grumbled.

“They have great stories, and they tip well,” Jill said.

“Made up stories,” Larry said.

“Yeah. Maybe. But stories are all they have now.”

Jill eyed the old men with a mixture of sadness and pity. She prayed that she would never wind up in a Dairy Queen, telling old stories, probably apocryphal, at the end of her life. It was tragic, she thought.

Like all those Greek mythology stories old Mrs. Crannick made us read. Someone rises to glory and then dies. I never got why that was so great.

Somewhere in the deserts of West Texas, a coyote urinated on the very spot where Jessie Statler was buried.

The universe, it seems, has a very twisted sense of humor.

June 30, 2023 11:31

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86 comments

Zatoichi Mifune
08:05 Jul 08, 2023

Had to come again to say congratulations on the shortlist! (Honestly, I'm not surprised)

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Delbert Griffith
08:36 Jul 08, 2023

Thanks so much, Zatoichi. I appreciate the congrats. I'm thrilled, of course, but humbled as well. To be part of such an amazing group is a humbling experience. Cheers!

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Wally Schmidt
04:50 Jul 07, 2023

I like tequila and I like this story Del. A vibrant mix of colorful characters and a story that is as tightly coiled as a snake. Great fun!

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Delbert Griffith
10:09 Jul 07, 2023

"A vibrant mix of colorful characters and a story that is as tightly coiled as a snake. Great fun!" You should be a professional book/story reviewer, Wally. Your comment on my little tale reads like the professional reviews I've seen. So, I thank you for the very kind words, my friend. It feels especially nice coming from someone who, I suspect, doesn't suffer average tales gladly. And, since you're a fantastic writer, the kind words validate the tale. In short, I'm chuffed! Cheers!

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Wally Schmidt
14:13 Jul 07, 2023

Chuffing deserved! Sadly, my own ink well has dried up and I am spending most of my time editing. Love how disciplined you are about the craft, producing fine work every week. Keep at it and hopefully preserve your gems for future generations of Griffith's.

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Mary Bendickson
14:56 Jun 30, 2023

The universe and Delbert, akin. Well done, my Friend. Congrats on the shortlist!

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Delbert Griffith
22:31 Jun 30, 2023

Thank you so much, Mary. I always appreciate you reading my little tales. Cheers!

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Tommy Goround
00:24 Jul 11, 2023

(congratulations)

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Delbert Griffith
00:26 Jul 11, 2023

Thanks so much, Tommy. I appreciate it. Cheers!

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Philip Ebuluofor
17:32 Jul 09, 2023

Beautifully delivered. Congratulations to you.

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Delbert Griffith
18:09 Jul 09, 2023

Thank you very much, Phillip. Cheers!

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Wally Schmidt
19:12 Jul 07, 2023

Congrats on the Shortlist! Can we just have this as a standing comment every week since you grace the list so often in one way or another?

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Delbert Griffith
19:16 Jul 07, 2023

If only that were true, my friend. I thank you for the congrats, Wally. You're a jewel. Cheers!

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Susan Catucci
17:32 Jul 07, 2023

I knew it I knew it I knew it! This is an extremely satisfying shortlist, Del (frankly a win would not have surprised me at all). It's a good day for all things being right with the world. Enjoy every minute, Del - just like we enjoy reading your stuff!

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Delbert Griffith
19:13 Jul 07, 2023

Aw, Susan, I think the world of your praise for my little tale, and we both know that I got a huge assist from you in writing it. I'm thrilled that it was shortlisted, but I promise you that I'm more pleased with comments like yours. Thanks you so much, my good friend. Cheers!

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Marty B
16:47 Jul 07, 2023

Good people, sheep, a circus and even a town fall victim, again, to the Bureaucracy of Important Men. The hero of the story was Conchita and her magical brew of lime juice and sugar water and tequila! I loved the easy pace and twisting turns the story took. Great one and congrats!

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Delbert Griffith
17:23 Jul 07, 2023

Thanks so much for the kind words and the congrats, Marty. It was a fun write, but there was some darkness underneath, yes? And I agree; Conchita was the real hero. Suddenly, I'm in the mood for a margarita! LOL Again, thank you, my friend. Cheers!

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16:18 Jul 07, 2023

Del, you are a modern day O. Henry. I love reading your work -- deceptively "light and fun" with an iceberg's depth of cold-brewed humanity underneath. Celebrating another win with you today!

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Delbert Griffith
17:21 Jul 07, 2023

Thank you very much, Deidra. Coming from you, it means a hell of a lot to this country boy. O. Henry. Well, if only. Thanks for the comparison; I'll try to live up to it. Cheers!

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Nina H
22:18 Jul 06, 2023

What a fantastic story! Love your style here, and tequila soaked tale of Gordi(t)a!

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Delbert Griffith
22:31 Jul 06, 2023

Thank you very much, Nina. I appreciate the kind words. Liked: tequila soaked tale... Cheers!

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Delbert Griffith
22:31 Jul 06, 2023

Thank you very much, Nina. I appreciate the kind words. Liked: tequila soaked tale... Cheers!

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Liam Murphy
14:36 Jul 06, 2023

Hi Delbert, I loved Gordita; it is fast-paced, well-paced and deliciously funny. This is literary fiction with a gorgeous fresh, and entertaining approach. I like it a lot. Liam

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Delbert Griffith
14:48 Jul 06, 2023

Wow, thanks so much, Liam. I truly appreciate the kind words. I'm pleased that the pacing worked. When I wrote the first draft, the pacing was terrible. It was a disjointed, rushed affair. Ah, the magic of editing, right? LOL Again, thank you, my friend. Cheers from Texas!

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07:35 Jul 06, 2023

I was assigned to read and comment, which seems superfluous since you already have a lively discussion going. This is a delightful set of threads of nonsense woven together with excellent pacing and wrapping up to a really satisfying theme. On the constructive side: it sounds like lions and sheep eat the same food, so exactly what was left out could be clearer. Also there’s a word choice glitch in this sentence: « He also eschewed female company for the night in lieu of doing something productive ». Really fun piece, but in the end not just ...

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Delbert Griffith
09:45 Jul 06, 2023

Thanks so much for the kind words, Anne. It means a lot when other writers like your tales. Yes, I could have made the poison thing better. And the word choices in the sentence you mentioned are, in retrospect, not in keeping with the tone of the story. Alas, we live and learn. I appreciate the critique; it means more to me than praise. Again, thank you, my friend. Cheers!

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Delbert Griffith
09:45 Jul 06, 2023

Thanks so much for the kind words, Anne. It means a lot when other writers like your tales. Yes, I could have made the poison thing better. And the word choices in the sentence you mentioned are, in retrospect, not in keeping with the tone of the story. Alas, we live and learn. I appreciate the critique; it means more to me than praise. Again, thank you, my friend. Cheers!

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Gloria Dawn
03:01 Jul 06, 2023

A fabulous fun tale. I loved the satire and the whole story! There are many ghost towns in Canada and the U.S., and I'm sure some of them have quite a story behind them, if only we knew what went on in the day. I believe many did get razed by fire, with old wooden buildings and kerosene lanterns, a combustible combination. But few had the delectable cast of characters you introduced us to. Well Done. You get my vote.

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Delbert Griffith
09:35 Jul 06, 2023

Thanks you so much, Gloria, for the kind words. Truly. Yes, a drunken mayor and a bunch of lions make a recipe for disaster, yes? LOL Ghost towns in Texas are legion. And so many have pasts that are lost; no one knows why they died out. Fascinating stuff, dark stuff, but always interesting. It was fun to write this tale. Again, thank you, my friend. Cheers!

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Susan Catucci
21:51 Jul 05, 2023

I'm noticing, Del, that I'm apparently not the only one who thinks what we have here is something really special. You breathe life into distinctive places and people and situations that don't let go. I marvel at how the pieces all fit together here - and it is funny and it's ludicrousness that absolutely works because it's Del Vision (has a very recognizable smart, homey, fun-feel to it.) Putting your imagination and creative gifts on paper is the best thing a wordy like you can do, Del. I'm happy not to miss any of your gems. :)

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Delbert Griffith
23:20 Jul 05, 2023

You remember how rough and uneven this tale was when you first read it? The damn thing was like ten miles of bad road. I have you to thank for pointing me in the right direction and making this a readable tale. LOl Del Vision. Coming to a theatre near you! Truthfully, I think you have a lot of gifts, Susan. Your tales inspire me, and I'm always happy to lend an assist when needed. Just like you do for me. I'm so pleased, my dear friend, that you like this story. Your suggestions led me to a major re-write, and I think it's one of my bett...

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3i Writer
02:31 Jul 05, 2023

What an epic story. Every detail is so mindblowing and really has a twisted sense of humor.

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Delbert Griffith
09:21 Jul 05, 2023

Thanks so much for the kind words, my friend. It was a lot of fun to write. Cheers!

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Sherry Bazley
23:02 Jul 04, 2023

Methinks The Legend of Gordita would make an excellent flick, with Clint of Westerns fame as the hapless sheriff-maker-of-mishaps. Really good work!

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Delbert Griffith
23:16 Jul 04, 2023

LOL Clint Eastwood as a hapless sheriff? That would be epic! Thanks for reading my twisted tale of a lost town. I'm pleased that you liked it; a writer's opinion always counts for more. Cheers!

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Kevin Logue
18:24 Jul 04, 2023

This was so unique in its format, well written and just a darn tottin' good story I has to be a contender. Very well done Delbert, I look forward to reading your other works!

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Delbert Griffith
18:57 Jul 04, 2023

Thanks so much, Kevin. It always feels good when a writer likes my tale. A darn tootin' good story. Well, high praise indeed, my friend. I'll take it and run with it. Thanks again, Kevin. Cheers!

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Sravya Lekha
13:31 Jul 04, 2023

This was so fun to read! Loved the use of the mini summary before traveling back to 1832, worked very well with the story's structure

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Delbert Griffith
13:33 Jul 04, 2023

Thanks so much, Sravya. I appreciate the kind words and the analysis. Cheers!

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Michelle Oliver
12:02 Jul 04, 2023

You write so masterfully and with such authority that I kind of expect to see a creative nonfiction tag! The world you created was so well rounded so believable despite the comedy of errors that caused both its rise and fall. I love the descriptions and language choices, so tongue in cheek. Great work as usual!

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Delbert Griffith
12:12 Jul 04, 2023

Thanks so much, Michelle, for the kind words. Coming from an author of your calibre, it means a lot to me. Truly. I'm hoping it gets shortlisted, for no other reason than I want an irreverent, snarky piece of mine to make a shortlist. I mean, don't escaped lions and lazy bureaucrats deserve a shortlist? LOL Speaking of shortlists, I'm saddened that "Mitzee and Menace" didn't get at least a shortlist recognition. What a great tale you wrote! It was, seriously, one of the best pieces of writing that I've encountered in quite some time. Tha...

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Michelle Oliver
12:32 Jul 04, 2023

A story about lazy bureaucrats and menacing lions deserves to be told! Thanks for your vote of confidence in my story. I think I may have angered the gods of Reedsy because twice now my stories haven’t even been approved… well I write not for judges, but for people like you who enjoy reading. If it tickles a judge’s sensibilities then that’s a bonus.

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Delbert Griffith
12:54 Jul 04, 2023

I'm shocked - shocked! - that any tale you wrote wouldn't be approved. I'd dearly like to know which stories, and why. This is inconceivable to me. You are one of the best writers on this site. I seriously question the ability of the judge(s) who denied your stories. Yes, you have my vote of confidence, but you have it because you're a legit writer. You certainly have skills in writing that I don't have. Your lyrical prose has me green with envy. Keep on writing those wonderful tales, my friend!

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Michelle Oliver
12:59 Jul 04, 2023

Sweet Justice was never approved and Cursed to be More was only approved after I emailed asking why it was not approved. They said it was waiting and finally was approved 12 hours before the winner was announced that week. Oh well the system is not perfect an I suppose human error has much to answer for.

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Delbert Griffith
13:39 Jul 04, 2023

The late approval for the one tale effectively took you out of the running for a shortlist or a win, so that's as bad as not being approved. I went back and read the first couple of paragraphs of both tales. I remember them well. They were both excellent stories; as usual, they contained that lyrical, flowing quality that you pull off so well. I'm a little disheartened that this happened to you. Both tales deserved sober consideration.

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Graham Kinross
11:18 Nov 29, 2023

First, congratulations on being shortlisted. Managing to fit all of that history into the story was epic. Alcohol, the cause of and solution to all of life’s problems. In a single swoop it seems like the flaming tequila was invented and lost decades before anyone else thought of it.

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Delbert Griffith
13:26 Nov 29, 2023

Thanks so much, Graham. I appreciate the kudos, and I appreciate you taking the time to read my little tale. It's Texas, my friend. When you mix tequila with guns and bad decisions, you have a story! LOL Cheers!

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Graham Kinross
13:28 Nov 29, 2023

You’re welcome.

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