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Funny Kids

โ€œPOETRY SUCKS!โ€


The shout finally bursts out of me as I grab my paper and try to dramatically slam it down. It generally flutters to the ground, so I groan, pick it back up, and rip it into shreds of failed poetry.


โ€œZeke,โ€ Samara sighs, โ€œpoetry does not suck.โ€


โ€œDoes so!โ€


โ€œDoes not!โ€ She huffs.


We exchange arguments for a couple momentsโ€”because my best friend and I are just so mature at fourteen years old.ย 


โ€œPoetry sucks,โ€ I repeat, โ€œand you canโ€™t change my mind on that.โ€


โ€œPoetry is an amazing art of expressing your emotions. Why do you hate it?โ€


โ€œItโ€™s hard.โ€


โ€œItโ€™s not.โ€


โ€œMaybe not for you, with your whole nature-inspired artist thing going on, but for me, a guy who only excels at sports, it is!โ€


Awkward silence fills the room as my words hang in the air.


โ€œZeke,โ€ Samara says slowly, โ€œyouโ€™ve gotta work with me here.โ€


I sigh but eventually give in. Poetry lessons with my closest friend are better than ones with dozens of trainers, all trying to force their knowledge of a subject into my head.


I suppose I should tell you who I am.


Well, hi! My name is Zeke Jackson, and Iโ€™m the teen son of Kira Jackson, the head of the wildly successful business empire.


My rich parents expect me to have a talent. Not any talent, though. A creative talent.


ย My parents are successful and happy with their jobs, but they think that the arts are better for people as people. They want me to suddenly be amazing at things like art and music. Writing. Even acting.


Sadly for them, my only area of strength is basketball, and you donโ€™t exactly pour your heart out while shooting baskets.


Anyways, my parents are constantly hiring tutors to teach me those things.


It's safe to assume every single one of them fail.


So here I am, in my bedroom on a Saturday, with this โ€˜new approachโ€™โ€”learning creative arts from my creative best friend.


โ€œWhat do you want me to do?โ€ I say wearily.


Samara grins. โ€œFree verse!โ€


I dramatically flop on my bed. โ€œI donโ€™t know what the heck just came out of your mouth, but Iโ€™m so sick of being clueless Iโ€™m not even going to ask.โ€ย 


Samara rolls her eyes and grabs my arm. She hauls me back to the table standing in the middle of the room, covered in pencils and paper.ย 


โ€œHey!โ€ I complain as my friend stuffs a piece of lined paper and a pen into my arms.ย 


โ€œToo bad,โ€ she says smugly. โ€œNow. Write whatever comes to mind. This isnโ€™t even real free verseโ€”just jot down the string of thoughts youโ€™re thinking right now.โ€


I take a deep breath and start to write.


Normally, when Iโ€™m being taught by just another tutor, Iโ€™d write, I donโ€™t care I donโ€™t care I donโ€™t care. But I had one week left with Samara to show my mother I was making progress with my friend as my teacher, so I needed to try.


โ€œIโ€™m done!โ€ I holler, jumping up from my chair and handing the paper to Samara. Her green eyes glint from behind her curly gold hair as she takes the page from me. I hold my breath as her eyes dart across the page.


She smiled. โ€œNice, Zeke! Now that your creative juices are flowing, it's time for actual poetry.โ€


I groan as Samara starts pacing in front of me. โ€œFor now, just write a quick poem about anything. It can rhyme, or it can not. It can be super emotional, or it can be cheerful. Whatever you want. You decide! You have five minutes, so ready, set, GO!โ€


I grab another sheet of paper and start to scrawl down:


แด„สœแด‡แด‡sแด‡:

cะฝeeั•eโ€”wะฝeษด yoฯ… ั‚ฮฑฤธe ฮฑ pฮนcั‚ฯ…re, ฮนั‚โ€™ั• ั•oะผeั‚ะฝฮนษดษข yoฯ… ั•ฮฑy

cะฝeeั•eโ€”wะฝeษด yoฯ…โ€™re ะฝฯ…ษดษขry, ั•oะผeั‚ะฝฮนษดษข yoฯ… eฮฑั‚


I pause for a moment as I watch the timer on Samaraโ€™s watch slowly shed time. What should I write next?


Thereโ€™s barely 30 seconds left, so I quickly scribble,ย 


cะฝeeั•eโ€”ฮน lฮนฤธe ั‚o plฮฑyย 

cะฝeeั•eโ€”plฮฑyฮนษดษข cฮฑษดโ€™ั‚ ะฒe ะฒeฮฑั‚!


I cringe as the timer goes off. My eyes fall to the ground as I place my โ€˜poemโ€™ in Samaraโ€™s hands.


โ€œItโ€™sโ€ฆโ€ she hesitates for the right word. โ€œInteresting.โ€


โ€œI know itโ€™s bad. Just tell me how it can get better, please.โ€


Samara inhales slowly then lets the air out the corner of her mouth. โ€œWell, your topic was a bit iffy. I like how you formatted it, and the first part was clever, but then you suddenly switch topics to playingโ€”while still starting it with โ€˜cheeseโ€™. No offense, though.โ€


I smile at her. โ€œYou canโ€™t be offended for something you already know: that you suck at poetry. I mean, I do.โ€


โ€œYou donโ€™t suck,โ€ Samara punches my shoulder, โ€œyou just havenโ€™t mastered it.โ€


โ€œIโ€™m never going to master it,โ€ I say.


โ€œYes you will!โ€


โ€œYeah, no,โ€ I laugh. โ€œI mean, Iโ€™ll still try, but itโ€™s a losing battle.โ€


โ€œPoetry isnโ€™t a battle,โ€ Samara smirks, โ€œand youโ€™d win, anyway.โ€ Her face lights up. โ€œOoh, I have an idea. Iโ€™m going to take you to what I call theโ€ฆPoetry Place.โ€




โ€œThis is it?โ€


She frowns at me. โ€œWhaddya mean?โ€


โ€œI donโ€™t know. I was expecting something moreโ€ฆsomething.โ€


My artistic friend had led me to the top of a cliff overlooking the ocean. A single metal bench was installed dangerously close to the edge.


โ€œThis place is amazing,โ€ Samara says, โ€œespecially for writing poetry. Cโ€™mon.โ€


She trots to the bench and I cautiously follow her. We both plop down and gaze at the waves in their calming pattern: in, out. In, out.


We sit there for what seems like hours, the salty wind pressing against my face. The sun starts to set, letting the sky on fire with hues of red and pink and yellow.


ย Without taking her eyes off the sun meeting the horizon, Samara says softly, โ€œMany think poetry is cheesy. To them, it is. Cheesy is the word people use to mask their fear of raw emotionsโ€”what poetry is often about.โ€


I hear her take a deep breath. โ€œPoetry is the heart of the matter, what you really think and feel. You canโ€™t fake it. Itโ€™s a form of self expression anybody can do, but itโ€™s tricky to do it well.โ€


She stands up and walks closer to the edge of the cliff. โ€œYou have to capture your ideas, your emotions, your thoughts and your dreams in words as best as you can. That way, others can truly step into your shoes.โ€


We watch the sun dip below the horizon, the only sound the win whistling in our ears. Samara eventually checks her watch. โ€œItโ€™s seven-oh-clock. You've got to be back home by ten, right?โ€


โ€œYep,โ€ I say.


โ€œHere.โ€ She hands me more lined paper and a pencil. โ€œWrite any sort of poem. This isnโ€™t a poem to shareโ€”itโ€™s a poem for you to have for yourself.โ€


โ€œAre you going to write a poem, too?โ€


She grins. โ€œYou bet I am.โ€


So we get to work. Almost an hour later, Iโ€™ve filled the whole sheet of paper with fragments of myself. Thereโ€™s a trace of a smile on my lips when my friend finally stands up, stretches, and turns to me. โ€œDid you finish?โ€


โ€œYeah,โ€ I smile, โ€œand Iโ€™m pretty proud.โ€


โ€œGood,โ€ she grins. โ€œDonโ€™t show anyone. Hey, do you want to see mine?โ€


โ€œI know itโ€™s going to be super deep and poetic and make me feel bad about mine,โ€ I say as I raise an eyebrow, โ€œbut sure. Hand it over.โ€


Samara tossed me her neatly folded paper then flashes me a smile as she starts to jog off. โ€œMeet me at the boardwalk in ten minutes!โ€


I wave and unfold her poem. Etched on the paper, in Samaraโ€™s beautiful handwriting, was her poem:



๐’ฏ๐’ฝ๐‘’ ๐“ˆ๐“Š๐“ƒ ๐“ˆ๐’ฝ๐’พ๐“ƒ๐‘’๐“ˆ ๐’พ๐“ƒ ๐“‰๐’ฝ๐‘’ ๐“ˆ๐“€๐“Ž,ย ย 


๐“‰๐’ฝ๐‘’ ๐“Œ๐’ถ๐“‹๐‘’๐“ˆ ๐’ธ๐“‡๐’ถ๐“ˆ๐’ฝ ๐‘œ๐“ƒ ๐“‰๐’ฝ๐‘’ ๐“ˆ๐’ฝ๐‘œ๐“‡๐‘’ย ย ย 


๐’ซ๐‘’๐‘œ๐“…๐“๐‘’ ๐“Œ๐’ถ๐“๐“€ ๐‘œ๐“ƒ ๐“‰๐’ฝ๐‘’ ๐’ท๐‘’๐’ถ๐’ธ๐’ฝ,ย ย 


๐’ท๐“Š๐“‰ ๐ผโ€™๐“‚ ๐’ถ๐“ˆ๐“€๐’พ๐“ƒ๐‘” ๐’ป๐‘œ๐“‡ ๐“‚๐‘œ๐“‡๐‘’ย ย ย 




๐ผโ€™๐“‚ ๐’ถ๐“ˆ๐“€๐’พ๐“ƒ๐‘” ๐’ป๐‘œ๐“‡ ๐’ถ๐“ƒ๐“ˆ๐“Œ๐‘’๐“‡๐“ˆ,ย ย 


๐ผโ€™๐“‚ ๐’ถ๐“ˆ๐“€๐’พ๐“ƒ๐‘” ๐’ป๐‘œ๐“‡ ๐“‰๐“‡๐“Š๐“‰๐’ฝย ย 


๐’ฒ๐’ฝ๐’ถ๐“‰โ€™๐“ˆ ๐“‰๐’ฝ๐‘’ ๐“‚๐‘’๐’ถ๐“ƒ๐’พ๐“ƒ๐‘”?ย ย 


๐’ฒ๐’ฝ๐‘’๐“‡๐‘’โ€™๐“ˆ ๐“‰๐’ฝ๐‘’ ๐“ˆ๐“๐‘’๐“Š๐“‰๐’ฝ?ย ย ย 




๐’ฒ๐’ฝ๐“Ž ๐’น๐‘œ๐‘’๐“ˆ ๐“‰๐’ฝ๐‘’ ๐“Œ๐’พ๐“ƒ๐’น ๐’ท๐“๐‘œ๐“Œ?ย ย 


๐’ฒ๐’ฝ๐“Ž ๐’น๐‘œ๐‘’๐“ˆ ๐’พ๐“‰ ๐“‡๐“Š๐’ป๐’ป๐“๐‘’ ๐“‚๐“Ž ๐’ฝ๐’ถ๐’พ๐“‡?ย ย 


๐’ฎ๐’พ๐“ƒ๐’ธ๐‘’ ๐“ƒ๐‘œ๐“‰๐’ฝ๐’พ๐“ƒ๐‘” ๐’พ๐“ˆ ๐“…๐‘’๐“‡๐“‚๐’ถ๐“ƒ๐‘’๐“ƒ๐“‰,ย ย 


๐’พ๐“ˆ ๐’ถ๐“ƒ๐“Ž๐‘œ๐“ƒ๐‘’ ๐“‡๐‘’๐’ถ๐“๐“๐“Ž ๐“‰๐’ฝ๐‘’๐“‡๐‘’?ย ย ย 




๐‘€๐’พ๐“๐“๐’พ๐‘œ๐“ƒ๐“ˆ ๐‘œ๐’ป ๐“†๐“Š๐‘’๐“ˆ๐“‰๐’พ๐‘œ๐“ƒ๐“ˆ,ย ย 


๐’ถ๐“ƒ๐’น ๐’ท๐’พ๐“๐“๐’พ๐‘œ๐“ƒ๐“ˆ ๐“‚๐‘œ๐“‡๐‘’ย ย 


๐’ฏ๐’ฝ๐‘’ ๐“Œ๐’ฝ๐‘œ๐“๐‘’ ๐“Œ๐‘œ๐“‡๐“๐’น ๐’พ๐“ˆ ๐’ธ๐“Š๐“‡๐’พ๐‘œ๐“Š๐“ˆ,ย ย 


ย ๐“ˆ๐‘œ ๐‘œ๐“…๐‘’๐“ƒ ๐“‰๐’ฝ๐‘’ ๐’น๐‘œ๐‘œ๐“‡.






โ€œDid you like my poem?โ€ Samara asks as I jog towards her.


โ€œYeah,โ€ I pant. โ€œHoldโ€ฆon. Let me catch my breath.โ€


A moment later, I add, โ€œYour poem was great. I mean, I hardly understood half of it, but it was very poetic.โ€


โ€œGee, Zeke, thanks,โ€ Samara says wryly.


โ€œAre poetry lessons over for today?โ€


โ€œYep,โ€ Samara says. โ€œI am no longer your teacher, Iโ€™m your best friend!โ€


โ€œNice,โ€ I grin. โ€œSince weโ€™re done with poetry, do you want to go shoot some hoops at the park?โ€


She returns my smile. โ€œYou bet.โ€

August 09, 2020 18:54

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20:09 Aug 11, 2020

Four wheels and flies? Honey you MUST be talking about a Pegasus

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21:09 Aug 11, 2020

Haha, but no. Keep guessinโ€™!

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Scott Smock
20:00 Aug 11, 2020

Except for where you put letting instead of lighting and forgot the d on wind you did very well. nice descriptive details.

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21:08 Aug 11, 2020

Thank you so much! Would you mind pointing out where those errors are exactly?

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Velma Darnell
12:51 Aug 11, 2020

What a nice story Aerin! I truly enjoyed the poem as it's both easy to read and has a deep meaning. Great job :) p.s. I would appreciate if you could read my story when you aren't busy, thank you!

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12:53 Aug 11, 2020

Thank you! P. S. Iโ€™d love to read your story!

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Vanessa Marczan
00:40 Aug 11, 2020

Very sweet and light hearted story Aerin ๐Ÿ€๐Ÿง€๐Ÿ“

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01:16 Aug 11, 2020

Haha thank you!

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Krishi Norris
17:06 Aug 10, 2020

Hii, Aerin. Just letting you know that I put you in my bio!

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17:32 Aug 10, 2020

Aw, thanks! ๐Ÿ˜Š

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Krishi Norris
17:51 Aug 10, 2020

Your welcome! ๐Ÿ’–๐Ÿ’–๐Ÿ’–

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Shiza Ali
13:45 Aug 10, 2020

Nice story.

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17:30 Aug 10, 2020

Thanks!

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Akshat .
08:03 Aug 10, 2020

Awesome story Aerin! Did you write that poetry yourself? If you did, then it's terrific! A very nice story again! Also, congrats on reaching the top 20! Hats off to * เธ„เน“เธ„เบ–เธฏ * and โ„ญ๐”ข๐”ฉ๐”ข๐”ฐ๐”ฑ๐”ข! 1 more thing: In the part where you transition from Zeke's house to the cliffside you should have added that swirly thing that writers use to signal a new scene. That's all!

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12:22 Aug 10, 2020

Thank you!!! I did write the poem, and Iโ€™m so glad you liked it. Thanks! Iโ€™m so happy to be in 8th! Yep, thanks Amany and Celeste! We each went on upvoting sprees of one another so now Amany and I are in top ten and Celeste is higher up. Thanks, guys! Anyways, wow, interesting you say that. Some people do regular breaks and others do something in the middle, and I usually do the latter, but last story somebody said it was unneeded. Nice to get a second pair of eyes, though. Thanks! ~Aerin

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Sia S
04:34 Aug 10, 2020

Nice work Aerin! Today's riddle's answer is..... that you take out the 'S' and then it becomes even.

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12:18 Aug 10, 2020

YES! ๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘

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Sia S
14:35 Aug 10, 2020

Thanks ๐Ÿ˜Š

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Tolu Odel
03:58 Aug 10, 2020

The first two lines of the cheese poem were straight facts. Also, I love this story.

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12:16 Aug 10, 2020

Haha, thanks so much! ๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜†

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D. Jaymz
00:19 Aug 10, 2020

Another great story, Aerin ๐Ÿ‘ ~~~~~~ For the sentence, 'It's safe to assume every single one of them fail.' I believe it should be 'failed', as in, 'It's safe to assume every single one of them failed.' ------ '๐’ฏ๐’ฝ๐‘’ ๐“ˆ๐“Š๐“ƒ ๐“ˆ๐’ฝ๐’พ๐“ƒ๐‘’๐“ˆ ๐“‰๐’ฝ๐‘’ ๐“ˆ๐“€๐“Ž,'. I believe the preposition 'in' belongs in this sentence, as in, '๐’ฏ๐’ฝ๐‘’ ๐“ˆ๐“Š๐“ƒ ๐“ˆ๐’ฝ๐’พ๐“ƒ๐‘’๐“ˆ in ๐“‰๐’ฝ๐‘’ ๐“ˆ๐“€๐“Ž,'. (Sorry, no appropriate font ๐Ÿ™„). You have put those directional cues in the next two sentences ('on the shore' and 'on the beach') as clues. But as this is a poem, where anything goes, then it very well aprop...

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00:27 Aug 10, 2020

Thank you! Wow, thanks for catching that mistake. Iโ€™ll make sure to add it in in a sec. Haha, thanks! I love the name Samara for the same reasons.

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Sia S
07:14 Aug 11, 2020

Is today's riddles answer Wind?

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12:23 Aug 11, 2020

Good guess, but no! Keep guessing!

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Charles Stucker
15:06 Aug 10, 2020

If I were teaching him, I would say, pretend you are the basketball. Describe a game from what you feel. Samara might also cay, "How abut the line, Cheese, it's sometimes a cheat. instead of your last line? Then it all fits together really well." Your last line. [She returns my smile. โ€œYou bet.โ€] might put in a little extra comment to be [She returns my smile. as if she has a secret about poetry and is tempting me with it. โ€œYou bet. I like your moves."] Then make the title "It's in Motion" as a reference to the phrase "Poetry in motio...

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17:31 Aug 10, 2020

Thanks!

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B. W.
19:17 Aug 26, 2020

Heya there again Aerin ^^ i'm honestly not sure if i've read and said something about this one or not. But eh here i am again, pretty sure i didn't do it though but sorry if i have. This one is just as great as all of your other stories i've read and seen. i don't know how you do it but everything in all of your stories is always so great, i barely ever notice anything wrong in any of your stories tbh and then i see some comments at some points and then i get confused. i might just be bad at seeing some things until its probably pointed out ...

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20:22 Aug 26, 2020

Thank youuu! Actually, youโ€™ve been on here for a couple months more than me, LOL! But anyways, hmm...writing advice...honestly, idk. Ima do a sentence or two for different topics: Charactersโ€”your characters should be as real as possible; with flaws and hobbies and PERSONALITY! If they feel real to you, theyโ€™re gonna feel real to the reader ;) Plotโ€”BEGINNING, MIDDLE, END! All three points filled in with plot. I donโ€™t know what else to say, soooooooooo.... Dialogue: NOT an info dump! Just make it natural, with contractions and slang like โ€˜...

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B. W.
20:33 Aug 26, 2020

Oh jeez i never knew that i honestly thought you were there longer, though i think you were at least the one to maybe start writing the stories before i started, im not sure. Thanks for all that though especially with the dialogue and the characters i can try some other things with them in my other new stories. sure i'd be glad to go and check out your newer one ^^

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B. W.
17:07 Aug 25, 2020

I'm not sure if i commented this or not but eh. This is still really great like your other ones. I'm a bit excited to see your next stories after reading "the Choosings part 2" since how great your stories are ^^ i'm going to give you a 10/10 again, i haven't found a bad story yet on you or anyone elses and thats great as well. i was looking through your bio again and saw the thing for the interesting fact so: i have this stuffed grey kitten i named "skittles" that i've had ever since i (think) was three after some heart stuff. and questions...

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17:13 Aug 25, 2020

Thank you! Answers: 1. Umm...try the links! Basically, I make google forms for fun that people like to take. Those are spy quizzes where you choose what you, an agent, do on a mission. 2. So, you know how when two people are together theyโ€™re sometimes called a ship? Well, weโ€™re on the ships! Like, Afra and Gervassi from Rhondaโ€™s stories ship is Afrassi, and their are pirates on Afrassiโ€”theyโ€™re on board that ship, so to speak. Some peopleave special rankings cuz they were on the ship from the beginning. Everybody is a Writer, but if youโ€™re...

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B. W.
17:18 Aug 25, 2020

no prob! oh alright i'll try that a bit later, i was kinda confused when i randomly saw them. oh i didn't think you meant actual ships with the characters i thought you meant something else at first. "wrirate" and "biwrirate" honestly, to me sound kind of cute in a way. The whole thing in general though sounds interesting to me because i don't think anyones done something like this on anything besides here now. do you think i could maybe join?

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17:21 Aug 25, 2020

Sure! As long as you read a story with a ship with people already on it, HOP ABOARD!

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B. W.
17:23 Aug 25, 2020

thanks, yay!

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