Just Give Him a Second Chance

Submitted into Contest #54 in response to: Write a story about a TV show called "Second Chances."... view prompt

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Mystery Drama

“Just give him a second chance!” Paxton pleads.


“Never!” I cry. “Mark will die in those chains tomorrow!”


I dramatically point to the left floor, where Levi sits, hunched over his bound limbs. 


Paxton approaches me. “But why?!”


“You know why! He killed my sister, my beloved Isa. Now he will pay the price!”


“It was an accident!” Paxton exclaims. “If you give him a second chance, Mark’ll fix this, I swear!”


I snarl. “You can't fix dead, Vayd. Mark’ll be done for in a day, and you’ll join him if you don’t leave!”


Paxton’s eyebrows pinch together. Then his mouth curls into a smile as he unsheathes his sword. “I’m not leaving without a fight, Arya.”


I smirk as the sound of my own sword scraping against its sheath fills the cavern. I twirl my sword as I gracefully jump off the giant rock I’ve been perched on. “Okay, then.” I toss my head back and throw my hands up as I cackle as loud as I can. A moment goes by and I regain my posture, staring coldly at Paxton. “Let’s fight.”



*



“CUUUUUUUUUUT!”


The producer’s voice booms out of the speakers as bells ring, signaling the end of the scene. Smiling, I place my plastic blade on the fake rock in the center of the black box—although, with the fantastic skills the staff have, it’s a jungle where the evil Lady Arya (or as everyone on set calls the character: Loony Lordess Arya) avenges her sister’s death.


“That was amazing, sweetheart!” Micheal Garcia, my dark-skinned, incredibly kind producer, says as he discards his microphone. He pushes open the door, the one that's part of the clear wall separating the filming part of the theater and where the staff sit, and hugs me. “Terrific acting, Miss Wren.”


Let me set the scene of where we filmed our TV show (Second Chances) for you: there’s a giant room, daily the size of a gym. Two thirds of it is for filming, and the last third is cut off by a giant, clear wall. In the filming section, there are props and stuff, but also a fake wall—a black stretch of thick plastic leaving a five-foot gap in between the filming space and the back wall. Behind the fake wall are a couple chairs for the special effects people, who control anything overhead—it’s their job to pull the right ropes to release bags of leaves or something. There’s tons of funky stuff lying around back there, like sacks of strange props or things connected to the ceiling in advance like my harness (attached to cables) for later. 


I swat his arm. “Micheal, for the millionth time, don’t ‘miss’ a seventeen-year-old. I’m a teenager! Not an unmarried woman!”


He just winks at me as he strolls over to congratulate the male lead and my tall, sporty best friend, Paxton Jones. 


Jolie Claremont strides onto the stage, her blond ponytail whipping around as she jogs to her friend, Levi Strong. Levi is also my friend—although he’s more like a nice little brother (same as he is to all of us), a twelve-year-old afraid of messing up.


 The second after Levi’s bonds are on the floor and he’s received a ‘nice work’, Jolie walks over to Paxton. The two hug as Jolie showers him with praise, and she pecks him on the cheek before everybody trots over to me. 


I cringe. Jolie and Paxton have been dating for almost two years, but I still don’t appreciate when they kiss. Blech.


“So,” Paxton says as he walks up to me, “how long of a break do we have?”


I shrug as his green eyes stare at me expectantly. “I dunno. Ask Micheal.”


Jolie sighs, as she always does when my friend and I interact. Jolie and I have never been that close, but as soon as she and Paxton started dating the most she ever did was tolerate me. She seemed to be offended any time Paxton even spoke to me, which was extremely stupid considering we had been best friend since kindergarten, when we both hatched dreams to become actors.


Paxton hugs me and starts off. We’re both very affectionate with hugging, and, like usual, Jolie’s gray eyes bore into my matching ones after the embrace. “Quit it.”


“Quit what?


“Wren, you know what.”


I laugh and glance at her. “Jolie, stop it.”


“No, you stop it.” She seems genuinely annoyed so I laugh even more.


Levi snorts and pats his bestie’s blond head. “Come on, Jolie. Let’s go get some chips.”


He grabs her wrist but Jolie breaks away. She sends me a look before walking off, saying, “Take Pax or something.”


Levi shrugs and strolls over to Paxton.


I turn around to meet them at the vending machines, immediately walking into Micheal.


“Oh! Sorry,” I say, jumping back.


His eyes crinkle as he smiles. “No problem. Are you ready for your big flying scene, sweetheart?”


I grin. “Totally.”


“Good, because it’s starting in a moment.”


I nod and start to migrate towards the stage as Micheal’s voice comes over the speakers once again: “Guys, the flying scene starts in two minutes!”


I pull my harness around from the fake wall. Levi helps me fit it on before he races back to his original spot. “Where’s Paxton?” I hiss.


“In the bathroom,” Levi says.


Paxton arrives and ties the ropes onto Levi again then grabs his sword and dashes a couple yards from where I pose, sword in hand and harness and cables attached to my waist and chest. Paxton seems surprised to see me. “Wait, Wren, you’re doing this scene?”


“Yeah.”


“I thought it was Jolie.”


“No, her auditions are next week.”


“Let me help you with your harness.”


He starts walking towards me but I signal him off. “It’s fine. My harness is already on.”


I pull over my cape to cover the equipment and listen as Micheal’s voice says, “Show ‘Second Chances’, Scene forty-four, take one, go!”


“Lordess Arya,” Paxton begins, “I’m prepared to fight you.”


My mouth curls into a smile as I flip my brown curls with streaks of hot pink. “You have a sword and a temper, but you’re not aware of my power.”


He squints at me. “Uh, you have a power?”


I smile. “Exactly! Clueless! Now watch, puny mortal, as I fly!


I try to calm my rattled nerves as the cables start to lift me up, up, up, until I’m yards above my co-star’s head. I grin and release the breath I didn’t know I was keeping bottled up. I’m flying! Not actually flying, but flying! Of course, I’ve flown before in rehearsals, but it still terrified and exhilarated me every time I did it again. 


“No freakin’ way,” Paxton breaths as he gazes up at me.


“Yes freakin’ way, puny mortal!”


“Stop it with that nickname. You’re human, too.”


“But I have powers!” I flounce around in the sky.


“That doesn’t change your species, idiot!”


I place a hand in my chest and huff. “It’s Arya, you nincompoop!”


“That’s what I said.”


Fake laughter recordings pours out of the speakers and my hands clenched into fists. “You will pay, Vayd!”


I’m starting to glide down when my dissent is sped up by my harness breaking


I shriek as I start to fall the twenty feet between Paxton and I.


“AHHHHH!” comes out of my mouth as I crash to the floor, where Paxton is trying to catch me. I smash into him and we both collapse to the ground.



*



Am I dead? My brain wonders.


No, I don’t think so.


Wait, why am I not dead?


It was seven yards, not a mile, stupid.


You’re stupid, stupid!


We’re the same person, weirdo!


I smack my head in an attempt to rid the little voice I’m arguing with. Sadly, the voice is my conscience, and you can’t knock your mind out of your skull.


I wince when my palm connects with my head. Ouch


Wow, that hurt, I think as I instinctively reach my hand up to rub my head, before jutting my hand back as I remembered the last time something connected with my head—aka five seconds ago.


I lift my head up to take in my surroundings. I’m still on the floor, apparently. Jolie is by my side—nope, wait, she’s tending to her boyfriend, who’s to my left.


I roll over and ask Paxton, “You okay, buddy?”


He groans and pulls himself to his feet. “I’ve been better.”


Jolie glares at me as she also stands up. 


“How long was I out?” I glance at Levi, who hauls me up.


He shrugs. “You weren’t ‘out’. Your harness snapped and you fell, bashing heads with my buddy Paxton before you both tumbled to the ground. You shut your eyes, then opened them, and here we are. This all happened ten seconds ago, by the way.”


I dust myself off and fumble with my harness. The literal lock connecting the cables to the straps is lying on the floor, not completely closed. I peer up and spot the cables swinging up high.


“You okay?” Levi asks me. 


I nod and turn to Paxton. “Sorry about that.”


“Don't sweat it, Wren,” he replies. “I’m sure the lock just broke.”


We all nod to ourselves, me thinking it was a wonder I stayed in the air as long as I did with a broken lock, before…


“The lock didn’t break,” Micheal announces from behind us.


We all jump. “You scared us,” I blink as he held up the lock.


“Don't be startled, sweethearts,” he says. 


“Anyways…” Paxton swallows, “you were saying?”


“This wasn’t a mistake,” Micheal says. “The lock. It wasn’t broken, it was unlocked. Somebody obviously wanted this to happen, to hurt Wren.”


“Duh,” Jolie rolls her eyes, “but who?


“We don’t know,” Micheal says.


“Duh,” I add, smiling.


Jolie rolls her eyes again and I chuckle before wincing and rubbing my tailbone. “Ow,” I complain to myself.


“Don’t be such a crybaby!” Jolie says. “Woman up, weakling.”


I want to smack her. “I’m not a ‘weakling’, Jolie.”


“You’re not very strong.”


“I don’t play sports! Besides running races, I mean. I’m an—”


“Artist,” she says in unison with me. Just, she pronounces it the right way but in a mocking tone. I glare daggers.


She grins at me. “Yeah, I know.”


“You guys?” I turn to my friends. “I’m pretty sure Jolie ruined the lock.”


She gasped and looked super offended. “What? No! I would never hurt you!”


“Mmmhmm,” I gave her the side-eye.


“Wren,” Paxton says, “I know Jolie doesn’t like you that much, but she would never try to hurt you. Right, Jolie?” He turns to his girlfriend, who kisses him on the cheek (again) before saying sweetly, “Of course, babe.”


I mime barfing and glance at Levi. “Lev, do you have any ideas for suspects?”


“It could be anyone,” he says. “Your harness was attached to the cables, lying behind the other fake wall in this theater, this whole time, so anyone could’ve unlocked it.”


“Nope,” Micheal shook his head. “I checked during the scene before the train wreck one, and it was fine. It was securely locked to the cable. When Wren put the harness on, the lock would’ve already been unlocked. And nobody went behind the wall after I checked—at least, I didn’t see them. But even if I didn’t see them, there’s only one key to the lock on the harness. That key is hidden behind the vending machine, as only you guys and myself know.”


He gestures to the vending machine, beeping by the supply room door.


“Wait,” Jolie says slowly, “that means it has to be one of us four.”


“Why do you say that?” Pax frowns.


“Because only we know how to get into the room.”


“Also Micheal,” Pax protests. His face melted into a gasp as she turned to our producer. “Did you do it?!”


“I would never want to hurt Wren, sweetheart!”


I nod. “I know.”


Levi shrugs. “We have to consider all possibilities. Maybe Micheal is mad at you or something…?”


Micheal frowns. “Of course not.”


“You did get mad when Wren messed up the same line seven times,” Jolie remarks.


“I was amused, not annoyed. And definitely not mad.


“Besides, I’m one of his lead roles,” I say. “Micheal wouldn’t want to hurt me purely because of his show, but that doesn’t even matter seeing he cares about me.”


“Completely true, sweetheart,” he smiles.


“I think this investigation with Micheal is over,” I tell my friends. “Which means it has to be Pax, Levi or Jolie that unlocked the lock and sent me falling.”


“Again, it’s not me,” Jolie says. “I don’t like you, but I wouldn’t hurt you. I don’t do that. My boyfriend, on the other hand…”


Paxton protests loudly before turning to me. “I’d never try to hurt you, Wren.” 


I smile. “Duh. Sorry. I know.”


“Again, we’ve got to consider everything,” Levi says. “I mean, Paxton definitely didn’t do it, but we should still check.”


“What would I do it for?” Paxton throws his hands up. “Wren is my best friend and I would never want to hurt her.”  


I hug him. “You’re definitely out of the conversation.”


Jolie looks like it's taking all of her willpower not to yank us two besties apart. “Who else could it be?” 


“Levi,” Paxton offered up.


I shook my head. “No. He’d never do it, either.” Paxton nodded.


“Really,” Jolie’s eyes narrow. “He helped put on your harness, remember? He could’ve easily unlocked it while assisting you.”


“No,” I say, a little more forcefully. “Right, Levi?”


I turned to my friend but he’s shaking, his eyes somewhere off in the distance. “I…I…I didn’t,” he mustered quietly. “I really didn’t, Wren. Please believe me.”


I take my young friend into my arms. “Of course, Levi. I’m sorry.”


“Okay,” Micheal sighs, “we’re back where we started.”


“We could just let this be,” Jolie offers, “and forget this ever happened.”


“Are you okay with that, Wren?” Micheal says.


I shrug. “I’m fine if we never find out who did this to me. As long as it doesn’t happen again, it’s okay.” I wasn’t exactly a forgive-and-forget kind of girl, but I didn’t even know who to forgive-and-forget, so…so be it.


Paxton sighs—with relief or exasperation; I can’t tell. Then he says, “I’m going to go to the bathroom. Bye.”


“Again?” Levi frowns.


“Yes! Geez, Levi!”


He strolls off and I squint at Levi. “Wait. Didn’t you tell me he was in the bathroom earlier, but right after you guys got chips?”


“At the vending machine, yep,” he nods.


“And…” I turn to Micheal. “The key is hidden in the vending machine, right?”


“Taped to the back,” he confirms.


I take a deep breath then let the air drain out the side of my mouth. “Is it possible that Paxton snagged the key while getting a snack with Levi, then faked a bathroom break so he could sneak behind the fake wall and unlock my harness?”


There's a silence as everybody thinks about my theory.


“Dang, Wren’s right,” Levi holds his forehead in his palm.


Micheal sighs. “It appears Paxton tried to hurt Wren.”


“No,” Jolie says. “No, I really don’t think Paxton would do that. I don’t like Wren, but my boyfriend’s best friends with her. Besides, wouldn’t the special effects crew have seen him?”


“They were on break, same as you guys,” Micheal says.


“He didn't do it,” Jolie repeats.


I bit my lip. “Jolie, I think he did.”


Just then, Pax walked up. “What’s up?”


“You tried to kill me.”


“No!”


“Yes,” I insist. “All the evidence points to you. We know you got the key from the vending machine then faked your bathroom break.”


“I think you’re jumping to conclusions without all the evidence, Wren. I would never try to hurt you!”


“Well, you did!”


“I. DID. NOT. TRY. TO. HURT. YOU!” Paxton grits his teeth. “Bye.”


He starts to walk off but Levi kicks his foot out and trips him. He tumbles and lands in a heap.


“Levi, don’t trip my boyfriend!” Jolie protests, bending down to help Paxton up. She freezes. “Pax, what’s that?”


“What’s what?” He says nervously, his eyes darting around as he shifts his body.


That,” she says, grabbing a copper key out from under her.


Micheal snatches it up. “This is it! The key to the lock!”


“The lock that caused me to fall twenty feet to the ground,” I snarl. “Pax. I can’t believe you. WHY?!”


“I didn’t try to hurt you.”


“Well, Jolie, Micheal, and Levi sure didn’t. You did it, Pax.”


“I know.”


I blinked in surprise. “But you kept saying you didn’t try to hurt me…?”


“I didn’t. I tried to hurt Jolie. I thought she was going to be using the harness.”


Jolie’s jaw drops and I muster, “Why?”


“She’s Jolie! She’s been driving me crazy for the past year, and I hate how awfully she’s been treating you, my best friend!”


His words hang in the air before…


“I’ll have to ask you to leave,” Micheal tells Pax, his voice low but with a thick coating of anger underneath it.


He just nods and walks away. Levi says, “I’m going to go talk to him,” before going after him.


Micheal patted me and Jolie on the shoulders, says “We’ll talk about this soon”, then walks off.


“Well,” Jolie says slowly, “I’m furious with Pax.”


“You didn’t get hurt.


“But he was trying to drop me.”


I nod. “Maybe you could be a little nicer to me? That’s the reason for all of this.”


“I’ll try. But I hate him right now.”


I think. I don’t like Jolie, but she and Pax looked so happy together. If she tries to be neutral towards me, I could definitely see them together again. But Jolie has to do one thing in order for this to work. “You know, Jolie…”


“What?”


I smile. “Just give him a second chance.”





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00:40 Aug 13, 2020

Hi, guys! Sorry this is sooooo long. I actually thought it was going to be super short but it ended up nearly pushing the max word count. Anyways, this was sort of a mystery, which I’ve never written before, so...I hope it’s okay! That’s it. Thanks for reading this story (Please give feedback!), and I hope you enjoyed it! ~Aerin

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Amany Sayed
14:26 Aug 13, 2020

For the riddle, today, isn't it one? One hen lays one egg in one day?

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14:27 Aug 13, 2020

Yep! It surprising how many people get it wrong. Good job!

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Amany Sayed
14:30 Aug 13, 2020

YAYAYAYYAYAY thank you :)

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נιмму 🤎
17:49 Aug 13, 2020

bruh i cant believe ppl have the audacity to downgrade someone points for now reason isnt that messed up tho... like we work for that😕

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19:26 Aug 13, 2020

Oh yeaaaaah drives me crazy when I see one of my comments with 0 points—and negatives are AWFUL! Actually, earlier today I saw one of your comments with a -1, so I upped it, but GEEZ. That means 2 people downgraded you. Ahhh.

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נιмму 🤎
19:34 Aug 13, 2020

who someone downgraded me or are u talking about amani??

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Amany Sayed
18:58 Aug 13, 2020

I know! It makes me really sad :(

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נιмму 🤎
19:09 Aug 13, 2020

frrr! smh smh😞

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14:30 Aug 13, 2020

Hi. I’m back. Sorry, I’m just bored. Uhhhhh...do you read KotLC? (I don’t know, I’m just trying to have a convo 🤣)

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נιмму 🤎
17:51 Aug 13, 2020

read your bio, i love the hunger games books!!!😁😍💜 have you seen the movies?

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18:10 Aug 13, 2020

Ooh, not yet, but I’ll probably watch them next week 😆

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נιмму 🤎
18:24 Aug 13, 2020

omg yesss i love the moviessss (and books) katniss is so pretty and peeta kinda hot

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18:31 Aug 13, 2020

Haha okay 👍👍👍😝

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H. W. Autumn
17:26 Aug 14, 2020

Okay, but KOTLC is my favorite book series! It's so fun to find someone who reads it too lol.

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17:28 Aug 14, 2020

YESSSSS KOTLC! I looove it. QUESTION OF TRUTH: Fitzphie or Sokeefe? (Or Team Foster-Keefe, whatever you prefer)

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H. W. Autumn
17:41 Aug 14, 2020

Sokeefe ALL THE WAY!! (hey that rhymes lol)

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17:42 Aug 14, 2020

*nods* *solemn voice* you have passed the test

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Aubrey Maria ✌
14:09 Aug 18, 2020

I love that series! KOTLC💕 def sokeefe!

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21:38 Aug 19, 2020

Yessss

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Roshna Rusiniya
09:11 Aug 13, 2020

This was funny. Enjoyed reading it.

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12:46 Aug 13, 2020

Thanks!

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Akshat .
05:13 Aug 13, 2020

Awesome story! As soon as you wrote, "To hurt Wren," I was like, "It's Jolie, it's Jolie, it's Jolie, it's Jolie!" The "CUT!" twist at the start was nice! Score: 4.7 out of 5

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12:44 Aug 13, 2020

Thanks! Yay, I’m proud of my score!

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Akshat .
12:50 Aug 13, 2020

You're welcome! :)

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13:40 Aug 13, 2020

Hi, I’m back. I was actually thinking about how Jolie was way too obvious, so I twisted the story around a bit so there’s a twist and Jolie’s the red herring. I dunno why I’m telling you this, but, uh, yeah!

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Akshat .
14:56 Aug 13, 2020

Hmm ... okay!

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Akshat .
02:26 Aug 14, 2020

Yeah, just read it. It's much, much better! The Paxton twist was more unexpected. It's good that you changed it!

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12:07 Aug 14, 2020

Thanks!

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Amany Sayed
01:49 Aug 13, 2020

Great story Aerin! I'm so glad you decided to step out of your fantasy comfort zone and write a mystery/realistic fiction. I enjoyed it! I had to re-read some parts quite a few times, as it was a little confusing how you wrote it. For example, in the beginning, when you use the actor's real names in the beginning I had to re-read to realize 'oh, that's their fake name, and then that's their real name.' Also, I never caught on to how old Levi really is. I mean, you say he's young, but he's friends with Jolie. None of these things are major pr...

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01:53 Aug 13, 2020

Thanks! Ah, okay. Actually, I meant for the beginning part to be a bit confusing so the reader could figure out it was on a stage on their own, but okay. Yeah, Levi is 12, and while Jolie is 16-17, they’re still kinda friends—but it’s still more that Levi is like a little brother to Jolie. Levi, Jolie, Pax and Wren are all generally friends, although they all have different relationships to one another: best friend, kind of little brother, gf/bf, regular old friends, etc. Okay! I’ll fix that. Thank youuu! ~Aerin

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Amany Sayed
01:56 Aug 13, 2020

No problem! I figured, but just wanted to share my thoughts :) Ah, maybe he should be her actual little brother? Jolie's I mean. Just a thought... No problem :)

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01:57 Aug 13, 2020

Hmm, cool idea, although I feel like that would be too much of a coincidence, that Jolie’s boyfriend is on the same show as her little brother. Levi’s just a stranger that’s part of the cast for now. But thanks!

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Amany Sayed
01:59 Aug 13, 2020

Oh, yeah, you're right. No porblamoooooo :)

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Hriday Saboo
16:37 Aug 13, 2020

Good story aerin b.

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16:41 Aug 13, 2020

Thanks!

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Sia S
03:03 Aug 13, 2020

Nicely done ✔ 👏

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12:40 Aug 13, 2020

Thank you!

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Sia S
12:43 Aug 13, 2020

:)

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נιмму 🤎
21:31 Aug 13, 2020

can u upgrade sia's comment? it was at -1 and i upgraded it to 0. how rude that ppl do that when she was saying something nice

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21:57 Aug 13, 2020

Uuugh PEOPLE. Yeah, I upgraded it, and now it’s at 3.

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נιмму 🤎
21:58 Aug 13, 2020

fr tho, so rude of them. Awesome!😁

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Sia S
03:11 Aug 14, 2020

Thanks a lot Aerin! I upvoted most of yours too!!

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12:11 Aug 14, 2020

Yayayayay thank you!

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Sia S
03:12 Aug 14, 2020

Thanks Celeste 😊,. Love your new pic.

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נιмму 🤎
03:43 Aug 14, 2020

thank uuu💖

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Sia S
03:44 Aug 14, 2020

:D

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נιмму 🤎
01:56 Aug 13, 2020

lol even tho i knew the prompt I totally forgot this was a tv show so I was taken by surprise with the "CUUUTTT" but that's a good thing😂 a twist. sort of a creative mystery but with some comedy in there too! Very well written and entertaining! Good job as always Aerin❤

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01:59 Aug 13, 2020

Hehe, thanks! That’s actually what I was going for, acting like it was for real, although I DID throw in their real names to confuse the reader a bit. Anyways, thank youuuu! Funny ‘mystery’ was sorta what I was going for. Thanks so much, Celeste! 😊😊😊

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Rayhan Hidayat
03:06 Aug 13, 2020

This was a very fun read Aerin! 😁 I really love how the tone changes between the acting scenes and the real life scenes; the dialogue goes from funny and snappy to very precise and intense when they’re trying to look for the culprit. It was overall a really nice sort of comedic mystery, good job! 👍🏽

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12:41 Aug 13, 2020

Thank you soooo much!

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Avery G.
01:19 Aug 13, 2020

Wow, this was amazing! It was sort of a mystery! It was really good! Great job!

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01:20 Aug 13, 2020

Thanks a ton! Haha, that’s also how I’d describe it: ‘sort of a mystery’. 😊😊😊

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Avery G.
01:26 Aug 13, 2020

You're welcome! Haha!

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Mariya Khan
18:27 Dec 31, 2020

Hi Aerin! I am a beginner at reedsy and I just participated in my first contest! Do you have any suggestions and tips on how to write a story? Thank you, M. :)

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Mariya Khan
18:27 Dec 31, 2020

(yes my nickname is M)

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19:16 Dec 31, 2020

Hiiiiiii, Mariya! Uhhhh...I’m always really bad at giving advice, lol. But I’ll go check out your story and give feedback! Welcome to Reedsy and happy new year!

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Mariya Khan
01:06 Jan 01, 2021

Omg, I didn't think you were going to see my comment! I love your stories thank you anyways!

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Beverly Riddle
22:21 Dec 07, 2020

AMAZING STORY!!! I thought it was Jolie, so the ending totally surprised me.

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22:36 Dec 07, 2020

THANK YOUU!!

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Amany Sayed
19:11 Aug 15, 2020

I saw you put the petition in your bio too. Thank you, I just feel so bad... Glad to know SOMEONE looks at my bio... :) A lot of people look at yours, so hopefully, it gets a lot more signatures.

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19:19 Aug 15, 2020

Oh, no problem. I signed the petition, texted it to everybody, and put it in my bio because SERIOUSLY?! Innocent dogs here, people!

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23:11 Aug 15, 2020

Hey, Amany! I just posted a new story and I’d love if you check it out! 😁 Just so you know...

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Amany Sayed
23:43 Aug 15, 2020

Ofc! I'll go asap

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Anna Maria
18:32 Aug 15, 2020

That was a really interesting twist! Great job! Also, thanks for the follow and like!! Every like makes a difference for a new author like me :)

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18:35 Aug 15, 2020

Thanks so much! Aw, no problem. I actually joined Reedsy less than a month ago, so I think I’m technically newer than you, although you just started posting stories this month...? I don’t know; I’m confusing myself; ignore all the above, LOL. Bye!

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Anna Maria
19:38 Aug 15, 2020

Ahaha yeah I joined some time ago but I never went on it, it was kinda just there, but I got some writing inspiration so I decided to write! I discovered a really nice community haha everyone's so nicee!!!

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19:48 Aug 15, 2020

Yesss definitely!

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Evelyn ⭐️
16:20 Aug 15, 2020

Just a guess: Is the answer to your riddle: A secret?

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16:52 Aug 15, 2020

Yesss congrats! My dad pointed out it could also be a ‘whole sandwich’, because if you share some it isn’t whole, but that’s the original answer, LOL!

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Evelyn ⭐️
16:26 Aug 16, 2020

oh ya! That makes sense too! Also thanks for changing it every day! I love riddles!

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16:40 Aug 16, 2020

Haha, I’m so glad you like them!

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17:04 Aug 14, 2020

Is the answer to the riddle 'legs'? Because they have a bottom at the top. Not funny tho.... >_<

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17:10 Aug 14, 2020

HEHEHEHEHE yes

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06:40 Aug 15, 2020

Yass I got it right!!!! Go meeeee

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<inactive> .
06:41 Aug 15, 2020

Great riddle though, it took quite a bit of time to figure out.

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16:55 Aug 14, 2020

AERINNNN!!! YOU'RE ON THE LEADERBOARD!! I have no idea why I didn't know until now!! Also, great story! I liked the 'CUT!' bit at the start, it was interesting!

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17:09 Aug 14, 2020

Hehe, thanks! Thank youuu!

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06:44 Aug 15, 2020

Also, my laptop was glitching, so you may have found several comments from me saying the same thing.

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12:16 Aug 15, 2020

Got it.

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Iam Danger
16:28 Aug 14, 2020

I thought it was Jolie

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16:37 Aug 14, 2020

Yaaaay I’m glad the red herring worked! Actually, it original WAS Jolie, but then I edited it so it was better.

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Doubra Akika
12:18 Aug 14, 2020

I loved this so much! The whole concept was so original. I love your writing style. Amazing job!

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12:21 Aug 14, 2020

Thank you! 🤩🤩🤩

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Doubra Akika
12:39 Aug 14, 2020

It was my pleasure! I honestly enjoyed it. Whenever you’re free, would you mind checking out my recent story? Just finished it earlier today. (P.S. you reply really fast 🤣)

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12:46 Aug 14, 2020

Yay! Oh, sure, I’ll totally check out your story! Hehe, yep, I’m on Reedsy pretty often.

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