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Fantasy

Oria, the nature kingdom.

Aeros, the air kingdom.

Aithne, the fire kingdom.

Limus, the water kingdom.

These four kingdoms make up Aontacht, but there was once when everyone lived together.

Long ago, our Ancestors gave the world magic crystals. They looked like every other stone, small and unpolished, but the contents of them were far greater.

There were four in total, one for fire, water, air, and nature. They provided magic to the inhabitants of the kingdom, to help make their lives easier. Everyone was happy, children would run around on the cobblestone streets, laughing as they wielded magic from their fingertips. 

The Ancestors named the world Anotacht, meaning unity. And Aontacht lived up to its name. Everyone lived in harmony, humans and mythical creatures alike. The Ancestors ruled this world, five people who shared their power equally.

And then the nature crystal vanished.

People could still talk to the spirits of nature, but they could no longer control it. They started panicking, thinking that it would just be a matter of time before all the crystals disappeared. But even worse, Aontacht started to fall apart due to arguments.

The Ancestors formed four groups, those who favored air, fire, water, and nature, dividing themselves in a time of need and breaking their promise to stay together. The fifth Ancestor disappeared along with the crystal, never to be seen or heard from again.

People started to accuse others of stealing the crystal, forming allies along with enemies. Air had allied with fire, but became mortal enemies with nature. Water and nature formed an alliance together, while water and fire became enemies.

Nobody knew who dropped the first bomb, but soon, all four sides were interlocked in a fierce battle, known as the Cogadh Mór. The Great War.

Children no longer ran through the streets, their mothers clutching them tight, not wanting to let go. The villages were destroyed by the opposite sides, debris and melancholy lining the skies. What once was a world with all people living in peace was now a place of terror and uncertainty. 

And then the biggest battle had begun.

The four sides fought each other, air and fire against nature and water.

Beams of water dosed fires that had started, and people from nature whispered to the spirits of Mother Nature, asking them to help in the war. They made weapons out of stone, arrows whizzing past, adding to the chaos of war. Blood streamed out from fresh wounds of loved ones, but nobody could stop to help them. The amount of dead people and creatures increased, littering the floor like trash. An Ancestor, floating off from the ground, waved his hand, and people were flung high into the sky, like some sick type of fireworks. They crashed back into the earth, dead. Dragons spewed red-hot flames, and trees caught on fire, burning and withering as the spirit inside them died as well. Plants curled their fingers around people, crushing the air out of them. Mermaids called water, flooding the place and drowning crowds of people. The war lasted for five years, leaving the world in ruins, yet there was no declared winner. The Ancestors had decided to call a truce, but the world won’t ever be the same again.

The Ancestors had decided to rule their own kingdoms, splitting up Aontacht. And thus, the Four Kingdoms were formed.


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Wind swirled around me, my copper red hair swishing over my face. But instead of the wind blowing me around, I only felt strengthened by it, like it was seeping into my bones and energizing me. It was a dangerous feeling, one that would surely get me exiled, or maybe even killed. After all, how would the citizens feel if their Queen had powers that only their enemy had?

I sighed, and called off the wind. Ever since I was little, I could control air, making it bend to my will. I didn’t know why, but I knew that it was unnatural.

No one else in Oria had powers. Talking to the nature spirits took years of training to master. Some stubborn plants won’t even open up no matter how much you coax them. 

But the worst part was that I was the Queen of Oria. My parents, the late King and Queen, had passed away when I was 16, leaving me to run the kingdom by myself.

As my parents’ death was quite sudden, I hadn’t had time to pick a suitor to rule beside me as King. But I would have to soon.

I was never the heir that my parents wanted me to be, I always did the wrong thing. But it was hard living up to their expectations, as they were the best King and Queen to have ever ruled over Oria. 

The flat-side of the hit against my exposed skin, but I didn’t wince, knowing that I would just be hit again if I did.

“Stand up straight! Eyes forward! Do not hunch over! Oria does not want a hag as their Queen!” Mother scolded, the ruler in her hand posed to strike again as soon as I messed up.

“Yes, Mother,” I gritted my teeth.

The Queen tsked. “You are such a disappointment, Merille. I would be surprised to see you make it past your second year of being Queen.” She walked out of the room, leaving me glaring daggers in her back.

I could feel my powers pulsing inside of me, summoned by my anger. They hissed at me to unleash them, but I refrained. The Queen of Oria dying from a sudden gust of wind seemed quite suspicious, as much as I wish I could.

I could still feel the place where the ruler stuck me. But I will prove them wrong, I will be an even better leader than they were.

Which meant that I had to hide my powers. I had the powers of the enemy, and I’m sure that they would find another Queen if they ever found out the truth about me.

Four sharp knocks startled me from my thoughts. I smoothed out my hair, which had become quite messy.

“Come in!” I called.

“Your Majesty,” an elf in the servant uniform bowed deeply, and I nodded at him, allowing him to continue. 

“Ezlynn has requested for you.”

“Alright, tell her that I will be down shortly.

“Yes, my Queen.” He backed out of my room, closing the door behind him.

Ezlynn, a satyress, was my tailor, and I left her in charge of making a dress for me to wear at the upcoming ball. I decided to host one to lift everyone’s spirits. 

There were rumors stating that a Princess from Aeros was kidnapped, and they were blaming it on Oria. Which wasn’t exactly surprising.

Even after the Cogadh Mór, Aeros and Oria were still sworn enemies, and barely kept the peace treaty. But now that Aeros had a reason to be angry, people are afraid that history would repeat itself in the form of a war.

I glanced at a mirror, making sure I looked presentable, and left for the fitting room.



“Your Majesty.” Ezlynn immediately dropped into a curtsy as soon as I entered the room. I nodded my greetings to her.

“If you would follow me, my Queen, I have picked out the perfect dress for you.” A smile toyed on her lips, making me raise my eyebrow.

“Oh?”

Ezlynn didn’t say anything else, but a knowing smile appeared on her face.

She led me to the back of the room, where all four sides of the walls were covered in floor-to-ceiling mirrors. I’ve only been here a few times, and each time shed an unpleasant memory.

“You need to look your best for this ball, and be on your best behavior. I cannot let you run around and ruin the ball. Do you understand?” Mother reprimanded me like a child in front of Ezlynn, even though I was already 14. I gritted my teeth, barely keeping my thoughts from escaping from me.

“Yes, Mother.”

“Good. Now, when we get back, you will memorize the names and titles of each nobility in Oria. Once you have done so, practice your posture.”

“Yes, Mother,” I obediently replied.

“You also have to stop eating so much, all that food is going to your thighs.” I lowered my head, nodding. But an inferno ragged inside of me, swirling all my thoughts and emotions into one: I will prove her wrong. And maybe then my parents will finally accept me.

Of course, that never happened because the King and Queen were assassinated 2 years later.

“Here is your dress, my Queen,” Ezlynn snapped me out of my thoughts, holding up a beautiful, navy blue dress. 

“This looks lovely. Thank you.”

“Would you like help putting it on?”

“No, thank you.” I nodded at her, and she curtsied again before leaving me and the dress alone.

The rough fabric scratched my skin as I slid it over my head. I called a bit of wind to tighten the corset, fumbling with the strings. I sucked in my already nonexistent stomach, and then released the breath after pulling my last string. 

I glanced at the mirror, taking in the dress.

It was a ravishing, azure dress that matched my sapphire blue eyes. Starting off as a rich, dark blue, it melted into a lighter shade, the hem of the dress fanning out around me. The tight corset accented my slim waist, a string of diamonds running from each side. Decorations made out of gold swirled around it, the official symbol of royalty in Oria, and off-the-shoulder sleeves completed the look. My red hair fell in curls around the dress, a striking contrast against the dark blue.

I looked gorgeous, but I couldn’t help but think that it wasn’t enough. I could almost hear my Mother scolding me, or my Father telling me how I would never make a good Queen, and would have to rely on the King to run Oria.

I sighed, and walked out of the dressing room.

Ezlynn gasped. “My Queen, you look lovely.” 

“Thank you, Ezlynn. This dress will be perfect for the ball, you have done a wonderful job.”

“Thank you, Your Majesty.”

“I shall get going now, I have a few things I still need to sort out for the ball.”

“Of course. Thank you for stopping by,” Ezlynn curtsied.

After I changed out of the dress, I headed to the throne room. I was scheduled to meet with a few suitors today, and I was dreading it. I hated the idea of a King, especially when I was capable of ruling my kingdom. Having a King just complicates things. 

I shudder to the idea of falling in love. Love makes you weak, and a Queen cannot afford to be blinded by love. 

But it would still be my duty to attend.


The hard edges of the golden throne cut into my back, but I was used to it. My Father had made me sit on this throne for hours, in preparation for when I became Queen.

“My Queen,” an elf with golden blonde hair and piercing blue eyes kneeled at my feet. I nodded at him to get up.

He stared right at me, his blue eyes penetrating into mine. 

The nerve, I thought. I was going to call him out on it, but decided to hear what he had to say first.

“My name is Ermir, and I am the Duke of the northern side of Oria. I would be the ideal choice for the King, because I am used to making hard decisions. I will never criticize you, and I will stand by you and support every decision that you make. I will make you happy, and even as King, I will not overpower your status as Queen. Merille…” He used my name, “I want only the best for you.”

I was shocked at his courage, and somehow, he spoke the exact things that I wanted to hear. But something was off.

“You said you were the Duke of the northern side?” 

“Yes, my Queen.”

“I thought that his name was Duke Terran,” I raised my eyebrow.

Ermir’s eyes widened the slightest bit, so small of a change that I started to think that I had imagined it.

“Yes, that was my father’s name. He recently passed away, and his dying wish was for me to be a better leader than he was.”

“Mm,” I had thought that Terran was a wonderful leader, beloved by my people. But maybe I was wrong, I never met him before, anyways.

 “Thank you. Next!” 

The trickle of men slowly flowed by me, all of them wanting a chance as King.

But all of them mashed into one, none of them stood out to me.

Except for Ermir. I could still remember how clear his blue eyes were, and the kindness in them. I felt my cheeks heat up. Something was wrong with me. I wanted to get to know him better, but that wasn’t possible, was it?

I work better by myself, that way I wouldn’t have to worry about betrayals.

But, I found myself scheduling an appointment to meet with Ermir again. And the scariest part was, I was looking forward to it.


“You requested for me, my Queen?” Ermir asked.

“Yes, I did. I… want to get to know you better, to see if you will be a good King.”

He smirked. “Alright. May I call you Merille?”

I opened my mouth to protest, but what came out was the opposite. “Of course.”

“Would you like to take a walk in the woods?”

“That would be lovely, thank you,” I smiled up at him.

I stood up, and immediately my guards stiffened. 

“Your Majesty, would you like us to come with you?” 

“No, thank you. That is not necessary, I will still be on castle grounds.”

“As you wish.”

“Shall we get going, then?” Ermir offered me his arm, and I took it.

We walked in silence for the first few minutes. 

“I’ve always loved the Oria palace.” Ermir murmured, almost like he forgot I was here.

The palace of Oria was very beautiful. It had strong, sturdy columns in the front, supporting the golden palace. Vines curled along the sides, swirling into a natural, intricate design. In the summer, flowers bloom all over the vines, covering the palace in bright red flowers.

But something in the way Ermir said it was nagging at me. Almost like… he wasn’t from Oria.

I narrowed my eyes. That name… Ermir… nobody in Oria would name their child something that means air. Especially not a Duke.

“Is something wrong, Merille?” He frowned at me, realizing that I had stopped.

“You’re not from Oria.” I accused him, hurt in my eyes.

Ermir laughed. “Where did you get that idea from? The only reason I am here is because I want to make you happy, I don’t want to see you suffer anymore.” He sounded sincere but…

“How did you know I wasn’t already happy? I’ve also never seen you before…” My parents always complimented me in front of other members of nobility. My mind flashed to all the Dukes and Duchesses that I had memorized, but Ermir was not in the list. I had every single nobility’s children and even distant relatives stored in my brain, but the name Ermir didn’t belong anywhere.

He froze, but before he could speak, someone fell from the sky, landing in front of us.

“YOU COULDN’T HAVE CHECKED THE PARACHUTE BEFORE EXILING ME?! THE-” He stopped midway, noticing us gaping at him.

“Who are you?” I demanded.

“Not important. Well, I shall get going now,” he smiled, turning around to leave.

“Pardon?” I felt shocked. Nobody dared speak to me that way!

“Hm?” The boy looked confused. Does he not know who I am?

But before I could say anything, he spoke again.

“Wait… Ermir? What are you doing here?”

I whipped around, facing Ermir. “He knows you?”

Ermir looked around frantically. “N-no! I’ve never seen him before in my life!”

The boy stared at Ermir for a minute, and then he started laughing. “Oh, that’s funny! You definitely don’t know your childhood best friend!” 

The boy who just landed in front of us was definitely not from Oria, and if Ermir was his childhood friend…

“What is your name?” I asked him calmly.

“... Aloysius.”

“And tell me, Aloysius. Where are you from?”

Aloysius hesitated, but must have seen the furious look in my eyes, because he relented.

“I’m from… Aeros.” His words froze me in place. An enemy from Aeros in Oria? I thought back to what he said when he landed. He was probably exiled. 

Only Aeros would exile their criminals to their enemy kingdom.

“You said you knew Ermir?” He nodded, and then narrowed his eyes at me.

“Oh God. Alize?!” He stared at me in shock. 

“Alize? Who is Alize?” I furrowed my brow, confused.

“Stop playing games! Everyone thought you were dead! What are you doing in the enemies’ kingdom?”

“I don’t know what you’re talking about. My name is Merille and I am the Queen of Oria.” He has some nerve talking to me like that.

“No, no you’re not. I’d think I would remember you, your looks are quite exotic after all.” When I still didn’t look convinced, he leaned in, concern lining his face. I instinctively backed away, ready to call for my guards. But his next words chilled me to the bones.  

“Are you feeling alright? You’re not from Oria, in fact, you hated Oria. Alize, you’re from Aeros.”


January 15, 2021 20:51

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Kate Reynolds
20:52 Jan 15, 2021

HELLOOOOOOO EVERYONE!!!!!!!!! Okay so fantasy is my worst genre to write in, so I thought I would try to improve it! Please give honest criticism (the harsher the better) for this story! Also, tell me what you think of the title and the names of the kingdoms/characters!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
21:20 Jan 15, 2021

i can't stop thinking of oreos 😋🍪

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Kate Reynolds
21:21 Jan 15, 2021

Omg- just realized how much Aeros sounds like Oreos XDDDDDDDDD And Oria as well........

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Erza Scarlet
18:36 Jan 16, 2021

You love Oreos-

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Kate Reynolds
18:46 Jan 16, 2021

No, no I really dont'

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18:26 Jan 19, 2021

Hey Molly! This was SUCH a wonderful story! Good job!! :D

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Kate Reynolds
18:31 Jan 19, 2021

Hello!!! Aw thank youuuuu!!!!!!! :DDD

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18:32 Jan 19, 2021

Of course!!! :DDDD

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Kate Reynolds
21:07 Jan 19, 2021

:)))))))))

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Dorian Gray 📖
21:25 Jan 15, 2021

This was great!! One thing that I would recommend is not infodumping and explaining what the terms mean, as that can seem redundant. Great job!!

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Kate Reynolds
21:27 Jan 15, 2021

Thank youuuuu!!!!!!!!!! Oohhh okie!!!

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Dorian Gray 📖
21:27 Jan 15, 2021

:DDDDDDDDDDDDD

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Kate Reynolds
21:29 Jan 15, 2021

:DDDDDDDDDDD

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Dorian Gray 📖
21:51 Jan 15, 2021

:DDDDDDD

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Kate Reynolds
21:29 Jan 15, 2021

Anything about the names though?

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Dorian Gray 📖
21:51 Jan 15, 2021

No, I thought that they fit what you were going for. I have some other name suggestions, but the names work fine.

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Kate Reynolds
23:31 Jan 15, 2021

Oh okieeeee THANKS!!!!!!!!

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Dorian Gray 📖
23:31 Jan 15, 2021

:D

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Kate Reynolds
23:34 Jan 15, 2021

Btw, about the OASIS thing... I think it's a great idea but like you said its basically CC Do you have any ideas on how to make it more original? (I've been thinking about it all day and I haven't come up with anything yet..)

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Sarah 🖤💖
15:06 Jan 16, 2021

I kinda have to agree with Luke here, though since it is the first story it makes sense that you would try to explain everything right then and there.

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Kate Reynolds
21:08 Jan 19, 2021

Ooohhhh okkkkkkk (I just saw your comment lol)

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✰ Jennie ✰
21:14 Jan 15, 2021

OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE IT KATE!!!!!!!! You are totally wrong! This worldbuilding is fantastic! HOLYYYYYYYY PLOT TWIST MACORONIIIIIIII SHE'S FROM AEROS?????? WOAHHHHHHHHHH Omggggggg wow PART 2

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Kate Reynolds
21:14 Jan 15, 2021

OMG............................. REALLY??????????????????????????????????

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✰ Jennie ✰
21:18 Jan 15, 2021

GURL. YOU'D BEST TAKE AWAY THAT COMMENT SAYING YOU"RE BAD AT FANTASY OR ELSE.... ⚔⚔⚔

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Kate Reynolds
21:20 Jan 15, 2021

XDDDDDDDDDDDDD THANKS YOUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU :33333333333333 Any critiques thoughhhhhhh (anything at all..?)

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Mira Caplan
21:26 Jan 15, 2021

YOU BETTER TAKE THAT COMMENT AWAY JYUTRDGFJHKYUTRSDGXFCHJKUYTHFXBCV THIS TWAS AMAZING

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Kate Reynolds
21:27 Jan 15, 2021

TANKS YOU SO MUCHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
21:52 Jan 15, 2021

Long ago, our Ancestors gave the world magic crystals. They looked like every other stone, small and unpolished, but the contents of it was far greater. i would change it to, 'but the contents of them were far greater'. Just grammatical i suppose because it's multiple crystals. Also, very important. This destroys your whole story: THERE IS NO PART 2 YEt!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Kate Reynolds
21:57 Jan 15, 2021

Ohhhhhh thanks for catching that!!!!!!!!!!! XDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD I AM WORKING ON IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :DDDDDDDDDD

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Mira Caplan
21:06 Jan 15, 2021

I. LOVE. THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKKK I CAN'T WAIT FOR PART 2!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Kate Reynolds
21:06 Jan 15, 2021

............. REALLYYYYY???????????????????? Is the title too weird?

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Mira Caplan
21:17 Jan 15, 2021

YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! LARB IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! THE TITLE IS AWESOME!!!! And I love the names you chose, it really sets the vibe for the series!!!

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Kate Reynolds
21:18 Jan 15, 2021

OMG THANK YOUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Any critiques from the Queen of Fantasy? ;D

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Mira Caplan
21:23 Jan 15, 2021

HhhhHHHmmmmMMmmm... not really...I'm going to read it through again and looks for potential edits! :)))

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Kate Reynolds
21:24 Jan 15, 2021

Okieeeeee!!!!!! Thank youuuuu!!!!!!! :DDDDDDDDD

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Mira Caplan
21:23 Jan 15, 2021

HhhhHHHmmmmMMmmm... not really...I'm going to read it through again and looks for potential edits! :)))

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Mira Caplan
21:25 Jan 15, 2021

I think the first thing is to really differentiate the past from present. (Maybe put a little asterisks thingy? ************ Like that? Idk...) I honestly don't know what else XD You described things well, there weren't and major grammatical or technical errors I could make out, and the story just...made sense. I'm not the best person to give critiques, but there ya go! XD

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✰ Jennie ✰
02:33 Jan 16, 2021

hmmmm after reading this again (sorry i love it too much!)... i have a teensy suggestion... so at the very beginning when you're feeling the wind pulse through you, it's a little abrupt and obvious. I suppose if you put it somewhere like when your mom is yelling at you, you think that in one move, you could smash her over with the wind channeling through your body in anger... but you push it down. Ya know what I mean? ya... thats it :) Still amazing tho... it was just a little too 'out there'.

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Kate Reynolds
03:40 Jan 16, 2021

XDD THANKSSSS!!!!!!!! Ooohhhhhhh YESSS I DO!!!!!! I will change it later! :D

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Mira Caplan
00:47 Jan 16, 2021

I....I found Theraya's theme song. Hold On by Xseries/ Extreme Music. Ohmigod it's PERFECT.

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Kate Reynolds
00:49 Jan 16, 2021

OH MY FRICK THAT IS SO PERFECT. I LOVE THAT SONG SO MUCHHHHH

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Kate Reynolds
00:49 Jan 16, 2021

Btw how are you?? (I'm really bored and wanna have a convo with someoneeee)

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Mira Caplan
00:53 Jan 16, 2021

YEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm great!!! Just FANGIRLING THERAYA WAY TOO MUCH AND PLANNING OUT THEIR VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY LONG ROAD TO THEIR HAPPILY EVER AFTER EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! How about you???

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Kate Reynolds
00:54 Jan 16, 2021

That's good!!!!!!! OMGGGGGGGGNGKDSNGSLGLSEBGLIBESL YEASSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS I'm good as well! I do have midterms coming up next week though QwQ

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Kate Reynolds
00:54 Jan 16, 2021

That's good!!!!!!! OMGGGGGGGGNGKDSNGSLGLSEBGLIBESL YEASSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS I'm good as well! I do have midterms coming up next week though QwQ

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Mira Caplan
00:58 Jan 16, 2021

EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEERYGHKJYUTDRYGJHB<N!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! My younger sister was legit CRYING after she read 13. Like, I was drawing, and after she finished she looked up at me and her eyes were...like...glistening with tears. Then she said "Please don't make Raya suffer." and I just...I DIED. And then when I told her the plot I had in mind which didn't end with Therin winning the races, obvi, she got mad and started actually crying while begging me to give them a happy ending. XDDDDDD Oooooof. Ughhhhhh, testsssss. The only time...

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Kate Reynolds
01:02 Jan 16, 2021

XDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD IM NOT SURPRISED WE NEED THERAYA TO WINNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN Also, whenever I press "read more" on your comment the whole comment just decides to vanish

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Kate Reynolds
01:02 Jan 16, 2021

XDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD IM NOT SURPRISED WE NEED THERAYA TO WINNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN Also, whenever I press "read more" on your comment the whole comment just decides to vanish

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Mira Caplan
00:58 Jan 16, 2021

EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEERYGHKJYUTDRYGJHB<N!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! My younger sister was legit CRYING after she read 13. Like, I was drawing, and after she finished she looked up at me and her eyes were...like...glistening with tears. Then she said "Please don't make Raya suffer." and I just...I DIED. And then when I told her the plot I had in mind which didn't end with Therin winning the races, obvi, she got mad and started actually crying while begging me to give them a happy ending. XDDDDDD Oooooof. Ughhhhhh, testsssss. The only time...

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Kate Reynolds
00:54 Jan 16, 2021

That's good!!!!!!! OMGGGGGGGGNGKDSNGSLGLSEBGLIBESL YEASSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS I'm good as well! I do have midterms coming up next week though QwQ

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Mira Caplan
00:53 Jan 16, 2021

YEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I'm great!!! Just FANGIRLING THERAYA WAY TOO MUCH AND PLANNING OUT THEIR VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY LONG ROAD TO THEIR HAPPILY EVER AFTER EEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! How about you???

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HEYYYYYY!! Loved this story so much Kate!!! Your amazing at story writing!! :)

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Kate Reynolds
23:32 Jan 15, 2021

HELLOOOOO!! Thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D

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Your welcome!!!

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Kate Reynolds
23:36 Jan 15, 2021

:))))

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GIRL!!!!!! This is incredible !!!!!!! HOW DID U WRITE THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! AMAZING!!! I really loved this story so much, the plot twist was really amazing! U left a cliff hanger :_ U better write a part 2, I really want to read what happens next!!!!!!! :DDDDDDDD

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Kate Reynolds
22:00 Jan 15, 2021

:DDDD AWWWWW THANK YOUUUUUUUU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Don't worry I will!!!!!!!!!!! :DDDDDDDDDDDDD Any critiques?

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Of course!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! YAY!!!!!!!!! NONE AT ALL!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It was amazing!!!! Thats my critique:D

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Kate Reynolds
22:17 Jan 15, 2021

:DDDDDDDD THANK YOUU!!!!!!!! :DDDDDD

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Of course!!!!! Also I would like to join Oasis!

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Kate Reynolds
22:32 Jan 15, 2021

Ofc you can!!!!!!!! We are currently sorting out some problems though. All you have to do is write what I put in my bio in yours!

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Serendipity May
22:56 Mar 09, 2021

WAFFLES!!

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Kate Reynolds
22:58 Mar 09, 2021

THANK YOU! :D What’s your favorite breakfast food?

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Serendipity May
23:05 Mar 09, 2021

YOUR WELCOME!!! :)))) My favorite breakfast food has to be either these breakfast sandwiches that my godmother home-makes or my dad's homemade breakfast burritos. They are both too good to choose from. (This reminds me of the vine: 'Hi I'm Chelsea, what your favorite dinner food?')

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Kate Reynolds
23:27 Mar 09, 2021

Ooooohhhhhh that sounds DELICIOUSSSSSS XDDD

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Alone Warrior
15:43 Jan 22, 2021

She changed her mind she’d like to be the grapes

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Kate Reynolds
15:44 Jan 22, 2021

Oh ok! Could you send me her link?

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Alone Warrior
15:42 Jan 22, 2021

Ok, she wants to join! She’ll be Blueberry Bethany

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Kate Reynolds
15:43 Jan 22, 2021

Great!!! Could you send me the link to her profile??

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Alone Warrior
15:07 Jan 22, 2021

Just reserve the blueberry one just in case cus I’m sure she’ll want it! Thx!

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Kate Reynolds
15:17 Jan 22, 2021

Okay!!!

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Alone Warrior
15:06 Jan 22, 2021

Oh- and one more thing... if my friend wants to join, can she?

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Kate Reynolds
15:17 Jan 22, 2021

OFC!!! Anyone can join! :D

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Alone Warrior
13:09 Jan 22, 2021

Omg... I read your bio and omg.... we are SO alike!!! I love Alec Benjamin and I love all of those songs! OMG I FOUND MAH LONG LOST TWINNNNN 😅

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Kate Reynolds
14:23 Jan 22, 2021

REALLY???????? YAAAAAAYYYYYYYYYY WE MUST HAVE BEEN SEPARATED AT BIRTHHHHHHHHH

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Alone Warrior
14:59 Jan 22, 2021

haha!

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Kate Reynolds
15:40 Jan 22, 2021

XD

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Kate Reynolds
15:40 Jan 22, 2021

XD

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Alone Warrior
14:59 Jan 22, 2021

haha!

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Alone Warrior
13:03 Jan 22, 2021

Hey there molly! I was wondering something.... I wanted to join but I would love to be a dragon fruit. Could I be dragon fruit daisy?

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Kate Reynolds
14:23 Jan 22, 2021

Hi!!!!! OOH YESSSS!!! Ofc you can! That is absolutely perfect! :D

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Alone Warrior
15:00 Jan 22, 2021

Yay!! :3

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Alone Warrior
15:04 Jan 22, 2021

I just edited my profile! I’m so excited 😆

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Kate Reynolds
15:40 Jan 22, 2021

I shall but your name under the members list!!!

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Kate Reynolds
15:40 Jan 22, 2021

:D

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Hi Kate! I found a writer who needs some support. its her first story and it was amazing! https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/author/rachel-smith-26606b/

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Kate Reynolds
18:34 Jan 17, 2021

Hello!! OOOHHHH OKIEEE I AM COMINGGGG

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Kate Reynolds
23:09 Jan 17, 2021

:)))))

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Erza Scarlet
18:26 Jan 16, 2021

Henlo Kate, i have no critiques because this is better then what I’d ever write O.O

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Kate Reynolds
18:32 Jan 16, 2021

Thank youuuuuuu!!!!!!!!!!!! (........none at all??? Not even grammar mistakes????????)

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Erza Scarlet
18:36 Jan 16, 2021

Child- Your teaching ME grammar. Do you think I can find your grammar mistakes when i don’t even know grammar ;-; ;-;

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Erza Scarlet
18:36 Jan 16, 2021

Child- Your teaching ME grammar. Do you think I can find your grammar mistakes when i don’t even know grammar ;-; ;-;

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Erza Scarlet
18:36 Jan 16, 2021

Child- Your teaching ME grammar. Do you think I can find your grammar mistakes when i don’t even know grammar ;-; ;-;

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Sarah 🖤💖
03:37 Jan 16, 2021

And how the turn tables have... But in all seriousness, what do you mean you suck at fantasy stories?! The worldbuilding was great! You introduced the characters in a fun way, and I'm already SUPER excited to see how these events play out in the future. Great job Kate! (Sorry I couldn't get to this story sooner. My wifi was out for most of the day so Reedsy wasn't working.)

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Kate Reynolds
03:42 Jan 16, 2021

XDDD Aw thank you!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! It is most def not a problem!!! :DDDDDDDDD

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Anna May
15:57 Apr 14, 2021

I know in your bio you were asking if anyone had changes and I have one. So as I remember satyrs are like half human half goat creatures. It’s kinda hard for me to imagine a satyr(ess?) going into a curtsy. Maybe you could make her bow instead? Or maybe I’m weird. Next suggestion: Could you explain about the magical creatures more? I know they live in peace and harmony with the humans, but could you elaborate on that a little more? Idk if these suggestions make sense, I’m not very good at putting my criticism into words.

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Kate Reynolds
17:24 Apr 14, 2021

Oh yeah, I'm actually gonna completely change the storyline, and I might delete some characters But thankssss!!!

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Anna May
17:31 Apr 14, 2021

You’re welcome!

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Kate Reynolds
19:03 Apr 14, 2021

:))

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Anna May
13:53 Apr 19, 2021

:)

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This reminds me of a story I'm trying to do about water and fire kingdoms. Wish me luck, it's really hard.

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Kate Reynolds
13:45 Feb 19, 2021

Oh good luck!!!

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Kate Reynolds
13:56 Feb 19, 2021

Np!

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