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Drama Christmas

First story at Reedsy!


Each year the Sorenson's held the most flamboyant cookie exchange in all of Durinsville This was partially due to the fact that they were the most well-known bakery in all of Pennsylvania.  Of course, there were certain people who were not invited each year, and they had a most horrid time, since Durinsville was a small town, and the Sorenson's inhabited the biggest house (or mansion as we shall say?) which of course could be seen from any point in the town. If you have never had to experience this sort of exclusion or pure solitude at the most festive time of the year, let me gladly describe it to you.  

The whole town is bustling to get ready for an amazing party that is arguably the pinnacle of festivity and excitement in the holidays. We say arguably because they also host the annual baking fest, which is equally delighted in (but that’s for another story). For the past week the whole town has rushed out to their mailboxes in anticipation of a creamy lemon-yellow colored envelope, tied with a rose-colored ribbon stamped with the wax crest of the Small World Bakery. Those who received one immediately began picking a recipe for a batch of cookies to present at the party. However, by December 14th, if you didn’t receive an envelope, well, all hope shall be lost, since the party was on the 15th, and everybody knows how punctilious and orderly the Sorenson's are. Now, on the night of the great cookie exchange, you could see people all over town happily bustling to the great Sorenson Mansion. Children holding tin pans would knock at the great oak door, and would be met by the cheery faces of Grammy Sorenson and her four children, and their twelve children who were all bakers at Small World Bakery. The whole town is there, where music and the delectable smell of baked goods arise from the Mansion.  

Now, normally everybody is invited, except for a few. Namely competing bakeries of Small World Bakery, people who once caused trouble at previous cookie exchange parties like Jonas and Randall Smith who brought dog treats one year, and Angelica Hardhardt who pushed over a table of baked goods containing all the cookies one other year. Perhaps the Smith brothers and Angelica Hardhardt deserved it, but the Miller family didn’t. They were a notable family that owned a very renowned bakery that specialized in holiday cookies of all kind, named Pastry Delights. They were the main rivaling bakery of Small World Bakery, so you can see why they weren’t invited. However, they were a simply delightful family. Especially Charlotte Miller, a thirteen year old girl who helped out her parent at the bakery each day and was often referred to as, ‘that sweet little gal’ by customers.  

You can imagine her torture when each and every one of her friends happily sets off for a most delightful party whilst she stays home, quietly doing her homework.  

This particular year, Pastry Delights, had nearly outperformed Small World Bakery during the Thanksgiving Bake sale. Small World Bakery was out to get their revenge. But not in the usual way. 

On the morning of the 15th, Charlotte watched woefully as each of her friends started getting ready for the party. Delilah had especially called her to ask her opinion on a red, long sleeved dress lined with white fur that reached to her mid thighs.  

“Yes, it does look very nice. Especially paired with a Santa hat.” 

“Oh, you think so Charlotte? Me too. What are you wearing? Oh wait, you’re not going. Whoops.” But Delilah didn’t look all that sorry (after all, one less competitor for the heart of Shawn Sorenson).  

Amelia Hepburn, who had never been extremely nice to Charlotte, very rudely remarked, “Some people do deserve to miss out on all the fun. Just look at your horrid fashion sense.” while Charlotte was walking the dog. To which Charlotte could not find a stinging remark fast enough, and when she did (“I do think you’re referring to yourself.”) Amelia was long gone.  

Even Lexine Warren, who was Charlotte’s best friend had turned down Charlotte’s offer to go to the movies, saying she was busy getting her hair crimped. So thus, Charlotte could only idly look out the window and watch the rest of the town get all fussed up. Only ten minutes later, however, she saw Shawn Sorenson (what handsome eyes) ambling along the road. This got her attention. Yes, partially because most girls in town had a crush on him (including her) and also because he was walking towards her house! Oh my! It was a rarity to see any Sorenson to come out on the 15th due to their frenzied preparation for the evening, but to come towards their sword enemy? 

But the excitement didn’t end there. As Shawn stopped in front of their house, he pulled out from his pocket a lemon-yellow colored envelope, tied with a rose-colored ribbon. At this moment, Charlotte practically flew out the door, bounded down the steps and ran towards the mailbox. Shawn had opened the latch and was sliding the envelope inside when Charlotte arrived.  

“Oh. Look who it is. Well, since you’re already here, I needn’t waste an envelope, I’ll just tell you.” This condescending tone was familiar as always, and both Charlotte’s older brothers had endured the same treatment from other Sorenson members.  

“You are hereby invited to the annual cookie exchange at 707, Durin Lane. Be there at six-o'clock sharp and bring a dozen hand-baked cookies.” Here Shawn stopped and added in, “Why don’t you bring your signature chocolate chip cookies? Everybody seems to enjoy them.” He cleared his throat and continued, “We wish you all a very happy holidays, and we hope to see you soon! Signed, Sorenson Family.” Charlotte could not believe her ears! Not only could she finally go to the spectacular party for the first time in her life, she was being invited to it by none other than Shawn Sorenson!  

“So you’ll accept?” 

“Of course! And of course, I’ll bring Pastry Delights’ signature chocolate chip cookies. They sold out the fastest at the bake sale you know. Sold out much faster than your chocolate chip cookies.” She couldn’t help add in the last sentence, since it was customary to never forget about the rivalry that was forever present.  

“Excellent. See you at six.” With that, he turned on his heel and rapidly walked away.  

A few blocks away, at 707 Durin Lane, Grammy Sorenson adjusted her glasses on her hooked nose. The rest of the Sorenson family gathered around her. She waited dramatically for total silence and anticipation, before she finally announced,  

“Twenty minutes ago, I sent my dear grandson Shawn on a very important mission.” Here she paused, and waited for the excited clamor to stop, for old age had turned her voice feeble and delicate.  

“I told him to go to the Miller family, and invite them to our cookie exchange tonight.” An indignant uproar ensued.  

“But they’re our enemies!” 

“Invite them, to our party!? The audacity!” 

“Why, Grammy, are you feeling alright?” 

“Oh my, we haven’t talked to them at all for three generations!” When their voices and muttering died down, Grammy continued.  

“But not as friends, as foes. As we all know, three weeks ago, at the Thanksgiving Bake sale, we were utterly humiliated by the performance of their chocolate chip cookies.” Everybody agreed to this statement.  

“Just simply horrid; to be beaten by the Millers? Why, they’re nothing but rookies!” 

“Tsk, it’s their secret ingredient I say!” This was a popular theory among the Sorenson family, and had been for the last week. Grammy fueled this notion emphatically. At that moment, the door banged open, and Shawn Sorenson stood there triumphantly.

"Grammy. The deed has been done. The silly girl, Charlotte, will be bringing the chocolate chip cookies tonight!" When she heard this, a wide grin spread across Grammy's face.

"It is time to figure out their secret recipe, and our honor shall be restored. Reinstating our position as the best bakery in this state, for once and for all!"



My first story at Reedsy! Shoutout to LitLover and Mira Caplan (amazing writers!!!) for recommending Reedsy to me. And for reminding (no, more like insisting) that I get this story out. Thx y'all and enjoy!

December 08, 2020 21:08

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✰ Jennie ✰
02:11 Dec 09, 2020

just saying, I've been on here for a week and 40 karma points?!?!? and I used to think karma was bad! i'm wrong, it seems! so ignore me and have a nice day! ❤

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14:55 Dec 09, 2020

LOL Me too! XD

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✰ Jennie ✰
22:50 Dec 08, 2020

how does the karma points thing work btw? i can't click on the question mark next to my points

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23:02 Dec 08, 2020

So basically if someone likes your story or comment it is one point, when your story is approved it's 10, and when you win a contest it's 100. To upvote or like a comment, there will be arrows next to the profile pic of the commenter, and an up arrow click is one point or a like, and don't click the down arrow cuz that's downvoting. Also, post a ton so I can upvote you!!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
23:06 Dec 08, 2020

wait... approved? what does that mean... sorry i'm such a noob

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23:06 Dec 08, 2020

When you submit a story, you submit it for approval, and the judges will determine whether it fits the prompt and then they approve it.

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✰ Jennie ✰
23:08 Dec 08, 2020

i honestly don't think mine fits the prompt. bc the Sorensons didn't hold the party just to get the recipe; they've been doing it the whole time... but oh well

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23:09 Dec 08, 2020

It's okay I think it'd still work, because they just have to have another reason for inviting them that's different from the reason they invited everyone else.

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✰ Jennie ✰
18:25 Dec 14, 2020

Who is John Galt?

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✰ Jennie ✰
18:26 Dec 14, 2020

thats your new profile pic isn't it? or something related

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18:29 Dec 14, 2020

HA! You legit asked the question!! That's the question that Atlas Shrugged is entirely built around, and he created a haven for all of the creative minds to stop carrying the world along on their shoulders like Atlas, to help them shrug in a way, which is called Galt's Gulch. It isn't a place where everyone does nothing, but it is a place where they can be creative unfettered by the demands of the greedy populace.

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✰ Jennie ✰
18:36 Dec 14, 2020

oh my....

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✰ Jennie ✰
18:44 Dec 14, 2020

how come I was at 239 karma yesterday but only 217 today? confuzzledd

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18:44 Dec 14, 2020

That's called downvoting... So sad someone downvoted me 100 yesterday. It's okay, stupid people just do it for no reason.

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✰ Jennie ✰
18:53 Dec 14, 2020

oh noooo!!! that's meannnnnn imma upvote all your posts

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18:53 Dec 14, 2020

Yah, it's ok you don't have to.

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✰ Jennie ✰
21:19 Dec 08, 2020

And where's Litlover? He's been hassling me for the past week.... ha

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✰ Jennie ✰
21:11 Dec 08, 2020

My first story at Reedsy! Shoutout to LitLover and Mira Caplan (amazing writers!!!) for recommending Reedsy to me. And for reminding (no, more like insisting) that I get this story out. Thx y'all and enjoy!

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Mira Caplan
14:59 Dec 09, 2020

XDDD Aaaawwwww, thanks for the mention, Jen!!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
15:22 Dec 09, 2020

np and don't skip class!

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Mira Caplan
15:23 Dec 09, 2020

XD The teacher's kinda between things, so I'm not skipping, just multitasking! :)

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✰ Jennie ✰
15:24 Dec 09, 2020

likely story... wait WE"RE BOTH IN FRENCH!!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
15:25 Dec 09, 2020

omg! I'm in school are you on the zoom?

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Olivia M
00:30 Dec 15, 2020

This was so good! I really liked the idea of rivalry between two family bakeries. I can't wait to read more of your stories!

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✰ Jennie ✰
00:54 Dec 15, 2020

Omg! Thanks so much Tate! I can't wait to read your stories when you get them out! Really looking forward to reading them! Plus, Howey LA Class UNITE!!! yayyyy

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Mira Caplan
13:51 Dec 15, 2020

YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
13:52 Dec 15, 2020

we're all here! patrick, luke, mira, jen, ben, maddie, emily, tate and more coming!

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Mira Caplan
13:54 Dec 15, 2020

Oh, I gotta follow all of them!!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
13:55 Dec 15, 2020

i think you have! ben and maddie are creating them

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✰ Jennie ✰
13:56 Dec 15, 2020

oh and Clover G is cal!

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Mira Caplan
13:55 Dec 15, 2020

That's so cool!!!!!!

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21:09 Dec 16, 2020

Tate I made a new story check it out

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22:42 Dec 08, 2020

OMG I WAS SOMEWHERE ELSE I LOVED THIS BUT U USE PARENTHESES TOO MUCH, maybe incorporate that into the conventional sentence. Also, search up rules to keep the same tense the whole time because that was flip flopping a little. I LOVED THE CHARACTERS SO MUCHHHHGGGGG SO GREAT JOBBBBB!!!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
22:45 Dec 08, 2020

you were at rock climbing lol... and AHHHHHHH i realized i use parenthesis like 40 timesssss. thx i will fix in next story :) and the tense thing... oof something that's been bothering my writing for a long time

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23:00 Dec 08, 2020

That's okay, just like read an article. Indeed, much lol. THUS THE POWER OF FEEDBACK!!!!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
23:06 Dec 08, 2020

So i'll read an article. i love feedback!

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23:07 Dec 08, 2020

Read an article about tenses on like a writing journal. Feedback's great!! You'll be in my next story!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
13:48 Dec 10, 2020

wait really?!?? OMG IM A CELEB NOWWWWWWWW jk hehe

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✰ Jennie ✰
13:49 Dec 10, 2020

I'm writing another story. How about you?

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14:13 Dec 10, 2020

Nah, I don't like this week's prompts. I toughed 2 out though.

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✰ Jennie ✰
14:20 Dec 10, 2020

I don't like them that much either... I'm going to try and tough out another tho

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14:25 Dec 10, 2020

Lol I can't wait

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Authoring Studio
10:26 Dec 09, 2020

It's so great that you know what you are good at and where you need improvement. I'm afraid I'm weak at thrillers and mysteries too, but I can definitely try to help in fantasy. What I do when I write fantasy is that I imagine what it would look like in a movie (like in Harry Potter) and then write accordingly. Also, in fantasy descriptions, I try to search for other words I can use instead of a common word. That helps. For example, I can replace 'said' with 'shrieked', 'exclaimed' or 'responded', etc.

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✰ Jennie ✰
12:52 Dec 09, 2020

Thanks so much! If i have time before this weekend i'm hoping to submit another story with improvements!

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Authoring Studio
01:51 Dec 10, 2020

You're welcome! I hope it helps 🙂

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22:25 Dec 09, 2020

Really? For that last one, I think that what would surprise most people is that most famous books, authors, and writings include said more than anything else. If you need mystery tips, you should introduce the tragedy or body early in the story, keep everything in a state of crescendo, and use RED HERRINGS.

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Authoring Studio
01:53 Dec 10, 2020

Well... Yeah, I noticed that too. But I just gave my personal opinion, since I have written three books myself. But it all depends on the choice of the author in the end. Thanks for the tips on mystery. I will try them out in my fourth book😊😀

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✰ Jennie ✰
02:05 Dec 10, 2020

woah! what are the names of your books? are they published? can I get them on kindle?

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Authoring Studio
02:39 Dec 10, 2020

That's the problem😢 they're only available in India, and they're not on kindle either... However, I can tell you the names- they're Half Past Eleven, The Eternal Gems and Souls No More

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✰ Jennie ✰
12:56 Dec 10, 2020

wowza! i found them online and the plot sounds super cool!

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12:18 Dec 10, 2020

That's so cool!! Sorry to give you advice lol... you're obviously very experienced

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Kate Reynolds
01:01 Dec 09, 2020

OMG JENNIE! THIS WAS SUCH AN AMAZING FIRST STORYY!!! Cannot wait to read more of yours!! :D

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✰ Jennie ✰
01:14 Dec 09, 2020

wow! thanks so much kate! Imma read your stories now :D

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Kate Reynolds
01:28 Dec 09, 2020

Np! And thankssss!!

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12:21 Dec 09, 2020

Yay! now you two know each other!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
18:35 Dec 09, 2020

And now I know all the peeps you know! yay community

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Kate Reynolds
18:36 Dec 09, 2020

:D

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18:37 Dec 09, 2020

YAY!!

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12:21 Dec 09, 2020

/yes read her stories they're soooooooo goooooddddd

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Kate Reynolds
18:36 Dec 09, 2020

Thank youuuuuu!! Yours are tooo!!

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23:29 Dec 08, 2020

Are you just following all of my followers?? :D

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✰ Jennie ✰
23:34 Dec 08, 2020

errr... yah? heehee

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23:35 Dec 08, 2020

Lol I think that's a great idea because I picky with mine and I don't have many followers so it's good to start out!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
23:37 Dec 08, 2020

plus the peeps you follow have good stories to read!

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23:39 Dec 08, 2020

Ya totally!

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23:19 Dec 08, 2020

OMG!! Welcome to reedsy my friend! Your story was awesome! I'm so glad you joined! I loved the plot and the whole secret recipe idea. loved every sentence!

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✰ Jennie ✰
23:28 Dec 08, 2020

Wow thanks! that was fast btw! I love your stories, especially reborn, bc the concept is extremely intriguing and somewhat in that eerie sense!

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23:29 Dec 08, 2020

Do you guys know each other???? Yeah, amber's really nice!! Have you friended Felicity Williams yet?

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01:23 Dec 09, 2020

Aw thanks, and no, i don't think we know each other. u both are really nice though :)

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12:17 Dec 09, 2020

Aww thanks so much!!!

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20:07 Dec 10, 2020

Jennie, this story was really fun to read! You gave it a unique tone and writing style that was really enjoyable. Having a longstanding family rivalry over baked goods was a fun and interesting change, and I like the idea of having a fancy mansion party for a dramatic scene... while still having the conflict being about baking. I'll be exited to know what happens next at this party! Welcome to Reedsy, Jennie! I would love to talk to you about writing sometime. If you want to try improving how you write fantasy, look up hard and soft magic s...

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✰ Jennie ✰
20:13 Dec 10, 2020

Thank you so much Isabel! I'm so glad you loved the story! Although I'm not the best at fantasy, I'll definitely try to look up hard and soft magic systems to improve.

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20:59 Dec 10, 2020

I guess the best thing for writing is always to practice. I'm trying to expand my variety of genres. At the moment, I'm trying some things with horror and romance, but I'm not sure when or if those will appear on this site

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✰ Jennie ✰
21:27 Dec 10, 2020

Well I look forward to seeing them!

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23:34 Dec 09, 2020

jennnnnnnnnnnnnnn someone be downvoting me helppppppppppppp pls upvoteeeeeeeeeeeeee

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✰ Jennie ✰
00:41 Dec 10, 2020

why they be downvoting youuuu????

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00:43 Dec 10, 2020

I dunno they wanna steal my leaderboard spot I guess.

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✰ Jennie ✰
00:48 Dec 10, 2020

wahhhhhh meanie > < ---

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✰ Jennie ✰
01:02 Dec 10, 2020

did you like my emoji lol? plus imma try to guess what those emojis you have mean...

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01:03 Dec 10, 2020

Yay!! Yeah I like yours

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Authoring Studio
10:27 Dec 09, 2020

I loved your story! I hope you continue writing. Looking forward to reading your submissions!

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21:26 Dec 15, 2020

JENNIE CAN YOU UPVOTE ME I GOT DOWNVOTED A TON!!

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✰ Jennie ✰
21:28 Dec 15, 2020

oops! i've been upvoting mira!!! wait didn't you pass 4000 yesterday or sumthing? or did you pass 3000?....

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21:28 Dec 15, 2020

I passed 4000 and just lost like 200 points

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✰ Jennie ✰
21:30 Dec 15, 2020

k i'm trying my best!!!!! do you think your downvoting has something to do with the hate against Vayd Danish?

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✰ Jennie ✰
21:31 Dec 15, 2020

Anyways, only 75 left to get you back to 4000!!!!! i got mira to like 2000 by myself yesterday! did you see that karma thing i posted on my bio?

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21:33 Dec 15, 2020

Yay!!!!!!!!!! YES I DID!!!!!!!!

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21:34 Dec 15, 2020

It's not hate against him, but its this whole thing. Maybe??

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✰ Jennie ✰
21:34 Dec 15, 2020

oh yeah.... i upvoted all your posts on your stories!

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✰ Jennie ✰
21:58 Dec 15, 2020

suitcase, pen+paper, boy and man.... what could it beeeee

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Elena Rouse
20:11 Dec 14, 2020

This was so good! I love it!

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✰ Jennie ✰
20:17 Dec 14, 2020

Thank you so much for reading! I'm so honored that my first story has received so much praise!

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San T.
09:49 Dec 13, 2020

I loved the story. I want to know more about them. What a wonderful story. And it ended so soon. Amazing job, really. Looking for more from you.

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✰ Jennie ✰
19:43 Dec 13, 2020

Thank you so much, I really appreciate that! I'm probably dropping a story tomorrow!

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San T.
00:37 Dec 14, 2020

I will read it.. :)

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15:19 Dec 10, 2020

I love the story and I want to know more! My suggestion is to make sure that you use the tense throughout the story. You started in past tense but changed to present tense a few times. Keep writing! The more you write the better you get!

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✰ Jennie ✰
15:23 Dec 10, 2020

Thank you so much for the feedback! The tenses are a problem I tend to have a lot, so I'm reading articles and such on how to keep all my tenses the same!

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16:56 Dec 10, 2020

Reading more will help too!

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✰ Jennie ✰
16:58 Dec 10, 2020

ok thanks! I'm writing another story and I'm hoping to keep the tenses the same this time

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17:10 Dec 10, 2020

Reading it out loud helps too!

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AAAHHAHAHA Great first story!

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✰ Jennie ✰
01:18 Dec 09, 2020

thx so much! i had fun writing it too! it's not very logical but very dramatic I think :)

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Mira Caplan
21:13 Dec 08, 2020

YESSSSSSSSSS!!! Finally!!! There were a few grammatical errors that I noticed, but that doesn't matter!!! You are SUCH a good writer, Jen. (I'm just gonna call you that, if you don't mind. Or Jennie. Which nickname do you prefer?)

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✰ Jennie ✰
21:15 Dec 08, 2020

Jen. and thx so much! yeah I noticed some too haha and I used delightful like 7 times. But now there's room for improvement yay

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23:03 Dec 08, 2020

Mira's just so supportive ^^ On my first story she like hailed me as the king!! Mira you are the queen of upvoting the spirit.

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✰ Jennie ✰
23:07 Dec 08, 2020

YAHHH and she's such an amazing writer herself!

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23:08 Dec 08, 2020

Lol yeah! Literally tho, look at her comments on my first two stories. She needs to start complimenting herself a little more. Maybe my critiques on her stories are making it worse :( Hope not

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✰ Jennie ✰
23:09 Dec 08, 2020

no! critiques make you a better writer!!! but let's compliment her too

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Mira Caplan
14:36 Dec 09, 2020

Aaaaaaaawwwwwww I feel so warm and sparkly and happy right now

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14:37 Dec 09, 2020

Awwwww, you are my bestest frien

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Mira Caplan
14:37 Dec 09, 2020

STOP MAKING ME CRY-

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Mira Caplan
21:25 Dec 08, 2020

That's ok! I repeat words a lot, too. (I actually have a character named Jen in one of my stories. That was just a cool little thing...kinda random.)

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✰ Jennie ✰
21:26 Dec 08, 2020

ooh interesting!

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Mira Caplan
21:28 Dec 08, 2020

Lunarii (Luna), Ashlynn (Ash/Asha), and Jen. I haven't actually worked on it in a few months, preoccupied with the main series I've been writing, Alden. It's in my bio

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✰ Jennie ✰
21:30 Dec 08, 2020

Yah I think it's in your schoology too! (sry i'm a stalker :))

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Corey Melin
01:41 Jan 24, 2021

Very well done. It flowed well so kept your attention. It will be interesting to see what is up Grammies sleeve. Cliff hanger

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✰ Jennie ✰
01:43 Jan 24, 2021

Oh thank you for the praise! Yes, Grammy will eventually get the cookies and figure out the recipe... thwarted by a young girl's love.

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