In June 2011, it was heavy rains of the monsoon day. the torrential down poured full across the city. It had entered into the many houses and veranda.it had brought with them many diseases; one of them was the malaria epidemic, which made everyone on havoc in life.
It had been raining heavily consecutively for three days. The rain-soaked area and surrounding, it was battered and hitting normal life, disrupting railroad life. Mumbai was known as" A curse of God" malaria epidemic area.
the working-class area was reported and diagnosed as a malaria spot. the news got leaked like wildfire. The rumor got everyone feared.
The Dawn brought for everyone horror and fear.
The state-run hospital had a sudden surge of and a spike in the count of malaria. government-run hospital crowded with patients.private doctor hushed up and welled up money from patients into bulky amount. the hospital lacked reserved bed for patients, some patients admitted into the hospital veranda and open spaces.having had injected a syringe of glucose bottle hanging on a stand stood on beside patients.
In such a situation, Bodhi lived in the chawl. He played out as Samaritan into chawl life. the living condition of chawl was very critical and dangerous.had faced poor sanitation, the issue of water sanitation, lacking hygienic conditions in the crawl. Around their home lacked repellent equipment.the chawl constructed for sweeper workers. He was the son of the sweeper worker. the rooms were single small room measures 200 ft area.it accommodating and consisted of 10 of a family member. They had a little privacy. A series of mosquitoes attacked in the evening. circled around the corner in the room at night. only women would sleep in a room at night. remaining members would spread bed next to gully or open space out of the room.
His morning started like such an incident. The whole was areas infected by a mosquito. It was a basic problem here. Local government took action to extricate it.fogging and pest control all over chawl every week.it also failed.
His mother was bed stricken for two years. he used to pay rent every month.wife didn't have permission for a job. Because they just got newly married.in meager income, it was difficult to run a family. every situation has a solution, but it had not.
The disease and Illness did not have to apply theory and method. He lived in a very critical situation. He worked as a sales executive in a train marketing company. Whatever he sold in train.
The marketing product he used to sell out and he had to skill to bargaining. His earning was depend on sales Basis daily. He was a first-time marketing acupressure ring on the price of ten rupees. Next was the massage machine. It was rapid give result products. It profited him daily on hundred rupees per piece. It was good earning from traveling and give smart responses to earn and sales daily basis.
He wanted to hawk new products In his mind. A new product which had been just company launched....it was an ultrasound machine.
When we get in trouble, we go any extent to get rid of them. Then result in fail at last. when Such like incident came across. When malaria-like diseases abrupted. Everyone took advantage of that tragedy.
Including quack, apothecary, or fake doctors, made mockery or disguise the face of well-wishers, and jumped onto the race. The public blindly attracted to sweet words suddenly.
He one day found a solution to it. He bought in bulky stock that product. He demonstrated his brand of malaria dispeller machine by train.
He started advertising his product by train. whoever was a while victim of malaria hearing his speech by train. He charmed all passengers with his talks and speech.and product which was very cheap and affordable to expenses.
Now He showed his product, he said, that 'this is a mosquito repellent"...it has ultrasound system...that condemn mosquito to get in the room and prevent them".....this sound only manufactured by china company, putting mental activity of Indian people and malaria insects,....how to operate this is simple….first plug into the electric board and switch on"
He got tired that day.his selling average was crossed the mountain. He went late-night home.took left turn and caught way to home, in that time he stopped at near Sheetal medical at Ganesh chowk.he purchased body lotion to apply over the body to save from mosquito bite. It was late 11 p.m. in the night when reached at home. the street dogs were barking near Chawl gate, dogs sniffed him and confirmed his existence of that area person, they left moving his tails.
When he came night late, the home door was slightly ajar, family half asleep. bed stricken old woman sensed his presence. he got refreshed himself. had dinner finished. then laid on spread blanket near wife.he put out the light, except ultrasound machine put on.a sound emerged from it was an only sense by insect.human could not sense and hear. he slowly closed his eye, took a big sigh, and slept.
Suddenly a sound of wailing came from the cot.on it laid his mother, who had been bed stricken for the last 2 years. She was caressed by family.she would feed my family and would be cleansed by family.everything done on cot.she could not move anyhow.
He got up by hearing a moaning sound suddenly. she pointed her finger at the kitchen side. indicated at something. he understood her indication.he brought in a glass water. her throat was thirsty.she drank water in one gulp.he guessed that his old mother could not see tomorrow day anyhow. he was sad by his guess.he was feeding her spoon by spoon water. He sat beside her for a few minutes. he moved his finger over her forehead. He confirmed that her death comes near. He did not wake anybody….thought that the next early morning when day broke, he would touch news to first his wife after the water filling was done.
Once again he took a deep sigh and looked at that machine one of them plug-in socket; which he sold bulky amount in train. He did not believe the machine would work as guidance given by the company." use and throw " was the company's motto. but slowly as vastly he got fast relief.he did not feel a mosquito bite. he never got bite rash over his body part. he confirmed that the machine was working well. its effect was growing rapidly. that night he delved into a dream.fast got asleep on the bed.
Next morning when he woke up, he exclaimed loudly, when opened his house door, he saw that insects gathered around the door frame,, cockroaches, worms, stranded dogs, cat, rats, rodents, all surround and circling around the door in one-row .ants climbed on the window, mosquito gangs circled around ultrasound machine stuck into it. rats standing still on the drainage line...all of them had taken one's position like soldier raids on terrorists.
Meanwhile, bed laden old woman, who had been bed stricken for the last 2 years was now could move on the bed and started to speak. she tried to move and speak to family members.
"It's a miracle of the machine!"..or anything else. he mumbled in the mouth.
When he switched off the button of that machine in very excitement of victory of his machine, at that moment a very dreadful event happened, as soon as he switched off the machine, all thing changed as nothing happened before. everything erased from a sweet dream,....a bed stricken old woman took the last sigh.
She was dead!!!
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Critique Circle I understand writing in English as a second language is hard. You can simplify by telling it first person. "I'm a salesman from Mumbai, and the recent floods, which cause an increase in malaria, make me rich selling an ultrasound mosquito repellant." This does several things for you. First, you are able to stick to present tense for every verb. Second, you center on a character and will keep the story focused on them. Third, you can write down their thoughts. Finally, any odd usage pattern is part of who the character is- so...
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Thank yu sir,you have commented my work.its great explained and it give understanding next writing.its luck that such like big author comments on my work I will do my best try sir.once again thak you sir
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Nice story. be careful with your capitalization of the first word of a new sentence. Your punctuation is a little shaky in places, double commas etc. Always proofread two or three times. Well done, keep writing!
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Thanks,your precious comments .I am lucky such big author comments on our work ..I will do my best
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No worries Swapnil. I'm just a struggling writer like yourself!
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