Submitted to: Contest #19

Dragons do not make good customers

Written in response to: "Write a short story about someone in the middle of a very long and busy retail shift."

Funny

It was 9 AM on a Friday. Black Friday to be precise. Ruby was shaking in her boots, ready to be greeted with angry alchemists looking for bottles of immortality for 70% off. She was rummaging around the candlelit shop when she heard the bell of the door ring, signalling someone was there. She popped her heard over the counter slightly, causing a pile of spell books to fall off of the counter. She heard the person scoff, disgusted.

“You should be more careful.” An old looking fairy cast a judgemental eye over at the teenage witch. Beside her was a fairy that must have been around Ruby’s age. Ruby had noticed this girl has been staring at her for quite a while now. A blush had spread across her pale cheeks and the tips of her glistening wings. She watched the fairy she was with walk off, her large, wrinkled wings knocking the books off of the shelves. The flustered fairy rushed and helped the exasperated worker.

“I’m sorry about my grandmother. Sometimes she forgets that she’s not still the queen of the Fairy village.” The way that she spoke held so much elegance, it was clear now to Ruby that she was a princess.

“No offense or anything, but your grandmother needs to learn some manners.” Ruby muttered, forcefully placing the books back on the shelf. She had no time to deal with overly-friendly princesses and stuck-up ex-queens. Nonetheless, the friendly fairy held out her hand which Ruby reluctantly took.

“I’m Lydia.” She squeaked excitably.

“Ruby.” She sighed, frustrated and dropped the hand that was in hers with so much force that hopefully she gets the message and leaves her alone.

“We should go get tea.” The blonde whispered, her voice shaking slightly. Ruby rolled her eyes at this.

“I’m working, idiot!” She snapped, moving behind the counter and escaping down the hatch in the floor.

“I know that. I meant after.” The excitable fairy yelled from the other side of the counter. This caused the red-head to sheepishly poke her head over the counter, blushing slightly.

“Oh.” Was all that her voice could muster.

“So is that a yes?”

“…Sure.” And with that, Lydia cheerfully skipped out of the shop with her grandmother, leaving Ruby to continue with her work.

 

About 20 minutes went by but it felt like an eternity. The shop has been fairly quiet despite today being a black Friday. She was busy stocking shelves of love potions when she heard the bell of the door ring. She reluctantly looked up and was greeted by a pair of elves arguing loudly.

“Can I help you?” Ruby asked, already tired of these people.

“That depends. Can you improve his attitude?” The woman elf replied, crossing her arms confrontationally. Ruby laughed nervously, not knowing how to deal with the situation. She then ran off to find her manager as the small potions shop was getting crowded.

She ran to and from the stockroom, carrying boxes and boxes of glass bottles containing glittering liquids. Her arms were getting tired and her legs began to shake. She went to go put the heavy box down when she felt a pair of hands remove the box from her slender, over-worked hands.

“I can look after myself.” The witch snapped, crossing her eyes defensively.

“I know.” Ruby lifted her gaze and found herself staring at her best friend, Ryan Paultet

“Busy day?” the teen wizard asked Ruby effortlessly, in high contrast to the amount of struggle that the red-head back onto the shelves where they were taken.

“Seriously, I can take care of this myself.” With that Ruby went running helping those who looked like they needed the help, or people who had been in the store for too long without buying anything.    

 

Ruby was rushed off her feet. It was hard being the only person working in the best potions store in the magic sector of the south east of England. It was now 6 PM which meant that ruby only had to suffer through another hour of this nightmare. She was meant to go home 3 hours ago but one of her colleagues, Rosa, had to call in sick with Pixie Fever. The store was pretty quiet at the moment so Ruby took the opportunity to slack off on her phone. She decided to see if she could find a social media page of that fairy that Ruby met earlier. She couldn’t remember her name, so she started to type in random things that would sound like something she would say. Fairy.princesses.are.cool. No that’s not it. Im-rich-and-you-should-all-feel-bad-about-yourselves. No that’s not it either. Im-overly-happy-and-annoying. Much to Ruby’s surprise, that wasn’t it either. She was about to type in another search when she heard the bell of the door ring. And the shelves falling over. Luckily that shelf had already been cleared out by mad black Friday shoppers hours ago. When she looked up she was pleased to see it was the town’s friendliest (and clumsiest) dragons, Dingle. He was one of the store’s best customers, coming in almost every other day to buy another bottle of fire extinguishing potion. Unfortunately, all of the potion had already been sold to other dragons and alchemists that have bad fire safety.

“I’m sorry, Dingle. We’ve already sold all of our fire extinguishing potions today.” Ruby informed him apologetically when she saw him frantically searching the shelves for the missing item.

“Buy why? You never normally sell out!” Dingle said, hysterically, flailing his arms around causing more shelves to come shattering to the ground. Unlike the other display that Dingle broke, this shelf was full of anti-hair potions. The purple liquid began to quickly spill out onto the floor.

“It’s black Friday today, Dingle. We always sell out on things like that pretty quick. I told you this last year.” Ruby informed the upset dragon while grabbing a mop to clean up the mess.

“Oh, I’m sorry about the mess. Let me help you clean it.” The purple dragon said, reaching for the mop but missing slightly and knocking Ruby round the head with the mop handle, he screamed out a dramatic cry.

“Please don’t touch this spill. It’s very flammable and you’re really not good at controlling your fire.” She said, hurrying to clean up when she saw Dingle try to repress a sneeze.

“I think you should go home, Dingle.” Ruby said, exhausted. It was now 7:30 PM, the store was meant to close half an hour ago.

“But I want to stay and spend some more time with my best friend.” This time, the noise from the shelves crashing to the ground was loud enough to alert the manager who was working in the office upstairs.

“What is going on here?” His voice bellowed, face turning red with anger when he saw the state of the store. Upset at being yelled at, Dingle ran out of the store crying, sparks and embers flying out of his nose.

“I think you should stay and clean this up.” The stern man informed, handing her the broom. She took it reluctantly. Looks like she’s not going on that date tonight.

Posted Dec 13, 2019
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Sarah Winston
22:05 Jan 21, 2022

Hi, Millie - I really enjoyed this story. I love a scene set in an old, overstocked shop! There's so much to knock over. Loved the old Fairy with the 'wrinkled" fairy wings, too (nice touch) and that great deal on Immortality Potion (70% off? Wow! Can I get it on Amazon?). It all gave me the sense of being in that little shop with all your quirky characters.
I used to make and sell miniature Dollhouse scale potions online, along with other witch-wizard themed items. I had my own mini-shop set up for taking pics, so I've knocked over plenty of tiny things with my big club hands trying to set those tiny scenes up. This brought back memories for me, even though it's only been a few years.

I caught a few typos and since this is a writers' forum type of site, thought I'd go ahead and point them out to you, with no invitation, mind you! No, none at all ;-D

* 'It was now 6 PM which meant that ruby only had to' - (Ruby uncapitalized)

* 'Ruby had noticed this girl has been staring at her for quite a while now.'
(switched tense mid-sentence- 'had noticed' to 'has been staring' vs.
'had been staring)

* 'The shop has been fairly quiet despite today being a black Friday.' (the shop
'has' been fairly quiet... this whole sentence is a shift from the story told in
past tense to suddenly told in present tense. Not that I mind, it can be a style
choice, a quick shift into the MC's interior thoughts, but it can be
confusing to a reader if the writer hasn't established that's what's happening)

* 'She went to go put the heavy box down' - that she'd been carrying a
particular box hadn't been established, just that she's been "carrying boxes
and boxes of glass bottles". It might read better as, "She bent to put down a
heavy box of - (something gross like Fermented Newt Eyes? or heavy like
Petrified Dragons' Teeth?)

* '“I know.” Ruby lifted her gaze and found herself staring at her best friend,
Ryan Paultet' (I was a little confused here by who said "I know" - was it Ruby?
Maybe describing his voice would help, such as, "I know." a handsome voice
answered. Or gentle, or firm, or silly, or whatever Ryan is to her)

* 'she was pleased to see it was the town’s friendliest (and clumsiest) dragons,
Dingle.' (the plural 'dragons' had me waiting for a gang of them to enter and
obliviate the place, but only one dragon showed up - plural vs. singular)

* '“Busy day?” the teen wizard asked Ruby effortlessly, in high contrast to the
amount of struggle that the red-head back onto the shelves where they were
taken.' (did you mean the 'red-head backed into the shelves'? Also, what was
taken? and what amount of struggle? This was unclear for me)

* 'Unfortunately, all of the potion had already been sold to other dragons and
alchemists that have bad fire safety.' (shift in tense from 'potion had already
been sold', past tense, to 'that have bad fire safety'- present tense - vs. 'that
had bad fire safety')

* 'Buy why? You never normally sell out!” Dingle said,' (did you mean 'But why?')

* 'Dingle said, hysterically, flailing his arms' (no comma needed between 'said'
and 'hysterically' as it's an adjective describing how he said it. However, if
you want to describe his state, you could keep the comma and change it to
'Dingle said, hysterical, flailing his arms', both descriptions of his actions)

* ' The purple dragon said, reaching for the mop but missing slightly and
knocking Ruby round the head with the mop handle, he screamed out a
dramatic cry.' )'he screamed out a dramatic cry' reads like a run-on sentence
and could stand on its own)

* '“I think you should stay and clean this up.” The stern man informed, handing
her the broom.' (who did the stern man inform?)

Also, I'm curious about this 'stern man'. Is he also unique, like the rest of their village, or just an ordinary non-magical human man? If so, maybe Ruby resents him (she's a witch, right?) or Dingle is afraid of him. Maybe the manager deserves a rotten name, too. Mister Snotgrass or Skunkus or Moleus.

Now I'm sorry to have to leave your pleasant, funky little potions shop! It was like a stroll down memory lane for me. I had a run on Zombie Farts in my miniatures shop for a while there, Pyramid Dust, too. Dragon Teeth, Bat Blood, Cauldron Cleaner, Tarantula Webs, just to name a few. It might be fun to name the shop, that way some of the items could be store brand, ie; 'Skunkus Immortality Potion", and some local or infamous Wizard who makes the special Fire Extinguishing Potion with his brand label (Lorde Huff 'n Snuff's, Captain Fizzlebug's Ancient Secrets Brand Fire Extinguishing Potion est. 1594). But then I'm just thinking like a former Magic Potions Miniature Shoppe Proprietor! Customers love branding and wild names for products. One woman once told me she bought a bottle of Zombie Farts just because she liked the name!

Thanks for writing this, it's really cute. Fantasy fiction is so much fun to create. Please keep up the good work, Millie!

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Millie Spence
01:08 Jan 29, 2022

Thank you so much for reading and thank you for the advice :)

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