When Grandma fell and broke her leg, my family rushed to help her. What did she need from her house now that she was living with her mother in a one-story home? Did she want us to take care of her heating and electric bills? Did she want Dad and Uncle Justin to move her laundry machine from the basement to the ground floor? The questions continued as such, with the adults wondering what they could do. However, my siblings and my cousins wanted to help, too.
So, when my younger brother asked Grandma, βWhat about your Christmas cookies? How will you make them this year?β she told him that he could bake them with his sister and cousins for her. The five of us jumped on the idea and scheduled a time for us to bake these cookies.
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On Saturday, December 12, we met in Grandmaβs kitchen to bake her cookies. She called us and said that she should have all the ingredients in her pantry and fridge. The recipe was in her favorite recipe book. While my brother, Joseph, and my cousin, Joanna, looked for her recipe book and my cousin Maddi tried to preheat the oven, Liam and I looked for her cookie cutters, which my grandma swore were in the basement. It took a few minutes, but we found the cookie cutters and brought them upstairs. Maddi had preheated the oven, an amazing feat for a ten-year-old. However, even with Maddi helping, my brother and Joanna still couldnβt find the recipe book.
βI think we will have to just bake from memory, guys,β Joanna said. βItβs okay. Alyssa and Liam, you have made these cookies with her before, right?β
I replied uncertainly, βUm, yeah, I have, but never alone. And we had the recipe book.β
βWell, it canβt be too hard, right? Sugar, and flour!β Joseph declared, like any other eight-year-old would.
βWe need more than that, Joseph! We will also need butter, baking soda (or is it powder?), and most likely an egg or two.β Liam told him. Liam loved to bake and was twelve.
As the oldest and the babysitter, I felt I should step in before they started an argument. βOkay! We have some options. We can look up a recipe on my phone-β
βNo, then they arenβt Grandmaβs cookies!β Maddi protested.
I continued, βWe could call Grandma and ask for the recipe-β
Joanna interrupted me. βLetβs do that!β
βOr we could bake from memory.β I paused, waiting for someone to interrupt. When no one did, I said, βI agree with Joanna, we should call Grandma and see if she can tell us where the recipe is.β
Everyone nodded, and five seconds later Grandmaβs face was on my phone screen. βHey guys!β she greeted us.
βHi! How are you feeling?β I asked.
βMuch better. I canβt wait for those cookies!β
Liam started, βAbout the cookies-β
βWe canβt find the recipe!β Joseph shouted.
βOh, I could have sworn I left it in the recipe book... is it in with the cookie cutters?β We all shook our heads. βHmm. Where is that recipe? Oh, I know! Check the other recipe folder- the yellow one.β There was a pause where she seemed to be listening to something or someone on her end. βSorry, guys, lunch is here! Iβll talk to you later!β With, that, she ended the call.
βHere is the yellow folder,β Maddi said from behind me. βThereβs nothing in it.β
βWhy is it labeled βcoffeeβ? Are there any other yellow folders?β I asked.
βNo, this is the only one. The only folder and the only yellow folder.β
βDarn it!β Joanna replied to her sisterβs response.
Liam added, βI guess we will have to try this from memory. What do you think we need? I know we need sugar, eggs, and baking soda or powder.β
βButter!β
βVanilla extract!β
We gathered the ingredients and guessed about how much of each we would need. We decided to put in 1 teaspoon of baking soda, 2 cups of sugar, 1 egg, Β½ teaspoon vanilla extract, ΒΌ cup milk, and 1 cup of butter. We measured the ingredients and put it in the oven, even though it wasnβt quite as thick as batter was supposed to be. This made cutting out shapes more difficult, but we managed. 10 minutes in the oven, and the cookies didnβt rise. They burned. We looked at the list of ingredients, and it was a few minutes before we remembered what we missed.
βThe flour! I told you we need the flour!β Joseph announced. We all looked at the list, and realized what Joseph said was true: we forgot the flour.
βWe should call Grandma again; maybe she has the recipe now,β Maddi suggested.
I unlocked my phone and called her, putting her on speaker. βHello again! How was your lunch?β I inquired.
βHey, Alyssa, Liam, Joanna, Maddi, and Joseph! Lunch was delicious! I'm sure the cookies are just as good!β We all glanced at the tray, which would probably have burned cookies stuck on it for the next century.
Joanna said hesitatingly, βWell, we still couldnβt find the recipe. So, we tried to bake from memory. Letβs just say it didnβt work.β
βOh no! The recipe wasnβt in the folder? You could check the bookshelf in the living room. It might be on there.β Liam rushed out of the room to look.
Before we could say anything else, Grandma said, βBye guys! Have fun and I love you!β and then hung up. Again.
Liam came back empty-handed. βThereβs no recipe book, folder, or paper on the bookshelf. Does she even have a recipe?β
βWell, I guess we will try again. With flour this time,β Joseph commented.
βGood idea,β Joanna agreed.
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We tried again. So, after adding the same amounts of ingredients as last time (this time with 2 Β½ cups flour), we baked cookies. This time, the cookies looked like cookies.
βWe should try them. You know, to make sure we didnβt mess them up,β Joseph suggested. Probably he just wanted to eat a cookie.
I looked at Liam, who shrugged. βWhy not?β he said. We all grabbed a cookie and bit into it. We all promptly made a face.
βThese taste... interesting,β Liam observed.
βNo, they are disgusting!β was my brotherβs less polite way of phrasing. βWhat happened?β
βWell, Grandma hasnβt been home in a while. Maybe some of her food spoiled?β I suggested. βLetβs look at the milk.β
We looked at the milk to discover that it had indeed spoiled. Liam commented, βI donβt remember adding milk to her cookies.β
I thought about that and replied, βNow that you say it, I donβt either. Letβs just throw the milk away and use the recipe we made. We can see what happens.β
βShould we call Grandma to see if she knows where the recipe is yet?β Maddi asked.
βI think we can do it this time. What do you guys think?β
βThird timeβs the charm!β Joanna shouted.
βWe got this!β Joseph added.
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This time, we added the same amount of ingredients, making sure nothing had expired and that all the ingredients were in the batter before baking them. We took them out of the oven, and they looked perfect. However, the real test was the taste. We took a bite, and they were not bad. They were delicious!
"Now we just have to get the icing right.β I commented.
βNo, we donβt,β Maddi said. βWe can just use the icing recipe on the back of the powdered sugar. Thatβs what Grandma does, I think.β
βI second that. We donβt have time to make three batches of icing.β Liam answered.
We found the recipe from the powdered sugar and made some icing for it. The icing turned out perfect, and we put it on the cookies. Joanna found sprinkles in the pantry, and I melted some chocolate chips in the microwave so we could drizzle it on top.
We were about to call Grandma and tell her the cookies were done when she called me.
βGuess what I found!β she announced.
βWhat?β Joseph asked excitedly.
βThe recipe for the cookies! It was saved in my phone!β
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Wow! I loved that and the fact that the recipe was on the grandma's PHONE was hilarious! One small thing, in this sentence, "Probably he just wanted to eat a cookie. " I think it might be stronger if you wrote it like this, "He obviously just wanted a cookie." But that's just personal preference so up to you! Also, I just posted a new story, it would be great if you could give me some critiques! :) Be prepared though, it's definitely a different genre than my first story...
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Of course, Iβll look right now!! Thank you, Janey, for catching that! Now that you say that, it does sound way better to rephrase it. Unfortunately, it wonβt let me edit the story anymore. But I will definitely fix it on the word document!! :)
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Haha no problem, I'm glad you liked it! And gotcha! :)
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Hi Katie! I've posted my next story. Would you give it a read when you are free and let me know what you felt about it? :)
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Of course, Akshaya!!!
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A great twist (i.e. it is surprising yet has a sense of inevitability)- I didn't see it coming in that it was on the Grandmother's phone! It was quite a lot of characters to introduce at once but I managed to keep them apart in my head, having different letters for the start of each name (as you have done for nearly all of them except for the J's) helps with this. It is great to break stereotypes and have a phone savvy Grandma. Well done.
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Thank you, Mary Kate, for leaving a kind and thoughtful comment!! :) edit: okay, I have no idea why that commented like 6 times. I am not tech savvy :P
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Hi Katie! I loved this story of yours as well! It was short, cute and funny! The whole cooking with siblings/ friends is a great experience indeed! Just a suggestion...maybe you could add a few scenes where the family members try out the cookies (all the batches :P) or for one of the cousins to be a bit afraid to be the guinea pig? You know, something like that to add more humor maybe? I thoroughly enjoyed this read, Katie and do ping me when you when you have posted another story! Happy writing! P.S. I just realized, you ...
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OH NO I didnβt!! Oops. Youβre right; the golden totally slipped my mind. The submission has been approved though, and now I canβt edit it :( Thank you for reading!! I am glad you liked it and grateful for your feedback!!
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That's alright! I still liked every bit of this story! My pleasure! :)
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The dialogue in this story really carries the characters and their different personalities. It's entertaining to see them collide. The sibling relationships make me believe these are real people.
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Haha thank you so much for leaving a comment!! I actually based the relationships between the kids on my actual family when we were younger. :) I probably had way too much fun trying to find names for my characters that are similar (but not too similar) to my familyβs names. Are there any stories of yours that you would like me to read?
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You're under no obligation, but I posted a story earlier today called "A sense Of Humor". Thank you in advance.
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Awesome! I will read it later (I may or may not be in class right now) :)
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PART 4 IS OUT!
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This was very good too, I wrote my story from this same prompt. I like how you had the kids do it. It showed teamwork and problem solving, fantastic..
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Thank you Sheila!!
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I loved the ending and the cookie spacers brought a smile to my face. I agree with the suggestions below about stretching out the pace with some tension, but I enjoyed the quick read and I gave it a like. Kudos!
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Alright here I go. I thought the story was cute, I liked the interaction between everyone, how they all had some sort of voice. I liked that it was essentially an easy read. I really liked how the dialogue is a bit childish and how we are actually able to get a sense of the characters personas. What I think needs to be improved here is the plot, the story is pretty simple and direct. I think to really build a strong story you could include some sort of struggle (it doesn't need to be hardship), something as easy as a fight between th...
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Yes, thank you, it was very helpful! I am glad you liked the characters :) I intended this to be an easy and quick read, but I agree that there is something missing. Thank you for ideas about the plot! Exactly the kind of helpful critique I am looking for. I will take a look at one of your stories right now!
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This is great, Katie! I love your cookie spacers and how their grandma had the recipe the whole time! It gave it a little bit of a humorous twist!
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Thank you, Katelyn!!
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Anytime!
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Yes, that is helpful!! This story was meant to be a quick and easy read, but I agree, there was something missing. I agree with you that adding stronger plot points could make it more interesting... I usually struggle with writing descriptions. Do you have any ideas on how I can improve that part of my writing?
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Thank you :) I appreciate it!!!
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Hey guys! I would really appreciate it if you would take the time to leave a comment, saying what you liked and disliked, maybe how I could improve. Telling me what you think really helps me improve my writing. And, if you leave a comment, I will read one of your stories and give you feedback on it, too.
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Love this!
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The ending, haha. Looooooooove it. You have a unique story telling voice and I'm happy I found your stories. Can't wait to read more of your current and future submissions. β€οΈ Really wonderful work here. π€π―
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Thank you SOOO much! Your comment really made my day. β€οΈ Iβm not sure when I will be submitting a new story because Iβm currently working on a novel (the link to the first few chapters is actually in my bio, if youβre interested π), but who knows? Maybe Iβll be inspired by the prompts on Friday... π
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