The kid , gothel and the golden book of dreams

Submitted into Contest #270 in response to: Write a story about someone searching for a missing ingredient, literally or metaphorically.... view prompt

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Kids Fantasy Inspirational

Dedicated to my brother Santi and to all adult kids who lost hope and left their dreams in the land of dreams.


There was a land in Trickily Boom,

A magical place where the brooms swept the gloom.

No Hogwarts here, no enchanted wood,

Just a cabin so plain, yet strangely good.


Wool on the walls, the floors, and the air,

Everything simple, yet full of care.

No grand adventure, no mystical tool,

Just the coziest spot, where normal is cool.


A pure-hearted kid with dreams in his mind,

He wanted to be great, leave the rest behind.

Maybe Messi, Ronaldo, or Clint,


But how could he do it? That was the question indeed.


Day after day, his search felt incomplete,

He hunted for wisdom, both bitter and sweet.

Perhaps a touch of courage, fierce and bold,

And a hint of mischief to break the rules of the box.


With sweat on his brow, like armor to wear,

And tons of hard work, though his dream seemed rare.


With no guide or mentor, he began to stray,

As time crept by, his dream more and more slipped away.


Gothel from the dream realm saw him fall,

a kid with no hope, no dream left at all.


He searched for the answer, but couldn’t quite find, the piece of the puzzle he left behind.


One night, the Deide Gothel from the upper realm, saw the kid cry and so close to giving up. She crafted a book with gold pages, filled with old stories and wisdom through ages. The words etched deep, forever to stay, a guide for the dreamer, lighting his way.


Inside, his dream was written with care,

But one rule stood: no truth laid bare.

The key ingredient was hidden from sight,

But she gave him a whisper, a little spark of light.


The rest was up to him,

To discover the magic and see it within.


He opened the first page and through its magnet fell inside, like falling through a memory or an abysm of land. After the fog dissipated, there sat Messi, full of pride. Casually seated, enjoying a snack,

The kid couldn’t believe it—how wild was that!


He didn’t knew much to do and doubt if he should play. Instead, intrigued, he asked, “Do you know the way? What’s the secret that led you to play as the best of your kind, rising so high?”


Messi smiled with a gleam in his eye.

“Twenty grams of dedication,” Messi said,

“And a life full of practice, ahead.

Add it to the mix that one you already stir,

And watch how reality blends and make ways.”


The kid stood in awe, taking it in,

Could it be that simple? Could this be his win?


With these new ingredients, he’d give it a try, and maybe, one day, he, too, would fly.


Years rolled by, and he practiced with care,

But still, something was missing—something rare.


As more time passed by, the more his dream felt distant, just out of sight,

despite all his efforts, both day and night.


Eventually he forgot to strive, his dream seemed pointless, no reason to thrive.


Why continue with nothing to fix,

When the batter won’t rise and refuses to mix?


He swore in anger, feeling deceived,

Swore never to dream, as his father once told:“ I told you so, you already know, that dreams aren’t for people like us.”He started to think that his father was right.


Each day turned the same, dull, bleak, and gray, and slowly his spirit began to fade away. He vowed, in his anger, felt cheated, deceived, then threw with all his strength and far away, the gold book of dreams.


Then the second page opened wide, shocked and complied, he noticed his journey wasn’t ove ,there was still much to learn, and let your breath be taken away.


Drawn to the page, he slipped inside,

in the mirror stood by his side Ronaldo gave him a side eye. “Ah, there you are! I’ve been waiting for you, I knew you'd come .”


The boy, confused, asked, “What now? I’ve tried, but it seems like I’ve still missed something inside. What more could I add to reach the perfect flavor of them all?”


Ronaldo smiled, with a twinkle in his eye.

“Ahh, there’s your struggle—the root that makes you ache, it’s not the mix that will help you stand tall.


What you’re missing is belief, my friend,

That’s the key to make your dream ascend.


50 gr of belief, mix it in the batter you got there, that’s what you’re lacking—the secret you seek. Believe in your heart, in the magic of you, and watch your dream finally come true.”


With newfound hope, the boy felt restored,

Stirred and stirred, as his dreams soared.

Yet no kitchen timer, no final chime,

No signal to say, “It's done, it's time.”


Then Clint appeared, simple and shy,


The boy, perplexed, asked, “Who are you, and why?” No fame, no glory, just a plain face,“What could you possibly teach me in this dream-making race?”


Clint simply smiled, humble and calm, He added a pinch of salt, like a balm.


The pot shimmered gold, bright as the sun,

The kid thought, Finally, my time has begun!


“I’m perfect,” he cried,

“the recipe’s right, Now I can conquer, reach masterful heights!”


But Clint raised a finger, gently and slow,

“You’re rushing, my friend, there’s yet something to learn. The salt its just for stirring and makes it clearer, so take a good look, it’s not in the recipe, nor in the book.”


The kid peered in, confused by the sight,

“What do you see?” Clint asked with delight.


“I see myself, and nothing more,” The kid responded, unsure what was in store.


“Yes, indeed,” Clint nodded with grace, “No need for mentors, or idols to chase.

The truth is simple, and always raw and bare.Your path is your own— unique on its tones.”


You’re no longer a kid, but your heart’s still pure, it’s no easy task. To make real the dream realm, but through all your struggles, you’ve learned to endure.


The perfect ingredient? It never existed,

It was you all along, in the dream you insisted.


So the kid understood, in that radiant glow, He forged his own recipe, and let the rest go. 

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Traducido al español:



Dedicado a mi hermano Santi y a todos los niños adultos que perdieron la esperanza y dejaron sus sueños en la tierra de los sueños.



Había una tierra en Trickily Boom,

Un lugar mágico que barría la bruma.

No era Hogwarts, ni un bosque encantado,

Solo una cabaña, simple pero amado.


Lana en las paredes, en el aire flotaba,

Todo era sencillo, pero nada faltaba.

No había aventuras, ni herramientas de poder,

Solo el rincón más acogedor para ver.


Un niño de corazón puro, soñando en silencio,

Quería ser grande, alcanzar el firmamento.

Tal vez Messi, Ronaldo o Clint,

Pero, ¿cómo lo haría? Siguiendo su instinto al fin.


Día tras día buscaba y buscaba,

Sabiduría dulce, amarga, la mezclaba.

Tal vez un toque de valor y osadía,

Y un poco de travesura que le sonreía.

Con sudor en la frente, armadura en la piel,

Trabajaba con fuerza, aunque todo se ve mal.


Pero sin mentor, ni una guía que seguir,

Su sueño poco a poco comenzó a desistir.


Alguien del reino de sueños lo vio caer,

Un niño perdido, sin saber qué hacer.

Buscaba respuestas, pero no hallaba la paz,

La pieza del puzzle que quedó atrás.


Una noche, la Deide Gothel del reino superior,

Vio al niño llorar, perdiendo el fervor.


Ella creó un libro con páginas doradas,

Lleno de historias y de sabiduría añorada.

Las palabras grabadas, para siempre quedarán,

Una libro de sabiduria ancestral.


En sus paginas, su sueño fue escrito con cuidado,

Pero una regla existía: un secreto guardado.


El ingrediente clave estaba oculto de vista,

Pero ella le dio un susurro, una chispa en la pista.


De el dependia el resto,

Descubrir la magia, que el llevaba dentro.


Abrió la primera página y al instante cayó,

Y allí estaba Messi, con orgullo lo vio.

Sentado tranquilo, disfrutando un bocadillo,

El niño no lo creía—¡qué mundo sencillo!

Intrigado, preguntó, “¿Sabes el camino?

¿Cuál es el secreto que te hizo divino,

El mejor de tu clase, tan alto llegar?”


Messi sonrió, con un brillo al mirar.

Viendose en el pequeño un abismo de su propia alma reflejar.

“Veinte gramos de dedicación,” dijo con calma,

“Y una vida de práctica, esa es mi arma.

Añádelo a la mezcla que ya preparas,

Y verás cómo tus sueños se disparan.”


El niño asombrado, lo empezó a pensar,

¿Podría ser tan simple? ¿Eso es todo al final?


Con estos ingredientes, lo iba a intentar,

Y tal vez, un día, él también volará.

Pasaron los años, y practicó con tesón,

Pero aún algo faltaba en su corazón.


Su sueño se sentía cada vez más lejano,

Aunque trabajaba, tanto tarde como temprano.

El tiempo pasó, y olvidó soñar,

Su sueño parecía imposible de alcanzar.


¿Por qué seguir si nada cambiaba?

Si la masa no subía, y nada cuajaba.

Juró con enojo, sintiéndose traicionado,

Juró nunca más soñar, como su padre había aconsejado:

“Los sueños no son para gente como nosotros.”

Comenzó a pensar que su padre tenía razón.

Cada día igual, gris y apagado,

Y poco a poco, su espíritu fue desvanado.


En su enojo, lo juró con su mente asorada,

Arrojó el libro dorado mandando lejos su alma.


Pero la segunda página se abrió de repente,

Y el niño notó que su viaje aún no estaba ausente.

Aún quedaba mucho por aprender,

Mucho por descubrir, mucho por ver.

Atraído por la página, volvió a entrar,

Y allí estaba Ronaldo, listo para hablar.

“Ah, ahí estás. Te estaba esperando,

Sabía que vendrías, aunque no sabía cuándo.”


El niño, confundido, preguntó, “¿Qué sigue?

Parece que aún falta algo que sigue.

¿Qué más debo añadir para lograr mi meta?”

Ronaldo sonrió, con una chispa discreta.

“Ah, ahí está tu lucha, la raíz de tu mal,

No es la mezcla de harina lo que te hará triunfar.


Lo que te falta es creer, mi buen amigo,

Ese es el truco para subir contigo.


50 gramos de fe, mézclalos bien,

Eso es lo que falta, el secreto que ves.

Cree en tu corazón, en la magia de tu ser,

Y verás que tu sueño al fin podrá nacer.”


Con nueva esperanza, el niño siguió,

Removió con fuerza, y su sueño voló.

Pero no hubo señal, ni campana al sonar,

Ninguna voz diciendo: "Está listo, ya la receta perfecta esta."


Entonces apareció Clint, simple y callado,

El niño, intrigado, preguntó: “¿Qué ha pasado?

Sin fama, sin gloria, solo un hombre sencillo,

¿Qué podrías enseñarme en este camino sencillo?”


Clint solo sonrió, humilde y sereno,

Añadió una pizca de sal, como un toque ameno.

La olla brillaba, como el sol resplandeciente,

El niño pensó, “¡Por fin, el momento evidente!”

“Soy perfecto,” gritó, “la receta está bien,

Ahora puedo conquistar, llegar hasta el cien.”


Pero Clint levantó un dedo, despacio, calmado,

“Te apresuras, amigo, aún no has terminado.

La sal solo aclara, mira bien en el fondo,

No está en la receta, ni en el libro redondo.”


El niño miró dentro, sin saber qué pasaba,

“¿Qué ves?” Clint preguntó, mientras lo miraba.

“Me veo a mí mismo, y nada más,”

Respondió el niño, sin saber lo demás.

“Así es,” Clint asintió con gracia,

“No necesitas ídolos, ni una gran estampa.

La verdad es simple, siempre estuvo aquí,

Tu camino es tuyo—todo depende de ti.


Ya no eres un niño, pero tu corazón es claro,

A través de tus luchas, aprendiste a no rendir el faro.


¿El ingrediente perfecto? Nunca existió,

Siempre fuiste tú, el sueño en ti que persistió.”


Así que el niño entendió, en ese resplandor,

Forjó su propia receta, y dejó todo el temor.



October 02, 2024 17:59

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25 comments

22:31 Oct 03, 2024

What a wonderful story, simple but powerful message. Love it.

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Angela Zuluaga
23:28 Oct 03, 2024

Thank you, I hope it brought back the little kid in you 😊

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JCG Garcia
19:22 Oct 03, 2024

What an incredible story, full of details, perseverance and the importance on having a dream and don’t giving it up. I love that you dedicated and wrote it to your brother 💕

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Santi Otermin
21:10 Oct 02, 2024

Angelita te amo. Gracias por animarme a cumplir mi sueño. Soy muy feliz

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Luisa Caldas
21:08 Oct 02, 2024

SANTI IS VERY HAPPY ABOUT YOUR HISTORY. IT IS AMAZING. WE LOVED IT. CONGRATS ANGELA YOU'RE ROCK HIS WORLD!!!!

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Isabella Sparks
17:37 Oct 10, 2024

I liked your story! It had a great message about looking inside and believing in yourself to chase and achieve your dreams.

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Angela Zuluaga
18:40 Oct 10, 2024

Thank you ! for reading, it back … yes, a lesson I'm trying to learn myself. jeje glad you liked it.

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Trudy Jas
14:53 Oct 10, 2024

Angela, J Foster's "in-depth" review is AI generated. No human thoughts were involved. Just ignore.

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Angela Zuluaga
15:58 Oct 10, 2024

Had a feeling that might be the case, no worries, any constructive criticism is well taken. thank you for the update

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Trudy Jas
17:44 Oct 10, 2024

True, but I'd rather the bloke had actually read my story and put some (human) thought into it. btw there is a report button, should you wish to.

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Angela Zuluaga
18:38 Oct 10, 2024

thank you ! its good to know

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00:39 Oct 10, 2024

So clever to set your story in verse. Very clever. A great message within.

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Angela Zuluaga
01:39 Oct 10, 2024

Thank you! Yes felt right in a children’s story for adults ☺️

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Daniel Rogers
03:12 Oct 09, 2024

A very poetic story. So unique and well told. Haven't we all thought recognition was just around the corner? When it didn't come, we pout and swear to quit. Then as we grow older, we see the truth - we are already great. Not necessarily great like Washington, but like a sunset. Great job 😀👍

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Angela Zuluaga
15:14 Oct 09, 2024

Thank you I appreciate your review, indeed I tried to pass my learnings to my little brother so that when it's his time he learns that we all are gems in our own story. Thanks for your comment, I appreciate it.

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LC Reid
00:56 Oct 08, 2024

Oh, what a wonderful read this was! I'm always so nostalgic for my childhood, so this hit home. <3

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Angela Zuluaga
01:31 Oct 08, 2024

We all wish to remain kids ! Thank you for reading and for liking it, I'm glad it brought you back home

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Linda Kenah
22:05 Oct 06, 2024

Wonderful story with a message for all. Great job!

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Angela Zuluaga
22:22 Oct 06, 2024

Thank you, I appreciate your comment a lot

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David Sweet
18:11 Oct 06, 2024

So awesome that you dedicated this story to your brother.

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Angela Zuluaga
20:11 Oct 06, 2024

thank you let's hope his inner kid last forever, as your inner one

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David Sweet
20:15 Oct 06, 2024

I hope he never loses that inner kid. I stay in contact with mine daily. It's what drives me through life. It also inspires my writing. I have wanted to do this since I was seven.

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Angela Zuluaga
21:00 Oct 06, 2024

that's rare, keep it up! your stuff is good.

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David Sweet
22:46 Oct 06, 2024

Thanks so very much

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