🌠 The Stars Between Us 🌠

Submitted into Contest #83 in response to: Write a fantasy story about water gods or spirits.... view prompt

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Contemporary Fiction

Author’s Note: This story doesn’t fit the prompt. I have had the idea to write this story for a very long time and started writing it back in late November/early December, but it wasn’t really going anywhere and I didn’t know what I should put in this story anymore. After a while, I finally figured it out. I would base this story off of a song. The song is called β€œWe’ll Be The Stars” by Sabrina Carpenter. I hope you enjoy my new story!Β 

Magic. The most complicated thing in life. You don’t know what to expect when you're dealing with it. But, when I was with my sister everything seemed like magic. The way she laughed. The way she talked. The way she hugged. Her positive energy. It all seemed like magic. Now, the only way I feel that magic is when I look up at the stars in the night sky, which is exactly what I’m doing right now.Β 

My sister made me want to reach for the stars. We always tried things together; things we didn’t know were possible. When we looked up at the night sky together the stars would make it come alive. All of our fears would drift away and become our hopes. It was like we climbed out of every single window that was locked.

She used to always say, β€œWe can reach the constellations.” I would trust her with my life. All our dreams were breaking out. β€œWe’re never going to turn to dust. All we really need is us. Don’t be scared to close your eyes. We’re never going to die, we’ll just turn into stars.” 

My sister was so inspiring. She made sure we never stepped too far, and that we were never letting go of ourselves and held on to who we are. I believe that when it is time to close our eyes, people will see us in the sky; we’ll be the stars. But, then the fire happened. Of course, she had to be the one who died. She had to be the one who left. The most inspiring person ever to walk on earth left the world. I lost hope when it happened. I just wanted to give up on my life. When I looked up at the stars that night, I felt like myself again; like she was watching me from the stars.Β 

She would let me in and hold me close. While she filled my heart with simple notes. I would let her take my breath and hold me high. So that I could feel the city lights; they were glowing under me.Β 

β€œDon’t be scared to close your eyes, we're never going to die; you’ll just turn into the stars.” Her words were repeating in my head.Β 

I walked back inside and upstairs to my room quietly; not wanting to wake up my parents. I climbed into my bed and wondered if I was going to wake up the next morning. I kind of wished that I wouldn’t so I would be able to reunite with my sister in the stars. Guess what, I got what I wished for… 


I hoped you liked my story!!!!! This is my first time using semicolons and I'm still not so sure how to use them, so I probably made some mistakes. Please let me know how I can use them and if I did use them correctly! Let me know how you liked it and it was pretty short so of course, I don't have enough words. I do think it may have been rushed, but I really don't know how else to write it, but I'm still proud of it and don't want to change it.

Oh and here is a link to the song:

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ti6J_9UPIsE&list=RDti6J_9UPIsE&start_radio=1




February 28, 2021 02:19

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Lucia :)
23:01 Mar 16, 2021

aHH this story was so short and sweet, I WAS LEGIT CRYING AHHAHAHA ahem. ❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️❄️

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02:07 Mar 17, 2021

Thanks!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Lucia :)
12:50 Mar 17, 2021

Np!

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14:21 Mar 17, 2021

:D

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Ruby Collins
22:55 Mar 03, 2021

This is such a good story it is sad though but I like sad sad stories I it is just a great it made me feel emotions well readding it withch i like I like how you rote it and I like how her sister said that they going to the stars and it was like her sister was watching down on her from the stars also snow flake amoge I don't know how to put one because I am on my comuter so i will just say it snow flake

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23:01 Mar 03, 2021

Ok! Thank you so so so much, Ruby!!!! You are so kind and awesome!

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This was short and sweet, and I'm cryinggggggggggg this was filled with very rich emotion and it had almost a poetry feel to it at the beginning while still staying a format of a story. It's really cool how you base a lot of your stories off songs and I think you do a very good job of capturing the artists feelings. And the titleeeeee. *chefs kiss* perfection One thing you can do(only if you want) is if you go back into edit mode you can delete the "hi's" now that it has been submitted. Off the charts amazing CJ! You've grown so much ...

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22:09 Feb 28, 2021

Thank you so so much! I will go delete the "hi's" right now! Thanks for letting me know that I can do that!

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Of course!

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Danny E.G.
13:31 Feb 28, 2021

This was a pretty sweet short story, I really enjoyed reading it :)) I love how most stories I've read from you were based off of songs, it seems like you relate to the artists so well. And especially to make a story this amazing from them, it's a talent. Great job, CJ....I don't think I would've wanted this written in any other way either, you've already did soooo great writing this (that and interpreting the song) :D

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16:48 Feb 28, 2021

Thank you so so much! That's so nice of you to say! Oh and I edited the story so it has a link to the song. I really like turning songs into stories; it's something you could do if you don't know what to write about which happens pretty often to me.

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Danny E.G.
23:19 Feb 28, 2021

No problem :)) Oh yeah, I did check the song out :D that's a really nice way to get yourself to write a story you'll love :)

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22:31 Mar 03, 2021

Yes, definitely. It helped me get through my writer's block I had I think two months ago.

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Danny E.G.
22:59 Mar 03, 2021

Ohh that's great! Do you still have it now? :b

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23:00 Mar 03, 2021

Nope!

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Mazie Gray
14:31 Apr 23, 2021

Cadence- This story was beautiful. Thinking back to your first story to reading this one--the transformation is astounding. You have improved your writing that it's better than mine. You really captured the way that the narrator felt about her sister. Seriously, you did a fantastic job. Also, I love the title! Keep writing. -Brooke

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14:38 Apr 23, 2021

Thank you so much, Brooke! Except, I don't think my writing is better than yours.

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Mazie Gray
14:39 Apr 23, 2021

You're welcome! You won't believe it, but it definitely is. ^^

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14:40 Apr 23, 2021

I find that hard to believe, but thanks anyway.

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Mazie Gray
14:40 Apr 23, 2021

No problem.

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14:41 Apr 23, 2021

:D

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Ant Man 🐜
23:11 Mar 31, 2021

πŸ˜β„οΈ I saw you asked what we were doing over spring break! I'm going to Arizona! 😁 How about you?

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00:06 Apr 01, 2021

Just staying home (Ugh it's so boring!) and working out.

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Ant Man 🐜
00:28 Apr 01, 2021

That sounds cozy! Maybe trying a new hobby would be fun πŸ€”πŸ˜

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02:48 Apr 01, 2021

Yea, maybe.

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Chloe Hanna
21:21 Mar 04, 2021

You really have a way with words!

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23:06 Mar 04, 2021

Thank you so much!

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20:41 Mar 13, 2021

ok! Thanks.

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My pleasure. :)

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