The secret of power

Submitted into Contest #51 in response to: Write about someone who has a superpower.... view prompt

277 comments

Fantasy Suspense

Nobody noticed Jake's absence during the English class in the only college in the city. Jake loved technology. So, he took the computer science stream. 

Mrs. Norwich, the English lecturer for the class, had switched on the television in the class when a college staff member came and whispered something. She was a tall, young woman with black hair and large spectacles.

The news flashed,"The Big Jumper is having another encounter with the Trapshot".

"Wow!", shouted the excited students. The Big Jumper was a hero in that small city and could make large leaps.   

Many times the encounter had happened between The Big Jumper and Trapshot. Nobody knew the reason why they were fighting and who they were. 

The bell rang for the college and all the students ran to witness the fight between the hero and the villain.

Trapshot, though not his real name, looked terrifying with self-made advanced technology weapons. Nobody knew his real name. People thronged in the devastated street to watch this encounter. The Big Jumper in a green-blue attire which he dons all the time while he fights, to hide his identity. Trapshot looks like a cowboy on his brown outfit and black boots.

"Give me that suit," shouted Trapshot.

"Not possible, Trapshot," replied The Big Jumper.

" What…," before Trapshot could finish his sentence, The Big Jumper packed a punch on Trapshot's face which sent him flying. Trapshot escaped on his Superbike which could also fly and the crowd applauded The Big Jumper for the gallantry act. He signed some notebooks and took photos with his admirers. At that time, many police cars came to the street. A bank robbery had happened in the nearby bank. Then The Big Jumper ran into an empty street and touched his chest. Suddenly, the suit started disappearing and there stood Jake. He was a strong man with large fists and the suit made him more powerful. He had silky brown hair with blue eyes. He walked into the empty college to take his backpack, but it was not in its place. He went home, keeping his head down. It was his favourite backpack and he had kept it for five years. He was the only child to his parents and they showered all their love on him. They were very friendly towards Jake and never used to chide him. The teachers liked him even though he barely attended the college nor did he secure good marks but for his socialising attitude. 

Meanwhile, people witnessed Trapshot going into the police station and having a conversation with the police. People living near the police station were afraid that Trapshot had got the police in his hands.

….

The following day, Jake decided to attend college. On that day, a new student came to class.

 Mrs. Norwich introduced her as Jane to the entire class. She had curly black hair and she shone brightly like the moon. No one could take eyes off her, but she saw Jake admiringly. She went and sat on the bench where the academically bright students sat. 

At lunch time, many gathered in front of Jane to get a chance to go out with her. But she didn't seem interested. She found Jake standing in the shade of the tree outside the class and started walking towards him. 

"Hi, would you be interested to accompany me to the cafe?", She asked Jake.

"Sure," Jake said while the other students looked at him in surprise. 

As they were chatting while sipping coffee in a cafe nearby, a woman cried,"somebody catch the thief. He is taking my purse".

Jake thought to himself "this looks like a job for The Big Jumper". He took this as a chance to impress Jane. He put down the coffee glass on the table and went into an empty street where no one could see him. He changed into his suit and started chasing the thief. As he could take huge leaps, he caught the thief in no time. He changed into Jake and handed over the purse to the woman. Then he saw some guys trying to kidnap a small girl. Jake remembered Jane waiting for him in the coffee shop. He called the police station near him to come and save the girl and ran to the cafe. But when he returned to the coffee shop, she was not there. He had missed a nice chance to be with her. As he walked in disappointment he saw Jane talking to the same woman whose purse was stolen. He rushed to talk to her.

“Sorry for leaving you in the middle of a conversation. Do you know that woman, Jane?”

“It's okay. Jake, what you did was awesome. No, I was just asking the route to the shopping mall nearby to her,” she said, trembling in surprise.

“Thank you for saving my purse, young man,” the woman said.

“It’s my pleasure,” said Jake.

“Okay, Jake. I have to leave now,” Jane said and walked away. Jake’s mood got better.

On his way to his house, his phone rang. It was his friend, Collins. 

"Hey, Jake," Collins started.

"What's the matter, Collins?", asked Jake.

"That new girl Jane is going out with your archenemy, Jake Hutchins". 

"What?"

"Yes, I saw them go out".

Jake sighed.

"Don't worry, Jake. You come to college and talk to her again".

"Okay, Collins. Bye," said Jake and hanged the call. His frustration knew no bounds.. He put on his suit and started jumping building after building. Hutchins and Jake were college mates, and they didn’t get along with each other. He was another handsome man.

….

On the following day, Jake went to the college and to his surprise saw that Jane was waiting for him. This time he knew he wouldn't miss the chance to go out with her. He decided to reveal his identity to get her attention better. 

"Let's go to the coffee shop again," invited Jake.

"Okay, but before you run away, say the reason to me,” said Jane.

"Okay," said Jake with a smile. They were happily chatting, but this happiness didn't last long. Everyone in the streets started running. They were afraid of something. Jake and Jane went to see what was happening. It was the Trapshot again. 

 She called the police immediately. But, Jake started running away.  

"What are you doing, Jake?", shouted Jane. 

“I am afraid of Trapshot. I am going home,” he replied. But soon The Big Jumper swung into action. This time the police had come on time.  

“ You cannot escape today, Trapshot. The police have come to arrest you on time,” The Big Jumper said, triumphantly.

But Trapshot just gave a wild grin and the police started attacking The Big Jumper. Jake was very confused. 

He fled the scene and found a place on a tall skyscraper to think what was happening around him. Suddenly, he saw a poster saying “Please defeat Trapshot. He has got the police in his hands”.

Jake thought,”that could also be the reason for the police attacking me. Today I will end his story”. Suddenly he remembered some familiar faces. The woman to whom he had given the purse and the thief were among the police force. He was very confused. 

 He thought he had to talk to Jane to clear some of his doubts as he trusted Jane a lot. 

Jake called Jane to meet him in his house.

Jane arrived in an hour and sat down to talk with him. 

"Okay, Jake. What is it?", Jane asked eagerly.

"Who are you? Can you say something about yourself,” Jake asked.

“What is it, Jake? You appear tensed up”.

“I trust you, but, I want to know more about you”.

“Hmm, okay. But do you know that people are talking about Trapshot coming to the police station and having a strong conversation with the police?”Jane asked, to divert him from knowing about her.

“Really! This explains a lot”, Jake exclaimed.

“What does it explain?” she asked.

“Nothing. Just an expression”.

 “Okay, why did you call me, Jake?”  

" I have to say one important thing to you, Jane".

"I am The Big Jumper”.

“What? Are you joking! Jake".

He touched his chest and his suit appeared. 

“Now do you believe? I have to touch this button on my chest to become The Big Jumper,” Jake said, delightedly waiting for her response.

“Wow!”

Jake made his suit disappear and said,” I have to tell you another important thing”.

“You are full of surprises, Jake”.

“Andy and I were childhood friends," Jake started.

"Who is Andy?"

"Wait. We loved technology, but I didn't take any effort to innovate things. But he did. He was an ardent boy. At the summer holiday of 11th grade, he started to make a suit. I was eager to find what suit it was. He revealed it to me and it was a jumper suit, which I use right now. I liked it very much and I wanted to own it. But Andy refused to give it to me. So, I stole the Jumper suit. From then on, I am using his suit to save people and he started to do terrorizing things to get back his suit. He doesn't want to be a villain, but I had made him one. He isn’t the kind of person who blackmails people as I know him. I never shared this with anyone," Jake said with a sigh. 

“It’s okay, Jake. Don’t worry,” Jane said and embraced him. But Jake felt something on his hands. It was a handcuff.

Jane touched her ear and then only did Jake notice that she had an earpiece in her left ear. 

"Confirmed, Sir. You may come.", she said. She stood up and showed her identity card to him. She was a police officer.

" What did you do right now?"Jake asked, panicking.

"I am a spy. Trapshot aka Andy had come to the police station. We were afraid and took weapons for our defence. But he had come unarmed. He lodged a complaint against The Big Jumper. We were surprised when we heard that The Big Jumper had stolen the jumper suit from him. We didn't believe him so we started to investigate it. He also said that every fight was planned by The Big Jumper and that it was an attempt to distract the police and the people to do other crimes like robbery and kidnapping. It was a valid point that he had given and he was not wrong. You were the one who planned the robbery and also the kidnapping of the small girl to distract the police. He said that he had saved the girl from the rogue gang. You are not the hero, Jake. Andy is. He also said that The Big Jumper's name was Jake. He didn't remember the last name so we were a little confused. So I was sent to know about you and Jake Hutchins. The thief and the woman’s purse getting robbed was all our set-up to find out your real identity. Now we have found out the secret of your power and you were right about his character," Jane explained.

“You gave me a big surprise, Jane,” Jake said, ironically.

 Many police cars were standing in straight rows to take Jake to prison. Andy was also there. 

"Come back as my friend, Jake," Andy said.

Jake was taken into the police van with dozens of policemen to make sure that Jake cannot escape.

….

The head police officer decided to say that they had arrested Trapshot so that Andy would continue to win the trust of people as The Big Jumper.

A wild grin came on Jake's face as he knew what was going to happen next.


He knew that from then on he would be a disturbance to the world.



July 23, 2020 14:28

You must sign up or log in to submit a comment.

277 comments

05:29 Aug 13, 2020

I love to learn that with your young creative mind you have written stories. When I read I was happy and astonished in your fluency and handling of the language. I wish you to write successful short stories, thrillers and novels.

Reply

Keerththan 😀
06:04 Aug 13, 2020

Thank you for commenting.

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Ashley Patterson
18:15 Aug 10, 2020

Loved it!!!! Had me wanting to read more

Reply

Keerththan 😀
02:12 Aug 11, 2020

Thank you for reading, Ashley. Glad you liked my story. Would you mind liking my story?

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Cheryl Fulks
14:35 Aug 10, 2020

Good story, nice twist at the end.

Reply

Keerththan 😀
15:07 Aug 10, 2020

Thanks.

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Aditya Pillai
14:00 Aug 10, 2020

Great job. Nice action and fast paced plot. Keep it up!

Reply

Keerththan 😀
15:06 Aug 10, 2020

Thank you for reading, Aditya.

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Jan H
13:14 Aug 10, 2020

Your storyline is great. I liked the twist at the end. Keep up the writing. We only improve if we keep practicing. :)

Reply

Keerththan 😀
13:24 Aug 10, 2020

Thank you for reading. Yes, practise makes man perfect. Keep writing and stay safe, Jan.

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Opeyemi Lawal
08:33 Aug 10, 2020

Great story. I love the ending.

Reply

Keerththan 😀
08:41 Aug 10, 2020

Thank you for reading. I am glad you liked the ending.

Reply

Opeyemi Lawal
22:55 Aug 10, 2020

You are welcome

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Show 1 reply
08:30 Aug 10, 2020

Very good story, I like the twist at the end.

Reply

Keerththan 😀
08:41 Aug 10, 2020

Thank you for reading. I am glad you liked my story.

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Kirti G
02:47 Aug 07, 2020

Good job Keerththan. You've got real talent at writing. Keep it up. 🙂🙂

Reply

Keerththan 😀
04:18 Aug 07, 2020

Thank you for reading.

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Ramkumar Gupta
02:29 Aug 07, 2020

Amazing story. Keep it up son.

Reply

Keerththan 😀
04:18 Aug 07, 2020

Thank you for reading.

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Ramkumar Gupta
02:27 Aug 07, 2020

Amazing story by a little kid. Speaks volumes of his talent and understanding. May yoi continue to excel.

Reply

Keerththan 😀
04:17 Aug 07, 2020

Thank you.

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
17:05 Aug 04, 2020

Nice story with excellent dialogues and awesome end . Congratulations

Reply

Keerththan 😀
17:15 Aug 04, 2020

Thank you for reading.

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
D. Jaymz
19:42 Aug 03, 2020

I liked your story, especially how you finished it. Nice twist. Your story flowed along at an easy pace so that I wanted to keep reading. To be able to write like that is very hard. You did it well. The dialogue is very good. It was a great story, with a little work it will be an exceptional story 👍 ~~~~~~ There will need to be revisions to clean up the grammar (but that is something we all have to do 🙄). You could also tighten up the story and reduce the word count by not stating the obvious. For example, for the sentence, 'Tr...

Reply

Keerththan 😀
02:16 Aug 04, 2020

Thank you for commenting. I didn't want to increase the word count. Though not his real name is a clue for the story. To hide his identity is not necessary I think. Thanks. Next time I will try to improve. Thank you for reading.

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Maya Reynolds
14:50 Aug 03, 2020

Great twist at the end!

Reply

Keerththan 😀
15:50 Aug 03, 2020

Thank you. Would you mind liking my story? Thank you for reading.

Reply

Keerththan 😀
16:33 Aug 03, 2020

Thank you for liking my story.

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Show 1 reply
09:31 Aug 02, 2020

Hi Keerthu First of all sorry for taking such a long time to read your story. While reading the initial part, I thought it is another super hero story, but your twist in the end made the story interesting. You may want to work on the details and dialogues to make it more interesting otherwise it is a great effort. Keep writing.

Reply

Keerththan 😀
09:34 Aug 02, 2020

No problem. Many authors have said about my detail improving and also said that dialogues were forced. I will try to improve myself. Then too this is just my second story. Would you also like my story. Thank you for reading.😀😀😀😉😉

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Jonathan Blaauw
12:18 Aug 01, 2020

This is a cool story. You’ve done a lot with the limited word count and while that’s sometimes inadvisable in short stories (the KISS principle and all that) your rather complicated plot resolves itself nicely in the end. I never felt lost or overwhelmed while reading, even when a second Jake appeared (which was an error, I’d guess) it didn’t derail the overall flow. Which speaks to your skill as a writer. I’d love to see what you could do with a novel! Well done.

Reply

Keerththan 😀
12:32 Aug 01, 2020

Thank you.

Reply

Show 0 replies
Keerththan 😀
06:56 Oct 14, 2020

I have always wanted to ask you and today I am asking it! What is the KISS principle?

Reply

Jonathan Blaauw
08:52 Oct 14, 2020

Ah, excellent question. KISS = Keep It Simple, Stupid! 😂😂 I've been meaning to get to your new stories, by the way. I'll get there, don't worry. In the meantime, well done on all your points. Keep going 😀

Reply

Keerththan 😀
08:58 Oct 14, 2020

Okay, thank you for explaining 😂😂 Okay. Thank you!

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Show 1 reply
Show 2 replies
05:34 Aug 01, 2020

hi keerththan your name is as interesting as your story. I felt like i was watching a spider man movie while reading. keep writing and would love to read your stories in future too. sreedevi.

Reply

Keerththan 😀
05:43 Aug 01, 2020

Thank you.

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
05:33 Aug 01, 2020

hi keerththan your name is as interesting as your story. I felt like i was watching a spider man movie while reading. keep writing and would love to read your stories in future too. sreedevi.

Reply

Keerththan 😀
05:42 Aug 01, 2020

Thank you for reading.

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Vicky S
20:49 Jul 29, 2020

Hi, I really enjoyed your story. Your description and dialogue was really good

Reply

Keerththan 😀
01:00 Jul 30, 2020

Thank you for reading. I am glad you enjoyed my story.

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Tyra Johnson
18:48 Jul 29, 2020

nice story.

Reply

Keerththan 😀
00:59 Jul 30, 2020

Thanks.

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Jubilee Forbess
15:15 Jul 29, 2020

I loved the twist that he was a villain in the end! I wouldn't have thought of that. Very excellent, keep writing as always.

Reply

Keerththan 😀
15:37 Jul 29, 2020

Thank you for reading. Stay healthy and keep writing, Rhondalise.

Reply

Show 0 replies
Show 1 reply
Reedsy | Default — Editors with Marker | 2024-05

Bring your publishing dreams to life

The world's best editors, designers, and marketers are on Reedsy. Come meet them.