Ten Seconds 'Till Death

Submitted into Contest #74 in response to: Write a story that takes place across ten seconds.... view prompt

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Sad Romance Teens & Young Adult

I’ve heard about someone’s life flashing in front of their eyes before they die. But mine was more of a movie. An old-fashioned movie. The scenes of my life slowly unfolded, shifting from one to the other on a tape. I could almost hear the clicking sound of the transitions. And somehow, I knew that I had ten seconds before the car would hit me, therefore killing me. And then the movie started.

10 seconds

I was the stereotypical “nerd” in middle school: I always had my nose in a book. I loved reading, it gave me an excuse to escape the real world and get lost in a better, fictional one. So it’s not a surprise when I accidentally bumped into someone while walking.

“Oh, sorry! I didn’t see you!” I blushed, turning crimson, as my book spilled out of my hand and fell onto the floor, the sound ricocheting off of the walls of the hallway. 

“It’s not a problem!” I looked up to see a boy with curly, brown hair and twinkling chocolate eyes hand the book back to me. 

“My name is Levi.”

“Lily.” I responded, smiling.

That was the start of one of the best things that had ever happened to me, meeting my best friend. Who would soon turn into something much more.

9 seconds

We hung out a lot. I was glad to have someone like him as my best friend, who would always have my back. 

And I always had his. 

It was like our relationship was a puzzle: each time we saw each other, we got a small piece of it, all the way until we completed the puzzle, and fell for each other.

“Lily!” I turned around, and my eyes lit up when they landed on Levi. He could do that to someone; cheer them up even when they were having the worst day.

“Lev! What’s up?”

“Nothing much, I just wanted to keep our streak of seeing each other everyday.” I blushed.

“You make it sound like we’re together or something,” I joked.

“Would you like to be?” Levi stared at me, an expression in his eyes that I’ve never seen before, almost like he was staring straight into my soul.

I held his gaze, unable to look away from those intense, dark eyes, like black holes. I’ve heard about people having butterflies in their heart, but mine had a whole zoo in it, stampeding past barricades that I had put up long ago, shredding them into nothing but oblivion.

And then the bell rang, the chimes signaling the end of the passing period. I glanced away, blushing.

Levi laughed at my expression, hugged me, and then left for his next class, his hug still lingering with me like a sweet scent on a fine summer day. 

8 seconds

I will always remember the exact day when I fell for Levi. It was a rainy Tuesday, and I had forgotten to bring an umbrella. The rain poured down, like it was a warning sent down from above. 

Except that day was more like a blessing.

I had put a hood on and ran to a little shed, where Levi was waiting for me, like always. This was where we would go before school started, and then we would walk to school together. The rain had soaked my coat, even with it being “waterproof.”

“LILY!” He ran to me.

“What, is something wrong?” I glanced around frantically, but his eyes were focused on me.

“You’re soaking wet!” He cried, his voice laced with worry.

“Yeah… I uh… forgot to bring my umbrella,” I grimaced.

“Here… take mine.” He handed me his umbrella.

“But what about you?” I asked, trying to push it back. But he insisted.

“Don’t worry about me, as long as you’re happy, I will be as well.” My breath caught at this, and we stood there until I remembered that we needed to go to school.

“Are you sure? You’re going to be really wet though…”

“I would drown in an ocean for you, being wet is nothing!” His tone was playful, but the meaning way deeper.

He ran out into the rain, dancing. I laughed, my voice twinkling as bright as stars on a clear, night sky.

Even though this was a small gesture, it made me see why my heart raced every time I was with him, why my cheeks would always heat up whenever he fixed me with his stare. It wasn’t because of his looks (even though he wasn’t bad looking). No, it was his personality. The way he raised his eyebrow when making a joke, and his smile, which seemed to shine brighter than the combined light of stars. And how he would always put me before himself. He could be so protective and stubborn sometimes. But I loved that. I loved every part of him. And it wasn’t long until we confessed to each other.

7 seconds

It was the last day of eight grade, and we were let out of class early. Levi and I laughed all the way back to our houses, the sun streaming through the viridescent leaves.

And then he stopped, turning around. 

Even many years later, I remember how my breath hitched when he took my face in his palms.

“Lilypad…” he called me by my nickname. “We’ve known each other for a long time now, and I realize… that I’ve caught feelings for you. I love the way your face lights up when you help people, and I love how caring and sweet you are. I want to stay by your side forever, I want to always be there for you, when you’re happy, or when you’re sad. I want to be the one to cheer you up, to put a smile on your face. So, Lily Keish, will you be my girlfriend?”

I gasped. “YES! A THOUSAND TIMES YES!” I was so happy, but I should have known that happiness never lasts. It was just a matter of time before the dazzling, bright happiness faded into a damp, lifeless grey. The color of disappointment. 

6 seconds

I had changed a lot during that summer, the summer before high school. My frizzy, almost black hair became soft and wavy. I knew exactly what to wear to bring out the golden flecks in my brown eyes, making even the dullest eye colors striking. 

I was never ugly, but now… now I was beautiful. Strangers would stop by just to gape at me. It was a weird feeling, but I soon got used to it. Too used to it.

And then came the first day of high school.

Somehow, I had become popular. People would stop to say hi to me or wave, and lots of people wanted to hang out with me. 

But I didn’t take my friends for granted. I still always sat with Levi, and we always would walk home together. 

Everyday, he would give me a small lilypad made out of paper. I had a jar where I kept them. I still remembered the first day that he had done this.

“Lily!” He smiled at me, his hand outstretched. In it was a small lilypad made out of paper. It was the most beautiful thing I’ve ever seen before. Every fold meant that he loved me, each crease holding a bit of the feelings that he had for me.

“Levi! You didn’t have to…”

“I know. I wanted to. You’re the best thing that’s ever happened to me, so I’m going to give you one of these everyday, in case you ever forget to love me.” He smirked, making me roll my eyes.

“You know that will never happen.” I swatted at him playfully.

That was the highpoint of my life. My relationship with Levi was going wonderfully, and I was happy. I felt like the luckiest person in the world; I had a loving boyfriend and he meant the world to me. But I should have known that my life would only go downhill from there.

5 seconds

I got used to being popular. I was starting to hang out with the “cooler” kids, and didn’t have as much time for Levi. However, he was still very understanding, and wouldn’t get mad at me when I told him I needed to cancel our plans.

“Hey Lilypad!” He called to me, smiling.

“Levi!” I grinned back.

“Wanna come over today?”

I winced, one of my popular friends, Hayley, had asked me to go to the mall with her. “Sorry… but I can’t today. I have… something to do.” Guilt started to pile on me, like grains of sand. Small, but after a while, it can bury a person alive.

“Oh, okay, that’s fine! Love you!” He blew me an air kiss and walked away, leaving me to drown in my guilt.

And then I started to change. I don’t know what happened, but I couldn’t stand to be with anyone that wasn’t popular. After all, I had my reputation to consider. 

Even though I had become extremely popular, Levi was still the same. He wasn’t as out-going as I was, so many people didn’t even know him. And I did love him, but… my popularity status was decreasing by hanging out with him. If I could change one thing, it would be to go back in time and tell the old me that popularity isn’t everything.

But I can’t.

All I could do was watch my younger self slowly make the mistake that would cost me my life.

4 seconds

Parties were now a regular thing. My friends from school would always host them, and I felt like I had to attend. However, Levi didn’t like them.

“Lily, where are you going?”

I turned around to see Levi standing there.

“Oh, I’m going to a party that Oliver hosted, wanna come?”

“No thanks. You know how I feel about them.” These days, it was almost like we were strangers to each other. And I guess in some ways, we were.

“Okay then. I guess I’ll get going now…”

“Love you!” Levi smiled at me, one that used to melt my heart. 

“Love you, too.” But the words felt weird on my tongue, like a foreign language. One that you might forget if you don’t practice it.

I could feel us slowly drifting away, but I couldn’t do anything to stop it.

3 seconds

My friends didn’t like Levi. They would always tease me for hanging out with a “nerd,” and after a while, I stopped defending him.

“So, how’s your nerdy boyfriend?” Hayley asked me, smirking.

“Still the same.”

“If I didn’t know better, I would think he’s mute,” a girl, Maddy, snickered.

“Yeah, like seriously why doesn’t he talk?” Hayley agreed with her.

“And those origami lilypads that he gives you, so lame. Has he never heard of stores before?” Maddy continued. 

Levi walked up behind me, but I didn’t notice.

I knew I should have defended him, but I didn’t. I wanted to fit in with my friends.

“Yeah, that is true. I don’t even know why I’m dating him anymore!” I laughed. And, just to prove my point, I took the jar of lilypads that Levi gave me and threw them onto the floor. The jar shattered, and the orgamis inside crumbled on impact. 

“Lily…” I whipped around to see Levi standing there, a look of absolute shock on his face. My heart stopped.

“Levi!” I had made a huge mistake. “I… I didn’t mean it!” 

“Yeah, I’m sure you didn’t. At least now I know, though. I never meant anything to you.” He looked at me with those chocolate eyes, this time filled with hatred, and walked away, taking all my happiness with him.

2 seconds

I’ve heard the words that you don’t miss someone until they’re gone, but I’ve never felt it until now. I should have appreciated Levi more, and now that he isn’t with me anymore, I feel numb. 

Which is worse than feeling sad.

When you are sad, you get over it. But it feels like I died, like I was just an empty soul without a purpose. I felt like life didn’t have a meaning anymore, and in a way, it didn’t. Why live if the person you love won’t be with you?

Sometimes, I just want to break down and cry. But I can’t.

No matter how hard I try, the tears won’t come. We haven’t talked in weeks.

It goes without saying that the paper lilypads have stopped coming, too.

1 second

I still love him. I scold myself everyday for saying things that I didn’t mean, and it breaks me. It’s hard to keep living if even myself hates me.

But I continue on. Maybe it’s the hope that I would someday get back with Levi, that I could make everything right again. 

Everyday, I think of countless ways to correct my past mistakes, but none of them worked.

I gave him flowers, gifts, taped up the lilypads. But he still wouldn’t even look at me.

“Levi!” I called. He didn’t even stop walking. “I’m sorry! I am so, so, so sorry. I still love you! I was so, so stupid!”

“Yeah, you were. And I still do love you, as much as I wish I wouldn’t. But you should know,” Levi turned around, “that it was still a mistake. I want to forgive you, but it’s harder to forget.”

I lowered my head. He was right, it was all my fault.

I ran a lot these days. Maybe it was so I could feel pain, and remind myself that I was still alive. Or maybe it was just to try to run away from all of my problems, which seemed to pile up these days.

I thought about what Levi had said, and how he still loved me. That hurt the most, the fact that he still had feelings for me but chose to ignore them.  

I felt tears forming in my eyes, but tried my best to swallow them back. I couldn’t let them out, as I was still at school. But tears are hard to reason with.

So I ran.

People called out to me, but I didn’t stop. I never wanted to stop, I wanted to die running. And I guess my wish came true.

I ran and forgot about all my worries, the only thing on my mind was the searing pain of my legs. My vision was blurred by tears, but I still saw the faint outline of something racing towards me.


I was like a deer caught in headlights, frozen and unable to move. All I could do was stand there as the car sped towards me.

But I suddenly felt… at peace. With the wind whistling in my ears, drying my tears, I realized that maybe it was best for me to leave this world. I had caused so much pain to Levi. 

Levi… I’m sorry. I hope that you can be happy now that I’m not in your life anymore, and move on. You deserve someone better.

As the car neared me, I saw the terrified expression on the driver’s face as he stomped frantically on the brakes.

And I smiled at him.

It’s going to be okay, I silently communicated to him. I’m not scared of death anymore. In fact, I welcome it. He seemed confused, but I returned my thoughts back to Levi. I wanted him to be the last thing I thought about before I died.

Levi, I love you. Know that we will see each other again, death is not the end. It just means that I’ve finished the race faster. Did you know I started running? I guess in a way I was already running towards my death.

I took a deep breath as death hurled towards me in the form of a blue car. I saw a hooded figure coming towards me, cloaked in all black, but then his figure changed into someone I knew very well.

Levi.

He came to me, smiling, and held out his arms. I sank into them, and he carried my soul out of my body. As we floated up into the clear blue sky, I saw myself on the ground, blood pooling all around me. But I had a smile on my face, and that was all that mattered. That was the last thing I saw before Levi carried me away into the distance, to a beautiful golden bridge surrounded by lilypads.


December 30, 2020 20:56

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182 comments

Kate Reynolds
20:58 Dec 30, 2020

Hello! I usually don't write much romance, so tell me how it is! Also I feel like the title is a bit weird, so if you have any suggestions please let me know! Thank you! :D

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Mira Caplan
21:04 Dec 30, 2020

IT TWAS AMAZING, AND THE TITLE WORKS PERFECTLY. Maybe you could incorporate something with lilies in it, if you wanted to change the title?

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Kate Reynolds
21:05 Dec 30, 2020

THANK YOU! And yeah, I was thinking about something like that! :D

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Kate Reynolds
21:06 Dec 30, 2020

Hm Fields of Lilypads maybe? (Or is that even weirder lmao)

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Mira Caplan
21:09 Dec 30, 2020

XD I personally like the current title, so you don't HAVE to change it, if you don't want to.

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Kate Reynolds
21:10 Dec 30, 2020

Ooh okie then!

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Mira Caplan
21:11 Dec 30, 2020

Mhm! Btw, this is totally random but I have a new obsession with Maven Calore. I've only read half of Red Queen, but I've stared at the draing of him on the Wiki page for the past ten minutes. XD

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Erza Scarlet
21:27 Dec 30, 2020

Bootiful child Bootiful. STUPID LILY ARE MY LAST WORDS FOR THIS STORY. NO I DO NOT HAVE ANY SYMPATHY FOR HER

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Kate Reynolds
21:28 Dec 30, 2020

AHAHA THANK YOU ERZAAAAA

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✰ Jennie ✰
21:10 Dec 30, 2020

Wow! Ten seconds!??!?! You crafted this story so well Kate! I just love it... sad romance... I cry Particularly how Lily developed into a popular girl and felt embarrassed about Levi, and when she didn't have Levi anymore, the regret was written so well. The ending tho... that was just amazing I love it I love it I love it I love it I love it I love i I love it I love it I love it Wahhhhhh me crying very hard rn!

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Kate Reynolds
21:11 Dec 30, 2020

XD thank you thank you thank you thank you!!!!!!!!!!

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Erza Scarlet
21:29 Dec 30, 2020

;-; Stupid lily

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Kate Reynolds
21:30 Dec 30, 2020

XD

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✰ Jennie ✰
21:14 Dec 30, 2020

The more I read this again the more I love it! A golden bridge surrounded by lilypads... Seriously this is the best story! I may have just read the winning story of this week! 🏆 🏆 🏆

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Kate Reynolds
21:15 Dec 30, 2020

Aww THANK YOU!!!!!!! :DDDDDDDDDD

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Mira Caplan
22:56 Dec 30, 2020

I aGrEe

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Kate Reynolds
23:05 Dec 30, 2020

:DD

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Dorian Gray 📖
16:54 Dec 31, 2020

OMG YOU'RE AT 2000

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Kate Reynolds
17:03 Dec 31, 2020

:DDDDD YEP!!!!!!!!

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Dorian Gray 📖
17:04 Dec 31, 2020

VARSHA'S A MALLOW TOO

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Kate Reynolds
17:20 Dec 31, 2020

YAAAAYYYYY

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Dorian Gray 📖
17:21 Dec 31, 2020

AND AKSHAYA AND JADE

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Kate Reynolds
17:21 Dec 31, 2020

:DDDDDDDDDDDDDDD

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Dorian Gray 📖
22:35 Dec 30, 2020

I LOVED THIS IDEA!!!! I would add some more dialogue, but it was amazing!!!! Great job!!!

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Kate Reynolds
22:43 Dec 30, 2020

THANK YOUUUUUUUUUUUUU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Dorian Gray 📖
22:44 Dec 30, 2020

NPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPP

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Kate Reynolds
22:45 Dec 30, 2020

:DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD

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Dorian Gray 📖
22:46 Dec 30, 2020

:DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD

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That Asian Creep
23:39 Jan 09, 2021

Woah... this is such an interesting plot!! I love it :))

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Kate Reynolds
18:13 Jan 10, 2021

:DDD THANKSSS!!!!!!!! C:

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Erza Scarlet
00:14 Jan 03, 2021

Hi Kate!

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Kate Reynolds
00:14 Jan 03, 2021

Hello!

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Kate Reynolds
00:14 Jan 03, 2021

Hello!

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I love your bio, Ezra! I was hoping you'd written some things, but if you're still trying to figure out how to write something that's okay, I didn't write for a while after signing in :)

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Kate Reynolds
20:40 Jan 08, 2021

XDDDDDD yep, Erza is my friend irl, and I've been harassing her to write a storyyyyyyyyy (but.. alas.. she hasn't *sigh*)

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Erza Scarlet
22:25 Jan 08, 2021

Who’s ezra ima erza-

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Erza Scarlet
22:30 Jan 08, 2021

Henlo hooman. Actually no- Your not hooman Henlo non-hooman Kate is harassing me to talk to you so hi-

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Kate Reynolds
22:32 Jan 08, 2021

I AM SO PROUD, YOU ARE MAKING YOUR VERY FIRST FRIEND *wipes tears*

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Erza Scarlet
22:38 Jan 08, 2021

There’s something wrong with you.

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Erza Scarlet
22:38 Jan 08, 2021

There’s something wrong with you.

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Erza Scarlet
22:38 Jan 08, 2021

There’s something wrong with you. Really wrong with you.

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Maya W.
22:10 Dec 31, 2020

Hey Kate! I've seen your comments on other people's stories floating around, but I never actually tried one of yours, I don't think. Well, for the most part, I really enjoyed it! I loved the beginning and ending, how the lillypads tie into the death, and the comparison to a movie. I do have some critiques though - it feels a little odd that Lily's only thoughts before she dies are of Levi. I feel like there'd be more going on in her head. Also, we don't really know what's going on with Lily, so maybe clear that up. There's a few places that ...

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Kate Reynolds
22:58 Dec 31, 2020

Hello Maya! Ooh thanks for the suggestion!!!!!! I will edit it soo! (I gotta finish a story first though) And sure I will as soon as I can! :D

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Akshaya Sutrave
13:28 Dec 31, 2020

Hi Kate! Wow, amazing! I loved reading this story! The character development was fantastic! I feel so sad for Levi, and maybe a little for Lily, even though what she did wasn't right. This story really moved me, and I loved it so so much!! Keep writing! :)

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Kate Reynolds
13:36 Dec 31, 2020

Thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :DDD

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Akshaya Sutrave
13:47 Dec 31, 2020

Of course!! :D

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Kate Reynolds
13:49 Dec 31, 2020

:DDD

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Akshaya Sutrave
13:51 Dec 31, 2020

:D

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Kate! This story broke my heart:( It was so sad, I felt like crying! You should write more romance, you're so good at them. The way you wrote everything was unbelievable. Sure you aren't a robot?;) I love this story so much!!! Great work!

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Kate Reynolds
22:21 Dec 30, 2020

Aw thank you!!!!!!!! XD nope don't think I am! THANKSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D

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:) You deserve it Kate!

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Kate Reynolds
23:05 Dec 30, 2020

Thanksss! :D

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Kate Reynolds
23:05 Dec 30, 2020

Thanksss! :D

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Kate Reynolds
01:17 Dec 31, 2020

C:

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Kate Reynolds
01:17 Dec 31, 2020

C:

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12:58 Jan 14, 2021

Have you ever heard of 'Falling into place' by Amy Zhang? I think this definitely gave me vibes of that. (Please put up with me as I geek out over the book. You should absolutely check it out, by the way. If it's even still in print) There is a line that goes something like "“Because Liz Emerson held so much darkness within her that closing her eyes didn't make much of a difference at all.” I think this line is very much akin to your own work. If I was writing it, I maybe wouldn't have included the part about Levi being some sort of angel; I...

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Kate Reynolds
13:12 Jan 14, 2021

No, I haven't, but I will be sure to check it out!! (It sounds awesome) Thank you soo much for the feedbackkkkkkkkk Thankssss!!!

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22:33 Jan 11, 2021

This was so amazing! It was only in 10 seconds as well! The story was amazing, and fit with the name really well, it was realistic, with the slow changes to how Lilly acted. Even if I wanted to, I don't think I could find a thing wrong with this story!

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Kate Reynolds
00:37 Jan 12, 2021

Aww thank you!!!!!!!!! :DDDDDDDDD That means a lotttttt!!!!!!!!!! :)))))))

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Kate Reynolds
00:39 Jan 12, 2021

Btw are you gonna post anything soon? (No pressure, though. Just wondering! :D)

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So sad and so sweet! Reedsy might put in a warning, if they haven't already. Very good, though!

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Kate Reynolds
20:40 Jan 08, 2021

Thank youuuuu!!!!!!!!!! Nope, they didn't! Thankssss!!!!!!!!!! :DDDDDDDD

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Zae Johnson
20:46 Jan 05, 2021

This was one of the best romance stories I've ever heard. It was so touching and I may have even shed a few tears. It was like a movie in my head was playing just.......better. This story is so true 'cause people can be sucked into popularity so easily and forget about the things that truly matter and you really brought it to life. Thank you for sharing your talent with me and all these other people. You would be a wonderful author and I would buy all of your books that were published. I am quite astonished by what you achieved with such a s...

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Kate Reynolds
21:34 Jan 05, 2021

Omg thank you soooooooooooooooooooooo much!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! That means a lot to me!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :DDDDDDDDDDDDDDD Btw tell me when you post your first story, I will be looking forward to read it! :D

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Zae Johnson
18:05 Apr 08, 2021

You're very welcome!! I will definitely do that. I just have trouble writing stories that match the prompt, and I am a slow writer so I struggle to finish it within the time limit.

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Kate Reynolds
20:18 Apr 08, 2021

Yayyyy!!! Yeah, same, I used to struggle with that too. But with practice I’m sure you can do it! :)

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Zae Johnson
00:39 Apr 09, 2021

Thanks for believing in me, it means a lot!!! Btw, if/when you publish books, I would say to not have a pen name (unless Kate Reynolds is your pen name) because, it sounds like the name of an amazing author. Just a little nugget of info for ya.

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Kate Reynolds
11:37 Apr 09, 2021

Ofc!!! Yeah, Kate Reynolds is actually not my real name XD But it does sound like an author’s name doesn’t it lollll

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Tempest Juvano
08:18 Jan 05, 2021

This is good writing. You've trapped her essence quite well. Their meet cute and love build up could be more detailed, but the story stands quite well. Kudos and keep writing!

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Kate Reynolds
13:00 Jan 05, 2021

Thank you! Okay, I'll work on that! :D

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Wirda Bibi
05:04 Jan 05, 2021

The story is AMAZING. WELL hey there. I read your story and tears were about to come out. I felt sad for lily and Levi. It was a great story. Keep it up:) Treat us more:)

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Kate Reynolds
12:59 Jan 05, 2021

THANKS!!!!!! Thank you so much! :D

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Wirda Bibi
13:00 Jan 05, 2021

anytime :)

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Kate Reynolds
13:01 Jan 05, 2021

C:

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Wirda Bibi
14:04 Jan 05, 2021

:D

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The Girl
05:34 Jan 03, 2021

I can't believe you told us a full blown love story in under 3000 words. That must have been quite a task yet every word felt purposeful and right in place.

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Kate Reynolds
16:58 Jan 03, 2021

Aw thankssss!!!!!!!! :D

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Akshaya Sutrave
17:31 Dec 31, 2020

Hi Kate! I'm a part of the Marshmallows now, too.

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Kate Reynolds
17:50 Dec 31, 2020

YAAAAYYYYYYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Akshaya Sutrave
04:00 Jan 01, 2021

:DDDDD

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Minnie Malfoy
14:01 Dec 31, 2020

This was written so well!! :D honestly, you're a genius :)

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Kate Reynolds
14:04 Dec 31, 2020

Awwww thank you!!!!!!!!!! :D

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Minnie Malfoy
14:06 Dec 31, 2020

you're welcome :))

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Kate Reynolds
17:50 Dec 31, 2020

:D

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Mira Caplan
21:03 Dec 30, 2020

...........my heart is broken, yet it isn't, somehow. This...*breathe* is, like, the most emotional thing ever. I love it. (I WISH I could make the gold flecks that aren't- really- in- my- eyes- but- I- like- to- sometimes- pretend- they- are- stand out...but beauty isn't everything. I guess some children of Aphrodite and Apollo have to learn that.)

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Kate Reynolds
21:04 Dec 30, 2020

Thank youuuuu!!! (And IKRR sadly my eyes are very plain)

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Mira Caplan
21:10 Dec 30, 2020

:) :) :) (Yeah...my younger sister has really long, thick eyelashes and dark eyes, like me, but she doesn't care about fashion or anything. XD Siiiigh.)

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Kate Reynolds
21:11 Dec 30, 2020

Lmaoo

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Mira Caplan
21:10 Dec 30, 2020

:) :) :) (Yeah...my younger sister has really long, thick eyelashes and dark eyes, like me, but she doesn't care about fashion or anything. XD Siiiigh.)

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