โPOETRY SUCKS!โ
The shout finally bursts out of me as I grab my paper and try to dramatically slam it down. It generally flutters to the ground, so I groan, pick it back up, and rip it into shreds of failed poetry.
โZeke,โ Samara sighs, โpoetry does not suck.โ
โDoes so!โ
โDoes not!โ She huffs.
We exchange arguments for a couple momentsโbecause my best friend and I are just so mature at fourteen years old.ย
โPoetry sucks,โ I repeat, โand you canโt change my mind on that.โ
โPoetry is an amazing art of expressing your emotions. Why do you hate it?โ
โItโs hard.โ
โItโs not.โ
โMaybe not for you, with your whole nature-inspired artist thing going on, but for me, a guy who only excels at sports, it is!โ
Awkward silence fills the room as my words hang in the air.
โZeke,โ Samara says slowly, โyouโve gotta work with me here.โ
I sigh but eventually give in. Poetry lessons with my closest friend are better than ones with dozens of trainers, all trying to force their knowledge of a subject into my head.
I suppose I should tell you who I am.
Well, hi! My name is Zeke Jackson, and Iโm the teen son of Kira Jackson, the head of the wildly successful business empire.
My rich parents expect me to have a talent. Not any talent, though. A creative talent.
ย My parents are successful and happy with their jobs, but they think that the arts are better for people as people. They want me to suddenly be amazing at things like art and music. Writing. Even acting.
Sadly for them, my only area of strength is basketball, and you donโt exactly pour your heart out while shooting baskets.
Anyways, my parents are constantly hiring tutors to teach me those things.
It's safe to assume every single one of them fail.
So here I am, in my bedroom on a Saturday, with this โnew approachโโlearning creative arts from my creative best friend.
โWhat do you want me to do?โ I say wearily.
Samara grins. โFree verse!โ
I dramatically flop on my bed. โI donโt know what the heck just came out of your mouth, but Iโm so sick of being clueless Iโm not even going to ask.โย
Samara rolls her eyes and grabs my arm. She hauls me back to the table standing in the middle of the room, covered in pencils and paper.ย
โHey!โ I complain as my friend stuffs a piece of lined paper and a pen into my arms.ย
โToo bad,โ she says smugly. โNow. Write whatever comes to mind. This isnโt even real free verseโjust jot down the string of thoughts youโre thinking right now.โ
I take a deep breath and start to write.
Normally, when Iโm being taught by just another tutor, Iโd write, I donโt care I donโt care I donโt care. But I had one week left with Samara to show my mother I was making progress with my friend as my teacher, so I needed to try.
โIโm done!โ I holler, jumping up from my chair and handing the paper to Samara. Her green eyes glint from behind her curly gold hair as she takes the page from me. I hold my breath as her eyes dart across the page.
She smiled. โNice, Zeke! Now that your creative juices are flowing, it's time for actual poetry.โ
I groan as Samara starts pacing in front of me. โFor now, just write a quick poem about anything. It can rhyme, or it can not. It can be super emotional, or it can be cheerful. Whatever you want. You decide! You have five minutes, so ready, set, GO!โ
I grab another sheet of paper and start to scrawl down:
แดสแดแดsแด:
cะฝeeัeโwะฝeษด yoฯ ัฮฑฤธe ฮฑ pฮนcัฯ re, ฮนัโั ัoะผeัะฝฮนษดษข yoฯ ัฮฑy
cะฝeeัeโwะฝeษด yoฯ โre ะฝฯ ษดษขry, ัoะผeัะฝฮนษดษข yoฯ eฮฑั
I pause for a moment as I watch the timer on Samaraโs watch slowly shed time. What should I write next?
Thereโs barely 30 seconds left, so I quickly scribble,ย
cะฝeeัeโฮน lฮนฤธe ัo plฮฑyย
cะฝeeัeโplฮฑyฮนษดษข cฮฑษดโั ะฒe ะฒeฮฑั!
I cringe as the timer goes off. My eyes fall to the ground as I place my โpoemโ in Samaraโs hands.
โItโsโฆโ she hesitates for the right word. โInteresting.โ
โI know itโs bad. Just tell me how it can get better, please.โ
Samara inhales slowly then lets the air out the corner of her mouth. โWell, your topic was a bit iffy. I like how you formatted it, and the first part was clever, but then you suddenly switch topics to playingโwhile still starting it with โcheeseโ. No offense, though.โ
I smile at her. โYou canโt be offended for something you already know: that you suck at poetry. I mean, I do.โ
โYou donโt suck,โ Samara punches my shoulder, โyou just havenโt mastered it.โ
โIโm never going to master it,โ I say.
โYes you will!โ
โYeah, no,โ I laugh. โI mean, Iโll still try, but itโs a losing battle.โ
โPoetry isnโt a battle,โ Samara smirks, โand youโd win, anyway.โ Her face lights up. โOoh, I have an idea. Iโm going to take you to what I call theโฆPoetry Place.โ
โThis is it?โ
She frowns at me. โWhaddya mean?โ
โI donโt know. I was expecting something moreโฆsomething.โ
My artistic friend had led me to the top of a cliff overlooking the ocean. A single metal bench was installed dangerously close to the edge.
โThis place is amazing,โ Samara says, โespecially for writing poetry. Cโmon.โ
She trots to the bench and I cautiously follow her. We both plop down and gaze at the waves in their calming pattern: in, out. In, out.
We sit there for what seems like hours, the salty wind pressing against my face. The sun starts to set, letting the sky on fire with hues of red and pink and yellow.
ย Without taking her eyes off the sun meeting the horizon, Samara says softly, โMany think poetry is cheesy. To them, it is. Cheesy is the word people use to mask their fear of raw emotionsโwhat poetry is often about.โ
I hear her take a deep breath. โPoetry is the heart of the matter, what you really think and feel. You canโt fake it. Itโs a form of self expression anybody can do, but itโs tricky to do it well.โ
She stands up and walks closer to the edge of the cliff. โYou have to capture your ideas, your emotions, your thoughts and your dreams in words as best as you can. That way, others can truly step into your shoes.โ
We watch the sun dip below the horizon, the only sound the win whistling in our ears. Samara eventually checks her watch. โItโs seven-oh-clock. You've got to be back home by ten, right?โ
โYep,โ I say.
โHere.โ She hands me more lined paper and a pencil. โWrite any sort of poem. This isnโt a poem to shareโitโs a poem for you to have for yourself.โ
โAre you going to write a poem, too?โ
She grins. โYou bet I am.โ
So we get to work. Almost an hour later, Iโve filled the whole sheet of paper with fragments of myself. Thereโs a trace of a smile on my lips when my friend finally stands up, stretches, and turns to me. โDid you finish?โ
โYeah,โ I smile, โand Iโm pretty proud.โ
โGood,โ she grins. โDonโt show anyone. Hey, do you want to see mine?โ
โI know itโs going to be super deep and poetic and make me feel bad about mine,โ I say as I raise an eyebrow, โbut sure. Hand it over.โ
Samara tossed me her neatly folded paper then flashes me a smile as she starts to jog off. โMeet me at the boardwalk in ten minutes!โ
I wave and unfold her poem. Etched on the paper, in Samaraโs beautiful handwriting, was her poem:
๐ฏ๐ฝ๐ ๐๐๐ ๐๐ฝ๐พ๐๐๐ ๐พ๐ ๐๐ฝ๐ ๐๐๐,ย ย
๐๐ฝ๐ ๐๐ถ๐๐๐ ๐ธ๐๐ถ๐๐ฝ ๐๐ ๐๐ฝ๐ ๐๐ฝ๐๐๐ย ย ย
๐ซ๐๐๐ ๐๐ ๐๐ถ๐๐ ๐๐ ๐๐ฝ๐ ๐ท๐๐ถ๐ธ๐ฝ,ย ย
๐ท๐๐ ๐ผโ๐ ๐ถ๐๐๐พ๐๐ ๐ป๐๐ ๐๐๐๐ย ย ย
๐ผโ๐ ๐ถ๐๐๐พ๐๐ ๐ป๐๐ ๐ถ๐๐๐๐๐๐,ย ย
๐ผโ๐ ๐ถ๐๐๐พ๐๐ ๐ป๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐ฝย ย
๐ฒ๐ฝ๐ถ๐โ๐ ๐๐ฝ๐ ๐๐๐ถ๐๐พ๐๐?ย ย
๐ฒ๐ฝ๐๐๐โ๐ ๐๐ฝ๐ ๐๐๐๐๐๐ฝ?ย ย ย
๐ฒ๐ฝ๐ ๐น๐๐๐ ๐๐ฝ๐ ๐๐พ๐๐น ๐ท๐๐๐?ย ย
๐ฒ๐ฝ๐ ๐น๐๐๐ ๐พ๐ ๐๐๐ป๐ป๐๐ ๐๐ ๐ฝ๐ถ๐พ๐?ย ย
๐ฎ๐พ๐๐ธ๐ ๐๐๐๐ฝ๐พ๐๐ ๐พ๐ ๐ ๐๐๐๐ถ๐๐๐๐,ย ย
๐พ๐ ๐ถ๐๐๐๐๐ ๐๐๐ถ๐๐๐ ๐๐ฝ๐๐๐?ย ย ย
๐๐พ๐๐๐พ๐๐๐ ๐๐ป ๐๐๐๐๐๐พ๐๐๐,ย ย
๐ถ๐๐น ๐ท๐พ๐๐๐พ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐ย ย
๐ฏ๐ฝ๐ ๐๐ฝ๐๐๐ ๐๐๐๐๐น ๐พ๐ ๐ธ๐๐๐พ๐๐๐,ย ย
ย ๐๐ ๐๐ ๐๐ ๐๐ฝ๐ ๐น๐๐๐.
โDid you like my poem?โ Samara asks as I jog towards her.
โYeah,โ I pant. โHoldโฆon. Let me catch my breath.โ
A moment later, I add, โYour poem was great. I mean, I hardly understood half of it, but it was very poetic.โ
โGee, Zeke, thanks,โ Samara says wryly.
โAre poetry lessons over for today?โ
โYep,โ Samara says. โI am no longer your teacher, Iโm your best friend!โ
โNice,โ I grin. โSince weโre done with poetry, do you want to go shoot some hoops at the park?โ
She returns my smile. โYou bet.โ
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Four wheels and flies? Honey you MUST be talking about a Pegasus
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Haha, but no. Keep guessinโ!
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Except for where you put letting instead of lighting and forgot the d on wind you did very well. nice descriptive details.
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Thank you so much! Would you mind pointing out where those errors are exactly?
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What a nice story Aerin! I truly enjoyed the poem as it's both easy to read and has a deep meaning. Great job :) p.s. I would appreciate if you could read my story when you aren't busy, thank you!
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Thank you! P. S. Iโd love to read your story!
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Very sweet and light hearted story Aerin ๐๐ง๐
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Haha thank you!
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Hii, Aerin. Just letting you know that I put you in my bio!
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Aw, thanks! ๐
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Your welcome! ๐๐๐
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Nice story.
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Thanks!
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Awesome story Aerin! Did you write that poetry yourself? If you did, then it's terrific! A very nice story again! Also, congrats on reaching the top 20! Hats off to * เธเนเธเบเธฏ * and โญ๐ข๐ฉ๐ข๐ฐ๐ฑ๐ข! 1 more thing: In the part where you transition from Zeke's house to the cliffside you should have added that swirly thing that writers use to signal a new scene. That's all!
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Thank you!!! I did write the poem, and Iโm so glad you liked it. Thanks! Iโm so happy to be in 8th! Yep, thanks Amany and Celeste! We each went on upvoting sprees of one another so now Amany and I are in top ten and Celeste is higher up. Thanks, guys! Anyways, wow, interesting you say that. Some people do regular breaks and others do something in the middle, and I usually do the latter, but last story somebody said it was unneeded. Nice to get a second pair of eyes, though. Thanks! ~Aerin
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Nice work Aerin! Today's riddle's answer is..... that you take out the 'S' and then it becomes even.
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YES! ๐๐๐
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Thanks ๐
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The first two lines of the cheese poem were straight facts. Also, I love this story.
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Haha, thanks so much! ๐๐๐
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Another great story, Aerin ๐ ~~~~~~ For the sentence, 'It's safe to assume every single one of them fail.' I believe it should be 'failed', as in, 'It's safe to assume every single one of them failed.' ------ '๐ฏ๐ฝ๐ ๐๐๐ ๐๐ฝ๐พ๐๐๐ ๐๐ฝ๐ ๐๐๐,'. I believe the preposition 'in' belongs in this sentence, as in, '๐ฏ๐ฝ๐ ๐๐๐ ๐๐ฝ๐พ๐๐๐ in ๐๐ฝ๐ ๐๐๐,'. (Sorry, no appropriate font ๐). You have put those directional cues in the next two sentences ('on the shore' and 'on the beach') as clues. But as this is a poem, where anything goes, then it very well aprop...
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Thank you! Wow, thanks for catching that mistake. Iโll make sure to add it in in a sec. Haha, thanks! I love the name Samara for the same reasons.
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Is today's riddles answer Wind?
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Good guess, but no! Keep guessing!
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If I were teaching him, I would say, pretend you are the basketball. Describe a game from what you feel. Samara might also cay, "How abut the line, Cheese, it's sometimes a cheat. instead of your last line? Then it all fits together really well." Your last line. [She returns my smile. โYou bet.โ] might put in a little extra comment to be [She returns my smile. as if she has a secret about poetry and is tempting me with it. โYou bet. I like your moves."] Then make the title "It's in Motion" as a reference to the phrase "Poetry in motio...
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Thanks!
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Heya there again Aerin ^^ i'm honestly not sure if i've read and said something about this one or not. But eh here i am again, pretty sure i didn't do it though but sorry if i have. This one is just as great as all of your other stories i've read and seen. i don't know how you do it but everything in all of your stories is always so great, i barely ever notice anything wrong in any of your stories tbh and then i see some comments at some points and then i get confused. i might just be bad at seeing some things until its probably pointed out ...
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Thank youuu! Actually, youโve been on here for a couple months more than me, LOL! But anyways, hmm...writing advice...honestly, idk. Ima do a sentence or two for different topics: Charactersโyour characters should be as real as possible; with flaws and hobbies and PERSONALITY! If they feel real to you, theyโre gonna feel real to the reader ;) PlotโBEGINNING, MIDDLE, END! All three points filled in with plot. I donโt know what else to say, soooooooooo.... Dialogue: NOT an info dump! Just make it natural, with contractions and slang like โ...
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Oh jeez i never knew that i honestly thought you were there longer, though i think you were at least the one to maybe start writing the stories before i started, im not sure. Thanks for all that though especially with the dialogue and the characters i can try some other things with them in my other new stories. sure i'd be glad to go and check out your newer one ^^
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I'm not sure if i commented this or not but eh. This is still really great like your other ones. I'm a bit excited to see your next stories after reading "the Choosings part 2" since how great your stories are ^^ i'm going to give you a 10/10 again, i haven't found a bad story yet on you or anyone elses and thats great as well. i was looking through your bio again and saw the thing for the interesting fact so: i have this stuffed grey kitten i named "skittles" that i've had ever since i (think) was three after some heart stuff. and questions...
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Thank you! Answers: 1. Umm...try the links! Basically, I make google forms for fun that people like to take. Those are spy quizzes where you choose what you, an agent, do on a mission. 2. So, you know how when two people are together theyโre sometimes called a ship? Well, weโre on the ships! Like, Afra and Gervassi from Rhondaโs stories ship is Afrassi, and their are pirates on Afrassiโtheyโre on board that ship, so to speak. Some peopleave special rankings cuz they were on the ship from the beginning. Everybody is a Writer, but if youโre...
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no prob! oh alright i'll try that a bit later, i was kinda confused when i randomly saw them. oh i didn't think you meant actual ships with the characters i thought you meant something else at first. "wrirate" and "biwrirate" honestly, to me sound kind of cute in a way. The whole thing in general though sounds interesting to me because i don't think anyones done something like this on anything besides here now. do you think i could maybe join?
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Sure! As long as you read a story with a ship with people already on it, HOP ABOARD!
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thanks, yay!
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