The sun said goodbye to me
And I laughed
For the sun always says goodbye
When the moon comes out
And the darkness begins to loom
It is the only moment
When I can count on someone else
When I can count on you
For you will never say goodbye
Not now, not in the past
And not before
Because it is in that moment
When the sun says goodbye
That suddenly, all is lost
And only then
Do you know that it can be found again
Just before the morning
The moon said goodbye to me
And I cried
For I had begun to care about that man
Smiling from above
The man stuck in the moon
I didn’t quite love him
But I found him interesting
The ways his eyes would turn
The way his silver flesh glistened
He was fascinating
The way he was trapped in the sky
Like a bird that flew to high
The sea said goodbye to me
And I smiled
For the sea is always there
Just not always with me
It’s always there to taunt the sailors
Who rush their boats up back to shore
Whose skin grows cold, just like the moon’s
Whose crooked voices cry
Crying for their loved ones
The ones they’ll never see again
Their versions of you
That’s the sea I know
So I laughed
For the sea will never leave
Not as long as the moon draws it closer
The clouds said goodbye to me
And I asked them
Which versions of them were leaving?
The ones that rain on my umbrella
Crying crooked tears
Just like the sailors out at sea
The one that aid the oceans at drowning
Drowning those I love
The ones that slide off my umbrella
Only to hit the sidewalk
When I put my umbrella down
And they come down my hair
And down my throat
Briny tears, just like the ocean
Or the ones that smile from above
But even those that seem so bright
Will cloud the sun and moon
The stars said goodbye to me
And I didn’t say a word
Because I knew they were so far away
I was lying to myself if I thought they cared
All that they loved was the night
And the moon
And the sun
And everything around them
They said goodbye as they fled the sky
Something you called beautiful
As you cried just like a sailor
Stuck away at sea
The walls said goodbye to me
The old brick walls of my house
Or perhaps I said goodbye to them
As I moved away
They smiled back at me
And said I was welcome anytime
That the teapot would always make that sound
That sound that kept me up at night
And the doorknob would always ring
And the glass would always be half full
Not half empty
And if it all failed
I would have a place back there
No more whispering
Through the walls
Whispering at you
Yes, no more whispering
Because I knew
That the right place for me
Was somewhere right by you
The ivy said goodbye to me
The ivy wrapped around the old bookstore
The kind that gives you a tight hug
Little flowers growing from the dirt
The dirt caked on the building
There’s a metaphor to be found there
But I won’t go looking for it
I’ll just sit here
With my cup of tea
And a good book
And read
Until I see you again
The ivy comforting me
Hugging me
Like the way you used to
Way back when you loved me
The day said goodbye to me
And I smiled once again
For I always liked night better
Because that’s when the whispers came
Whispers through the walls
Your whispers
And I would whisper back
And in that moment, all was alright
There were no fights
No frowns
No cries
No sun
No moon
No stars
No rain
No sea
All would be okay
Because I had you
And you had me
Imagine that life
And what it could have been
Before you said goodbye
Imagination said goodbye to me
It said my life was done
That there’d be no more ivy hugging me
No more silent cries of sailors
And no more you
And I said, take it
Take everything
For we could handle it
And all would be okay
But then you said goodbye to me
And all is left is dust
The ashes said goodbye to me
They said this day was waiting
They said they knew you’d say goodbye
That all would be alright one day
But not while I had you
Because that would just be too much
Too much to ask of one person
Because ashes have no embers
And there’s no wood for fire
So all that’s left is dust
And I’m alone
Waiting for you
Forgetting that you’re up in ashes
The stories said goodbye to me
They said they weren’t true
That I was foolish for believing
A single word they said
And all that I had was nothing
Now that you were gone
That the sailors don’t cry of love
But of loss instead
Because they know they’re good as gone
Soon as they step out to sea
Your grave said goodbye to me
It said don’t come anymore
You know this isn’t right
That you can’t be this precautious
And your turn will come
So stop looking at yourself
And go live your life
Before it all will end
But I didn’t listen
And I kept on coming
Coming to your grave
Because I wanted your goodbye
And then you said goodbye to me
And I finally smiled once again
Because I knew I was as good as gone
Just like the stars up in the sky
And the boats that come to shore
And the rain as it stops falling
And the sun and moon at night and day
And even my house and the ivy
The ivy at the bookstore
My own imagination
The stories
The whispers
Everything we told each other
And your ashes
Kept sealed in a box kept in my room
That’s the you that said goodbye to me
The one that was already gone
Just to warn me
That death would say hello
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I haven't posted in quite a while, so thank you for bearing with me! This story is entirely in verse, which is kinda cool I think. I also have been really into poetry lately, so I wanted to write a story entirely in verse. I'm so sorry I haven't posted, too - life's been crazy. And I'm sorry if I didn't read your story as well, I promise I will soon. Thanks for reading!
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I love that this was written all in verse, and it read so well. It seemed a little fantastical at the beginning, but then it all came together with the repetition about saying goodbye, and revealed the distant plot. I saw just a couple of typos, but you probably have already noticed them (I hate it when you find an error after a story has been accepted). This was sad, and a little dark at the end, but so beautiful. Please write another story soon!
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Ah, thank you! I'm working on a novel and a couple novellas at the moment but I do have a few ideas for short stories! I've also taken the month off writing because I'm studying in Madrid. However, I am coming back tomorrow so I should be posting again soon!
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Hey Maya! Sorry it took me a while to get to this. It's good to hear from you again. I love how this story is entirely in verse, there's something so beautiful about poetry, and you really capture its essence here. I attached myself to every word, and you really didn't let me go. It evoked such a sadness in me, the idea of everything saying goodbye to you, and the reluctance to let go. I'm so hopeless at writing poetry as I've probably expressed many times, but we make me wanna go and write some. I loved every line! Amazing work, Maya!
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This is amazing!!
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This poem was so heartfelt and poignant. I loved every once of it!! But um... are you ok? The poem seems as if it coming from a deeper place in you...
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Thanks Cookie! And yes, I am okay. I write a lot of sad stuff, though I will admit that this one was quite emotional. Point is, all is good! And I'm finally writing again, so yay! Thanks for reaching out. :)
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No problem!! I'm just making sure I don't have to beat anybody up😂
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Oh, this was lovely Maya. I could never write anything like this. The words and the images washed over me and I felt so swept up in and connected with the universe. Such a gift. I loved it!
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Great! I love that it's done in poetry. Missed you!
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A fantastic of written verse and poetry fulfilling the circle of life through all nature around, below and above us.
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Wow, this was thought-provoking! When I read the label "Speculative," I knew I was in for something intriguing, but I wasn't expecting this! Great job
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This was amazing and I loved reading it so much. It really touched my heartstrings Could you please read my story if possible :))
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