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βNo fair, Alina got the last cookie!β
βBen, sometimes in life you can't have everything,β Alina said and chowed down on a chocolate chip cookie.
Gooey, decadent chocolate streamed out of the cookie, like silk ribbons. The cookie looked soft and buttery, crumbs spilling out underneath.
Alina gobbled it right up.
Alina patted me on the back, and said, βYou can always make more cookies, yβknow. Itβs not like that was the last cookie in the world.β
βWhat if it was?β I asked.
βI wouldβve still eaten it,β she said and raced up the stairs.
βCatch me if you can!β
Our house was...cool. It wasnβt a normal house that a third-grader would live in. Everything was antique, which translated to that I wasnβt allowed to play with anything, unless it was on a computer or drawing.
Not that I was complaining.
Basically, when you entered, there would be a place to put your shoes. Past that, it split into 3 pathways; the staircase, the kitchen/dining room, and the living room. The staircase was a wooden swirly one, that wrapped around the pole in the middle of it. The kitchen was quite fancy. Almost everything was made of black marble, except for the oven, fridge, toaster and sink.
They were all made of boring steel.
The dining room looked like it belonged in a 17th-century room. All the chairs had swirly decorations on them and were painted in silver. A giant chandelier with crystal embellishments adorned the lights, and the hanger was made out of gold.
Real gold, I didnβt know.
The living room looked like where a British tea party would take place. There was a tiny little pink table, where little teacups made of china would sit there, with no tea in them at all.
How sad.
Three couches surrounded the table, each one meter long. The cloth was a light beige, with maroon flowers plastered everywhere.
How ugly, isnβt it? Grandma probably designed the decor, it was just so...old.
I raced up the staircase, just at the heels of Alina.
Being the younger brother always means Iβm behind, below, second.
Alina makes it better, though.
βHa, I beat you again,β Alina panted, pausing for breath in between her words.
βIβll beat you next time,β I responded.
βHa, like thatβs ever gonna happen. Follow me, I wanna show you something,β she said and waved me into her room.
This was unusual, Alina never let anyone inside her room, not even Mom.
Which meant this was a special offer.
βWhat do you want to show me?β
βI made a fantabulous plan.β
βFor what?β
βReally Ben, you are oblivious to everything,β Alina said, sat down and pulled out a drawer.
βWhat does oblivious mean?β I asked, and sat down next to her.
βUgh, never mind. The plan I made was for our new treehouse!β
βWeβre getting a treehouse?β
βYep! Itβs for my birthday next week, and Mom and Dad are letting us build it!β Alina said, spreading out a blueprint out on her bed.
Why Mom and Dad gave the treehouse to Alina instead of me, I will never know, but the blueprint looked pretty interesting.
βHow do we build it?β I asked and looked over her shoulder to examine the plan.
βSo basically we use these oak boards and then this glue and we put it in an octagonal formation andβ¦β Alina droned off, explaining how to build that treehouse in the most complicated way possible.
Only Albert Einstein couldβve made it more complicated.
Wowee, my sister was a math nerd, so look how that fits.
βDoes Mom and Dad know that you have a blueprint?β I asked, curious.
βUm...no.β
βHow did they expect us to build it?β I asked, now confused.
βI donβt know, I think they wanted us to get a guide instead of me making one,β Alina replied and stretched out her legs.
βDonβt we need wood?β
βYeah, weβre gonna get it from the basement.β
βWhen can we start?β I asked, anxious to start building.
βNow! Race ya to the basement!β Alina shouted and suddenly jumped off the bed and ran out of the room.
I sprang up from the bed and raced after Alina, sprinting downstairs and almost crashed into 3 tables.
My breath was steady, consistent and quick.
I passed Alina.
This sounds really lame, but that was my first time ever getting in front of Alina.
βNo,β Alina panted, as little as 10 centimetres behind me.
βYes!β I responded, two steps away from the basement.
Thumping down the stairs, I flicked on the light a second before Alinaβs feet touched the ground.
βI won.β
βThat doesnβt count, you were just lucky,β Alina said, sucking in her breath with tiredness.
βYou always say that,β I said as I looked around.
It was...messy.
Saying that was weird because my whole house was orderly and organized, so the basement was a horror.
There were boxes everywhere, things spilling out of them with thick coats of dust layered on top. Stocks of food piled on top of shelves, with honey and marinara sauce that looked well past its expiration date. Pictures of Mom and Dad in their teens stared down at us expectingly, waiting for us to do something.
That was creepy.
βLook, these are some wood planks we can use. Can you take them to the backyard?β Alina asked, pointing to a pile of wood on the floor.
βFine.β
Alina always gave the hard work to me.
Humph
I scooped up the wood, the edges threatening to give me splinters. I hauled them up the staircase, across the house, and even managed to open the back door.
A monarch butterfly perched on one of the branches, fluttering its orange wings.
Momβs voice called out, βAlina, Ben, dinnerβs ready!β
The butterflyβs wings flapped about, and it flew into the sky, disappearing into the clouds.
βOkay, coming!β
I ran inside, slamming into my seat at the dinner table.
βWoah kiddo, hereβs your food,β Mom said and placed a plate of roast chicken under my face.
I started gobbling it up right away, not caring about manners at all.
βWhat were you doing earlier?β Mom asked, aiming the question at Alina.
I stared at Alina intently, reminding her to not give away the secret.
βUm...I have a blueprint,β Alina stuttered out, giving me a forgiving face.
Alina could just not keep a secret, for the life of her.
βOh okay, great job,β said Dad, and started talking about work-related things.
I bent down to Alina and whispered, βWhy did you tell them?β
βI just canβt lie Ben, you know that,β she whispered back to me under the table.
βYeah, just tomorrow let me do the talking.β
βOk.β
We sat back up, backs straight, and ate dinner.
~
The next day, at exactly 3:27 pm, I burst into Alinaβs room with my hands flailing over my head.
βBOO!β I shouted and looked at Alina.
She was sitting in front of a computer, and the camera light was red, which meant it was recording something.
βUgh, I was recording my Student Council speech, and now Iβll have to do it all over again. You didnβt even ask to come in, βAlina groaned and closed her computer.
βSorry, itβs just I wanted to start building the treehouse today. If youβre done school work,β I asked very politely.
βYeah, okay, letβs go to the basement to get some supplies.β
βRace?β
βNo, Iβm tired today,β Alina responded, and walked out of the room.
βOkay,β I said with disappointment, as I followed her downstairs and into the basement.
Flick
As light flooded the room, Alina said, βIβll get the glue, and you can get the tools.β
I nodded my head and walked to the back of the basement.
I picked up a screwdriver, a hammer, some nails, and when I reached over to grab a wrench, I saw something unusual.
A ball, sticking out of the wall.
Golden, but rusty, kinda like Grandmaβs doorknob, with little fingerprints printed everywhere.
βAlina, I found something weird over here,β I called, urging her to come.
βWhat did you find?β she asked, crouching down to take a better look.
βThis thing that looks like a doorknob is coming out of the wall.β
βHmm, maybe the people that lived here before us forgot to demolish it,β Alina said, got up and walked away like it was nothing.
I stood up, keeping my view on the doorknob. I backed away slowly until I reached the basement stairs, and I ran up them. At the top, I paused for a few seconds and listened.
Nothing.
I ran outside with the tools in my hands, realizing I was afraid of the doorknob.
I didnβt know why.
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The next day at dinner, Mom asked us again, βHow was your day?β
I shot a look at Alina, signalling to her to not talk about anything.
βUm, I did some of my science project today.β
Yes, go Alina.
βOh, youβve been doing those for a while, havenβt you?β Dad asked, slurping up his noodles noisily.
βYeah,β Alina said, staring down at her spaghetti, looking like she thought spaghetti was revolting.
βAnything else?β Mom asked, as if prompting Alina to tell about the doorknob.
β...wefoundarandomdoorknobinthemiddleofthewall,β Alina spat out in a single breath and stuffed her face full of spaghetti so she wouldnβt have to answer any questions.
βCould you repeat that sweetie?β Mom asked, her face curdling with worry.
βUh, at school we started a new project on worms!β I piped up, sparing Alina the trouble of talking about what had happened in the basement.
βOh really? When I was your age, I used to love worms,β Dad said, smiling.
βMay I go to the bathroom?β Alina asked dramatically, her mouth bulging as if something was gonna fall out.
βYe-β
Alina rushed off to the bathroom before Mom could finish, and we all heard an unpleasant sound of retching and forced breathing.
I donβt even know if she threw up from the worms, spaghetti or the doorknob.
Mightβve been all three.
~
After dinner was done and Alinaβs throat was nice and clean, I gathered up the courage to ask her something she most likely would say no to.
βCan we go back in the basement?β
Alina looked down at her feet, sighing.
β...β
βFine.β
I was shocked. Alina proved my theory at dinner that she too was scared of the doorknob, but now she was saying yes andβ¦
Alina started walking to the basement, not saying a word.
I followed her, not wanting to miss this chance.
Once we were in the basement, Alinaβs jaw dropped and pointed at the wall.
I followed her finger, and what I found was terrifying.
Where the doorknob was, there was a door.
A real-life door, with black smoke spilling out of the edges, moaning sounds flowing from that creepy door.
βW-whaβ¦β
Alina backed up moving away slowly like I had the day before, but I was curious, so I stepped closer.
βWhat in the world are you doing?β Alina whispered.
I put my hand up, asking her to be silent.
β...β
I crept closer, trying to cautious of what or who mightβve been in there. The doorknob glistened, much shinier than it had been yesterday. My reflection looked back at me, watching. The door itself was kinda boring, to be honest. It was a dark brown, like most doors, and...that was it.
The smoke is what was interesting.
It curled out of the door, flowing out a little bit like dry ice would. The black was hard to see in the basement shadows, but you could tell it was there. It was wispy, like thoughts, like decisions, like Alinaβs voice.
It was...mesmerizing.
Open the door, Ben. Such nice things are hidden inside. Do you like ice cream? Thereβs a freezer of ice cream inside.
My internal voice was screaming NO!
My brain said Yes.
My hand reached out, shivering from the lack of heat in the basement. My hand closed around the ice-cold doorknob, glistening with polish.
Click
It opened.
Alina, come here
A wispy figure stepped out that was made out of black smoke, the same that was spilling out of the now-open doorway. It was a wolf, but with a human voice, a voice so silky smooth.
Alina, come here. Wouldnβt you like to abolish spaghetti? Itβs the worst food anyway, right?
Alina absolutely hated spaghetti.
Alinaβs eyes turned white, a swirling ball of nothingness.
She mindlessly started walking towards the wolf.
βNo!β
Alina was right in front of the wolf, smiling.
Thank you, Alina.
The wolf backed up, raising its head high, and licked its lips.
Oh no
I was not gonna let a black smoke wolf eat my sister.
I jumped in front of Alina, waving my arms to stop the wolf from hurting her.
Ksshh
The wolfβs claws scraped against Alinaβs skin, drawing bright red blood.
Alina pawed vigorously like she was doing the doggie paddle, with her eyes closed.
Swshh
The wolf was gone.
Alina smiled at me, her eyes back to normal. She ran towards me and embraced me in a hug.
βThanks so much, Ben,β she cried. βYou stopped that...thing.β
βYou are welcome,β I responded with lots of arrogance.
βIs it okay if I tell Mom and Dad?β
βWell now you have a scar on your face, so yeah, tell them.β
***
Now I sit here, on my patio, remembering that moment.
Itβs been 8 decades, 80 years since that wolf had visited me and Alina. My 88th birthday was only yesterday, and Alinaβs 94th a few weeks ago.
Iβm surprised I could remember something that was so long ago.
I look over to Alina, who is gazing at the butterflies in the backyard.
She always loved butterflies and always will.
I switch my gaze onto her scar.
Right below her left eye, just sitting there. Itβs faded a lot in 80 years, but it was still there.
A little brown line, starting below her eye and ending at her chin.
Faded, but still there.
βAlina, do you remember when you got your scar?β
She smiles at me just as a butterfly comes to perch on her still fingers.
βYes Ben, I remember.β
βDo you know what gave you that scar?β
βSigh. Ben, they say as you get older, you get wiser, but I really donβt know what happened. I havenβt gotten that much wiser since I was 14.β
I chuckle, along with Alinaβs smile while she looks at the butterfly.
A monarch butterfly, with orange and black wings, just like the one decades ago.
Who knows, this butterfly can be the great-grandson of that one.
I giggle with the thought, startling the butterfly and making it fly away.
Alina said, βYou know Ben, I canβt lie.β
βYes Alina, I know.β
βI love butterflies.β
βI know.β
βAnd I think I have found a new favourite.β
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Wow- amazing story, Amethyst! From the very beginning, you did a great job of showing how close Alina and Ben were. Their relationship was believable and the dialogue between them made the story flow really well. I loved the way you described the antique house, the cookie, the door, and the butterflies. The imagery you used was so creative and it painted a picture of the scene perfectly. It was such a wonderful story, how it seemed very realistic except for the fact that there was a mysterious door in the wall. The ending was so sweet, how they were 80 years older and reflecting back. My only suggestion, isn't really a suggestion it's just that maybe it would be interesting to learn more about the wolf and the door and the story behind all of that in a sequel or something. Great writing!!! :D
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Thankss so much Maya!
Yes, the wolf was a bit random, but I wanted this story to be just like by itself, not in a series, but thanks for your suggestion!
Thank youuuuuu!
~ Amethyst
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You're welcome!!! I really enjoyed reading this!!! :D
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yayyy it was really fun to write too :)
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Yayyy!!! :DDD
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Sorry you got kicked from the game, Amethyst. I didn't kick you but I think the others didn't know that you were there. Sorrrrrrryyyyyyyy
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MAYA IM SO SORRY IT WAS MY FAULT I WASNT ON THE TAB ITS NOT YOUR FAULT D;;;;;
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mmmmmmmmmmmm I WANT COOKIES NOW.
The way you described the cookie...I still can't get over it.
I CAN'T BELIVE YOU DOUBTED YOURSELF OVER THIS STORY, IT WAS FANTASTIC!!!
Told ya it was gonna be great.
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HAHA YESSSSSS
:D
well, I didnt plan the ending when I started, so I thought it was gonna be real boring
thAnkS foR dAt
you didn't give me that poem, I found it on google
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wow. I wonder why I didn't read this sooner...who knows XD
A few things struck me as odd...
First of all...if she hates spaghetti, why did they serve it at dinner? just wondering.
If they are making a tree-house, and the parents allowed it...why do they have to keep it secret?
Here, this is where it says it: "βUgh, never mind. The plan I made was for our new treehouse!β
βWeβre getting a treehouse?β
βYep! Itβs for my birthday next week, and Mom and Dad are letting us build it!β Alina said, spreading out a blueprint out on her bed."
I like the wolf part and all but how can smoke cut?
Also, the butterfly thing seemed kinda thrown into the mix...kinda curious about that...
Overall great job though!
Again, loved the wolf part and the hypnosis was great (am I turning dark or something?).
;)
L.W.
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lol XD
yeah, you can tell I didn't plan this out well :D XD but thanks for the corrections, since I can't edit~
lol yeah, just wanted to tHrOw sOmEtHinG iNtO tHe miX XD
thank you!!!! lol
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np :)
nothing wrong with that XD
np again ;)
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:)
lol XD
:D
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THIS IS ME
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HEYO
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HIII! CUTE PICTURE!
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thank you! im feeling happy (for once) ;)
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YAY HAPPY! MEE TOO!
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:DDDDDDDDDDDD
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Skribble Link: https://skribbl.io/?Xrx2njr1Vp74 :)
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OH
i was gonna work, can i watch and play if it's my turn?
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Sure!
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maya, who is who?
i might be in the wrong game, is their any 'get in my van' in your game?
can you send the link again?
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https://skribbl.io/?Xrx2njr1Vp74
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Dont feel lonely Amethysttttttttttt:)
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YAY LUNAS HEREEEEE
i have workshop in 7 minutes i can't talk to you now :((
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Das oki!!! Maybe laterrrrr:)
Enjoy your workshop!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Also your pfp is so cuteeeeeeeeeee
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ikr?!
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yeah!
i am SO excited to build a spider
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Whoa! That sounds rly cool! Are you building it out of wood? Or like paper?
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oh sorry
we actually didn't do that, I built when Ron and Harry got attacked by the spiders in the forest out of lego :D
I hate spiders anyways so it fits
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We're playing skribble again at 2:30. Want to play?
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