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Drama Fiction Teens & Young Adult

The three of us walked down the long stretched out hall-way as I tried to prepare myself for the inevitable to come. It started almost immediately once those idiots saw her barely enter the classroom.


"Vivian you have such a beautiful name!" they would excitedly say and then it would always be followed by, "Can we please be friends? You are so popular."


Her inevitable responses would always end up being, "Aw You have a beautiful name as well" which would quickly be followed up by "Of course we can I'd love that."


I tried my best to make myself not hear any of this during the classes but again, all of this was just inevitable, and no matter what I was able to hear it. The popular girl was of course going to have some fangirls there.


"Vivian, why do you hang out with that girl? nothing is special about her." one of her idiotic fangirls had asked her after the first class. I don't even understand why this girl has fangirls, she's just someone.


I could hear her begin to speak but I didn't want to stick around and see what she was going to tell the girl. Besides, I think I have a feeling about what she was already going to say.


"Oh, I just feel so bad for her and so I'm letting her hang out with me until she finds actual friends. We weren't friends to begin with, I just feel bad."


Though I hadn't been looking where I was going when I walked out into the cafeteria and then proceeded to bump into someone. "Oh gosh, Ivy are you alright?"


Oh great. "Hello, Ash...how's your life been being together with the popular girl?"


Yep, that's right, every popular girl always needs to have a boyfriend with them. Though all of Vivian's stupid fangirls and everyone else didn't seem to really care about Ash, it was just about her.


I again didn't want to stay that long in the cafeteria to see what he would say and I speed-walked out of there. There were still five classes to go to, but I didn't go to them. Not like anyone would notice that I'm missing.


Finally, the bell soon rang, it felt like absolute music in my ears every day. Though it was always a bit loud and I felt almost deaf for a while, though that was good as well, I wouldn't have to hear Vivian's stupid fans.


I ran towards the exit and quickly left Vivian high, and yes that was the actual name of the school. Though it seemed like it was a big present for her and not just the name, this was probably one of the reasons she decided to go here.


It's almost like I could hear her obnoxious voice telling her fan-girls, "Isn't it great everyone? My name was beautiful enough to be the name of something great."


I've wished for a long time that maybe, just maybe one day maybe Zeus could just come down here and get rid of Vivian. He's a greek god and it's Zeus, he could do anything he wants.


Though that was likely to never happen at any point in time, though I wish it would. This isn't a fantasy though, this is just reality.


"Hey, Ivy wait up!"


If it had been Vivian or one of those other people that I've mentioned I would have just kept going, Though I realized it was Ash. He wasn't that bad compared to the others so I decided to stop, at least for him.


"What do you want, Ash? don't you have to be with your girl-friend right about now?"


He seemed to look around the area we were in before lightly chuckling and then speaking, "We have nothing else to really do and Vivian has an old tree-house, would you want to come with us?"


Hm, a treehouse? why would she ever want a tree-house? She could be going on a cruise or something right about now if she wanted to, but she decides to be at a tree-house? Wait...I got a perfect idea.


I must have been in my thoughts for quite a while because Ash was snapping his fingers to get my attention and he seemed a bit impatient. I then simply nodded with a smirk on my face as I walked back to my place.


"Uh...bye! see ya later I guess."


I had a while before I had to go and see the two at her place and the tree-house, so I was left at my house with only my thoughts. They would keep me company, I hope. Wait, do I really wanna try and do this?


I didn't know what to do for the past few hours and the question kept coming up in my mind every so often. The clock on the wall showed me that it was time for me to go.


The clock continued to tick from behind me as I then opened the door and headed for her place, the answer to the question I had been wondering I now knew. Yes. Yes, I will.


"Ivy, You made it!" Two voices which must have been Vivian and Ash say in unison from the backyard. I don't know how they could have seen me since I hadn't even seen them, there were trees covering the whole Tree-house.


While I carefully began to climb up the unsteady ladder I could already imagine in full visuals of what was to come. Vivian was loudly talking on her phone now in which I heard her say, "No they haven't said anything, I'm not sure if ill be in the movie."


"Wait...What?!"


Snap!


In anger, just as I started reaching the top of the tree-house, I end up managing to break off a piece of the old rusted ladder. I swear it would have turned into a million pieces if it hadn't landed in the soft grass, where it only lost a few more pieces.


"You're going to be in a movie?!"


Ash carefully walked over to me as he began to try and lead me to something as he spoke, "She's not in the movie yet, she auditioned and doesn't know. It's not even that big of one either, you shouldn't worry."


He sat me down on a small blue bean-bag that looked like the ocean in a way, though none of us said anything, we just stared. That wasted about five or ten minutes while we tried to think of what to say.


Eventually, Ash awkwardly coughed to get our attention as he then suggested, "Why don't I go and get us some drinks or something? Vivian's mother has some in the kitchen."


"Alright Ashy be back soon!"


I watch him carefully go down the ladder and really slowly as well, almost like a turtle or a sloth in a way. Once he finally got down and back into the kitchen, It was time for me to put my plan into action.


Though it was still a bit awkward as the two of us just stared at each other until I then asked her, "Wait, Vivian, do you maybe see that?" I pointed to the edge of the tree-house.


"Huh?"


"Go check it out!"


Vivian, a bit confused, stared at me until she got off of her stool and got near the edge while trying to find the thing that I mentioned. I quickly got up behind her with a large smirk on my face. This should be enough to get rid of her...


"You know, Vivian...maybe you shouldn't be standing that close to the edge, you could maybe fall" I laugh while I don't have time to see how she reacts, I shove her off the tree-house.


I look down to watch and see what happens, I can see her terrified and confused face look back at me, not knowing what's going on. When she was going to hit the ground though, I looked away not wanting to see it, though I could hear it.

November 11, 2020 04:19

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Laiba M
14:40 Nov 11, 2020

I'm so glad that you used my idea~ Thank you for giving my thoughts and ideas a shot :) It turned out perfect! I loved it! I'd recommend going over and doing a full edit with the help of Grammarly, though :D I agree with Amany, the beginning is a bit confusing, but other than that, I absolutely love the story~~

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B. W.
16:09 Nov 11, 2020

Thank you, im glad that ya liked the story ^^ what did ya think about Ivy in the story though and what she ended up doing in the ending?

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Laiba M
16:38 Nov 11, 2020

I think her reason for pushing Vivian could've been built up a bit more. Yes, Vivian was more popular, but that should be emphasized. Vivian is more popular, looks better, has rich parents who spoil her, and is loved by everyone. Vivian has everything and Ivy doesn't, yet Vivian constantly complains about things that aren't a big deal. Build that up a bit more :) Otherwise, Ivy pushing her off doesn't make much sense.

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B. W.
16:50 Nov 11, 2020

anything else?

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Laiba M
18:32 Nov 11, 2020

Nope :) I'd just recommend doing a full review with Grammarly and then taking some time to edit the parts behind the push. Yes, people hurt/ruin the lives of popular people because they're popular, but they have more of a motive. Maybe the popular people bullied them. Maybe they didn't have as much and had more problems than the popular kids, who always acted like their life was horrible. Add more to her motive :)

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B. W.
18:41 Nov 11, 2020

I've been using Grammarly for this story and some of the other ones as well though. I don't know what to even put down for the stuff for the push, though I could just tell you all the reasons and stuff that she decided to do it if ya want?

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01:14 Nov 15, 2020

Oh, my gosh! No, Ivy! I definitely wasn't expecting that. It was so shocking. Congrats on that! Also, the classic dilemma of being jealous of the 'popular girl' was fantastic in your words. You had your own twist on it, like all of your other writing. I will say that this story needed more description. For example, when Ivy is guessing what Vivian will say, you should add something along the lines of "My fists clenched as I walked away of the ever-popular Vivian. A deep rage bubbled in my stomach." Just more, please. Other than that, overa...

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B. W.
02:06 Nov 15, 2020

I'm still terrible at being descriptive like that and the way i'd try to do it, it would probably be bad but ill try to do that ^^ though thanks and I'm really glad that ya liked the story and all that, Ivy has a few other reasons for doing that to Vivian besides her being popular as well even if it wasn't really stated.

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02:17 Nov 15, 2020

You're not terrible, you just need more practice. You are welcome. Well, is there going to be a sequel so we can find out those other reasons?

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B. W.
02:35 Nov 15, 2020

No not really, i already have a lot of series going on at the moment and I just wanna leave this one alone

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02:45 Nov 15, 2020

That's okay, too! Then our questions will never be answered and that makes it that much better. :D

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B. W.
02:54 Nov 15, 2020

You remember the whole adventure with friends thing?

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