The water gods of Ahgondoa

Submitted into Contest #83 in response to: Write a fantasy story about water gods or spirits.... view prompt

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Adventure Creative Nonfiction Fantasy

Down the river of Ahgondoa;in a quiet place with no one but Joyce,surrounded by tall trees with the sounds hollowing from the water.

Joyce heart was shattered with so much fear,her head was spinning around. Trees were moving around her, with big yellow eyes as they stared at her and laughed continuously.

The ground was shaking from the laughter that was an echo throughout the woods.Joyce fingers were a stopper to her ears,but invane it didn't help,but,the sound became more loud and louder.

Stop!

"am feeling dizzy -

She fell onto the ground, her body was so weak to rise up on her feet.Fog was all over the river of Ahgondoa,a dark smoke came out from the underground; surrounding her. In the midst of that dark smoke,Joyce was choking and coughing as the smoke made a line into her nostril.

Joyce had no idea what was really going on,lying on a bare ground with all her clothes covered up with soil.

"What happened?

the pain in her body, scratches of beast all over her body. Sweat dripped down her face,in fear looking side and side as she hurriedly left the river of Ahgondoa.

"Where have you been?"mother asked

Joyce didn't utter a single word, she was like a zombie as she walked with her eyes all popped out;staring at Eliv her big brother. The tremor in Joyce hands as it shook so vigorously, getting hold of her brothers' neck so tightly.

"you're chocking me-

The screams could be heard from a distance, neighbours trying to remove Joyce hands from her brothers' neck.The sound of the spirit of Ahgondoa kept on calling her name -

Joyce!

Joyce headed towards her room, banging the door right behind her.Her Mother knocked the door calling out to her,there was no answer.

It was around midnight, the moon was so bright; the sounds of wolves from the woods. The sound that came from the kitchen; waking up everybody thinking it was a burglar.

The fridge was wide open, the beast was feasting on the meat from the fridge.Joyce had turned into a beast, the mother couldn't control her tears;seeing her going through the window and disappearing into the woods.

It was a bright sunny day, in that lonely forest.Waking up with no idea how she got there:an old lady stood right beside as she smiled at Joyce.

"what am I doing here?

Joyce was scared of the old woman as she kept on moving far from her.The woman stretched her hand towards Joyce-

"don't be scared,my child,"the old woman said

Suddenly, a bright light shone around the old woman; the flapping wings behind the old woman's back.The old woman was an angel.

"don't be afraid, am here to help you,"the old woman said

The spirit of Ahgondoa was still looking for Joyce, the loud sound from the spirit. The spirit was angry as a dark smoke came before them;a lady appeared between that dark smoke ,pointing towards the angel.

"you- you ruined my plans

The evil spirit drew it's rod and pointing towards Joyce and the angel,throwing fire on them which went back to the evil spirits. Fire was all over the evil spirit as she screamed -

"Fire-am burning

the evil spirits burnt into ashes blown by the wind,never again to haunt the river of Ahgondoa.The old lady flapping her angels' wing,bidding goodbye to Joyce.

Joyce headed home, her mother full of joy that she ran towards her in great happiness that her daughter was okay.

"are you okay ?

Joyce mother kept on spinning her around,Joyce smiled back at her mother -

"mother- am fine

Nobody wanted to be near Joyce,the fear in people's hearts thinking that they will be strangled to death. There was no one in the neighbourhood, all doors closed.

"mother -why are people afraid of me?

"don't mind them child,let's go into the house,"her mother said.

A screeching sound through Joyce ears as she stopped and shook her head.The voice that kept on calling her name,the sound that became more louder.

"mother-can you hear those sounds?

Her mother couldn't hear anything, the spirit of Ahgondoa had followed Joyce to their home. The black smoke that hovered all over the neighbourhood.

"what do you want from me ?

ha-ha-ha- the spirit laughed, the neighbourhood was invaded by the evil spirits. Joyce turned only to see her mother lying down on the ground-

mother!

Seeing her mother lying on the ground, thinking that she was dead;all covered up with sores. Every corner she ran too,people were covered with sores as she kneeled down and called upon God

"please!God come to our rescue,"tears filled her eyes as she cried.

There was a loud thunder;Joyce ran outside and saw armies of angels coming down from the clouds with swords in their hands.The evil spirits was once again furious.

"noo- what brought you here again?

the evil spirits asked the angels,the angels said,"Joyce' faith brought us here".

The evil spirits were surrounded by the angel,the bright light that made the evil spirits to scream out loudly, fire burning them into ashes blown by the wind.

The angels moved from one door to another, restoring the neighbourhood. Her mother was restored as she hugged her daughter, not knowing what had happened.

There surprise of seeing angels with flapping wings,on their hands carrying bibles as they gave each one. The neighbourhood was restored,people became more close to God and were not attacked by the evil spirits again.

The angels guarded every corner of the neighbourhood, there was no space of evil spirits but righteousness covered the entire neighbourhood.

Joyce later became a minister of the word of God,the spirit of God was in her.The neighbourhood had been blessed,the farms were all green,no hunger was smelled as people's face were full of joy.

There was no more sickness, fear wasn't there-the glory had been been restored, people learned to be kind and share with others around the neighbourhood.

Mr Davidson stared towards the sky with that big smile, giving out his riches to the poor -

"you need this,more than me,"me Davidson walked away

March 04, 2021 15:22

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Michael Regan
00:25 Nov 13, 2021

I like the story line, but I think you could have handled it a bit better. It seemed a bit disjointed to me.

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Therese Hudson
07:48 Mar 10, 2021

Great story

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