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Fantasy Contemporary Urban Fantasy

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My cat, Oreo, is the best poker partner I've ever had. Hands down—no pun intended. Don't let those old Coolidge paintings fool you; dogs really don't know what the hell they're doing once you sit them on that rickety ladder back chair, and their paws just aren't made for holding the cards steady. Trust me: If you want a reliable means of collusion in a game of Texas hold 'em, British Shorthairs are the way to go.

Of course, it also helps that Oreo can talk now.

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Last month my boyfriend, Mark, came into the living room while I was watching TV. He didn't sit, which was the first red flag. The second came in the hushed form of those infamous four words: "We need to talk."

There was a program playing, some roundtable discussion where the panelists debated the ideologies of Buddhism. My finger grazed the remote's mute button, but I kept the volume on, hoping the panelists' words would eclipse Mark's.

It didn't work.

"It's not you, Trevor, it's me," he began, right before telling me how I made everything about myself and he just couldn't take it. I said nothing because I didn't want to prove his point. Then he left and took eighteen months of memories with him into the dusty Las Vegas night.

Well, I decided to follow the teachings of the show and take the Buddhist approach: four Budweisers and two joints.

When that didn't work, I opted for the casino, since I was already losing things.

It was on a whim that I grabbed Oreo, usually silent and antisocial, during one of his coughing fits, tucked him under my armpit like a fifteen-pound black-and-white football, and shambled out the door.

We staggered downtown through the palm trees and lights of the Vegas strip. Colors bright as the future illuminated the casinos. Eventually I chose one glowing hot pink named Flamingo.

The bouncer out front stopped me before I could enter. He gestured to Oreo. "No cats allowed."

"He's a service cat, bro," I said, slurring my words.

"No."

It wasn't until I offered him my last two joints, which I'd been saving for after the casino, when I could legally file for bankruptcy, that he finally relented.

The stench of tobacco and desperation congested the casino. In the poker room we sidled up to a sparsely-populated table. Oreo sat on the chair beside mine. After I exchanged my life savings for a pile of black tokens, he wobbled on his hind legs, flopped his paws down on the emerald felt, and coughed on the stack of poker chips I'd split with him.

"My friend's playing too," I interpreted.

The dealer, a twenty-something in a green visor, looked askance at my cat, probably wondering how we'd evaded the bouncer, but what could he do? We were already inside. He gazed over the top of my head as though seeking another, less persuadable bouncer.

Still, when dealing, he shrugged and jokingly tossed two cards to Oreo, who pawed at them and coughed.

The game proceeded like normal, with all of us raising our bets, folding when appropriate. I moved Oreo's chips to the table's center, just to get that loss out of the way early. It wasn't until the dealer was collecting our cards that I bothered to flip Oreo's hand over.

Imagine our faces when we saw my cat sitting on a royal flush.

Technically, because I had gone all in with Oreo's chips, the dealer had no choice but to declare Oreo the winner of the round. With a smile, I snatched up our winnings.

We all thought it was a fluke, until the next game when Oreo had four-of-a-kind, all 6s.

Then the dealer politely asked us to leave.

Standing there on the sidewalk, $600 richer than before because of my cat, I hugged Oreo. And that's when, for the first time, he spoke, his voice like a squeaky toy: "Let's go again. That shit was too easy."

Understand: I was cross-faded at the time, blissfully numb in a stupor of alcohol and weed, so my cat speaking never seemed that far-fetched.

We jaywalked to Bellagio, with its air-conditioned rooms and more lenient cat policies. Oreo perched on my shoulder like a pirate's parrot as we devised our poker tells.

When we were at Bellagio and Oreo purred like a '92 Camaro, I knew to fold. And at Caesar's Palace, when he bent down and licked his crotch, I sat back and awaited his royal flush.

Suddenly the center strip unfurled before us like uncharted territory, and we spent the next three weeks exploring. The only casino we didn't try was The Mirage—Mark's workplace. The place we met.

Upon leaving Flamingo we made a pact: Oreo keeps his talking a secret, and I give him seventy-five percent of our winnings. What he needs with all that money is beyond me, though once, I swear I smelled something in the kitchen that wasn't Meow Mix.

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Today is Sunday, which is bad for two reasons. The first being that Mark and I had our "we days" on Sundays, when we went shopping or ate out or performed karaoke for drunk strangers.

The second being: It's been one month, to the day, since our breakup.

Meaning, I need a distraction.

Oreo lazes on the couch, holding a can of seafood pâté that I don't recall purchasing. The TV is tuned to QVC, where a woman is advertising vacuum-sealed barramundi.

"Crazy shit, huh, kid?" he asks when I flop down next to him. "They think of everything."

"Yeah, neat."

"Where's your phone?" he asks, yellow eyes glued to the screen. "I need that."

I squeeze the cushion. "Hey, let's have a we day." I can hear my neediness. "How about we go to the casinos?"

"Hell no. We've been every day this week."

Which is true. In this last month, Oreo and I have been approached by strangers who've heard of our status—rivals from neighboring cities, sponsors who want to design T-shirts using Oreo's likeness.

So much for "What Happens in Vegas."

"C'mon," I plead.

Oreo ignores me.

I grab my phone, dangle it like a treat. "Fine, you can have all the barramundi you want," I lie.

And I'm surprised, after all this time, how easily he folds.

***

At Flamingo the bouncer holds out his hand. "Hold it," he says, and points to a sign that wasn't there last night. On it is an artist's rendition of Oreo, ten pounds overweight. Two words orbit his head: "NO CATS!"

"What the hell? We were just here yesterday," I protest.

"New day, new policy. No cats," he says, folding his arms over his chest.

"But—"

"Owner said so. You gotta problem, you take it up with him."

He doesn't even budge when I offer him a joint.

"Son of a bitch," Oreo squeaks as we stalk off. "I left QVC for this?"

"Relax," I tell him. "It's just one casino."

But when we try Caesar's Palace and Bellagio, they've got the same anatomically-inaccurate anti-Oreo signs, the same muscle-bound bouncers standing between us and a brighter, greener future. "Owner said so," the Bellagio guy reiterates. "It was in the newsletter."

Later, Oreo issues some not-so-nice comments regarding the newsletter and where the owner can shove it.

It's getting late. The color has drained from the sky. The nightlights of the city wash over me and Oreo, bathing us in muted hues.

As we're heading back home, he abruptly slaps his tail against my back. I stop and follow his eyes across the street to an oasis of palm trees and a miniature waterfall. The one casino we haven't swindled: The Mirage.

Memories of Mark return in waves, so many it feels like I might drown. There's one I can't shake: me sitting down at his empty blackjack table on the night we met. After I lost four games in a row, Mark's white teeth appeared as he said, "Busted." And I'd replied, "You mean the game, or checking you out?"

He loves telling that story. Loved.

"No, it's probably the same thing there," I say.

Oreo dangles his paw in my face. His claws emerge on command. "Humor me, kid."

So we jaywalk to The Mirage.

There is no sign out front. The bouncer glances at us, nods, tells us to enjoy our night. And just like that we're in.

Oreo scoffs. "Guess this place didn't get the newsletter."

Though I hate myself for it, I can't help but check Mark's old blackjack table on our way to the poker room. In his place a blonde croupier is dealing. Somehow it's not a relieving sight.

In the poker room Oreo picks our competition. He's got a nose for sniffing out weak players, says they smell like piss and Bud Light. That's how we wind up at the table of a bald man with a beer gut.

I'm so busy sizing him up that I almost miss my name.

"Trevor?"

The dealer stares at me. Mark.

My mouth dries up trying to form a response, but then his eyes soften.

"Hi, Oreo!"

My cat—our cat—jumps onto the table. Mark makes a show of rubbing his belly. Oreo, the little actor, purrs and curls his tail.

What are you doing here? My brain has the words, if my mouth would only cooperate.

"We're short-staffed in here tonight," Mark says, reading my thoughts like only he can. His tone is matter-of-fact, impersonal. "You were wondering, right?"

My fingers are shaking. "I'd like to play," I say, nodding to his cards. It doesn't feel as good as I'd imagined, ignoring his question. The man beside us perks up, ready to go. I empty my pockets on the table and Mark converts the cash into chips.

"Sure." He gives Oreo one last rub. "Go on, you."

"No, he's playing too," I say.

Mark blinks. Something crosses his face, some emotion that clouds the sunshine of his eyes. "Hold on. Are you the ones who got that stupid no-cat policy started? You and Oreo?"

The bald man leaves to take a call, tells us he'll only be a minute.

My lips hover around the shapes of a thousand words. Somehow they settle on: "What no-cat policy? No one told us about that when we came in."

"Well, no," Mark says, "because we all thought that newsletter was bogus. We haven't had any incidents here of anyone using cats to cheat."

He's staring at me but I can't meet his gaze. Oreo meows unconvincingly.

Mark frowns. "Oh, Trevor, please tell me you didn't—"

"Sorry, that was the wife," Baldy says, pocketing his phone. "Y'all ready to play?"

Oreo slinks into the seat beside me, and Mark's question once again slips into the void.

Oreo and I forfeit the first few games, as usual, to lull Baldy into a false sense of security. "Busted," Mark says the fourth time we lose, out of habit surely. But it makes me wonder if he's waiting for my response, waiting for me to say the magic words from our love story, waiting for me to make everything right.

I nudge my stack of chips over to Oreo. "I'm gonna sit out for a bit."

He opens his mouth to argue but knows better, plays it off as a yawn.

Oreo and Baldy get their cards. As they're weighing their options, I stare at Mark until he's forced to acknowledge me. "What?" he says.

"Oops." I pretend to look away. "Busted."

But the come-on doesn't work in reverse. Mark rolls his eyes, deals another card.

"Nothing? No reaction?" I feign indignation.

He sighs, deals a fourth. "What would you like me to say, Trevor?"

It occurs to me that I have no idea. "Why did you leave?" I ask.

"I told you already, didn't I?" Mark deals the fifth card. "I can't keep a ship afloat if it's full of holes. I can only patch up so many."

"I don't need patching." This time the indignation is real.

He turns to me. "I want to believe that, Trevor. Really, I do."

Before I can respond, something in my peripheral vision stops me. I look to see Oreo moving our entire stack of chips forward, thousands of dollars worth. He's all in. So is Baldy.

Panic twists my organs like balloon animals. "What are you doing?" I demand, to which he responds by licking his paw and rubbing his face—the straight flush signal. He reveals his cards: 10-6, all diamonds. Then leaps onto the table, slinks behind the winnings, pushes them forward.

"Not so fast, bucko," Baldy interjects, dropping his cards. Ace-10, all hearts.

Royal flush.

Oreo stares, opening and closing his mouth. It reminds me of the time he ate some peanut butter. The only thing he's eating now is crow.

"Come to papa!" Baldy reaches past Oreo and collects our chips, the culmination of a month's worth of poker games.

"Oreo," I say, surprised at how even my voice is. I don't think the realization's hit me yet that we've lost all our money.

"Shit," he hisses. He says it again, raking a paw across the table. His claws leave ghostly indents in the felt.

Mark stops collecting cards. The ace of hearts falls from his grasp. He turns to our cat. "Did he just talk?"

But Oreo is like this casino, a mirage, already off his chair and heading for the exit. And I'm right behind him. It takes everything in me not to peer over my shoulder for one last glimpse of Mark.

***

The TV is still on when we get home. It's the only sound in the house; Oreo hasn't spoken since we left The Mirage. When we returned he ran ahead of me, through the cat door, and disappeared.

Which is why I'm surprised to see him now, thirty minutes later, walking on his hind legs, dragging a plastic bag overflowing with cat food. "Later, kid," he says, heading for the door.

I lean over the arm of the couch. "What's going on?"

"What's it look like, numbnuts?" Oreo snaps. "I'm leaving."

I know I should be mad. He lost all my money and now he's splitting? Maybe it still hasn't registered because I only feel an emptiness. I'm being left, again.

"You can't go," I say, desperate. "We've got a match scheduled tomorrow. We could get the money back."

Oreo shakes his head. "It always has to be your way, doesn't it?"

I recoil. Mark said the same thing last month. Verbatim. I try to recall where Oreo was during the breakup. Outside? In the room?

"I didn't even wanna go out tonight," Oreo says. "You didn't even listen to me."

"You're right, I'm sorry. I'll get you that QVC food, I promise."

"Too late now."

"Come on, don't be like that," I say, and realize my cat is breaking up with me. I also realize I didn't even try this hard to keep Mark around. "We can still work this out."

He stops, looks me in the eye. "Look, kid. It's not you, it's—"

His words are cut short when he starts coughing. It sounds worse than it ever has, a rumbling noise like a lawnmower than won't start. He hunches over, arches his back, and retches, producing a hairball the size of my fist. The unfinished sentence joins Mark's in the void.

Not that I mind. I'm sure I can fill in the blank.

We stare at the soggy, matted clump by my feet. Entranced, Oreo paws it like a ball of yarn. Then he looks at me, blinks his disinterested yellow eyes, mewls. Dropping down on all fours, he pads to the cat door.

"Oreo?" 

He doesn't respond.

"Wait, what about your stuff?" But he's already gone into the night, leaving the cat door flapping. Silence clutters the room.

"Hey, where the hell do you think you're headed? Get back here!"

The words aren't mine.

Instinctively, I grab the TV remote, wield it like a scimitar. But when I turn around, there's no one there.

Then the voice comes again: "Goddamn mangy fleabag."

And that's when I look down.

There, smack dab on the polyester rug, the hairball is speaking, unleashing a stream of invective, cursing Oreo's mother and his intelligence and accusing him of being born out of wedlock. All in the same squeaky-toy voice Oreo's been using for the past month.

My real poker partner.

Disoriented, I shake my head, catching a glimpses of the TV. And something comes to me, said by one of those panelists last month, just after Mark walked out. A Buddhist woman on the show had likened the process of reincarnation to upgrading a cell phone. "It's like a new shell for something from the past. You come back as a different version of your old self. Hopefully better, wiser."

I'm not sure why I remember this—I'm agnostic. But that's what I'm thinking about when I take a step forward. How people come back, how they can change. How when Oreo comes back through the cat door, he'll be voiceless, altered.

Maybe it wouldn't be for the worse.

I'm still thinking about that when grab the screaming hairball, I step outside, and dump it in the trashcan. The night grows quiet and still around me.

On the couch, awaiting Oreo's reincarnation, I flip through the muted TV channels. There's an Allstate commercial promoting accident forgiveness. According to The Weather Channel, this week looks bright. Things are finally starting to warm up.

Before I can stop myself, I grab my phone and scroll through the contacts list until Mark's name and number materialize. And maybe it's desperate, extrapolating romantic advice from a weather forecast. But maybe it's not. Maybe I've changed too. Maybe I'll know what to say this time, how to play my cards better, wiser.

I give Mark a call and wait for what happens next.

April 30, 2022 03:47

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J.C. Lovero
12:49 Apr 30, 2022

Good morning pen pal friend! Very excited about this story for so many reasons. First, and most importantly, Oreo. That name is EVERYTHING. So cute, I just want to cuddle! Second, a foray into urban fantasy with a talking hairball stuck inside a cat?! Yes, please. I was into it. Not gonna lie, I was somewhat expecting Oreo to die unexpectedly with the coughing bit, but what you did instead was just hilarious to me. Love that little injection of humor. Third, I think what really made this story shine was the character development. Trevor r...

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Zack Powell
16:11 Apr 30, 2022

This comment was a lovely way to wake up. Great self-esteem booster right there. Thank you for spotting the hero's journey, which I was hoping would be concrete enough. That being said, I think I'll leave the fantasy stories to you from now on. 😂 Whole different mindset required to write these things. I had fun with this, but OMG I overwrote by 600 words and had to cut a LOT. (Please tell me I'm not alone there.) Full disclosure: The story's original conclusion was not open ended UNTIL I read your story for the week. Then I was like "Oh da...

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J.C. Lovero
16:37 Apr 30, 2022

Always happy to help a friend! I'm humbled you took inspiration from my story. #teamwork Don't worry, you are not alone. I do feel challenged to fit fantasy into the word limit. The genre (like sci-fi) lends itself to world-building, which I sometimes struggle to do if the idea gets way too big for the format. The good thing is that you can save whatever is cut and use it in a longer work for the stories that resonate with you. You did great with the fantasy! Glad you stretched that muscle this week. Side note: now I'm curious what the o...

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J.C. Lovero
16:42 May 06, 2022

Congrats on the win with your foray into fantasy! Don’t sell yourself short on this genre 😍

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Zack Powell
19:41 May 06, 2022

I think me and Fantasy is probably the equivalent of what you said about your relationship with Comedy. I used up all my creative brainpower with the genre for the rest of 2022. Maybe next year I'll try it again, LOL.

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Riel Rosehill
07:53 Apr 30, 2022

Hey!! Awww yes, and you said you didn't have the brainpower to write fantasy? I loved this! Also, welcome to the cute animal names club! (My neighbour's border collie is also called Oreo 😃) So our world, but with a magical touch - I like that. I really felt for Trevor being dumped with the it's not you, it's me (but really it's you) So, sorry in advance for an all over the place comment, I didn't get enough sleep to be able to write this how you would deserve it... (had a gin distillery work social last night 😬) I'll do my best 😅 Though...

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Zack Powell
19:37 May 05, 2022

OMG, I feel terrible! I SWEAR I had a sprawling counter-novel for this DAYS ago, and I hit the Reply button. 😭😭😭 FINALLY have some free time this week to get caught up on my Reedsy stuff, only to find out that my response never went through. I'm REELING. I'm gonna try to remember the essence of what I'd written (and the rest I'm gonna make up on the fly - as usual, am I right?). Side note: I still think Crumpet is the cutest pet name yet. I'm 99% sure I've told you before that I'm trying to hit up all the Reedsy genre tags at least once (2...

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Riel Rosehill
20:10 May 05, 2022

Heyyy you are back!! <33 I was wondering if I somehow annoyed you too much / gave you comment fatigue with my legthy comment here and also under my own story, the anxiety...! I'm just super happy it wasn't that and I can finally breathe! (It's not your fault I am this kinda stressy-type!) Love Spirited Away, re-watched it recently... I saw it in the cinema when it came out, loved it ever since! :D I know you are trying all the genres and it's brave - I'm going to tick one off too for the next one but please, have the lowest expectations--...

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Zack Powell
20:28 May 05, 2022

LOL, if anyone would get fatigue, it's probably you from all the novella comments I write. (What can I say, I love good fiction xD) Been a BUSY week - just now starting my story for the week too, LOL, so low expectations all around! #hotmessexpress incoming. I cannot wait to see which new genre you're going for. With the time crunch, I don't think I can afford to try one out. (Funny enough, Horror is a tag that I haven't hit yet, so I'm always hoping to get some inspiration when I read your and Sharon's stories. 😅) And besides, the last ti...

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Riel Rosehill
21:19 May 05, 2022

Don't you worry I just took care of that first step - but I get it, I am so socially awkward like that too! Look out for the email... PS I can't wait to one day read a horror from you!

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Riel Rosehill
05:21 May 06, 2022

Just saw your story is in the recommended..! Fingers crossed for you!

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Riel Rosehill
14:10 May 06, 2022

OMG!!! I'm screaming, Another win?! Well done, well done, well done! I do hope you know what an amazing writer you are after all the wins and shortlists... amazing stories, keep them coming! <33 Knowing you, you are probably trying to meet the next deadline right now but make sure to celebrate this! :DD So happy for you!

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Zack Powell
14:28 May 06, 2022

OMG OMG OMG! I literally thought this story had no chance in hell of winning. What a way to wake up today. Wow! (Side note: This now just gave me the freedom to post a terrible story tonight, so thank you, Reedsy! 🤣🤣🤣)

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Chris Morris
23:12 May 09, 2022

This story is just so good. It's really weird, in a good way, and I found myself wondering what I'd do with a cat like Oreo. The story was so funny and yet has that deeper layer involving the relationship between your two main (human) characters. The paragraph where it's revealed the voice was coming from the furball had me laughing out loud, too. Loved it. Seriously good stuff here. Congratulations on an obviously well-deserved win.

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Zack Powell
00:18 May 10, 2022

Thank you very much, Chris! Happy to know that the humor translated to the page for you - I never know when I'm writing. The furball part was a ton of fun to write. Thanks for your kindness! Much appreciated.

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Shea West
20:21 May 09, 2022

This line right here made me laugh: take the Buddhist approach: four Budweisers and two joints. and it made me think of Sublimes's song where Bradley Knowles sings, 'I smoke two joints in the morning I smoke two joints at night I smoke two joints in the afternoon to make me feel alright' I can't help but imagine a college class full of psychology students sitting down to dissect this person, and all of his possible stuff. Like it's all I can see. As someone who lived in Las Vegas for 5 years, and worked in fine dining in the big ole ca...

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Zack Powell
00:14 May 10, 2022

Thank you for giving me a new favorite song. It's wildly catchy. And for sure, you could probably spend a whole two hour lecture analyzing this guy's neuroses. Soo much baggage. LOL, you've probably seen it all when you were working in Vegas. Must've been a really fun job, though. I imagine being employed in casino culture would never have a dull day. I hope we get a prompt calling for a story set in a casino so you can fill us in on what we're missing out on.

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Shea West
00:26 May 10, 2022

It would go something like this: Feeding people until 1-2am in the morning, working alongside cooks that smoked like chimneys, and drank like fish, sexually harassed like it was breathing air... burned forearms in deck ovens, gossip gossip gossip....Get off of work looking like a wet dog, walk by the line of people waiting to get into the club. REPEAT.

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Zack Powell
00:34 May 10, 2022

HMM...Maybe it's not as glamorous as TV makes it seem. Welp. The more you know!

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Graham Kinross
06:07 Jun 26, 2022

I can see why this won. Well deserved Zack.

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Wendy M
20:45 Jun 22, 2022

I wish the like button could miraculously transform into an "Oh my god I f...ing love this," button. You have an amazing talent for making a story feel like it is happening around you. And I really believed in a talking cat!

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Zack Powell
21:31 Jun 22, 2022

Thank you, Wendy! Love your writing style, so this is a huge compliment coming from you!

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Zelda C. Thorne
08:49 Jun 02, 2022

I'm soooo behind on my reading. What a treat this was! So many bits I loved. "What he needs with all that money is beyond me, though once, I swear I smelled something in the kitchen that wasn't Meow Mix." LOL The moment his cat breaks up with him. Saying the sane things Mark did... The whole plot. Brilliant. Congratulations on your win 😁

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Zack Powell
18:06 Jun 02, 2022

Thanks, Rachel! Glad you had some fun reading this - it was a blast to write.

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Faith H
01:02 May 27, 2022

This story is so creative! I loved reading it :) What inspired you to write it?

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Zack Powell
02:10 May 27, 2022

Thanks for reading, Faith! Funny enough, the inspiration for this story came from my love of pirate. In the first version of this, Oreo was actually a parrot named Peter who was possessed by the spirit of a dead pirate. When I couldn't get that to work out, I decided to switch the animal and the setting, which gave way to this. One thing just led to another, I suppose.

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Faith H
04:19 May 28, 2022

I imagine the story would've been pretty different if it was Peter the parrot instead of Oreo! I'm glad you wrote this story, it was very fun to read :)

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Mark Sheehan
01:33 May 26, 2022

I've been to the casinos in Vegas once. They could be described a lot of ways, but what I saw, particularly when we cruised through at 4.00am, you managed to reduce to just just nine words. "The stench of tobacco and desperation congested the casino." Cool beans.

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Zack Powell
02:33 May 26, 2022

Thanks, Mark! Glad to know I found a pithy way to convey the essence of an experience.

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01:19 May 24, 2022

Hey, Zack! I really enjoyed reading this story, specifically about Trevor's growth and of course, Oreo. The ending was the seal for me, I just loved the way it flowed and how it tied back to blackjack. Amazing work as always :) ~ Jasey

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Zack Powell
04:08 May 24, 2022

Thank you for this lovely comment, Jasey! Happy to hear that you enjoyed this. :)

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04:11 May 24, 2022

No problem! Hope you're doing well :D

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Lavonne H.
15:11 May 15, 2022

Hi Zack! There is nothing left to say about your creative, intriguing and laugh out loud story...shucks. And you will be on to the next story so these comments are rather moot by now. Except to say I am sending links to it to everyone I know that loves/hates cats and plays poker--lists that almost coincide in length ;) (I am married to a guy who worked at becoming a professional card player...some 50 years ago. Before televised games and tournaments. His comment was the guy shouldn't have tried to win back his money. Did I say my husband is...

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I.M. Carney
15:15 May 13, 2022

This was such a fun story! Your writing is witty and to-the-point, which I admire. Thanks for making me laugh this morning!

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Zack Powell
16:16 May 13, 2022

Thank you very much, Izy! Glad you got some laughs out of this one.

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Karen Kinley
15:59 May 12, 2022

Just got around to reading this, and boy am I glad I did! Literally LOL funny! Loved every word of this tidy story. Everything worked. Your humor is awesome! Best line I've read in a LONG time: "The stench of tobacco and desperation congested the casino." 🤣🤣 Well done!

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Zack Powell
00:43 May 13, 2022

Thank you, Karen! I had a lot of fun writing this (the "tobacco and desperation" line especially), so I'm glad to know that humor was able to come through for the reader too. Thanks a lot!

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Philip Ebuluofor
14:17 May 12, 2022

Hooking tale. I glued to every word, paragraph to the end. Shit, fine work men.

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Zack Powell
14:56 May 12, 2022

Thank you very much, Philip!

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Philip Ebuluofor
15:19 May 17, 2022

My pleasure.

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Mia Fitzpatrick
01:07 May 12, 2022

Very interesting. I love the concept of Oreo. How'd you come up with the talking hairball!? I find that quite unique. Great job on the peice.

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Zack Powell
02:12 May 12, 2022

Thank you very much, Mia! The original idea for this story was to have a possessed parrot, since they can already talk. But it was a lot harder to fit that animal into a casino setting, so I switched it to a cat and conjured up the hairball to justify the talking.

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Jeanette Harris
15:59 May 10, 2022

I love this story where this cat is talking, he wins poker games, wow the cat has opinion of own great story

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Zack Powell
17:35 May 10, 2022

Thanks, Jeanette!

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Susan Young
11:55 May 10, 2022

What a super story! I liked the way you brought so many things together in the familiar yet other-worldly setting of Las Vegas. Great dialogue.

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Zack Powell
13:36 May 10, 2022

Thank you very much, Susan!

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09:38 May 09, 2022

This story is a full house of poker metaphors, really enjoyed it. and after a journey of personal discovery liked how the mc came back around at the end and learned something out of it. got to know when to hold them, know when to..

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Zack Powell
17:15 May 09, 2022

Thanks, Scott! I'm really glad you caught all the poker metaphors (the story's original title was even "When to Hold Them"). Very happy to know someone noticed.

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Nancy Richy
15:31 May 08, 2022

Well, just freaking funny. Could be the pain meds from the pinched nerve in my back - hard to tell - but it made me laugh and appreciate someone who can spin a tale as effortlessly as you did. Besides that, my BIL has a cat named Oreo who weighs about 47 lbs so I was hooked from the get go. (Did I just say "get go"? Must be the pain meds again). Think I'll write me one of these funny stories, see what happens. Seriously - awesome ink, Zack. Well done!

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Zack Powell
08:34 May 09, 2022

LOL, pain meds or no pain meds, I want to say thank you, Nancy! This comment is lovely. Your BIL's Oreo sounds very adorable (I unabashedly love big cats). Definitely encourage you to do a funny story of your own - it's so much fun laughing at your own lines as you're writing. If nothing else, you know you'll get a kick out of reading the story back to yourself. Thanks again for this comment!

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Nancy Richy
00:43 May 19, 2022

Hey Zack! Thanks for all you said and the encouragement. Well, I did it - I wrote a story for the next contest! Is it all shits & giggles? Prob not but there is some funny stuff and its about life which, as you know, isn't always funny. I'm happy with the way it turned out; let's see who else is. Thanks again. Really nice 'talking' with you!

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Harnoor Kaur
14:08 May 08, 2022

Amazing! Congratulations!

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Zack Powell
08:29 May 09, 2022

Thank you, Harnoor!

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