THE TIME HAS COME

Submitted into Contest #39 in response to: Write a story about a Google Street View driver.... view prompt

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The time has come.


If you are a finding this, then either you have passed away - or you’re about to.


No one else knows this place but him.


If you do, then you can’t go.


If he has let you come this far, then you can’t live.


Don’t try to call the cops - it will be too late anyway.


Don’t try to yell - he made sure no one can hear you.


Don’t try to catch him - he won’t be caught unless he wants to.


Don’t try to run - he won’t let you get far.


Don’t try to hide - he will find you.


Don’t try to live - he has confirmed your death.


Don’t try anything - he will hunt you down.


Before you ask any other questions, you must know about him.


To know about him, you must know about his past.


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He used to be a good guy and a really nice friend.


He was the best son in the world and he loved his daughter very dearly for her

entire life.


Not only was he a family man, but he was also a driver - just like you and me, and

many others - like us.


He was a driver for Google and he screened the streets for everyone to see - sound

familiar?


He took his daughter with him one day to seek out a new place.


She enjoyed it the whole way to the place.


They stopped at a carnival on the way and they got on every single ride.


You could even give them the title of “Best Father and Daughter.”


When the night was falling, they stopped by a hotel - not far from where you are.


They stayed for the night and decided to leave in the morning.


They slept sound and when they woke up in the morning, his daughter was missing.


There wasn’t a place where he didn’t look.


He looked in the room and in the lobby of the hotel.


He asked the neighbors and he ran around the parking lot.


He left the hotel in his car and looked all around the hotel.


He drove for miles.


He drove for hours.


He drove for his daughter.


After driving for a long time, he started to head back - thinking that his daughter

might have shown up back at the hotel.


On his way back, he found a forest - the exact one where you are right now.


He looked around everywhere, but she was found nowhere.


He got back in his car and started to head back.


Unfortunately for him, his camera on his car fell off and it blocked his view from

seeing the back.


Just then, he hit something.


Whatever he hit, it made a loud thump.


He couldn’t quite tell because the camera was in his way, but he saw blood.


When he got out, he saw her there.


He saw his daughter, bleeding and on the ground with an ice cream cone in her

right hand and a balloon in her left.


He felt bad, but he didn’t know what to do with her.


He couldn’t tell anyone, but he couldn’t keep it to himself.


He buried her right where he found her.


You are sitting on her grave.


***


— Now, you might be wondering how you are related to this, but trust me, you fit

perfectly into his story.


You both have had a family.


You and he are both drivers for Google.


You both chart the uncharted as a street driver.


You both brought your loved ones to the hotel.


You both ventured out to this park here.


You both —


Even if you live - your loved one won’t so don’t fight it - your loved one is next.


Now, don’t think that he’s a psychopath.


He is actually really not.


He is just like you and me.


The only difference is that he cares.


He cares about his daughter and he cares about himself.


He even seems to care about you.


After realizing what happened to him, he wanted to protect others from the pain.


If he sees a Google Street View driver or even the car, he will go for them.


He targets those who are just like him.


He doesn’t want to see another driver kill a loved one.


He killed his daughter on accident, and you are the victim of his change.


He will first kill you, and then your loved ones.


No one knows about this place, and no one will.


You need not worry about hurting a loved one - you won’t be there to hurt them,

and neither will they.


***


Let me just sum up everything real quick:


— He was a father and a driver.


— He accidentally killed his daughter because he couldn’t see the back of his car -

due to the camera on the top of his car.


— He wants to kill you so that you won’t have to worry about killing anyone else in

the future.


— He will also kill your loved ones so that they won’t have to suffer going through

life without you.


— He will bury you right next to his daughter so that you die peacefully.


— To make you feel even better, he will bury your loved one(s) along with you.


— He is doing you good in a way, so respect him.


— He is me, and I hope that you have signed this book - or else . . .


***


Do you hear that sound in the bush behind you?


That is him.


He is coming for you.


Don’t scream - he feeds off of fear.


Don’t run - he was a Google Street View driver, and if you know what I mean,

nothing ever goes out of his sight.


Everything is being recorded, so don’t try anything.


His motto is: “You won’t be there to kill anyone, ” and trust me - he means what he

says.


He’s coming closer, right?


But don’t worry; just sign your name in this book - next to all of his other victims.


At least your loved ones will find you in this way - oh wait, they can’t.


Remember that I am doing you a favor, so don’t feel bad.


Everything is going as planned.


All you have to do is cooperate with me.


Your cooperation is the least that I expect from you - after all, I am doing so much

for you.


Try to think happy thoughts - it’s now or never.


The time has come for you to part with this world.


The time has come for you to say your goodbye’s.


THE TIME HAS COME . . . for your death.

May 01, 2020 21:00

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Jill Howard
19:20 May 05, 2020

You asked me to review your story, so here I am! I like the difference in format in this story- the separated sentences really make it stand apart from others, and help build suspense as well. Cool take on this prompt! It really pulls the reader in. The one thing I would suggest is to run your writing through Grammarly or something similar to catch any small grammar mistakes. Overall, though, great concept!

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Pranathi G
19:38 May 05, 2020

Thank you! I will do next time! Thanks for the advice!

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18:30 May 05, 2020

I really love your story. The format you wrote with is rarely used so I really appreciate it. I also loved how you allowed the readers to feel like they're a part of the story. I'd advise that you put your work through Grammarly to get rid of some writing errors. Overall, your story was engaging and fun to read. Thanks!

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Pranathi G
18:31 May 05, 2020

Thank you so much! I will definitely do that the next time that I write!

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♡ Tana ♡
16:56 May 05, 2020

Wow, that's a really great story. I love the writing style, it's so unique and enthralling! Great job!!

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Pranathi G
18:08 May 05, 2020

Thank you!

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Grace Van Essen
16:31 May 05, 2020

It's a great story, though it reminded me allot of another story I read on this website recently. Overall, it's an excellent story, that kept me on the edge the whole time.

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Pranathi G
18:10 May 05, 2020

Thank you!

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Kaveen Selvi
06:41 May 05, 2020

One word: Eerie

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Pranathi G
15:15 May 05, 2020

That was what I was going for!

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Saranglogy R
03:38 May 05, 2020

I loved how you explained in a poetic form without rhyming words. A different way of story telling. I loved it. Keep up the good work.

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Pranathi G
15:15 May 05, 2020

Thank you!

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Zilla Babbitt
20:11 May 04, 2020

You asked me to read, so here I am. Very interesting! I like how you work around the Google Street View driver thing to maintain a meaningful story. Very interesting take. I enjoyed the poetic feel, even the choppy sentences. It sort of gave the feeling of a deranged person's thought process. The only thing that sort of bothered me was the motive behind the man's intent to kill. Down in the comments you explain it was because he doesn't want anyone else to feel that pain, but how does he know the main character is going to kill someone? W...

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Pranathi G
20:14 May 04, 2020

Thank you! Next time I write a story similar to this, I will be sure to make it more clear and motivated. Thanks for the feedback. It really helped!

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19:39 May 04, 2020

"Do you hear that sound in the bush behind you?" My God i love it i really like it, its the type of stories i read so this is just good

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Pranathi G
19:40 May 04, 2020

Thank you so much! I'm glad you like it!

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L. M.
18:28 May 04, 2020

Hi, this is a startling story! Good job at making it so direct.

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Pranathi G
18:32 May 04, 2020

Thank you!

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L. M.
19:16 May 04, 2020

You're welcome. :)

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Rawn A Lynn
18:16 May 04, 2020

Thank you for the truly chilling story! It was a greatly executed concept.

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Pranathi G
18:17 May 04, 2020

Your welcome and thanks!

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Manan Suraiya
17:13 May 04, 2020

Heyo! You asked for feedback, so here goes: Great story! I am a huge fan of crime stories, so this was an interesting read. It seemed more like a poetry though, if that was the format you were aiming for, then good. However, as a crime enthusiast, I suggest don't reveal everything. Let the readers be with the questions you created for them. Work on it, and you will definitely improve! Cheers. Do read my other submission titled 'Hunter'. P.S: I don't want to open Google Maps now haha

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Pranathi G
18:04 May 04, 2020

Thank you! It was intended to be like poetry, and I will definitely take your advice. I will read your other submission Hunter. Sorry for you not wanting to open Google Maps!

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Lynne Desen
16:41 May 04, 2020

Great intrigue! Good job taking us along on a scary, unpredictable trip.

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Pranathi G
16:49 May 04, 2020

Thank you!

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Pranathi G
16:10 May 04, 2020

Hi! Thanks for reading my story! If you like it please LIKE and give me feedback! Also, can you guys answer the following question? Thanks. If you were to read a story based on the following prompt (below), what kind of story would you be interested in reading? The prompt: Write a story about one event from the different perspectives of multiple friends. Would it be a murder mystery, a story about someone's valuable thing going missing, or other? If other, then what would you rather read about?

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Manan Suraiya
17:09 May 04, 2020

It can be anything. It all depends on what genre you prefer.

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Pranathi G
18:02 May 04, 2020

Ok, thanks!

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Tvisha Yerra
15:30 May 04, 2020

Amazing story, and I love how enthusiastic you are on the Author Bio!

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Pranathi G
15:54 May 04, 2020

Thank you!

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Tvisha Yerra
15:29 May 04, 2020

Amazing story!

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Pranathi G
21:15 May 04, 2020

Thank you!

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Artemisia Pearl
15:10 May 04, 2020

I loved your story!!! I was at the edge of my seat, heart racing as I read. It was mysterious and put together. I loved the thrill of suspense and the pauses. I loved your take on the google driver prompt. Although, I have to ask. (Sorry if it's a stupid question) But was there an actual book that the victims signed or was it a metaphor?

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Pranathi G
15:21 May 04, 2020

Thank you so much! No problem - I don't mind the question. There is an actual book where the victims sign it. The killer doesn't want to get caught, so if he knows the victim's name, he can stage an accident, so it won't look like he actually killed the person. Does that help?

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Artemisia Pearl
16:16 May 04, 2020

Oh yes! Thank you so much!

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Pranathi G
16:17 May 04, 2020

No problem!

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Srijani Ganguly
15:03 May 04, 2020

Cool idea and story! But would it perhaps be better if you joined a few sentences together? So there's a more natural flow?

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Pranathi G
15:06 May 04, 2020

Thanks! I agree with you, but I decided to keep them all separate so that my story would be different from everyone else. I wanted my story to have completely only short sentences and no paragraphs at all.

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Srijani Ganguly
15:08 May 04, 2020

Cool! Makes sense.

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Pranathi G
15:09 May 04, 2020

Good, thanks for reading! Your story was also really good! You got like one of the highest numbers of likes for the contest!

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Maggie Deese
15:00 May 04, 2020

Hi, Pranathi! I thoroughly enjoyed this story. The simplicity you used was both beautiful and haunting. I genuinely felt scared when I reached the end and I loved getting to know the backstory of the man! You have a talent; keep up the great work!

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Pranathi G
15:01 May 04, 2020

Thank you so much! Your story was also really good! Glad you enjoyed it!

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Pranathi G
14:35 May 04, 2020

Please do LIKE if you like my story!!! Thanks!!! Feedback is appreciated!!!

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07:55 May 04, 2020

Wow! That gave me chills. It was really well written and a unique reply to the prompt. I was dragged in at the beginning and couldn't stop reading. Nice job!

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Pranathi G
12:17 May 04, 2020

Thank you so much!

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