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Surprising Recoveryย 


Esma laid down, flat. Not moving for many seconds. She was in a deep and quiet sleep. But this isnโ€™t your normal kind of sleep. She was sleeping, for what felt like forever. Esmaโ€™s mind was blank. She never moved for several days. Everyone would just find her, in her deep and long slumber, and all assuming the worst โ€” death.ย ย ย ย 

She didnโ€™t even know she was surrounded by so many people. All day and every day she was quiet, her eyes tightly closed and slept. She had no breath, her hands, or any body part for that matter never moved from the day she was brought here. Everyone tried calling for her. Some even yelled at her face, but still, there was no movement. This was occurring for many days, and everyone had already concluded that she passed away. It also seemed like the most reasonable answer for what happened to her. Honestly, no one would have ever survived after what happened to her. It was just, impossible. Merely, impossible.ย ย 

So, this day would be no different, would it? Just the same โ€œstatue-likeโ€ posture of our little Esma. Her condition was devastating, really. But other than the young couple who rescued her, she had no one else to look after her in the hospital.ย ย 

โ€œMiss, please, what happened to her? Why isnโ€™t she moving? Why isnโ€™t this young girl not breathing? Why?โ€ Mrs. Frank asked one of the nurses.ย ย 

โ€œLook, Mrs. and Mr. Frank, I appreciate you for bringing her on the correct time, but you cannot do anything about it. We told you several times that she has passed away. Besides, we donโ€™t even know who her parents are.โ€ the nurse replied, feeling very restless and irritated by the young couple.ย ย 

โ€œBut โ€” this child hasnโ€™t lived her life yet! She is only a young girl! Please, doctors, nurses, just...try to help her survive. I know we are not her parents, or even related to her, but I think, even if this child survives, that she has nowhere to go. I think she is an orphan.โ€ Mr. Frank concluded, hoping to get some sympathy from the nurses.ย ย 

โ€œIn that case, Iโ€™ll โ€” Iโ€™ll call the doctor. Remember, weโ€™re not sure if we can help her, but I guess there is no harm in trying.โ€ the other nurse replied and muttered something in her breath as she walked out of the hospital room.ย ย 

Esma still slept, slept like she never heard this entire conversation. She slept so peacefully. So nicely. In fact, she was the only person in the room who had a small smile on her face. The others were either miserable or frustrated. Still, Esma always was a sweet and cheerful girl, always smiling, always laughing. Who ever knew such an unfortunate thing would happen to this sweet, and innocent girl?ย ย ย 

โ€œOh, Liv, I donโ€™t feel good about this. I want to save her. I...I think this girl didnโ€™t deserve such a thing to happen. Can we do anything? Just, anything to save her?โ€ asked the young man, who didnโ€™t look anything over twenty-seven.ย ย 

โ€œHoward, I donโ€™t know if we can. Weโ€™re no doctors! Iโ€™m just a meteorologist and you are a journalist. We donโ€™t know anything about medicines, and what doctors do. I think that we must pray for her. She deserves a better future. Such a sweet young girl. Though I have not met her, or ever talked to her, I can tell she is a charm. A wonderful, and a beautiful child. We must be hopeful, because, Howard, weโ€™re helpless. Thatโ€™s all we can do.โ€ the woman replied, as she started going next to Esmaโ€™s bed.ย ย 

The woman stared at her, sweetly. Then, she suddenly felt the urge to slowly rub her hands along Esmaโ€™s pale cheeks. Her hands also wanted to ruffle her short, wavy hair. As she motioned her hand to perform these actions, her face still made a frown. Worrying about Esmaโ€™s condition. Uncertain about whether she was going to be able to open her eyes, and breathe the world, or if she was going to just sleep again. The woman placed her purse on the little stand, and now comfortably started weaving her hands through Esmaโ€™s hair.ย ย 


My dear child,ย ย 

Oh, sweet girl,ย ย 

Please wake up as you smile,ย ย 

Your eyes are like pearlsย ย 

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Wake up,ย ย 

From your slumber,ย ย 

Wake up,ย ย 

From this ever-lasting sleepย ย 

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My child,ย ย 

Oh, little girl,ย ย 

There's a whole world out there,ย ย 

For you!ย ย 

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If you just,ย ย 

Effortlessly,ย ย 

Open your sweet,ย ย 

Beautiful eyesย ย 

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Oh, my child,ย ย 

If only,ย ย 

If only,ย ย 

You wake!ย ย 


The woman sang this little lullaby to her, as Esma was โ€œsleepingโ€. After singing, and not hearing Esma budge from her place, the woman started crying. She started sobbing, quietly, but loud enough for her husband to hear.ย ย 

โ€œWhy wonโ€™t she wake up Howard? Why wonโ€™t this sweet little girl wake up? Why? Tell me Howard, please tell me?โ€ she questioned Howard, and then continued to cry.ย ย 

She knew her husband had no answer, but still, she felt so much affection towards this young girl that she really couldnโ€™t help herself but to think about her desperate condition. About how this little girl laid there, not making a sound.ย ย ย 

โ€œPlease, Liv, I donโ€™t know. I really donโ€™t. Maybe the accident was very harsh. I have no clue. We werenโ€™t even there when it happened!โ€ her husband replied, sadly.ย ย 

โ€œPray, Howard, pray. Pray to the good Lord, and maybe, just maybe we can save her Howard. Pray along with me, for the life of this little girl. "the woman begged her husband, and he did listen to his wife.ย ย ย 

The young couple was hoping that a miracle would happen right now, to save this childโ€™s life. They were hoping very dearly for any magic to happen, as they continued to pray for this young girl.ย ย ย 

The woman had not stopped crying though. Her tears rolled continuously down her freckled cheek, and a drop of her tear accidentally rolled on to Esmaโ€™s face.ย ย 

Suddenly, a miracle really did happen.ย ย 

Esma choked as she jumped off the bed. It was all too sudden for her. She started to haveย breathingย issues and was almost suffocating.ย ย 

โ€œDOCTOR!! The girl...she...she has made it! But she needs help! She cannot breathe! Doctor!โ€ Howard yelled from the room, and the doctor appeared.ย ย 

โ€œHowโ€”thatโ€”it canโ€™t possibly happen! She survived?!โ€ the doctor was very surprised, but without thinking too long, he immediately grabbed the oxygen mask for the girl and let her breathe.ย ย ย 

Esma again, blanked out.ย ย 

๏ผŠ๏ผŠ๏ผŠย ย 

Again, she woke up, confused.ย ย 

โ€œOh! Young girl, do you know where you are?โ€ the doctor asked.ย ย 

Esma looked around her. She saw a bunch of wires and tubes connected to her body, which almost made her flinch. She saw some weird lines moving in a zigzag, on...some device she couldnโ€™t possibly make out. She also saw a black-and-white machine, which had a skeleton on it. Again, Esma was pondering on what it was. She looked down to spot her wearing a hospital gown, and her legs covered in a teal blanket. She wasnโ€™t sure where she was at all. She didnโ€™t understand what the tubes were, or any of her surroundings.ย ย 

But what was even scarier for her is to find a lot of strangers huddling around her, looking at her in distress or surprised. She noticed that there was one man, who looked a bit old, with glasses, some weird things on his neck, and wearing a white coat. She figured that he was the one who was controlling all the tubes, and things like that. He also saw him repeat his question.ย ย ย 

Esma noticed two women who were also wearing the same outfit as the man she had seen earlier. They were wearing blue masks and was staring directly at her. She felt scared and unsure. Lastly, she saw two other people. A man, who looked very happy, and another woman, who looked relieved. They were holding hands and sighing in relief. Still, she couldnโ€™t recognize any of the people in the room.ย ย 

โ€œLittle girl! I asked you, do you recognize any of us? Do you know who you are? Do you know where you are? "he emphasizedย each and everyย word to make sure Esma heard it.ย ย 

โ€œIโ€”I donโ€™t know any of you. I donโ€™t know why I am here, in a hospitalย room.โ€ Esmaย admitted and looked away from everyone else.ย ย 

โ€œReally? Do you remember anything? Before you came into the hospital room?โ€ the man asked.ย ย 

โ€œNo. I donโ€™t.โ€ Esma said, looking even tenser than before.ย ย 

โ€œOk,โ€ the man replied, his face looking a bit defeated, โ€œdo you remember your name? Where you are from?โ€ he asked her.ย ย 

โ€œMy...my name is, I...I donโ€™t know, Iโ€™m sorry. I forgot. I also donโ€™t know where I am from.โ€ Esma replied, looking a bit stunned.ย ย 

โ€œOh my, poor girl. She has lost her memory. I am sorry, but I cannot do anything to fix her memory. Based on her records, her name is supposed to be โ€˜Esmaโ€™ and it says she doesnโ€™t have a proper guardian. She is an orphan. She has had many foster parents, but they all have refused her.โ€ the doctor told everyone in the room, and the people who were most shocked were the young couple.ย ย 

โ€œWhat? Who would not adopt her? Sheโ€™s a charm! Sheโ€™s a beauty!โ€ the woman protested.ย ย 

โ€œWell, we can let you adopt her if you want. She can stay with you. But I do advise you, not to talk about her past. Her brain nerves have been severely damaged, and it is a big deal that she can even speak. Also, all her 5 senses her working properly, so she is one lucky girl. But please donโ€™t tell her about her past. I donโ€™t think she can handle all the information.โ€ the doctor suggested to the young couple.ย ย 

โ€œOh, thank you, doctor,โ€ the woman replied and then looked over to her husband, โ€œHoward? We have been married for almost four years and yet have not had a child. Can we please adopt this little girl? Please? Iโ€™ve always wanted to be a mother of a girl, and youโ€™ve wanted a child too. Please, can we take care of her Howard?โ€ the woman begged her husband.ย ย 

โ€œYes, Liv. I donโ€™t even have to take a single second to think over this. I love her, I love our little Esma. We can take good care of her my wife. We promise, doctor, we wonโ€™t tell her about her orphan life.โ€ the man replied, softly chucking.ย ย 

Now the coupleโ€™s gaze was turned towards Esma. She was just sitting there, wondering who and what they were talking about. She didnโ€™t know her name, or in this case, remember. But she felt that they were talking about something good, something happy. Something about this young couple made her feel comfortable towards them. Made her show love and affection towards them. Esma secretly knew that the couple would take care of her.ย ย ย 

Everyone in the hospital room was smiling and laughing very gently, all now looking towards Esma, who also gave back the action. She too smiled brightly at everyone, but mostly towards the young woman.ย ย 

โ€œI hope you three live a happy life. As you know, just go to the main lobby, take a right from here and walk straight, and you can tell everything that happened right now, fill a form, and go to adopt her. I wish you three the best of luck and a happy life.โ€ the doctor told them, and then again spoke. โ€œI almost forgot! Remember to bring her for some checkups once every two weeks. You can take appointments on the front desk, and they will take care of everything.โ€ he continued.ย ย 

As the doctor told this to them, the couple nodded, and brought little Esma with them, bringing her along to the front desk. They were all happy.ย ย 

~The End~ย 

January 01, 2021 18:14

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Hello everyone! Here are some things I want to share about this story: 1. Before I do that, I want to wish each and every one of my readers a Happy New Year!!! I really hope you all had an amazing celebration to welcome 2021. I hope you all had at least some memorable moments you made in the past year. Hopefully 2021 will be a much safer and a happier year than last year! So, let's all cross our fingers and hope 2021 is a better year! 2. Yeah, so this story looks finished, but I bet all of you who read this story might be still curious abo...

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Oh, my. I'm not even sure what to say. Also, the age thing in your bio? Mine is between ten and twenty, your's is 0 and 100. You're a genius at bios! And wow, this story...

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Haha, thanks so much Jade!! I just wanted to have some humor in it! XP Anyways, thank you so much for reading and commenting on my story! It means a lot to me! :)

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wow this was great! almost brought me to tears (I don't cry for any stories, so that's...wow) you wrote this so fast! the contest just started, and you drop a fabulous story right after :D ~ Amethyst

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Wow, thank you so much Amethyst! I am so glad you liked this story! Also, really? You cried! I am so glad you felt for the characters! โค๏ธ I hope you had a wonderful New Year! :)

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Nora K.
13:26 Jan 02, 2021

Hey, Laila! ;) A tearful and heartfelt story! Your characters are beautifully written, unique and inspirational! Your storyโ€™s flow is calm and quiet, keeping your readers curious and thrilled! The characters relationships between one another are marvelously described and detailed! The womanโ€™s lullaby is so very creative and thoughtful! Your characters show emotions, such as fear, delight and devastation, by โ€œshowingโ€ and not โ€œtellingโ€, which is so incredibly wonderful!! Marvelous job!! I will have to add this to my list of favorite stories b...

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Hello Nora!! Thank you so much for your comment! I am so glad you liked this short-story! Also, I completely made up the entire lullaby thing, so...glad you liked it! P.S. You can still call me Haripriya, your choice!

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Nora K.
16:30 Jan 02, 2021

Really? You are such a wonderful song writer!! No problem! I was delighted to read it!! :)

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Writer Maniac
12:02 Jan 02, 2021

This was a very heartwarming story, I really enjoyed it! I could really feel that connection between the Franks and Esma, so it was wonderful that she got adopted by them. I really liked it! I would love to know your thoughts on my latest story 'Pride and Joy' :)

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Thank you so much for reading! Also, I am glad you liked the ending! I would LOVE to read your story! :)

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Writer Maniac
04:40 Jan 03, 2021

I also posted another one called 'Intertwined Destinies' a few hours back, so I would love to get some feedback on both :)

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Writer Maniac
15:44 Jan 03, 2021

I just posted another one called 'The Real Thing', would love to know your thoughts on that as well, whenever you're free :)

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Akshaya Sutrave
08:44 Jan 02, 2021

Hi Laila! This story was just so moving and amazing! It kept me hooked till the very end. I loved the ending, it felt exactly the right thing to do!! :D I did notice a couple of times where you wrote 'Esma' as 'Esme' (for example, in the third paragraph) It isn't a very crucial thing, but I just wanted to tell you :) Overall, it was a great first story for 2021!

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Hello! Oh, sorry! It was auto-correct which was doing this, and even though how many times I told it to 'ignore', it never did. Sorry about that though!! Thank you!

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Akshaya Sutrave
15:07 Jan 02, 2021

No problem! :) I can understand, the same happens to me if I use any new or fictional name in my writing. It's hard to catch those auto-corrects even while reading because our eyes skim over the minute difference in spellings. Of course! :)

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I'm glad you did! Can you tell me where exactly I spelled the name wrong?

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Akshaya Sutrave
15:11 Jan 02, 2021

I noticed one in the third paragraph: 'So, this day would be no different, would it? Just the same โ€œstatue-likeโ€ posture of our little Esme.' I didn't notice it anywhere else, but if I do, I will definitely tell you! :)

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22:02 Jan 01, 2021

So a bunch of stuff to say- Laila, is....my favourite name in the world! I love how it sticks to the Indian roots and still manages not to sound like a tongue twister! If you drew the image in your profile pic, WOW YOU ARE AN AMAZING ARTIST! And lastly this story. I am absolutely speechless.

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Haha, Sapphire, I am so glad that you like the name and the story! Also, yes, I did, thank you so much!!!!โค๏ธ๐Ÿฅฐโค๏ธ

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22:39 Jan 01, 2021

Wow that is amazing! Np!

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Mary Kate
11:43 Jan 02, 2021

A really sweet story, I enjoyed it and am glad that it had a happy ending for Esma and the couple :-) Wow, you get the story out so quick! (I am still getting my head around an idea). I think in terms of writing this is the best one of yours that I have read. Well done! Did you want me to do a critique? p.s. I love your new name (although I like Haripriya also)...

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Wow, Mary, thank you so much! I am so glad that you liked this quick story! It was kind of the first thing that came into my head when thinking about this prompt! I would love it if you could spend the time to critique it! :) Also, you can call me Haripriya! :)

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Mary Kate
15:43 Jan 02, 2021

Great- just a few things that I noticed: In a few places you slipped into present tense instead of past tense. For example in the second line where you say 'But this isnโ€™t your normal kind of sleep'. This would sound better as 'But this wasn't your normal type of sleep.' Note: here you also slip into 1st person viewpoint ('I' ) (assuming you are not intending 2nd person here)...As you started in 3rd person view (she/her) then ideally the sentence should be 'But this wasn't her normal type of sleep'. Be a bit careful with head hopping (...

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Thank you so much Mary! For some reason, your comment didn't appear on my notification thing..so I noticed just now! Sorry about that!!

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Mary Kate
08:03 Jan 03, 2021

Thats ok- no worries :-) MK

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Emma Taylor
23:54 Jan 12, 2021

Oh what a sweet story. Can Mr and Mrs Frank adopt me?

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Can you help? I got downvoted. And people are deleting me D: (Sorry for bothering you ๐Ÿฅบ๐Ÿฅบ๐Ÿฅบ๐Ÿฅบ๐Ÿฅบ๐Ÿฅบ๐Ÿฅบ๐Ÿฅบ)

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Oh no...that's not good! Why are people deleting you???? I'll definitely help!

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