Missing ingredient

Submitted into Contest #83 in response to: Write a fantasy story about water gods or spirits.... view prompt

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Fantasy Friendship Drama

"What are you doing?" Water asked, splashing onto the land where Prometheus was. She was bored of watching gods and titans carve up the world, and hoped that the gentlest titan she knew would have something for her.


The titan spared her barely a glance, utterly engrossed in his work. His dark eyes had that look again, the one that meant he had retreated thoroughly into that bewitchingly busy head of us. Water drooped a little, settling herself down on her elbows to watch. His long, bronzed fingers were carefully putting dirt together. And apparently, this wasn't his first attempt, since a small army of dirt figures were littered around him, crumbling.


Water frowned, looking from the disgusting mounds to Prometheus. "You're scaring me, can titans go mad?" Briefly, she wondered how much more fun he would be if he was crazy. Prometheus ignored her, adding some bizarre parts to the mound, and if she squinted, Water admitted it looked a bit like an arm.


"It's not right!" Prometheus huffed suddenly, viciously crushing the mound in his hand. Dirt flew everywhere, and Water shrieked, ducking from it. She resurfaced gingerly, utterly stunned. Prometheus had never behaved like this before.


"What? What?" She snapped, unsure of whether to laugh or hide. "They look the same, all mound-y and weird. I hate to break it to you, but none of them looks right!"


"No!" Prometheus fumbled for the words. "They need to be...it's the dirt! It's just not malleable enough, I can mould them right because it keeps drying and breaking and crumbling-ah!" Prometheus crushed the disintegrating forms around him. "It's not-ugh!" He took a deep inhale, almost rubbing his face with his dirt-caked hands.


Water gaped at him, at a loss. She watched his frustration, unable to help. So she did what she usually did, whenever Prometheus studied his surroundings, failed to notice anything new about her looks, or if he ever opened his mouth during one of her anecdotes. She splashed him with water.


Prometheus growled angrily, the titan in him showing. "What? Why can't I ever just be allowed to work? Between you and Kronos I haven't got a second to-oh!"


Water smiled mischievously. Ah-ha! That had gotten him to pay attention. Who cared about some disgusting-


"You did it!" Prometheus cried out, plunging his hands into the dirt. It wasn't quite dirt anymore though, it looked and moved differently.


"Uhh," Water had absolutely no idea what he was talking about. All she knew was that the sun was getting to her friend. She watched as Prometheus lovingly put the dirt together, rolling torsos and heads.


She finally took a chance, boredom eating away at her. "So, what are you doing?" She resisted the urge to add: if you haven't lost your mind!


"It's a project of mine, I'm trying to make smaller titans out of clay," Prometheus explained. "I'm studying how to animate something, and I really want to create intelligent, beautiful, graceful, and creative beings,"


Beautiful? They were literally made of dirt! "That's nice," Water said, resting her chin on her upturned hand. "So, why? What's wrong with the big titans with powers? Who are, mind you, beautiful, graceful-?"


"Titans aren't that beautiful or anything like that." Prometheus face darkened. "I just don't want to be alone with Kronos, who ate his children. Or with the stupidly vain Helios, or the useless jerk Atlas." He practically spat out Atlas' name, Water noted. Not an unprecedented reaction to the biggest bully on Gaia. "I want to make creatures who are forced to work together, who can challenge anything with their minds!"


Water yawned slightly, uninterested. These little ones could challenge whatever they wanted, as long as they steered clear of her. "Okay, can you throw in some personality in there too? If you're making millions of mini-yous, this planet's about to get even more obnoxiously boring!"


"Personality?" Prometheus asked, carving out delicately muscled limbs. "Oh, I didn't think of that,"


"Yeah, one has to have a personality before they can go around carting it off to others, don't you think? It's a good thing Themis didn't have kids because I don't think a stick-up-your-ass is a good thing to pass down to kids." Water remarked, referring to the notoriously uptight Titaness of justice. She felt her mind wandering, and turned back to the little beings. "Hey, just wait a minute here!"


"What?" Prometheus asked, anxiously looking over his pristine clay figures.


"You haven't made any that look like me!" Water pointed accusingly at the figures. "Male, male, male, male? What on earth are they supposed to do to breed? Come to you for more children? What on earth are they meant to do for common sense? Or for someone with their head screwed on straight?" Water glared at him. "Tell me you were going to add some figures worth looking at?"


Prometheus stared at her for a moment before breaking into incredulous laughter.


Water stared at him, unnerved. His moods had shifted more than her's today, and that was saying something.


"I completely forgot!" Prometheus set to work to add a few more figures, making them resemble Water more than him. Then he made some that were mixes of both, or variations. The clay never came out looking exactly the same.


"There we go," Water huffed, crossing her arms. She still didn't like the idea of these immobile, mindless, thoughtless beings. Nobody should be created to be a mere reflection of greatness. Nobody should live, without living for themselves, with spark and strength.


She waited until Prometheus was finished. He stared expectantly at the figures as they dried, looking as proud as Atlas did when his gorgeous daughters were born.


Water took her moment. Gently, she cast a small spell on some drops and flicked them at the figures. The drops seamlessly permeated the figures and Prometheus turned to her questioningly.


"Let them be as ever-changing as the one that gave them life, as unchained as the vast ocean, and as powerful as a raging wave. While being tamer than a puddle that hasn't caught the wind. Let them all contain life and multitudes, in a single drop." Water explained, her eyes fixed on the figures. And maybe her eyes deceived her, but the female figure closest to her breathed. Her little terracotta chest came alive, not dark clay, but fluid skin.


Prometheus watched his creations come alive, eyes shining with wonder. They stretched and moved, their cheeks reddening with blush, eyes blinking into focus. He could say nothing as they helped each other, chattering slightly, and already thinking, moving, being.


Water and Prometheus watched as they set off, and Prometheus stared longingly after them. "They're..perfect,"


Water smiled by accident, unable to contain her delight. It was surreal, to think she had made something. Even if that something was hideous and pitiful, they would contain her nature.


"Do they look small? Oh, they must be so hungry," Prometheus whispered lovingly, even as the humans shrank in terror and ran from him.


"Methie, leave them alone, you hear? Let them do as they want. You aren't alone anymore, so let them become the perfect ideal you wanted them to be," Water warned, eager to get her friend back.


"They look so cold," Prometheus insisted. "I'm gonna do just one last thing for them, okay?"


"Prometheus, you made them, stop doing them more favours!" Water dramatically sighed, falling over with a splash.


"No, to have them truly reach their potential, to not be afraid. I need to get the fire," Prometheus had his own fire dancing in his eyes.


Water resisted the urge to scream. The whole afternoon, wasted, and now who knew how long this fire expedition would take. But she could see from the look in Pormethous' eyes, that nothing could stop him from helping his little monsters.


"Oh, whatever, just don't take too long, okay?" Water said, resignedly. She looked after the things too, finding it a little cute how they climbed and built things.


"Promise me something," The titan said suddenly, terribly serious.


"What now?" Water asked, looking right into his deep eyes.


"If anything, anything ever happens to me. Promise you'll help them succeed."


"What?" Water laughed, her disbelief obvious. "I gave them life, I think I've-"


"Please," Prometheus persisted. "I want you to help them. Let them conquer even the sea, let them explore, and get stronger."


"You're serious about this?" Water asked, staring at him.


"Yes. War is rumbling on the horizon, new gods have arrived. I fear for them. I know they can change the world. Please, Water, help them. Feed their crops, build their cities." Prometheus's eyes never left the stormy horizon, his face dark.


Water contemplated it. "Best I can do is allow them conquest if they impress me, Methie. Your little titans will have to impress me." But Water smiled, knowing Prometheus had gotten the message. "But don't you go get in trouble or anything, not over them, understand?" She asked, and then worried as Prometheus didn't reply.


"They're not little titans," Pormtheous whispered.


Water rolled her eyes, utterly exhausted with him. He was going to get himself killed! "What are they then?"


"Humans," Prometheus stated, and the skies rumbled with thunder, lightning skating across them. "My greatest creation,"


Water scoffed at this show of dramatics. "I get it, Prometheus, I get it already. I hope your special little humans live up to the crazy reputation you've built for them. I hope they're better than the titans." I hope they're like you, Water thought privately.


Prometheus smiled and set off, and Water growled annoyedly at the silly promise he had extracted from her. Long live the age of the humans, she supposed, if she was backing them, she couldn't risk looking weak and let them lose.


You better impress me, she warned the humans, with every swell of waves, or splash of the water. Her challenge would stand for all time, and she had never been impressed before.


March 05, 2021 06:16

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Moon Lion
06:46 Mar 05, 2021

A few notes on the mythology, it may seem a little weird. It is definitely altered from the original myths, and I have relied on certain versions that fit the narrative better than more mainstream ones. Water is an original creation and has been randomly inserted into the story. Thanks for reading it btw!

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JK Bowling
00:22 Feb 21, 2022

This is a such a good story (times a hundred). There are a lot of layers here and I really enjoyed it (I feel like there's a similar spark missing in the stories you write more recently, but I'm sure you'll find it again). Just one thing to watch out for: "..of them looks right!" Look right makes more sense? But I'm not sure.

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Moon Lion
00:36 Feb 21, 2022

The "spark" came easier pre-Uni, but now I'm very swamped with work, and not able to take the same time coming up with things, unfortunately. And yes, I see where the mistake is now, thank you!

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JK Bowling
05:19 Feb 23, 2022

I hope you find it again! Your stories are incredible

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Eve Retter
05:48 Nov 22, 2021

Can see why so many ppl commented on this one, a typical and fun Moon Lion story

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Emma Harris
05:13 Mar 26, 2021

Honestly, masterpiece!! I love greek mythology so that makes this even better. I love to read variations of different stories that I've heard!

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Moon Lion
21:57 Mar 26, 2021

Thank you so much! That's super kind of you to say :)

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Vera Vuscoe
20:01 Mar 18, 2021

Great job! I had a mythology unit at school, but I can't remember who Prometheus is! One of my favorites! :3

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Moon Lion
00:48 Mar 19, 2021

Thank you for reading. You had a mythology unit?! That sounds amazing! Prometheus is a titan, who sculpted humans out of clay. He also stole fire for humans and was punished severely for it, by getting chained to a rock and having an eagle tear out his organs. I foreshadowed that fate a little bit near the end.

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Vera Vuscoe
11:26 Mar 19, 2021

Oh yeah! I remember I had a bunch of myths in a binder and there was a little information about him in Pandora's Box. I could be wrong though. I also remember I couldn't pronounce half of the gods or goddesses names right before then... Thanks for telling me! - Starlight

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Riya 🌺
00:40 Mar 18, 2021

Hii! I'm a big fan of your stories! Like all of your other ones, this story was great and really detailed. Would you mind checking my story out?

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Moon Lion
05:07 Mar 18, 2021

for sure and thank you!

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Riya 🌺
20:31 Mar 18, 2021

:D

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16:54 Mar 11, 2021

This is a great story, I'm always excited to see twists on mythology! I think you misspelled Prometheus' name, but I don't remember where. It was interesting that you made Water a character, like a sentient element of Gaia, instead of choosing a primordial deity or nymph, though from that choice I found it weird that you made her feminine instead of literally sentient water, which is what I first expected. And despite knowing that this is a creative piece (and a good one at that), the first woman was Pandora, created by Zeus to bring cala...

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Moon Lion
18:28 Mar 11, 2021

Thank you so much for your feedback! I also love twists on mythology, particularly Greek mythology since it is well-studied and analyzed, with multiple versions to work with. I did make mistakes with Prometheus' name unfortunately and autocorrect wasn't too good at catching them. Initially, I was going to use the primordial ocean titan since the story had Prometheus or the water titan of freshwater, but I wasn't sure if that would make sense to readers without context. I did take huge liberties with the myth of Pandora, but with my invente...

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02:46 Mar 12, 2021

I really liked this take on the myths, and I think you did a good job of making the characters really unique. I believed in their personalities, and in their relationship to each other. Water's suggestion to give different qualities to humans made a lot of sense. Water is known as the element of change and versatility, and the literal ingredient of water was needed to make the clay work in the first place. Water was a good character, though for mythological stories I don't think you need to be afraid of naming an obscure deity for a charac...

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Moon Lion
20:02 Mar 12, 2021

Thank you, your feedback is really kind. I agree about your point about the undeniable atmosphere of this place in Greek mythology :) You've given me a lot of ideas for the next time, so thank you again!

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21:52 Mar 12, 2021

I'm happy that was useful, I'll try to check in and see what you're up to in the future, you're really great to talk with!

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Moon Lion
01:31 Mar 14, 2021

Thank you! You are amazing to talk to too :)

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Amelia Bowen
17:00 Mar 07, 2021

Great story!!

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Moon Lion
17:34 Mar 07, 2021

Thanks!

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Annette Lovewind
04:50 Mar 06, 2021

Wonderful!

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Moon Lion
05:44 Mar 06, 2021

thank you!

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14:11 Mar 05, 2021

This. is. amazing. Mythology. YES. Loved this. Great job. Perfect :)

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Moon Lion
15:22 Mar 05, 2021

Thank you so, so much! I'm so glad you liked it!

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12:56 Mar 11, 2021

No problem :) It really is beautiful

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Moon Lion
15:58 Mar 11, 2021

:)

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Mazie Gray
20:10 Mar 14, 2021

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Moon Lion
02:17 Mar 15, 2021

thank you!

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Mazie Gray
19:44 Mar 15, 2021

You're welcome!

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04:45 Mar 13, 2021

Great story! You could have begun the story with a better hook. I felt the question 'What are you doing?' to be a mundane day to day conversation. Otherwise, impressive work!

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Moon Lion
01:31 Mar 14, 2021

Great point, I will keep that in mind for next time!

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