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Sad Drama Inspirational

I wouldโ€™ve given anything and everything to be out in the tropical storm when I was little. It wasnโ€™t frightening. In fact, it was cool.

I wouldโ€™ve wanted to go jump in the huge puddles the rain was making. When our drain got clogged because of all the dirt and leaves the rain carried in, it created a huge puddle. It was like a pond in our backyard.

I wouldโ€™ve asked Mom to go out and play in the puddles or even swim in that pond the rain created.

And sheโ€™d say no, to all my questions.

Sheโ€™d tell me Iโ€™d get sick.

Sheโ€™d tell me Iโ€™d get struck by lightning.

Sheโ€™d tell me Iโ€™d get carried off somewhere by myself or to an island in the middle of the sea, by the strong winds that the tropical storm caused.

Sheโ€™d tell me all the excuses for me to not go outside.

My mind flashed back to a particular moment in my past. I was ten, a lonely, only child who sat in her room doing nothing. I have a really hard time making friends, so I was pretty much always by myself. Or sometimes when I got super bored, Iโ€™d play with the maidโ€™s daughter. Mom and Dad were always working, so I couldnโ€™t bother them either. I was watching the rain pitter-patter-pitter-patter against the cold window.

The rain splattered all over the window like paint, and scattered all over the place in tiny little drops. Iโ€™d watch the drops and put them into races against each other. First to reach the windowsill wins!!

There was a knock at my door, and ten year old me pulled her brownish blonde hair with blue outlines up into a messy bun. She wouldโ€™ve wanted the maids to think she was clean and did her hair before anyone came to see her.ย 

Or if it was the maidโ€™s daughter who wanted to play, she wanted to be ready.

But neither the maids nor the maidโ€™s daughter were standing in the doorway after I told them to come in. It was someone I wouldnโ€™t expect to see standing in the doorway wearing a raincoat, rain boots, and holding an umbrella. It was someone I wouldn't have guessed to have a huge grin that showed their dimples, plastered to their face. And the smile wasnโ€™t fake either. It was real, and it lit up the room.

โ€œMom?โ€ I asked, running to pull her into a tight hug.

โ€œJoy!โ€ She exclaimed.

I thought this was very unexpected. She wouldnโ€™t take work off to come see me. Sheโ€™d never done this before. โ€œDonโ€™t you have work?โ€ I finally asked, looking into her deep brown eyes.

She gave a concerned look and kneeled down to be face to face with me. โ€œJoy, I never want you to think I do not have time for you! You come before work. Always. I know Mom has been busy lately, but you know I come and check on you every night, right? I come and kiss your forehead, wishing I could spend more time with you. Even on the weekends I have to work. But thatโ€™s how it is. Trust me, if I could change it, I would.โ€

I hugged her and rested my head on her chest. I could hear her heart beating softly. Thump. Thump. Thump. โ€œSo whyโ€™d you come down here?โ€ I asked.

โ€œDo you want to go out in the rain?โ€ She asked, a grin on her face.

I looked up at her with possibly the biggest smile Iโ€™d ever made. I nodded. โ€œYES!โ€ I exclaimed, dashing off for the stairs to put on my rain clothes. After I was dressed, we ran onto the front porch and sat in the porch swing.

I looked over at Mom as we swung. Sheโ€™d pulled her chocolate brown hair up into a messy bun, hairs sticking out all over the place. Her lips were a light pink like cotton candy. Her eyes were the deepest brown. If you dived in, theyโ€™d suffocate you and pull you under the surface. She had one freckle that was shaped like a heart. She told me she got teased for it when she was little, but Iโ€™ve always told her I loved it.I think it resembles how loved and lovable she is.

She points off into the distance. โ€œSee that, Joy? Lightning.โ€

There was a bright flash of zigzag white light, and then a roll of thunder, across the sky.

โ€œCome,โ€ She said, as she got up from the swing and stepped out into the rain. She was dancing and splashing in puddles. It was like she was a kid again, having fun and dancing around. It was something I even wanted to do.

I ran out into the rain and joined her.ย 

As the rain fell from the dark clouds above, we stuck our tongues out and tried to catch a drop. When it landed on someoneโ€™s tongue, weโ€™d cheer.

The wind picked up and started blowing the leaves around, forming a little tornado. We chased them as the rain hit our faces and we got soaked.

I swear, that is the best moment of my life. When youโ€™re living in the moment. When youโ€™re with the ones you love most. When you are having fun. When you canโ€™t even express how much fun you are having, or how much love you want to show.

And then she was sick.

*****

That was two years ago.

Mom has been sick ever since.

I went to Dadโ€™s room where Mom was talking to Dad in a raspy voice. Dad had tears streaming down his cheeks, and I immediately knew something was wrong.

I rushed up to Momโ€™s side and Dad left the room. โ€œWhatโ€™s wrong?โ€ I said, and even though I didnโ€™t know what was going on, tears were still streaming down my face like rapid waters in the river.

โ€œJoy.โ€ She said in a raspy tone, tears streaming down her face. โ€œJoy, I know this is hard for you.โ€ It was barely a whisper, so I had to kneel down and hold her hand.

โ€œPlease,โ€ I said, sniffling. โ€œWhatโ€™s wrong?โ€

โ€œJoy. I-Iโ€™m t-too s-s-sick.โ€ She stuttered through tears and weeps and moans.

โ€œNo.โ€ I said. It was a statement. This couldnโ€™t be happening. โ€œNo, Mom. Donโ€™t leave me.โ€ I pleaded. If there was a space big enough for a lake, my tears wouldโ€™ve already filled it up in moments.

โ€œIโ€™ll always be with you, Joy.โ€ Sheโ€™s crying harder now. โ€œSo I want you to promise me something. I want you to remember something. For me.โ€

I nodded. โ€œAnything.โ€ I promised.

โ€œWhenever you see lightning, think of me. Iโ€™ll always be here. Live that special moment again. Replay it in your mind. Never forget me.โ€

โ€œI wonโ€™t, Mom.โ€ My tears formed a pool on the ground next to her bed. โ€œMom, I-I love you.โ€

She tried to smile. But before I could hear a reply, her eyes shut and her chest stopped rising and falling.

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*Twenty years later. Joy is 32*

The thunder awoke me from the deep sleep I was having. I looked over my shoulder and saw my husband, Arnold, sleeping peacefully. It was only four in the morning.

I tip-toed down the hall passing my daughter Amelia who was sleeping in her room.

I tip-toed down the hall and all the way down stairs where I slid on rain boots and a sweatshirt.

The rain hit my face, but I didnโ€™t care. I sat down on the porch swing and watched the rain.

Lightning struck, and for a second, I couldโ€™ve sworn it was in the shape of a heart. Like Momโ€™s freckle.

Iโ€™ll always be with you.

I replayed the memory we had together out in the rain in my mind. It was more clear this time. I could feel the feelings I was feeling then.

I felt a hand rest on my shoulder. But when I looked up, no one was there. I think it was Mom.

Whenever you see lightning, think of me. Iโ€™ll always be here. Live that special moment again. Replay it in your mind. Never forget me.

August 13, 2021 14:46

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The main charcter, Joy Higgins, was inspired by Varsha Vimal. Go check her out! Her writing is great. If you would like one of your characters in my book, fill out the form in my bio! Thanks. Bella

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Caroline Fonteno
02:06 Aug 16, 2021

Is the lie number 3?

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The lie for two truths and one lie is number three! Congrats, I'll put you on my bio!!! :DDD

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Caroline Fonteno
02:07 Aug 16, 2021

thank you!

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Fiery Red
17:13 Aug 13, 2021

A heart touching story. Pretty easy to read and get absorbed, I especially loved your descriptions, they were very visual. Great writing!! I would really love if you could leave feedbacks on my stories which haven't received any comment yet. It inspires me and also helps me to see through my flaws. Thank you. Keep writing and growing!!!

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Thanks, Red. I will definitely give you feedback when I get the chance to! Yep, your comment inspired me too! :D

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19:18 Aug 23, 2021

This almost reads like a screenplay! I characters are very vivid -- they just jump off the page. I love the repetition -- it also reads like a lovely narrative poem. Try to avoid doing this: *Twenty years later. Joy is 32* And have the speaker make a comment like, "Almost two decades later, I still..." or give some indication of the passage of time. Well done!

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Hi Deidra! Thanks for heading on over here!! Iโ€™m glad you enjoyed this story. I tried to make the characters vivid and realistic so you could relate with them. I will try to avoid that next time. I wasnโ€™t really sure what to do there but I really like your idea! Iโ€™ll make sure to keep it in mind. Thanks again!!! ๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜‰

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Dhwani Jain
03:32 Aug 14, 2021

Ah! Nice story, Bella! To be honest, it was bland-ish in the beginning but the plot and the ending was such that I wanted to cry.

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Thanks, Dhwani! Ok! I could add more detail or something happen differently if you want. And I was going for a sad story because I've never written sad, so I guess I achieved my goal! -Bella-

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Dhwani Jain
11:23 Aug 14, 2021

=D No need, but yeah, if you add a little bit more 'action' (not fighting though, you get my point?) then it'd be great. Yeah you did!!!

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The description in this story was great and the dialogue was very impressive. Your style of writing...I just love it. The asteriks really help the story move along. Like a storm. But eventually, the lightning stops.

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Thank you, Breckin. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

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TJ Squared
15:05 Aug 13, 2021

pretty heart-felt story. tbh, the mom seemed more childish than the kid herself lol. I liked how the lightning was symbolic, and who doesn't love a good storm? great story :)

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Thanks, Wolfie! The Mom was supposed to seem more childish. She always has to work and now she just wants to let loose and have fun! Yes, I thought that it would be great to include something that's symbolic and makes you emotional. Yea, who doesn't love a good storm? Thanks, Wolfie!! :DDD

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TJ Squared
15:11 Aug 13, 2021

makes sense lol yeah, definitely. lol ofc, Bella :D

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TJ Squared
22:08 Aug 14, 2021

it's out!!!! I liked your space idea, might use it in a future story :)

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21:42 Aug 22, 2021

AH you like KOTLC! That gets a follow from me :)

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Aww, thanks for the follow, S A P H A N A !! Who is your favorite character from KOTLC?

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21:42 Aug 25, 2021

XD np!! Ahh cant choose! Probably Keefe though! Wbu?

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:D I know, right? I'm also Keefe or Biana.

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13:33 Aug 26, 2021

Yas! Some people ship Keefe + Biana :O

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18:04 Aug 21, 2021

I am blown away by this, no pun intended. I can see everything so clearly, and the bit at the end with the lightning flash was just-- SO PERFECT! I usually skim the first few lines of a story to see if I like it, and a lot of times I'm not satisfied enough to read the whole thing, but your intro really pulled me in. Thanks for posting this beautiful little story! It made my day.

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Hi Raven! ;D Yay, I'm so glad! PERFECT?! Wow, thanks! I'm glad those first few lines could hook you to read through the whole story. :) You're welcome! I had an amazing time writing this! :DDD Also stay tuned for more! I'm brainstorming now! -โค- ๐”น๐•–๐•๐•๐•’

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18:18 Aug 22, 2021

I will!

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18:32 Aug 23, 2021

How are you?

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Iโ€™m great, we just started school so yeah. What about you?

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Daniel R. Hayes
06:08 Aug 21, 2021

Bella... this was incredibly moving. I really loved reading this bittersweet story. The way you wrote this story with emotion was really amazing. I could literally feel every tear she cried. And that ending... so, so, good and heartfelt. You have a great talent for telling these stories, keep up the great work! :)

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Hey, Daniel! Thanks! :D That means a lot, more than you'll ever know! I don't know if you read this in the other comments or not, but I have never written a sad story. Maybe a few sad parts, but not like this! So it really means a lot! I will! And maybe I'll write more like this, so stay tuned!! -โค- ๐”น๐•–๐•๐•๐•’

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Daniel R. Hayes
15:43 Aug 21, 2021

Hi Bella, I didn't read that this was your first sad story! That makes it even better because you went out of your comfort zone. As I mentioned before, you did a fantastic job with it. I will definitely stay tuned for more, and I look forward to reading your other stories! Hope you have a great day :)

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Hello! :D Thank you so, so much! Yay! I definitely have more coming, brainstorming right now. :D Have a great day to you too! Happy writing! -โค- ๐”น๐•–๐•๐•๐•’

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22:14 Aug 20, 2021

Please tell me you didn't eat fried grubs! That's my guess by the way, that you didn't eat fried grubs. ๐Ÿค Thanks for liking my story. ๐Ÿ‘

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lol, I did eat fried grubs in Thailand at a festival and they taste like french fries! The people seasoned them and they were weirdly great!!! Np :D

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01:39 Aug 21, 2021

Oh wow! That's so cool. ๐ŸŸ

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:D Everyone else said it was gross ๐Ÿ˜ญ ๐Ÿ˜… ๐Ÿคฃ

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Megan Sutherland
02:37 Aug 20, 2021

this is so sad- rawrrrrr i decided to come read one of yours because you liked so many of mine, and for that i'm very very grateful. :) for your bio: i think the lie is #2 because i can't even contemplate eating a bug- okay, here's my take on the story! :DD 1. your description of mom's face was so on-point and perfect i am honestly speechless. i can't even describe how much i love that part of the story and i envy your ability to describe like that. kudos to you!! 2. the only problem i have is this is that the plot is just... ord...

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that is what I was going for so I guess I achieved my goal! :DDD lol You're welcome! It's no problem actually, you're stories are great. :D And thanks for dropping onto my page, I really appreciate it. Oooh yay! Somone FINALLY guessed. But I hate to tell you that that is actually true, lol. In Thailand, I was visiting family, and we went to this festival. They fried grubs and seasoned them, and I decided to try one. You actually really should, they taste like french fries ๐Ÿ˜‚ Thank you! I love that you love it! It was really fun for me to...

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Megan Sutherland
12:53 Aug 20, 2021

yayyyyy oml i just could never put one in my mouth like i'm picturing a gross crunch and like because i know the bugs where i live are creepy and big i can't even fathom putting one in my mouth. wait so which one is the lie-

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lol, they were very small and you ate them in handfuls. But I'm not lying when I say they taste like french fries. It was weird. The lie is that if I could I'd pay to go to space. I would never! I'm so so so scared! I mean what if it blew up? Or what if something went wrong and we got lost in space? Or what if we never made it to our destination? Isn't that scary?

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Megan Sutherland
03:16 Aug 21, 2021

WHATTTT okay bella that's where we're opposites. this is SPACE. like- imagine how beautiful it is up there and i guess my way of coping with that worry would be to just focus on the fact that it's SPACE?! so few people have been there, if i had the chance, i would go immediately. *and wear my new tie dye NASA shirt haha*

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Umaya E
06:59 Aug 18, 2021

"Whenever you see lightning, think of me. Iโ€™ll always be here. Live that special moment again. Replay it in your mind. Never forget me" Loved this line! Your story was easy to read but it was very touching. This reminded me of my childhood self and how I found the rain very magical( I still find it so) Thank you for bringing back those beautiful memories. P.S It's raining now!! I'm thinking of dancing in the rain today. Imagine a slow indie-folk song playing in the background when it's raining! ( An amazing coincidence)๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿป

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Hey, Umaya! :D I really enjoyed writing that line. I felt like I smushed too many things together in that sentence, but I guess it worked out. Thanks! Aww, thank you! I've actually never written a sad story before, but people seem to enjoy it so yay! You're welcome. Oh what a coincidence! That sounds fun! :D :D :D -โค- ๐”น๐•–๐•๐•๐•’

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Svara Narasiah
01:05 Aug 18, 2021

So beautiful!

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TJ Squared
17:17 Aug 17, 2021

I finished the space story! Thanks for all your help! Hope you like it :DDD

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YAY! You're a speedwriter. I'll go check it out!

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TJ Squared
17:32 Aug 17, 2021

yep XD :D

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Just read it and left a comment! Amazing! :D

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TJ Squared
17:56 Aug 17, 2021

:DDD thx

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Hey Bella! Thx so much for including my character in this beautiful, and emotional story! I loved the way u described the rain and the thunder, and how you gave a whole backstory, the present and the future too! LOVED it!

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Hey Varsha! You're welcome, you gave an amazing character for me to work with! Thank you so much, Varsha! I'm so happy you took the time to leave an amazing comment and read my story. :D Thanks! -Bella-

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Aww, of course! But u created a masterpiece with it! NP! It was my pleasure to do so! Your story really tugged my heart strings! Of course~ -v

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Aww, thank you! :D That's what everyone else is saying! I'm glad you liked it. :))) -Bella

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Palak Shah
18:59 Aug 14, 2021

This was a beautiful and heartfelt story and I loved reading it. The characterization of the mum was great. Well done :))

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